Ha-I didn't see that coming. Good one.

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Original item by ray pool

Hi Ray,
Thanks for your feedback on The Rhyme Of The Ancient Partygoer-it is one of those where I started off with the idea for its ending and then had to create the lines to get there. It is, indeed, just a story.

Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks Mark. It didn't get much response but I guess that's life anyway your comment is a beacon in the dark!
It could be set to music . Might suit the banjo - I do play a little! Cheers. Ray.

Comment is about OLD SETH (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Amanda. Thanks for dropping onto The Rhyme Of The Ancient Partygoer and giving feedback.

Comment is about Amanda (poet profile)

Original item by Amanda

An excellent choice for a theme for a collection of poetry.
The recent TV programme on those daring and dedicated
young women pilots had me nodding and smiling in
admiration - with the survivors mirroring their young
selves in demeanour and pride in their fraught wartime
occupation. God bless them.
This takes inspiration from John Pudney whose spirit,
I'm sure, will excuse my fond plagiarism in a good
cause.

FOR JENNY

No need to ask her why
Jenny-in-the-sky
She loved the engine sound
Beyond Jenny-on-the-ground.

She sung along aloud
Jenny-in-the-cloud
To dry her grieving tears
And overcome her fears.

Whether flying near or far
Jenny-the-bright-star
Only cared that she succeeded
Delivering planes our freedom needed.
..............................................

Comment is about Poet's tribute to women pilots who ferried planes in the war (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

So true for many people today. And I admit I do this myself at times. And I always question why???

Comment is about Zen and the art of deletion (blog)

Thank you for kind words. And for Huw, I respect your take on the poem, but will politely say you grossly misunderstood.

This poem is directly related to my life and present situation. Yes, some details I do hide from my daughter as she's too young to understand. But I never burden her with my problems. I explain to her the best I can for her age what is going on. I accept my faults and let her know where I messed up so she knows not to do the same. To do better if she is ever in a similar situation.

But even when I fail I don't accept defeat. I'm always looking forward to find a way to overcome it. I was raised that way. I see nothing wrong with it personally. You should never let the world know when you are weak if you can help it. Then you only make yourself vulnerable to more abuse.

With that being said. You really can do anything you set your mind too. But you can't just believe it. You have to work for it. You have to ignore the snide remarks of others. You have to chase your dreams. And with time and dedication you will succeed.

Also, as for the rhyme. I was listening to hip hop when I wrote it. The way I read it is as a rap. No real reason to that, its just the inspiration I had at the time.

Comment is about My Inspiration: My Daughter (blog)

Original item by Amanda

Thanks so much for reading and commenting. Much appreciated. x

Comment is about Step On (blog)

This is a message all mothers ought to give their kids, not just daughters. Great read!

Comment is about My Inspiration: My Daughter (blog)

Original item by Amanda

First of all there is nothing to say this is a work of fiction or not. Having read your profile I think it might well not be fiction.

The words implicitly convey your love for this child and anyone with sense knows that mothers fight for their children unstintingly.

Young children/babies are all our futures and your commitment to declaring better things for the child is natural.

Critics should look at themselves clearly first and put the stones down.

Never accepting defeat is a grand notion, learning to accept it graciously is equally grand. A point we would all do well to practice.

Well done for posting and use your resilience to keep posting.

Comment is about My Inspiration: My Daughter (blog)

Original item by Amanda

Hi Graham, The Net's opened up the world for voyeurs, peeping toms and just about everyone who gets a perverse kick out of getting little glimpses into complete strangers lives and drawing parallels with their own worlds.
I sometimes do it because I'm bored. Or angry. Or just curious about some interesting people, so it really is ambiguous, my reasons why. Thank you so much for reading!

Comment is about Zen and the art of deletion (blog)

Thanks John. I appreciate it. I will add some more soon. Cheers, George

Comment is about Misled (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

This piece raises an interesting subject about just how much one can find out about people (on the Internet) without really knowing them.

Interestingly, I think reading people's poetry can give enormous insight into different lives (a little like thumbing through someone's music collection).

The stalking, watching, watching, watching in a Zen like state can also mimic the passivity of staring at a computer screen, trance-like.

But do you really care? or are you really saying you don't.

This is truly ambiguous.

Comment is about Zen and the art of deletion (blog)

Your piece was great. Respect for the honesty in your rhymes.

Comment is about My Inspiration: My Daughter (blog)

Original item by Amanda

I love it

Comment is about Step On (blog)

A timely and rewarding journey through the seasons
of a lifetime, with autumn the period of harvest plenty
before the threadbare trials of winter - in nature as in our
brief lives in its keeping.

Comment is about A Song For Autumn (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

I enjoyed this narrative - and could imagine Pete Seeger
or maybe Woody Guthrie singing it to a haunting country/
railroad lament.

Comment is about OLD SETH (blog)

Original item by ray pool

a very persuasive poem and finely put Lynn. Simplicity is always powerful and the fact that it is in question form says it all. Ray

Comment is about Step On (blog)

very good Lynn

Comment is about Step On (blog)

thanks guys! i like this one too. your positivity keeps me writing!

Comment is about brine (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

This poem should be preserved Stu, really lovely x

Comment is about brine (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thank you so much . It was a good evening. so nice to see some more new faces. You were of course in good form as always. Hope to see you next month

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Martin, I really enjoyed your readings at Sale last Tuesday.

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Wow! Just wow. Thanks for NOT being a pretentious fucking idiot ;)

Comment is about Eat it (blog)

Original item by Corr Lens

I'm spent. You?

Comment is about Corr Lens (poet profile)

Original item by Corr Lens

thanks for the comments, always very helpful.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thank you, I appreciate that Martin Elder.

Comment is about Hypothetically speaking (blog)

Original item by Dara Smith

A pleasure to find one of your posts again. So refreshing in its rhythmic simplicity and contrast to much of the "worthy" and self-indulgent stuff that gets posted on this site.

Comment is about A Song For Autumn (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

This hits me like a brick, reminding me that I have listened to the same thing before from many people who do not feel like they are being heard. A brillant poem .

Comment is about Hypothetically speaking (blog)

Original item by Dara Smith

This will be a great read, Alison has worked to. bring these women's experience to life in poetry . Looking forward to getting my copy.

Comment is about Poet's tribute to women pilots who ferried planes in the war (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

This is a great poem , I particularly like the line
'But the past hugs me like a ghost'

Comment is about Nothing but Regrets (blog)

Original item by Chandana

A heady brew . This one Stu. You seem to be getting more and more into your stride. cracking!

Comment is about brine (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hi Ian-many thanks for your feedback on Bobby The Bonehead Bouncer. Ledger

Comment is about Ian Gant (poet profile)

Original item by Ian Gant

thanks Patrico, thanks for taking the time to comment and heartwarming you like it

Comment is about Every Mobile is on Silent (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

very true Adam , i always find those moments of pleasant chats with strangers very life affirming , thanks for the comment

Comment is about Every Mobile is on Silent (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

Bloody good!

Comment is about Machines that go to war (blog)

Original item by PatricioLG

The Cave

Down on Brighton beach
a place so dark
the grey rock hides
what goes on inside.

But if out fishing
and your net empty
sandy bodies will invite
eager for a catch.

Comment is about Night fishing (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

The Morning Train

Catching the right one is what I have to do
but if everyone I ask frowns then keeps shaking head
must be on the train that has the mystery trip!

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

thanks anna! i took ages deciding wether to use the c word but for me it works. im glad it oozes a heady mix! i was trying to stimulate the senses. that feeling of discovery, the smell of spices and the start of a relationship.

Comment is about brine (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Love the sensuous feel of this poem. It oozes a heady mix for the senses. Really good.

Comment is about brine (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Interesting.... It could also be seen as it being a conversation with someone whom the author has an interest in, and wants to make sure that the other individual would be able to handle what's being said without acts or thoughts that are based solely on physical contact, but instead a deep mental stimulation.

Comment is about Hypothetically speaking (blog)

Original item by Dara Smith

Thank you! You are correct on so many levels and always seem to get the authors words or shall I say my words.

Comment is about Hypothetically speaking (blog)

Original item by Dara Smith

Cheers Ray, re 'I stood and stared'. It was during one of my moments of contemplation, and, catching my reflection as I stared out of the window. I do have the original mirror on the original wall and the original foto too. ;-) Tommy

Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)

Original item by ray pool

Cheers Ray, re 'I stood and stared'. It was during one of my moments of contemplation, and, catching my reflection as I stared out of the window. I do have the original mirror on the original wall and the original foto too. ;-) Tommy

Comment is about l stood and stared (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

A flaming good rant Patricio. One could envisage this on a stage in a club. :-) Tommy

Comment is about Machines that go to war (blog)

Original item by PatricioLG

Thanks for your comments Stu and Huw. yes Stu I have performed this live and it seemed to go down well. I have to say at that time of my life I had little success with chatting up girls due to own social ineptitude. But this is based on Saturday summer nights in Brighton.

Comment is about Night fishing (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Hi Ray, thanks for your comments on Bobby The Bonehead Bouncer-a poem written in anger but given that comic book approach as a piss take of that breed. As a working musician I've no doubt you've seen more than your fair share of their thuggery!

Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)

Original item by ray pool

Thank you, Martin, for your comment, very much appreciated. I am glad you enjoyed reading it.

Comment is about The Cucumber Plot (blog)

Original item by Anna Ghislena

Very nice deep message.

Comment is about Every Mobile is on Silent (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor