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Graham Sherwood

Tue 9th Feb 2016 17:43

Zach, contentment is a well hidden place. Sadly it tends to come as one ages. Perhaps it's genetic and is only switched on as we see less ahead of us than what's been left behind.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 9th Feb 2016 17:36

Ah! the muse can be either a nymphomaniac or an estranged lover. Ideas cannot be easily ordered I think.

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Robert Mann

Tue 9th Feb 2016 17:26

Mark - I couldn't agree more, which can be seen in my piece from yesterday 'Spin on This'. Never believe a word they say!
Rob

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Robert Mann

Tue 9th Feb 2016 17:23

Mark - unfortunately, because I usually like your work, the third line seems forced and ill fitting for a man of your capabilities. Sorry!
Rob

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Anthony Emmerson

Tue 9th Feb 2016 17:23

Welcome Shirley, love the villanelle!

Regards,

A.E.

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steve pottinger

Tue 9th Feb 2016 16:21

A beautiful poem. I especially love the last stanza.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 9th Feb 2016 13:36

Another fine tale from you Jim! Enjoyed every line of this - bloody marvellous!

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Laura Taylor

Tue 9th Feb 2016 13:32

Hahaa - I bloody love this!! :D Magnificent toying with language, and hilarious to boot :D Bravo!

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Laura Taylor

Tue 9th Feb 2016 13:16

Ooo red hot!

I think I know exactly where this is coming from, ahem, if you'll pardon the pun ;)

pranking cinders
kinder kind


This is a pretty spectacular poem Mr Pool. 'flaming suction' - well I never! ;)

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Laura Taylor

Tue 9th Feb 2016 13:03

Jeremy

I've read and re-read your post several times now, and can safely say that my main reaction is one of bewilderment. It's like asking someone if they like jam and them replying "the earth is flat". I don't get it. Not only do I not get it, I am loath to turn this into some kind of surreal bunfight, so the only response I can offer now is to walk away and wish you well in your parallel universe.

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Andy N

Tue 9th Feb 2016 13:01

very very good john. enjoyed reading them back as well as been involved in writing them last night. possibly my favourite two of them every done.

top stuff guys!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 9th Feb 2016 11:52

Hi, Jim,

I have much appreciated your comments. I fully intend to scope your work in detail; didn't want you to think I was ignoring you, especially since you're making an effort to participate wholly.

Cynthia

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 9th Feb 2016 11:39

Katy, I also feel that if I enjoy my own poetry, then chances are someone else will too. And I do like my own work, as if it is not even mine, just another writer entirely. Otherwise, I either adjust a poem to my own satisfaction, or jettison it. Harshly.

It's hard to know whether this is narcissistic or fairly common among poets. What think you?

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Nigel Astell

Tue 9th Feb 2016 10:52

What about giving the collage poem the title Twice Broken?

Still liked the poetic current flowing in your poem John!

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Nigel Astell

Tue 9th Feb 2016 10:39

Well read Andy
look forward to when we team up at the Art Gallery
should be a good night mate.

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Adam Whitworth

Tue 9th Feb 2016 10:08

A poem I can agree with. Best one I've seen today. Well done. :)

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Emer Ni Chorra

Tue 9th Feb 2016 09:40

I am sorry for your loss Nicole. Suicide leaves behind so many unanswered questions, neverending psychological pain. Much love and peace. Emer

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Vicki Ayers

Tue 9th Feb 2016 09:22

Thank you both for your comments! Greatly appreciated!!
When I'm not writing or making music I work for a homeless charity here in B'ham called Crisis - I teach percussion, & technical theatre, life skills, &  build confidence. 'My boys'  humble me on a daily basis - this is my tribute to them based on their stories. Homelessness is an increasing problem - most of my chaps aren't addicts (although some are) they are educated, intelligent, amazing men who fell through the gaps in the system & are viewed by a lot of people as scum.

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Nicole

Tue 9th Feb 2016 03:23

Thank you. I wrote this after a friend of mine killed himself.

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Nicole

Tue 9th Feb 2016 03:22

Thank you so much Emer :-)

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jeremy young

Tue 9th Feb 2016 03:17

hi laura

it's disrespectful because your logic is false

"and they follow a fundamentalist branch of Islam that is intricately linked to ISIS."

it's 'intricately linked' because it is mainstream islamic jurisprudence - I doubt you'll find anyone who has a serious and respectful opinion of islam that would argue that it is not

so the point is moot

yet consider what mr fayadh says

"look up to yourselves from the bottom of the river;
those of you on top should provide some pity for those underneath..
the displaced is helpless,
like blood that no one wants to buy in the oil market! "

or

"night,
you are inexperienced with Time
lacking rain drops
that could wash away all the remains of your past
and liberate you of what you had called piety..
of that heart.. capable of love,
of play,
and of intersecting with your obscene withdrawal from that flabby religion
from that fake Tanzeel
from gods that had lost their pride.."

or

"your mute blood will not speak up
as long as you pride yourself in death
as long as you keep announcing -secretly- that you have put your soul
at the hands of those who do not know much..

losing your soul will cost time,
much longer than what it takes to calm
your eyes that have cried tears of oil"

http://monakareem.blogspot.co.uk/2015/11/ashraf-fayadhs-disputed-poems-in.html

obviously one needs to consider the context of the unspoken history of the 'palestinians' - the inverted comma is deliberate - and of the way in which the 'palestinian' issue is used - none of which fits particularly neatly in narrow confines of media debate - hence why mr fayadh phrases his criticisms and accusations as he does - and why it is so important to the saudis that he renounce his poetry

none of it has anything to do with allies - or the implication that 'we' are colluding with terrorists - or that the saudis are no better than terrorists etc

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John Coopey

Mon 8th Feb 2016 22:58

Harry, We in Britain fail to understand that Europe is Germany-France. I think our leaving/staying in the EU must arouse as much interest in Europe as if Spain or Poland were having the referendum.

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John F Keane

Mon 8th Feb 2016 22:14

All I can say about that is - wow!!!

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raypool

Mon 8th Feb 2016 22:08

I'm very pleased you like this Stu. Where do ideas come from? A mystery. But what isn't a mystery is that it is my birthday today - a birthday fire baby!

cheers Ray

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 8th Feb 2016 22:00

John,
A propos immigration and Dave.

At the time when Germany was forging ahead (and Britain was the sick man of Europe) Our fraternal delegates used to come back remarking on the hordes of Turkish workers in the German factories. (so - given the ageing pop and the call for a large consumer base - and therefore cheaper unit cost - maybe Merkel aint so daft as people say she is)

We needn`t worry, most of our immigrants sneaked in while we were all asleep.

You are quite right about Dave`s posturing. The idea that we can sway anything vital by threatening to take our ball back is hilarious...reality is about to kick in.

As usual, you`ve got Dave`s shenanigans in a nutshell.

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Martin Elder

Mon 8th Feb 2016 21:46

Beautiful use and flow of words David, I love it.

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Martin Elder

Mon 8th Feb 2016 21:44

As Colin says very clever Lynn. I love the image of a young woman sitting in an office more interested in the bow than the typing. And so beautifully formatted.

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Martin Elder

Mon 8th Feb 2016 21:36

You have captured well the attitudes of some people to a certain section of humanity who are looked down on by the rest, because of the way they appear and present themselves, because they are different. I like the way you have repeated the opening line of each stanza. Nice one Vicky

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Martin Elder

Mon 8th Feb 2016 21:29

This was brill to hear this Andy. Only just seen it here tonight. Fab stuff.

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Martin Elder

Mon 8th Feb 2016 21:22

I meant to say to you tonight that I also like the line chiselled in tragedies. Nice one Andy

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Emer Ni Chorra

Mon 8th Feb 2016 19:00

Hello Nicole, wonderful poem above. Written with great feeling. I hope to read more from you soon.
Emer

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Stu Buck

Mon 8th Feb 2016 18:59

great stuff ray. brief, mysterious and red hot. one of your finest.

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Emer Ni Chorra

Mon 8th Feb 2016 18:57

Very powerful poem Nicole, are you a sufferer of PTSD?

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John Coopey

Mon 8th Feb 2016 17:13

MC - a rather unsubtle use of campaigning for staying in by playing a race card.
Ken- don't hold your breath for a view from Jezza. He's got left and right wingers favouring In and left and right wingers favouring Out. His leadership to date does not inspire me that he'll make a decision.

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John Coopey

Mon 8th Feb 2016 17:08

Many thanks for your kind comments, Trevor.

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Mon 8th Feb 2016 16:12

Hi Katy.Once more you do not fail,but what do you think of-

'rolling violent dice
of drunken incomprehension.
Morning
sings out my sin'

fantastic lines! (just a little suggested reshuffle-but then again,what do we doddering wordsmiths know?)

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P&S........ps please bring back your sexy profile pic!

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 8th Feb 2016 15:39

On OUR side? Now I'm fit to be tied!
Now he says if we leave
We'll witness a jungle
Along the south coast
(Dave - comprenez-vous "bungle"?)

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ken eaton-dykes

Mon 8th Feb 2016 15:19

A wonderful rhyming flow of wisdom in a wicked humorous way. The last verse of which Jeremy Corbin would be proud to wind up question time.

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Stu Buck

Mon 8th Feb 2016 14:13

reads really well this. hints of menace and quite unnerving.

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Trevor Alexander

Mon 8th Feb 2016 14:13

Move over Bob Dylan! I like the parody as social commentary: tried it myself, but not as well as this.

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Stu Buck

Mon 8th Feb 2016 14:12

i love this jim! its hilarious and moving and hopeful.

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Stu Buck

Mon 8th Feb 2016 14:11

wonderful. i live in the valleys and read this as i looked out the window at a day which you could no doubt describe better than i. gorgeous.

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Trevor Alexander

Mon 8th Feb 2016 14:09

I like this - more a senryu maybe?

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Trevor Alexander

Mon 8th Feb 2016 14:03

Very good - and a poke at our conscience!

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Robert Mann

Mon 8th Feb 2016 13:19

Shirley - like this one a lot. Evokes a feeling of lightness in more ways than one. Well written.
Rob

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Andy N

Mon 8th Feb 2016 12:51

thanks guys. look forward to reading this tonight.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Feb 2016 11:27

Hi Jim

Thanks for your note on Bathtime.

It's a deeply unpleasant memory from childhood that has plagued me for years. I thought to try and exorcise it through poetry. Stu's take is close to the real thing.

Cheers

Laura

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Feb 2016 11:27

Howdy Stu

Thanks for your note on Bathtime.

It's a deeply unpleasant memory from childhood that has plagued me for years. I thought to try and exorcise it through poetry. Your take is close to the real thing.

Cheers

Laura

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Feb 2016 11:26

Hi Michelle

Thanks for your note on Bathtime.

It's a deeply unpleasant memory from childhood that has plagued me for years. I thought to try and exorcise it through poetry. Stu's take is close to the real thing.

Cheers

Laura

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Feb 2016 11:24

I made the clarification as the Saudis are seen as our allies, and they follow a fundamentalist branch of Islam that is intricately linked to ISIS. How you managed to make the unfeasible jump to me disrespecting him I have no idea.

I've never liked words being put into my mouth so please don't do that.

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