thanks everyone, really glad you enjoyed this one. as i mentioned before, this took 3 hours of my time, which for me is a lifetime. worth it though!
Comment is about voices (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Travis Brow
Thu 9th Jul 2015 12:55
Stu, 'Rorschach leaves' - beautiful phrase. I'm lucky enough to have trees to look at through my window and I'm endlessly seeing telling images in the leaves.
Comment is about claret (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Travis Brow
Thu 9th Jul 2015 12:51
Susan,
Sorry I missed your latest addition Beck (Stanza Stones) when you first posted it.
I like the concept of water and its cycle, providing growth and life before returning to its source, but I have to pick you up on a couple of things:
If water were 'common' currency, as opposed to rare, the grass would not be parched. Perhaps valued currency would be more apt unless the common you refer to is the land itself.
Salty bullets and pearl necklaces conjure up images I'm not sure you intended and will have some people sniggering!
Please take my comments in the way of constructive criticism as I enjoy your words immensely.
Comment is about Susan Darlington (poet profile)
Original item by Susan Darlington
<Deleted User> (13947)
Wed 8th Jul 2015 22:52
I was browsing through profiles and am so glad I stumbled upon this wonderfully written piece. Simple yet beautiful. Very well done.
R
Comment is about Lips (blog)
Original item by Michael W. Lankford
i will steve black. i have been checking books about em in waterstones..sure i saw a japanese book?? will have another look. i want some good illustrations x
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
I certainly understand the concept of poetry as an evolving
art form - with the caveat that it should be within the
range of all and not selective by special interest material.
If words are to be employed under the term "poetry" then
let them be for the comprehension of all and not the few.
We should not need dictionaries to translate - as if from
a foreign language - what we are offered to read...
with the exception, perhaps, of nonsense from the likes
of Edward Lear.
Comment is about Armitage ready to investigate the role of rap in modern poetry (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Can I make a suggestion mollie to the last verse?
flying slow flying low,
seeking stars that glow,
over swaying meadows
then going home.
Comment is about Humming bird (blog)
Original item by mollie learmonth
sure sir, i will try to translate it
Comment is about Storm inside a man (blog)
Original item by GAURAV JAIN
Oh dear, we are getting down and dirty with the yoof aren't we?
Trying to get establishment to understand (even have a go at) rap or hip hop is like trying to juggle tripe (no pun intended). As soon as there is a whiff of acceptance the genre will morph again.
Sooner or later our language (I know language is an ever evolving thing) will be so denigrated that Oxbridge, if it doesn't already, will be offering a chair for texting and rapping.
What a shame poetry isn't to be seen as a wonderful vehicle for improving the English language and the vocabulary of the aspiring young writers of the future.
As a postscript, a clearer prompt for the future of Ms CAD could not be made. Perhaps a job-swap Simon?
Comment is about Armitage ready to investigate the role of rap in modern poetry (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Excellent observance,Graham. I see the fine point involved. Thanks, Huw. Thought you might.
Comment is about A Poet's View (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 8th Jul 2015 10:52
Fantastically brutal. Love it x
Comment is about bar prayer 1 (07/08/2015) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
u r very right sir @huw thomas
Comment is about Storm inside a man (blog)
Original item by GAURAV JAIN
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 8th Jul 2015 08:28
thank you Rose x
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
A wonderfully clever premise Stu! A Mr Ben of poetry no less.
well done,
Graham
Comment is about voices (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Imagery and Essence. Is it filtered or distilled I wonder?
Comment is about A Poet's View (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Chaos and hope, beginnings and endings, just the right balance Greg!
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
The sort of polemic I like Ray.
As I get older, I'm glad my father and his father aren't still around to see what they fought for.
Comment is about LONELY LABOURERS OF THE MEAN STREETS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 7th Jul 2015 22:54
Hi Racheal.This is superb.A really deep and soulful piece.
Thank you.
Rose.
x
Comment is about the raven speaks unto the dove (new edit) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Lynn Hamilton
Tue 7th Jul 2015 21:54
"Is full of people but devoid of life" is my favourite line out of this piece. I enjoyed reading the whole from start to finish
Comment is about beach (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Nicely presented Greg. From the heart and a very reasoned attitude. It reminds me that in wartime, many different nationalities pulled together, and conversely how divisions in societies can seem insoluble.
Could there a touch of Betjeman here, a fondness maybe for the gentle?
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Lynn Hamilton
Tue 7th Jul 2015 21:33
Hi Stu. Thanks for reading and your comment on Attic Darth Vader. 'Strangely Sweet' is an excellent description.
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Lynn Hamilton
Tue 7th Jul 2015 21:27
Thanks Mr Lens. Don't forget your rubber ring! ;)
Comment is about Corr Lens (poet profile)
Original item by Corr Lens
Thanks for your kind words, Matthew. I should say that my intention wasn't political in writing it. I just wanted to include a Woking poem at last year's remembrance reading, and that's why I put it together, knowing that the garden would be opened some time later this year. Some places and people need and deserve poems in which they are commemorated - and the Muslim burial ground, a lonely, fairly deserted spot that will surely now attract more visitors, is certainly one of those places.
PS Many thanks for requesting it!
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Such a brilliant piece, highlighting a forgotten group of people. The line "in a corner of a foreign wood" is particularly clever and powerful. I don't want to turn your piece too political, though i'm sure you had politics in mind when you wrote it. The poem reminds me of something the rapper Akala said. People today are more willing accept a German immigrant than an Indian immigrant. They will accept the grandson of a Nazi before they accept the grandson of a man who fought against Nazism and for the British Empire. Your piece speaks to the fact that love, bravery and humanity are universal despite the narrative painted in some history and media.
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Here you are, Matthew http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=49972#page_comment_132621
Previously unposted. Thanks for requesting it!
Comment is about Matthew John Rutter (poet profile)
Original item by Matthew John Rutter
An Islamic-style garden is being created within the walls of this former burial ground for Muslim soldiers, in woods on the outskirts of Woking.
Comment is about A Foreign Wood (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks for the kind welcome. Yes it is such an interesting place, the perfect subject matter. Is there is copy of the poem published or on here so I could have another read? I missed the last poetry session at the phoenix centre but I hear there is to be another in October hopefully I'll have something to read for then.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hi Matthew, welcome to Write Out Loud. Yes, I guess that was the night the Pyrford TV Arts crew were there. The poem is called 'A Foreign Wood', and, yes, it is mine. I composed it last year, just before a Remembrance reading in Woking town centre that the Phoenix organised, and I took part in with another local poet, Sarah Williams. Both Sarah and I were at the Phoenix on Monday night, as it happens. I didn't want them to think I only turn up when a TV crew is there! I've always thought of the Muslim burial ground, out there in the woods, as a rather eerie place, but I think that will change once the Islamic garden within it is open. I had a peek the other day and it is virtually finished.
Comment is about Matthew John Rutter (poet profile)
Original item by Matthew John Rutter
Hi Greg I saw you read at the Phoenix Centre in Woking a little while back and meant to speak with you then but I was playing music and got distracted. I wanted to discuss one of the poems you read. I cant remember the name of it but it was to do with the Muslim war graves, was it your own work?
Thanks Matthew
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
And I too chortled through and thoroughly enjoyed this 'work', appreciating a really new angle on our diverse poetical influences. Well done.
Comment is about voices (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Joe - a little care about diet is always likely to provide
health benefits to those who make the effort. Oily fish,
rice, lean meat like chicken, natural style yoghurt and
others out there to be found will contribute towards
wellbeing. Potatoes are full of carbohydrates and relied
upon for their energy - a double edged sword IF the
energy is not used in physical terms because the result
becomes excess bodyweight. The trick is sensible eating
- surely possible in an age that sees the world of information available on anyone's computer.
Cheers...good health and good eating!
Comment is about FOOD FOR THOUGHT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
तूफान की शकल में हम जब आएंगे
सबके होश उड़ जायेंगे
आधी दुनियां डुबो देंगे अपनी लहरों से
जिस दिन हम जोश में आएंगे│ |
बेहोशी का आलम है चारो ओर
जब तक हम नशे में है
हलचल मचा देंगे सारे जहाँ में
जिश दिन हम होश में आएंगे │|
भीड़ में छुप कर बैठे है अभी हम
लगे है खुद को तराशने में
आ गये जिस दिन बाज़ार में बिकने को
सबसे ज्यादा बोली लोग हम पर ही लगायेंगे
एक अनमोल हीरे के नाम से हम जाने जायेंगे │|
दिल थाम के बैठना यारों
ज्यादा इंतज़ार हम नही कराएँगे
जिस दिन आएंगे तूफान की शकल में आएंगे
और सबके होश उड़ जायेंगे│ |
Comment is about Storm inside a man (blog)
Original item by GAURAV JAIN
Hi Stu, thanks for taking the time to read my poems and comment. I am surprised 'voices' only took you a morning, but that is proof that good poetry sometimes happens because poetry is in you. Not all poetry has to burn out of you as Bukowski might say.
Michelle :)
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
this is hilarious and also strangely sweet.
Comment is about ATTIC DARTH VADER (blog)
holding hands is excellent. a really descriptive snapshot of an intimate moment that belies a far greater meaning. pure poetry!
Comment is about Michelle (poet profile)
Original item by Michelle
Thanks! Its about as meticulously crafted as my poetry gets, in that it took me a morning to write. I was trying to think of a way to acknowledge my influences and poetic heroes, and i opted for this. hopefully i have done them justice. the tanka is one of the only pieces of work i have had published so far!
Comment is about voices (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Tue 7th Jul 2015 11:16
Love this Lynn, gave me a really good giggle :)
Comment is about ATTIC DARTH VADER (blog)
Tue 7th Jul 2015 11:11
Really enjoyed reading this Cynthia, everything about it really - the rhythm, the light hearted tone, the layering of ideas, thanks x
Comment is about Points (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Tue 7th Jul 2015 11:03
I love this one!! All of it - can't stop re-reading it x
Comment is about stepson icarus I (07/03-05/2015) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
Hi Martin, thanks for comment on Eternal City, yes just been to Rome, amazing, amazing place! Will probably go back and I rarely go same place twice!
Really enjoyed this poem here, felt like I was there, you've captured imagination, I also like the nautical and geographical references, excellent stuff, jeff
Comment is about Not from round here (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
i find humour in it too. i find humour in everything though, so maybe im not the best judge! but yes, it was written to be darkly comical in places.
Comment is about dysmorphia (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
<Deleted User> (13947)
Mon 6th Jul 2015 18:02
Stu! How did you get into my head!? I love love LOVE this. I have no fancy words or critique...just love :)
Comment is about dysmorphia (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Once again Ray an astute observation by yourself. Tommy
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
I read it as you toss and turn
inside a dream of a lost iron love
hoping this new peace will help you forget
we always say time will do it - - - why?
Comment is about Iron Lung (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Stu Buck
Thu 9th Jul 2015 13:18
ita vero!
Comment is about virginia (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck