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Stuart Bright

Fri 20th Jan 2017 06:34

Hey L, welcome to WOL!

You manage to pack a lot of content into such small poems! Love what you've added so far and I look forward to your future posts.

Thanks for sharing.

Stu.

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Stuart Bright

Fri 20th Jan 2017 06:27

Jealousy, an awful emotion which noone wants to admit, you've caught the turmoil of thoughts and feelings perfectly. A younger, less rounded me has spent many a night looking at a blank phone with nothing but worst case scenarios to keep me company, nicely done.

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Stuart Bright

Fri 20th Jan 2017 06:20

Hi myescape,

The first 5 are my early work, excluding Ink which was the first bit of writing I've done in the current years. It's also one which I'm happiest with, you should check it out and let me know what you think.

Thanks for taking the time to read them!

Stu.

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lynn hahn

Fri 20th Jan 2017 04:19

Love this one shows the true relationship

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lynn hahn

Fri 20th Jan 2017 04:15

Put me on the list for this poem to come to life.

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lynn hahn

Fri 20th Jan 2017 04:07

Sounds like marriage lol

Love it

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lynn hahn

Fri 20th Jan 2017 03:53

Needed this today. Thanks

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Myescape

Fri 20th Jan 2017 02:40

Delightful.. could almost feel the night breeze of being there

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Randall Eckstein

Fri 20th Jan 2017 01:33

Ooh, gave me chills. I love the imagery, and after reading your bio, I feel like it might be a reflection of your youth growing up in the wonderful places where the world is green and blue.

Simply a beautiful poem and a wonderful vision of a natural world.

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Randall Eckstein

Fri 20th Jan 2017 01:30

Wow, what a great vignette poem. The imagery, the attribution, the conclusion all draw me in and show me something, rather than telling it to me. I love it!

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Randall Eckstein

Fri 20th Jan 2017 01:24

Although the theme of the poem is very good, I feel jarred by the forced rhymes.

I like the second stanza most, the true feelings and passion of the moment can be felt. It just feels unfinished with the word disguised. Since it is an adjective, it begs for a concluding noun to complete the object of the preposition.

I'm not sure what paid jellos are. Is that a British thing? Likewise with circle plus. Since I don't know what these two things are, I can attribute them to British parlance, but in reality, I have a niggling feeling that they are just forced rhymes.

If you retool this a bit more, I think you've got a winner. ?

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lynn hahn

Thu 19th Jan 2017 23:18

Wow what a beautiful and hopeful poem. Sounds like you were blessed with a wonderful relationship. She was one lucky woman

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Paul Waring

Thu 19th Jan 2017 22:12

Thank you Jeff and Tristan for reading this and for your comments. Nice quote again, Jeff! And Tristan, I am touched by your kind words, that means a lot. Thank you both. Paul

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Tristan Ayran

Thu 19th Jan 2017 21:53

What a beautiful piece-one I will never consign to oblivion.
Tristan

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Jeff

Thu 19th Jan 2017 21:23

Thanks for the comments guys & there is always a new start.....never give up! Jeff

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Jeff

Thu 19th Jan 2017 21:20

Someone once said don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened......Jeff

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Jeff

Thu 19th Jan 2017 21:15

Thanks for the comments Paul & its ok, we're both better than them......Jeff

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jane wilcock

Thu 19th Jan 2017 21:14

Hi Andy, Ive not blogged for ages - terrible time recently-but now surfacing to read your poetry has gone from strength to strength and this one I love as it is a powerful canvas of emotion.

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jane wilcock

Thu 19th Jan 2017 21:09

I enjoyed this and felt your island heritage and the green woods of Uk! lovely greens of differnet temperatures

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jane wilcock

Thu 19th Jan 2017 21:08

I would love it to be put to music but I am not musical. thankyou

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Paul Waring

Thu 19th Jan 2017 20:58

Well expressed Jeff, and reading your response to Kimberley's comment gives us more perspective on what must be a really difficult situation. Paul

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Jeff

Thu 19th Jan 2017 20:46

I know! Working in the Middle East I'm sooo fucking tired of no being able to hold my girlfriends hand outside our room due to some sanctimonious imaginary arsehole. All we have is love & peace but can't even show it!,......a rant I know but come on! It's 2017 & we still believe in ghosts!......Jeff.

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Myescape

Thu 19th Jan 2017 20:45

How many of the poems on your page are works from your younger self?

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Jeff

Thu 19th Jan 2017 20:07

It's a night out & hangover in one....Jeff....

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Martin Elder

Thu 19th Jan 2017 20:07

Nice one Stu. I am often struck by the sheer immensity of the dichotomy between all that is harsh cruel and ugly on the one hand and all that is beautiful and sublime on the other.

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Martin Elder

Thu 19th Jan 2017 19:58

This is good news. I love the YSP and visit as often as I can. I thoroughly recommend it as a place to view good art in beautiful surroundings. A really relaxing space with an inspirational for writing or just taking in the magnificent vibe of the place. I look forward to Simon Armitage's collection from being poet in residence.

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Stu Buck

Thu 19th Jan 2017 19:21

cheers guys, its all a bit apocalyptic these days so i figured id look ahead to saturday morning and make a prediction.

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raypool

Thu 19th Jan 2017 19:17

I can't do better than echo David's words entirely Stu. This has the detail and vividness of a renaissance painting with some horror and glory in the swirl.

A real goodie. Ray

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raypool

Thu 19th Jan 2017 19:09

Hi Steve , thanks so much for going forward on the technical issue for me. I do take the point about the certificate thing being on my computer. It is a random thing, and seems to home in on WOL only by law of averages. I use the site more than any other; funnily enough it also happened on a youtube link from an email last night. Apparently it might an adware thing. I'll keep my eye on it and won't let it deter me !

regards Ray

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Jeff

Thu 19th Jan 2017 19:01

Benny hill is my hero! Seaside postcard & typical English humour....I love it..... Jeff

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Jeff

Thu 19th Jan 2017 18:59

Nope....told me to go "f" myself......funny industry I work in hahahahaha.....Jeff

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Paul Waring

Thu 19th Jan 2017 17:28

Thanks John, I was chuffed to bits to read your comment. Paul

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John Coopey

Thu 19th Jan 2017 17:06

All of the below, Paul. Very envious. I may tell everyone that I wrote this!

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John Coopey

Thu 19th Jan 2017 16:49

There it is, Claire. You've broken your WOL virginity. Good to see you posting and particularly this one.
I enjoyed your performance of this last week. Look forward to more of your posts and appearances in Donny.

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raypool

Thu 19th Jan 2017 16:30

elP: I take your points; I don't think the written word will wither completely but the incentive to print it may do in view of costs - so keep cherishing.

Colin. Thanks for the comment. I have a few 1st editions, all uner £20, but I agree with your assessment. How interesting about the refugees, Wales has a good reputation for culture generally. Glad you like it.

Raj: Very kind, don't we love'em! I remember when Charing X road bookshops all spilled out on the the pavements, great days.

David: I'm so glad you immediately got the double entendre idea and also no judgments ; you are the perfect reader! That's great for the South bank, nice and homely. Great place for germ warfare!

Stu: Thanks for picking that - a fortunate mind game popping its cork.

Thanks all Ray

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Saniya

Thu 19th Jan 2017 16:14

Thank you Raj! It's actually not real just a feeling that maybe one day will become real.

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Paul Waring

Thu 19th Jan 2017 15:59

M.C., I really appreciate your comment especially because, with light hearted material like this, you can never be sure how it will be received. But the reaction to date makes me glad that I followed my instinct to post it!

Many thanks, Paul

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raypool

Thu 19th Jan 2017 15:23

Thanks elP . I very much take your point! I'm going to try to outmanoeuvre this malware. Apparently its a semi legit but aggressive adware attachment designed to trap you into revealing buying habits online etc. Large brandy and paracetamol to the ready. Then i'll get back to thanks all...

Ray

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Tristan Ayran

Thu 19th Jan 2017 15:14

Haha! Thanks David! Your words mean a lot! ?
Tristan

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Nigel Astell

Thu 19th Jan 2017 15:11

News Flash!

Where is The Heart of Stockport has a small display in Stockport Library this week.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 19th Jan 2017 14:43

It's always welcome to see imaginative light hearted
blogs...many thanks for this commendable contribution.

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Juan Pablo Lynch

Thu 19th Jan 2017 14:40

I love it. The poem is very realistic about the human condition.
Raj, I actually belief that self doesn't necessarily know the truth but is always in search of truth. Self is not complete on it's own. It needs truth to free it from inferior complexes. As a Christian, I believe self needs Christ, the way, the truth and life, to really blossom and be as fruitful as can be.

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Raj Ferds

Thu 19th Jan 2017 14:29

Sorry, one more bit to add, if that's ok.

I believe that the 'self' is not the individual body or mind but that aspect within each of us
that knows the truth.

Am i making sense?
R

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Raj Ferds

Thu 19th Jan 2017 14:27

I like it Amberlee. Quite intense.
There's a lot of struggle I see, searching, probing.
Perhaps the defining moment will come when you find your true purpose?

Interesting journey!
Raj

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claire crossdale

Thu 19th Jan 2017 14:25

Absolutely! And potential for adding a bit of "seasoning" too, with addition of a few choice letters, if performed. Thanks for reading it.

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Stu Buck

Thu 19th Jan 2017 12:34

missed this when it first appeared martin but its a fantastic piece. cant add much to what has been said, just offer my apologies for overlooking it in the first place!

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Stu Buck

Thu 19th Jan 2017 12:32

lovely stuff!

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Stu Buck

Thu 19th Jan 2017 12:31

excellent writing randall, you are a real asset to this site already. a really great style, huge imagination and that 'quality' that you find in good poetry as opposed to average poetry.

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Myescape

Thu 19th Jan 2017 12:29

Both my poems I shared tonight were written tonight.. no sleep and dark coffee are to thank lol

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Greg Freeman

Thu 19th Jan 2017 11:27

Thanks to all those who read at Write Out Loud Woking on Monday - that means you, David Andrew, Michael Cutchey, Amel Oudjida, Kitty Coles, Peter Taylor, Andy V Frost, Eddie Chauncy, and Ray Pool - plus comperes Rodney Wood and Greg Freeman, plus the four diners who asked to take their meal in the poetry section of the New Inn so that they could listen in. Another fine evening of warmth, community, and shining words.

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