It looks as I am not clever enough as I really hate, for example, ironing and can't imagine how can I transcribe it to the arena of pleasure.
When I say "win" or "lose" I do not mean any fightings or competitions, though don't see anything bad in them. There are moments in life when you have to fight, for your rights, for example.
In my case when I have a certain aim in life and I manage to succeed I say I've won, if I didn't I've lost.
I hate wars, I hate meaningless fights.

Comment is about I Learn And Study English (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

HI Cynthia! Thank you for commenting my poem! Hope to see more of you on one of Manchester poetry readings! X

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I'm with Isobel! A gem of a haiku, using the concrete 'onion' which symbolically can take you anywhere your own experience or intellect wants to go.

Comment is about Onion (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

It is good, Steven, in deep lamentation mode, and well structured too. IMO, the line about 'hope' would be an excellent, one-line conclusion, as it summarises the 'unlimited despair' idea.

Comment is about Shadowed (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

I found it just a little slow at the beginning but as soon as you hit the humour of the piece, it was solid gold.

Comment is about Concrete Thinking (blog)

Glad you reposted for new readers. "Night sky winters' is superb, since usually one thinks of animals or people 'wintering'; very apt.

Comment is about Rowan Tree (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Lynn, this is really good, imaginative and funny with a roaring pace from start to finish. Love the ending.

Comment is about Cloud Eleven! (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I understood it as far as I'm aware but then I read the speech-marked version XD A conversation between a woman and a man about the male's escapade naked in another's garden at midnight, am I right? And almost caught by a woman in a car passing by.

I like the little summary at the end but then I grew up with the Aesop style tales. We'd have one read out to us every assembly when I was in junior school and they'd expect us to guess at the morale before they read those last few lines.

I think you've got a real strength in dialogue here, love the humour and I love the back and forth of the conversation.

I found 'assignation' a little awkward, it didn't quite fit the line or the flow to my way of thinking.

Thanks for the read, thoroughly enjoyed and if I'm off the mark at least it might give you a few giggles xxx

Comment is about Midnight Gardens (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

A strange sequence of ideas, Larisa, interesting certainly. 'Feelings have no age' is a superb premise; but where does the idea of "with age you 'become a sage'" or 'you have a big revenge' fit in? IMO, you have structured your thoughts to fit the rhyme scheme, and they have taken on an artificiality which you didn't intend. Always with respect.

Comment is about Feelings Have No Age (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi - really like it - very evocative of the season. B

Comment is about Rowan Tree (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Thank you, Stefan!

Comment is about My Foolish Heart (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Good morning Larisa-a very very good poem indeed-love the last two lines especially-well done Odessa girl! warm regards-Stefan-xx(M-xx)ps-nice title and lovely image

Comment is about My Foolish Heart (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

If you are clever enough, you transcribe the 'hard work' to the arena of 'pleasure' by convincing yourself that it is by sheer 'cleverness' that you are able to control your ATTITUDE. IMO, winning and losing are just societal perceptions, imposed to deliberately create competitiveness or combativeness, apparently an innate part of our animal nature, to be nurtured in lieu of wars.

Comment is about I Learn And Study English (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

So - Accident in this poem is defined as cause and effect, while Chance links more closely to Fate (Inevitability), which point you did not pursue in the poem. In fact, you carefully avoided it. Therefore, your last sentence below is a conundrum. Yes? No?

Comment is about His Majesty Accident (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I,m gonna complain-Lynn has not only violated me copyright-now shes nicking me bezzy mates! this is WAR!! ok...now then...cloud twelve..ah! what a good title for a poo-em! hee hee...cheers cheekies-Stef-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about Cloud Eleven! (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Better marrow than courgette and it flows better...
Well - this could be an allegory for lost love being replaced with the hum drum or just a bit of fun..I like it. x

Comment is about Limerick (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

One you have to think about so a great example of a haiku Dave and it could have as many meanings as an onion has rings. x

Comment is about Onion (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

lovely stuff, dave.. really enjoyed this.. did make me cry a little,but onions do that - lol

bernie - winston i think knows more than me, but the haiku i was taught at university (perhaps wrongly) was a old japanese poem with three lines and dashes of 5 - 7 - 5 on the lines..

Comment is about Onion (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

enjoyable read, lynn.. tricky poem to write as a short story within a poem.

i bet this will go down really well being performed too.

Comment is about Jimmy (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

lot of good lines here, steven even though i think it is really really bleak.

you may want to consider putting in 'Hope is hard to find' in maybe another bit of the piece inbetween the stanzas too to give it a little bit of a chorus.

still - stirring stuff m8.. impressive

Comment is about Shadowed (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Hi, Dave! Thank you so much for reading my poems "Ballad about the Soldier" and "The Victory Day". Thank you very much for your thoughtful comments.
With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Carr

Very nice poem, Mike. There are so many true thoughts. Enjoyed reading it and listening to your voice.
With warmest wishes,
Larisa

Comment is about The Free Thinkers Ministry (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Thanks Ann. The view from the hill, stretching back nearly 40 years

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

What a lovely sweet poem Ann. i like the part... if i was a man ... when it comes to love why cant men be more like women..then again im not so sure after just reading a book ...Stepford Husbands by Jane Gordon..what if women could create the ideal man.. ?..its quite a good read and makes you think ..lv bernie x x

Comment is about Josie my Bristolian Maid (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for commenting Ann. I hope you enjoyed the shepherds pie

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi - many thanks.
all the best. B

Comment is about jean lucy thompson (poet profile)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Thanks Louise! This is one I started as five haiku and turned into a poem. I think it worked really well, though it sees a return to darker thoughts! :-/

Comment is about Shadowed (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

i particularly like the first and last lines, all things are transient, she will repeat to fade, all things are transient, she will repeat to fade. Really like how they hold the poem.

Comment is about Rowan Tree (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

i love the sound of this. 'suicide siren call', the sh sounds in ambition and obsession, 'sleep shadowed' and 'shackled'. good stuff m'lad xxx

Comment is about Shadowed (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

HA ha Lynn this is superb !! how on earth did you manage to put this together so quickly ! think i will come to your heaven and not stefs < No offence stef..lol > but lots of chocs, all those lovely men..richard gere ahh !..animals that talk and men doing housework .. well what more can i say lol..ref pics yours sounds a better way than mine so i will try that way myself ..thank you lv bernie xx

Comment is about Cloud Eleven! (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Yea! They're all ganging up on you, along with Dave Bradley's onions! xx

Comment is about Limerick (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Tomas, thank you for your kind comments on Melancholium, much appreciated.

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Hi Dave-many thanks for comments on 'T'inking' poem.-Stef.

Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Carr

Hello Bernadette, you asked about Haiku.
The true answer would probably take a couple of pages to describe it in its purest form, but on the whole, here in the UK it is taken to mean a three line poem with five syllables in the first and third lines and seven in the second. The lines should relate to each other in some way, as Dave's does quite well. Hope this helps

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Surprising number of facts for a poem. Very informative as well as conveying some emotions at a personal level, in the suggestions about the pictures. I think it works well as a remembrance poem.
Dave

Comment is about The Victory Day (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I think to "love how you love" is a great gift. She has it. xx

Comment is about Josie my Bristolian Maid (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Some interesting ideas in this poem and it conveys the pressures, emotions and consequences of war very well.
Dave

Comment is about Ballad about the soldier (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Haha, thank you kindly, Stef, I should have thanked you for the idea!! And here I was wondering what Sade has that I haven't? Again don't answer that! Lol. Thanks for the chocolate mouse and sloppy kiss, I'm on my way...haha. Love, Lynn xxx

Comment is about Cloud Eleven! (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

The image is of the wonderful Pre-Raphealite artist's model Fanny Cornforth.

Comment is about Josie my Bristolian Maid (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

HAHAHA!Lynn-really good! of course I will be sueing for copyright violation...er no..go on-you can have this one on the house-cos it really made me laugh-and you did allow me my lake of beer-and me and Benji could have a good old chinwag-brill! but lastly,what has Richard Gere got that I aint? don,t answer that! one choclate mouse and a sloppy kiss for effort-go to the top of the blogs!-Stef-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about Cloud Eleven! (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Bernie, thank you for lovely comments on "Jimmy". Re the pictures, I started to google "images for" followed by the subject, and searched for something I liked the look of. Where there's a will.... lol. Love, Lynn xx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Yes ty Bernadette; for your comments on Was This the Plan I agree sometimes I do feel its all planned out ahead for us grrr x

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Ty Ann for your comments on Was This the Plan Yes maybe we are as you understand so well Love to you too x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thank you so much dear Larisa for your lovely comments on "Jimmy". Love, Lynn xx

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thanks Bernadette for your comments on Was This the Plan Yes sometimes it seems like that to me too Liked your poem Kindred Spirits btw and the pic too Lovely x

Comment is about KINDRED SPIRITS (blog)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Then came the millennium dome.
Excellent!
Dave

Comment is about Concrete Thinking (blog)

can somebody tell me what a haiku is please ..thanks bernie

Comment is about Onion (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

very nice poem lynn a lovely short story in poetry form with a lovely romantic ending..very nice ! lv bernie x x

Comment is about Jimmy (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Andy for taking the time to comment on my poem Magic Fields :) Much appreciated

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Great.

Now you've dunnit
The sky's the limit.
Innit?

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Original item by Crackling