I like the rythm and rhyme you've got going on in this Tommy. It kind of mirrors the fight going on inside. That's one drink I've never tried :)

Comment is about This is not a vodka; ginger, ice and lime (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I thought it was sad. I liked the brevity of it and the way you paint the mood.

Comment is about Dinner Party (blog)

Michael
Thanks for such high praise.

The Other’s Worlds
by J. Otis Powell!
Weird whispers cross datelines
Fine lines of immortal volition
A history of where the blues were born
Whirlwinds that bound de man up
Chain de man down

Willie wiggles then he falls
Willie wobbles and falls regular as daylight
Like pain of uncured sickness
Like blowing - relentless winds

Wild whistles of whiskey wills
Tell secrets that cloak resolutions
Eerie echoes bounce off brick brain blockades
Wander in subconscious valleys
Like demons in deep sleep
Holding healing at bay fencing the body off
Form soul and from voices of angels

It is a commencement of wills at war
A burden for friends - foes
Loved ones / enemies
It’s a yoke that dominates identity
And distorts the smells in the air

Wishes from other’s worlds well-up inside
There is little isolation from weathered want
It’s piped in like air conditioning
It creeps like a thick fog hiding all but itself
The self is warped
Watered down
Withered

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Enjoyed this, Tommy, I suddenly got very thirsty!
:o)

Comment is about This is not a vodka; ginger, ice and lime (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Thank you so much for reposting, Michael. It is just beautiful. xx

Comment is about Harlequin's Meditation - Sven Vath (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

one of your best pieces, Nick I have read here.

its simple,direct language worked well for me.. A

Comment is about MISSING (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

little tellie and has a element of Bukowski i think, but i like your humour in this... good stuff.. A

Comment is about Dinner Party (blog)

isobel. thanks for your reply. im sorry the comment i made seems personal. i often write a point and it comes accross like this. i was really just interested in the observation and the two ways of looking about things how they are opposite and how the perceptions of the mentally ill are not usually recieved as 'valid'. you should of course be able to write opinion without fear of backlash and your original comment was fine really and also valid (im sure im very dfficult to live with - for 'sane/insane' friends..im lucky to have any friends at all but i think thats true of us all. it would be an odd world if we all agreed...sanity is a debatable concept.
no need for apology, but accepted nonetheless. thanks xx

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wow ntombazana i realy love your poem " friends with benefits", yep i hope i am personaly gonna be that friend you are looking for who will lift up uor spirit....much love makhumza mzilikazi(sma)

Comment is about Friends With Benefits. (blog)

Original item by zethembiso mkhize

i think its a very poerful piece of work...truly ....i am looking forwad to read more of your work

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

wow noetic-fret, ....(000oooo).

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Very glad you reposted this.

Comment is about Harlequin's Meditation - Sven Vath (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Thank you Noetic-fret, I surpass myseld at denial :o)

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Thank you Stella, I'll treat you to one...and watch you gob-a-gag drinking it :o)

Comment is about This is not a vodka; ginger, ice and lime (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Thank you Noetic-fret, I surpass myseld at denial :o)

Comment is about This is not a vodka; ginger, ice and lime (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Depends on how you look at it and define it. For some, 'do the very best he can' could have menacing implications... ; )

Comment is about QUESTION (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thank you Ray and Francine - I'm glad that you got something out of this. I think we all need to have a poem that bombs now and again - it keeps us in touch with reality :)
I had a feeling this would be too sweet for the WOL palette but wanted to keep it with the rest of my poetry cos it means something to me. My blogs on here operate much like a photo album...

The inspiration was a glorious morning cuddle in bed with my 8 year old. She is growing up fast and I doubt she will be wanting to do that for much longer. The poem plopped out very easily cos it wasn't so much about crafting. I agree with your suggestions Ray and I'm going to implement them!

Philip - you were lucky to hold the blog top spot for longer than a nanosecond :)

Comment is about She Loves Me (blog)

Original item by Isobel

This is such an incredible read... So powerful and beautiful.

Comment is about Harlequin's Meditation - Sven Vath (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

It's odd, isn't it, what attracts comments and what not?I thought this was really sweet and charming, the last 2 lines lovely.You could be well rid of the holy spirit line, though, and maybe put "who aren't" after robbers and murderers.

Comment is about She Loves Me (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks, Isobel.The rhythm is there but, yeah, maybe it's not obvious on the page. It's really a very personal poem, much more personal than political.

Comment is about Mayday (blog)

I must admit, you have me drooling at the mouth. i used to drink this all the time. Moscow mule, and Im feeling for you. right now i could do with one.

big thanks

noetic-fret!

Comment is about This is not a vodka; ginger, ice and lime (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

When she smiles, that's me at peace,

My favourite line Martin :)

Pehaps if you complete a few like the one above you will then be able to attempt one that is true to you..?

Comment is about Trying Something New (blog)

Original item by Martin Nelson

You could play with that first line, lots couldn't you?..it would change the whole perspective of the read with say a Should it be
the plan of man..this little one got me to thinking.. :)

Comment is about QUESTION (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Because of the title..arghh...all I can think of now is vodka ginger ice and lime...Think this is a fiesty write..smashin stuff.. :)

Comment is about This is not a vodka; ginger, ice and lime (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Clever twist Terry..brought a wry smile to my face.

Comment is about Dinner Party (blog)

Isobel. I have just been reading charlottes page and noticed a comment you made there...
do you know what? form the experience of the manic depressive condition/bi polar personality...i can honestly say that living with the so called 'sane' sometimes unbearable, never mind difficult.
sometimes like existing in flatline.
I am attracted to most my friends by their range of emotion, depth of empathy and understanding, capacity for excitement and generally enriching experience as people who make the world real to me. I dont look at the condition/label, i forget the name of it, get it mixed with the others for I care less about it than for the love my friends and the need/want for their presence in my life.
mainly the sane bore me to death and their blinkered vision makes me laugh.
living with anyone is difficult, life is difficult x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

The idea was smart and the execution just beautiful

Comment is about At Home With Adolf (blog)

Isobel - perhaps I should write
"Is it not the plan for Man..." :-)
M.C.

Comment is about QUESTION (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

thanks for your comments on 'kiss me...'. will look up m. piercy :)

Comment is about stephen smith (poet profile)

Original item by stephen smith

aha xD don't worry about it.

I'm manic depressive - i wouldn't want my girlfriend to go cheating on me or hitting me. Everyone has different perspectives on the whole affair and my opinion is that he did drive her to it.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi lynn, thank you for your comments on the poetry i have written. I very much appreciate all comments be they good or bad, they can only make me a better writer. I have placed Harlequins Meditation back in the blogs for you, and you can find it here;

http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=25080

Thank you once again Lynn,

Much love to you and yours

noetic-fret!

xxx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

brilliant!!

re the last two lines-are they meant to imply
the t-coloured-t giving you a slap
or vice-versa?

Comment is about Trying Something New (blog)

Original item by Martin Nelson

dennis'cat

much like ma pal fae new york
i watch the buffoonery of ma ane hong kong fooner he
hae a bit maer wit tho fae shooer.

gnasher ma braer
black and spiked
little fellar
an accomplice
a clyde to his bon.

i get nae cred
for keeping them oot o tha gaol
but soo wit?

a cat's life is ne'er
maer than aloof


haha apologies to any real scots readers...this was my attempt at an irvine welsh style stab at the Dundee dialect of which my only experience was witnessing big nasty bar fight and waiting at hospital for friends to come out after the fact.
Dennis the Menace was created and written in Dundee. Little hard knock ;)
also based on time spent living in Glasgow and travelling in scotland this accent might be a bit skewed ;p

bring back hong kong fooey, dennis and the late great cartoons of my youth!!

hope you like stella, im waiting for batman :)

Comment is about At Home With Adolf (blog)

haha i like your point isobel. the personal detachment has allowed a great flow and gentle humour.

julians comments - absolutely. i believe the art of poetry is to channel the subconscious inspiration. i am a follower of C. Jung and regard his theories on the psychological relationship with the collective subconscious and his work on archetype to be both fascinating and real for me.

applied to poetry and writing/arts in general Jung sates the gift of the artsist to be a connection and a vehicle, a medium almost (but not in spooky ghost way :)x

i always recommend the book 'women who run with the wolves' Clarissa Pinkola Estes, as a great example of Jungian psychological analysis of writing, particularly for the female experience. Its all about fairy tales x smashing read.

'artifice' - indeed it cannnot be faked Julian x crafting is something i m much better at if i let go, as stella has here.

Comment is about At Home With Adolf (blog)

Am being nosey and commenting on your comments re Ted Hughes. I don't really think anyone can judge another for sure without knowing them personally. Films and media can portray things in skewed lights. I imagine living with a manic depressive would be very difficult, to say the least. I don't think it's a crime to fall out of love, either. I would tend to judge a person on how they treated their kids, mind. That is a completely different relationship. It can be made difficult when people separate though. The kids and the ex partner can become a package that not all people can unwrap.

Comment is about Charlotte Henson (poet profile)

Original item by Charlotte Henson

And now, on reflection, I'm thinking that he needs to work on his calf muscles.

Comment is about Brain And Body (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

That is a very hideous body. I'm not sure why he bothered with the red underpants. It couldn't really get any worse or better for that matter. Quite why men do this to themselves, I've no idea, since I've never met a woman who likes it...

A fun idea for a poem Larisa - you prefer to fuck brains - so that's where I've been going wrong! LOL x

Comment is about Brain And Body (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thanks Peter :)

Sylvia Plath is wonderful, i'm a massive fan. i'm not a fan of her husband, partly because i just don't like his poetry, and partly because i believe he contributed to her suicide.

Comment is about Peter Asher (poet profile)

Original item by Peter Asher

She sounded like my kind of woman until we hit the racism...

I found the poem hard to get into, like Steve. I like the lines that people have picked out already.

I don't think of it as a political poem - more of one commenting on society and changing values.

Comment is about Mayday (blog)

No, it's not :(

Comment is about QUESTION (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

In my view, and experience, good writing tends to operate at two levels, the conscious and the subconscious. We cannot always know what we are writing until we have written it; and even then not be sure.
I would go further and say that those who try to craft subconscious consciously - the clever beggars - risk having the result smacking of artifice.
Well done with this stellar piece, Stella.

Comment is about At Home With Adolf (blog)

I'm with Rachel on this one. I think it's great when poets can move beyond their own realm of experience and write on different themes. I think if this had been based on personal experience a little more anger would have come through, which might have spoiled it. Then we'd all be saying 'Aww poor Adolf - look what he had to put up with' ;

It was great to hear this performed last night. x

Comment is about At Home With Adolf (blog)

Thanks for the comment on my audio blog entry Lynn. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

i'm not sure i understand what you mean xD

Comment is about J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang) (poet profile)

Original item by J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)

Charlotte
In response to White Noise I was taking off from your comforting words at the end, "Afterwards, I would coax her out from under the sofa,
Stroke her hair when she would sob.

It’ll be okay, baby,
We’ll be okay." At times I settle for such resolve as in; It's sawright wit me because it's alright already. Always has been, you know what I mean? White noise as a metaphor is very real for me.I hope I have been more clear.
J. Otis

Comment is about Charlotte Henson (poet profile)

Original item by Charlotte Henson

Just uploaded another poem on Australia Day 2008, and heard of another black death in custody... being Sorry is not enough... we need to change our practices, our words and our hearts...

Comment is about S'hi D'Amour (poet profile)

Original item by S'hi D'Amour

Thank you Winston. Just love Write Out Loud! Rose

Comment is about Rose Fraser Ritchie (poet profile)

Original item by Rose Fraser Ritchie

thanks everyone for comments, they are inspiring.

Comment is about you and us (blog)

the inherent cleverness is its gift stella x it doesnt matter that you never saw it from outside i believe poetry and the poet can be gifted on a purely subconscious level. i always work back to front, in my art work, dance appraisal/critique and writing. i make, then study. i think its a common method.

ps i think i am unique in having would be fascist grandparents?? who would think?

This is still brilliant and so are you (and slim:) x)

Comment is about At Home With Adolf (blog)

Hello Lynn
You spotted "A Bloke's Back Brake Block Broke". Is the thumbprint of my doggerel so obvious?
Glad you liked it.

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

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