Great poem- really describes how objects left behind by loved ones remain a connection with them.
Comment is about MY FATHER'S WATCH (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Joyti
Sun 12th Jul 2015 00:01
My father worked on the railroad in India, I was often captive to his regime. I greatly enjoy your work.
Never doubt it.
Comment is about MEMORY OF HEAT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks guys, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. It was an incredibly cathartic experience writing this and I hope that shows in the piece. I take a lot of influence from Bukowski and the thing I love most about him is how he left everything on the page. No one was left in any doubt as to his life and emotions. I try to get that feeling into my poems.
Comment is about sober (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
This stands as a very moving poem Stu. Can't find anything to add as it is utterly complete and I'm sure resonates with anyone with that terrible experience.
great stuff.
Comment is about sober (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
HI David I have just read Your Chair and Work Horses and thoroughly enjoyed the easy and thought provoking style of both. Being a furniture restorer (also a musician) I appreciate the affection engendered by old pieces like chairs, particularly Windsors , slightly stern I know, and the line gruff serenity is perfect. A pleasure and sense of confidence comes through them! In Work Horses I love the juxtaposition of past tense and present "I am watching."
Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)
Original item by David Cooke
as good a compliment as one could wish for!
Comment is about sober (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
You're not the first to suggest that, Graham. Cheers my friend.
Comment is about TREE WISE MONKEYS (blog)
Original item by THE PEN AND THE PAGE
This is particularly timely Darren.
Only last night I was playlisting on Spotify a load of old songs of my youth to remind me of my early teens.
Remember Barry McGuire and the New Christy Minstrels?
This poem of yours kept reminding me of Eve of Destruction. Perhaps you should add music!
Comment is about TREE WISE MONKEYS (blog)
Original item by THE PEN AND THE PAGE
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. Actually, I am reading them having arrived home from an evening engagement which was difficult to get through because I am quite 'strung out' at the moment. This has made me feel better so thank you again.
Comment is about 'Yes, I Will Wear One' (blog)
Original item by Abigail Elizabeth Ottley Wyatt
Hi Abigail,
Your poem is beautifully phrased. I adored the change into the floral imagery.
Great stuff!
Comment is about 'Yes, I Will Wear One' (blog)
Original item by Abigail Elizabeth Ottley Wyatt
<Deleted User> (13947)
Fri 10th Jul 2015 20:34
"flawed but still
perfectly human." So very true. So very beautiful.
R
Comment is about 'Yes, I Will Wear One' (blog)
Original item by Abigail Elizabeth Ottley Wyatt
Spot on Abigail.
I agree with Robert.
It will be yellow stars next.
Freda
Comment is about 'Yes, I Will Wear One' (blog)
Original item by Abigail Elizabeth Ottley Wyatt
Abigail,
Your words are both beautiful and poignant. As a 'survivor' of the rigours of mental stress and anguish, I appreciate the view that those who get through it have a greater insight, balanced judgement and are grounded in a more profound reality.
Let's see more of your work PLEASE.
Rob
Comment is about 'Yes, I Will Wear One' (blog)
Original item by Abigail Elizabeth Ottley Wyatt
This event I did my poem about was only given out to members just two days before it happened so it was kept top secret for these serious sexy swingers!
See you Monday
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
News Flash !
This is a chance to have our poetry put on display in Stockport Art Gallery!
'The Enchanted Art Gallery Weekend'
26th & 27th September 2015.
We can as a group do something on the theme of Enchantment or just put in individual poems to be put on display.
I will bring along registration forms for anyone who is interested.
All forms and work must be taken to the Art Gallery
Tuesday 15th September - Sunday 20th September.
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks guys, these comments mean a lot. The bike riding is not going so well, I keep falling off. But, we shall overcome (some day).
Comment is about drop (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Travis Brow
Fri 10th Jul 2015 15:31
This is excellent Stu, and poignant at the same time. I've never attempted the kind of 'concrete poetry' arrangement of words, the way you have here with...
're arr a ng e me nt'
..but it serves your purpose well.
There's no humiliation in learning to ride a bike, however old you are. Fuck it; and when you're ready, ride off in to the sunset.
Comment is about drop (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Reading at the 'Cornwall in my Soul' event on Lemon Quay in Truro as part of the Truro Festival.
Comment is about 'Cornwall in My Soul' as part of the Truro Festival (photo)
Original item by Abigail Elizabeth Ottley Wyatt
Thanks David, I look forward to your comments as always! Shame about the work, still it could be worse, I have my significantly younger and smaller wife teaching me to ride a bike in the front garden. Humiliating doesnt cover it!
Comment is about drop (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Yes thanks I was aware, but I fancied reading at the "official" poetry event first. Plus I need to pluck up the courage.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Matthew, just wanted to make sure you knew, you can read your poetry on any Monday night at the Phoenix, at the open mic. Open to poets as well as musicians!
Comment is about Matthew John Rutter (poet profile)
Original item by Matthew John Rutter
Only our mother can tell us apart, Graham.
Comment is about MONOGAMOUS WORDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks Cynthia Buell Thomas!!
Faith in Almighty is the central thought.
Comment is about Just-in-time (blog)
Original item by Juhi Gupte
<Deleted User> (13947)
Fri 10th Jul 2015 00:06
Thank you for your kind comment Mr. Coopey on Bitter Wish.
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
You can find more of my poetry on line including some videos simply by searching on SUBACCHI POET.
Comment is about MY FATHER'S WATCH (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
You are rightly elevated to the salubrious level of Melvyn Bragg and Steven Fry for your wordsmithery
Comment is about MONOGAMOUS WORDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (13947)
Thu 9th Jul 2015 23:49
Thank you Mr. Elder for your wonderful comment on Bitter Wish. It is much appreciated and so very kind.
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
yes! i have a willow tree in my front garden and was just thinking how sad it would be if it got throttled. then i saw it as an allusion for suffocation love. it grew from there. if you pardon the pun.
Comment is about virginia (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Great imagery and a lovely flowing pace . I can imagine the ride. I find that Northern rail provides a good stimuli for poems.
Comment is about Paper Dreams (blog)
Original item by Eva Elizabeth
Very topical Nigel and very Nigel. A good piece of poetry. I look forward to seeing you next week.
Comment is about Camp At Butch Farm (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Thanks Cynthia and Andy,
The poem took me about 20 years of thinking upon the subject :) It was actually written very quickly and edited over a couple of reads, which, as Cynthia points out is why it is not perfectly spelt or 'grammatized' I like the imperfections. To be honest i get so on top of my work I wouldn't see its mistakes. sometimes it is a rush with my self to get it out which takes precedence..not for the reader but the creative process for me involves getting it out. i seem only to be motivated with the spelling etc once its already online. I have to say though i do use 'creative spelling' often as a mechanism for idea. I.e. Afrika's. and i find writing changes, grows and develops with every read..as if a poem could become a book, a chapter etc i think its learning where to draw your limits with editing. i can write new poetry from the edit of an original..but some poetry i like to keep it as close to its original to avoid labouring it. its a delicate balance.
i take your compliments however as praise for the words and that is wonderful x thanks again. if you've any time to highlight my errors i would be grateful for you to point them out only i am likely to invent a list of artistic purpose for why they are included or omitted :) it is hard to be creative AND place importance on correct english format..and here i go, this poem is about perfection/imperfection and other extreme opposites.I would like to see it written perfectly but other peoples ideas of perfect english are not necessarily set to a standard.
Andy, I am always writing. i don't write solely for this website or for performance poetry 'club' I have always written in one form or another and always will while I am able :) a writer/artist has to have something to write/create about. for a writer there is no vacation x
I am Welsh and Irish/Manx (scouse) by blood. why dyou ask?
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
<Deleted User> (13947)
Thu 9th Jul 2015 22:37
Thank you for your flattering comment on Bitter Wish. It has me beaming for the better part of an hour. :)
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
An excellent contribution for both heart and head. And a finely felt memorial.
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I like the deep idea behind this, the expression of a thinking mind.
Comment is about Just-in-time (blog)
Original item by Juhi Gupte
And this poem moves upon the face of the waters, and upon the heart, with insightful power. Very creative.
Are you Celtic? Well, more so than us all, at least?
Rachel, I know great writing has nothing to do with grammar and punctuation; but since you are so prominent in talent and set such a high standard in subject matter and expression, also check your 'page' presentation for the bare minimum of spelling. Or get someone to proofread for you. Famous writers always do that - pass the mundane stuff to a secretary.
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
I hope to get to Wigan again some time; not been since the Tudor closed. Please make yourself known if you're ever at Sale Waterside.
And congrats on your personal achievements.
Comment is about Eva Elizabeth (poet profile)
Original item by Eva Elizabeth
Many fine images here with well-selected details, and a good pace with much internal motion and rhyme, quite in sync with your topic. How do 'wind' and 'birdsong etc.' play a part in this scenario? Inside a train? The two lines sound good, but are they appropriate for this particular position of the writer? It's a sincere question. What am I missing?
'Paper Dreams' is a super title for a great idea.
Comment is about Paper Dreams (blog)
Original item by Eva Elizabeth
Is this a play on Virginia Creeper? In whatever language?
Comment is about virginia (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thank you Andy, really appreciate your feedback
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Who knows, but time waits for no-one...!
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Thank you Harry, hope it "got to you" in a positive way! Katy
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
white ribbon of time made me shiver.
excellent stuff x
Comment is about Iron Lung (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
<Deleted User> (13947)
Thu 9th Jul 2015 16:50
phew. wow.. excellent, rach. didn't know you were still writing.
this must have took ages to write.
impressive.
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
great ending there, eva. really enjoyed this.
like in particular notebook of paper dreams and Coughing, wheezing, sniffling, sneezing but a lot of good lines here.
excellent x
Comment is about Paper Dreams (blog)
Original item by Eva Elizabeth
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 12th Jul 2015 08:36
Hi Ali, I really like the way this resembles an arrow waymarking a trail or footpath. Whether intentional or not, adding and subtracting a few words would make it clearer. Thanks for posting.
Comment is about The Hike (blog)
Original item by Ali Bell