Not a bum note in it Laura, well done.

Graham

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Laura, thank you for the kind words on Tartan Beret.
I've just been looking at some of your youtube clips (very impressive) how do you do it?

very best regards,

Graham

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very worthwhile read.Love the third from last line especially.Nice one man.xx

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Thanks, Jojo!

Comment is about Natasha Tingle (poet profile)

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Hahaa - love it Lea :D Fabularse, one might say!

Comment is about The Farty Party Manifesto (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

or-
'my heart wants what her heart needs to give it'

?
xx

Comment is about Needs and wants (blog)

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Thanks for commenting on 'TheFamily' Harry. :)
Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

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appreciated girls.Yes Rose,it is imperative that we keep trying.Noris,you are absolutely spot on re the title,and let us hope your beliefs come to fruition.xx

Comment is about Darkside (blog)

Agree with Andy - the language and imagery are dense and rich. A beautiful poem, with some disturbing ideas beneath your metaphors.

Comment is about The liberation (blog)

Original item by Marie-Anne

This is one of the best poems I've read by you Ian. Deeply moving, and I connect with it so strongly. It has a funereal air to it, and that's not just because the subject is close to death, it's the sombreness of it too. Almost hushed. I love that you have seen these ideas in this photo. These lines are so uncomfortable, so real, and such a great choice for describing the state of dementia and encroaching death:

The quiet discomfort
of not quite right
that marks him out
as transient.

Brilliant.

One tiny typo though in the following line - there's a full stop after reassurance and a lower case b in but:


for reassurance.

but there is a failing,

Comment is about Dexteram Patris (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

I feel justly guilty of persuading you to delete the picture Preeti, but please don't take it as a unilateral view.

As to the piece, I repeat, it sings in a way that one imagines the style of music that you describe the dancer performing to. I particularly like the somewhat dramatic end.

Graham

Comment is about Us/We (blog)

Hey, I love this!! Hilari-arse!!

Comment is about The Farty Party Manifesto (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Do the leg and feet belong to the same person? If so, and I think they do, something to think about would be the use of the plural 'feet'.

Other than that this is a succinct and intriguing snapshot :)

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I could not delete my pix ! I had to delete the entry itself. Please put your nice comments back Graham !
Thank you for reading and giving very fair and just opinion.

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Hello Harry. Thank you for your points on Tartan Beret.
As you know I'm not a good changer once done but I always appreciate your point of view. It makes me look at the work a different way.
With me the picture comes complete and leaving anything out would be like an incomplete jigsaw, so there it is.
Thank you for taking the time to put pen to paper though. I really do take your views seriously.

regards,

Graham

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

This makes you think back. I was only fourteen but 1965 was the year my passion for the music of Bob Dylan began. If only we had known?

Comment is about Last Word festival looks back at legendary 1960s poetry 'incarnation' at Albert Hall (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

We'll have a go, Julian. Watch this space ...

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I feel exactly like this occasionally. I hope whatever has happened to you is a good thing. Nice poem.

Comment is about Today (blog)

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''a snapshot narrative

provocatively beckoning

the hungry-eyed muse.''

This is it; the nub, the font of inspiration. You nailed it.

Comment is about Snapshot Narrative (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Haha thank you!!! And why yes it was what I intended ;-)

Comment is about Self Love (blog)

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Your writing is simply amazing!

Comment is about Natasha Tingle (poet profile)

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Your poem is wonderful. Unless I'm wrong, I felt that the title is for the "darkside" of man. I myself am a believer, yes I believe that mankind will eventually evolve and will come to peace with itself. When the time comes and man inhabits the Moon and Mars it will be when man gets to be his real self.

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You are a dark horse, David. You were there at the birth of performance poetry? Really! Tell us more. Show us the photos. I hope you wore beads, a Khaftan, or at least an Afghan. Wow! I was just quoting this article in my email to the Nuyorican Poetry Café in the East Village, which Ginsberg described as the most integrated place on the planet, when I spotted your comment. I wonder if we can rustle other attendees up.

Comment is about Last Word festival looks back at legendary 1960s poetry 'incarnation' at Albert Hall (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Love this. The wisdom of time :)

Comment is about Looking back in Anger (blog)

Original item by Gray Nicholls

The world of depression summed up so well poetically x

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Original item by Twilbury Wist

I really like this Smash, I like how it does the full circle and ends hopefully. Just one little suggestion and that is to change the pass to passed. :)

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Brilliant - 'nough said

Comment is about Dexteram Patris (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

morning/evening jaqueline

I'm smiling like an idiot that you called Raycharles a 'piece.' If I was pretentious I'd describe it as a satire of found poetry, but it's really literally a personal conversation copied, pasted, and reformatted to make it readable. But it is verbatim: it was a bad night with a good ending.

Sometimes my life feels like somebody's making it up, and when I'm talking to someone my mouth moves like I'm an actor, before I even have a chance to think about what I want to say.

If you want to know more about Raycharles, there are some other things way way way back that I wrote like loveletters before I was on WoL that I imported onto here. They are all named 'Ray Charles' followed by a number. http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=45923

Just went over your new pieces. I would love to hear R.A.M. recited -- I, too, suffer the malady of a drifting mind. The problem is finding the surface again, sometimes.

Lady Spodden is simply fantastic -- very well paced and the language is fucking perfect. genuinely, i'm impressed and humbled.

Comment is about Jacqueline Phillips (poet profile)

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What a lovely poem. I really enjoyed the feeling it conveyed. Thanks for sharing.

Comment is about Looking back in Anger (blog)

Original item by Gray Nicholls

Hi Jojo - great twist, I was expecting it to be about falling in love but then I guess that's what you intended. :-)

Comment is about Self Love (blog)

Original item by Jojo

Hi Zach - It has taken me far to long to comment on this. I read it as soon as you put it up but have since been caught up in my own writing frenzy.

I would be interested to know if this is a 'based personal experience' thing but you don't have to share that info if you don't want.

I love the story this piece tells and found that by the time I had read it to the end I had a fully formed characterisation of the two conversationalists in my mind. It would be interesting to see this format used for a full novel.

Comment is about Ray Charles 0553 (02/28/2015) (blog)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

Hi Emma, like the wine glass, your post resonates. One large vodka raw against the throat and all your itches are scratched. Until the throat itches back. Tommy

Comment is about Breathing Liquor (blog)

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Hi Gray, thanks for taking the time to read & comment on The Tree House. I love If I Were a Proper Poet, can really relate :)

Comment is about Gray Nicholls (poet profile)

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Hi Andy, thanks for your very kind comment on tree house xx

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re 'the more important conquest'I think 'that one'will never come about.

But it won't be for the want of trying!
Enjoyed the poem,people.x

Comment is about Darkside (blog)

Hi Giovannie.This is my kind of poem.Short,and cleverly composed with the use of simple words.


Enjoy the site.x

Comment is about just craziness (blog)

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Lovely lines Harry. :)

Comment is about For my love on Valentine`s day (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Jackie Phillips, I'm glad it caught your eye! I had been debating for a while on whether or not to post it, but I'm certainly glad I did!
Andy N, Thank you very much! It means so much to me that you enjoyed it!

Comment is about In The End (blog)

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like

Comment is about just craziness (blog)

Original item by giovannie

Thank you

Comment is about It takes (blog)

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Thank you

Comment is about stranger (blog)

Original item by giovannie

Thanks for commenting Harry. :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about THE FAMILY - an Acrostic poem (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

ahh thank you Mamta pleases me no end that you found it touching

Comment is about YOU STOP TIME (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

thanks Rose yes that works too and glad you like it

Comment is about YOU STOP TIME (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

Thanks for your comments on my Tewkesbury poem, John / Zach. Appreciated.

Comment is about Zach Dafoe (poet profile)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

I don't usually reveal my sources, Frances. But in this case thanks are due to Mr Graham Sherwood for letting us know about this. Graham has put one of Leonard Nimoy's poems up on the blogs, too http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=47255

Comment is about Farewell Leonard Nimoy, actor, director - and poet (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

R.I.P.Mr. Spock. I didn't know he wrote poetry. Thanks for this Greg.

Comment is about Farewell Leonard Nimoy, actor, director - and poet (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

excellent work, ian. not a word out of place there i think

Comment is about Dexteram Patris (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

sweet

Comment is about It takes (blog)

Original item by giovannie

your comments say it all Rose.And thanks,re your last line.(P)xx

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