Ah, but wasn't the sexy Elvis something else! Can't quite get the line "my eyes and above" ... But I really like this, tight and concise, like a two-minute single

Comment is about I have seen Elvis in my mirror... (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

This is an incantation, a prayer. Beautiful and right, so many will identify with it; and that, for me, is one indicator of the success of a poem. You'll have to give it a sharper title sometime, Rachel, that it merits. Greg

Comment is about Protection Poem (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

I expect the koala bear ate it all!

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Ann - I have changed my pic to a Koala bear having a bath / drink. Hope you like him... Unfortunately all the other info in my profile seems to have disappeared! Win x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

We CANNOT avoid good use of vivid vocabulary because readers might not know what the words mean! Good heavens!!

Comment is about If only we could. (blog)

I actually think it looks rather good in the new version Chris. Not pointless or offensive at all! ;-) But it is your poem, write it how you feel it should be written! Nice talking to you! xx

Comment is about You're A Bit Of A ***Deleted, Offensive and Pointless***, In My Opinion. (blog)

And you've changed your name too! Dear Star, we knew you were still as sweet as ever!

Comment is about You're A Bit Of A ***Deleted, Offensive and Pointless***, In My Opinion. (blog)

Hi Winnipoo - why have you suddenly become a rather sinister door with Egyptian overtones? You don't look so friendly now as when you were stting on your boat. xxxx

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

yeah the phoenix. the dance is to "Birdsong" a piece of music I drummed up and is called the dance of death, one of the Life Dance routines where the dancers rise at the end. Can't say any more. It is very physical though.

Comment is about Birdsong (blog)

Original item by Beulah

'Held' has a cracking first stanza.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

I do like this one Emma. I like how short and to the point it is and I really like the way it alludes to things other than cigarettes...addiction is addiction, after all. No matter what...or who...you're addicted to :-)

Comment is about Cigarettes (blog)

Original item by Emma Robinson

I found your poems here to be a thrilling read. Very true to life and written in a way that many can identify with and yet they don't seem to me to be wallowing in self pity.
Some humour in the every day observations too. I really enjoyed reading. Thanks for these.

Janet.x

Comment is about Richard Krason (poet profile)

Original item by Richard Krason

I'm a smoker and know people who've given up. I also know people who could relate to this in another sense too, not just cigarettes.
Maybe a change of title would put a different spin on it, especially if you wanted to perform it.
In which case Rodney's not far out with his idea of expansion. You could add a twist at the end referring to cigarettes.
Just a thought of course. Your poem, your call. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Cigarettes (blog)

Original item by Emma Robinson

Hi Cate, thanks for taking time to comment on 'Blue Planet' - much appreciated - best wishes Dave

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

I feel this poem comes straight from your heart Rodney, nice one.

Comment is about CHRIS WOOD (after his appearance at the Westy) (blog)

Original item by Rodney Wood

i disagree with rodney here... i think this piece works well as it is... i particularly liked the first few lines but enjoyed the full piece.

Comment is about Cigarettes (blog)

Original item by Emma Robinson

Cheers for your comments on my Evil Weevils, Miss Rachel. Just re-read your Lady of Shalott Day; crackin' stuff. I'm tempted to do a sort of Spring Onion Woman response but I have neither time nor moral fibre at this moment. Catch you soon. Iain ;o)

Comment is about Rachel Pantechnicon (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel Pantechnicon

great story telling buddy

Comment is about The Plays of William Shakespeare (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks Emma and TC for your comments! See, not ALL my poetry is dark! :-)

Comment is about Thoughts on Travelling (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Rodney: thanks for your comments regarding the metaphor :-) I think I'm in danger of overusing it a bit :-) The poem is about something in particular to me, but I haven't added any specific references to keep the poem a generalisation of the situation.

Comment is about The Art of War (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Emma: Thanks for your comments! :-) Glad you liked the way it ends, that was the toughest part (for me) to write!

Comment is about The Art of War (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

well spotted, check my other work here if you want.

Comment is about a horror poem (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

Doesn't actually appear to be a poem.

Comment is about a horror poem (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

Thanks for the suggestion about the pulpit, though I will of course continue to write on diverse themes as I have these past 40 odd years - it's all in the mood of the moment :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Rodney Wood (poet profile)

Original item by Rodney Wood

Generous use of the metaphor but it needs sharper lines and be about something in particular.

Comment is about The Art of War (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Just get down from the pulpit and write some poetry. No one's going to argue with the sentiments.

Comment is about Blue Planet (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Cate

great poem this one Awww. Win

Comment is about If I Could (blog)

Original item by Cate

Cate this is beautiful, I totally felt it. Just beautiful.
Rachel
x

Comment is about If I Could (blog)

Original item by Cate

I loved this. The images felt so right. beautifully observed and I got a distinct warmth from it. Lovely.
rachel
x

Comment is about About Jamaica (blog)

Original item by Raymond Antrobus

I love your poem 'Forgiveness' Antony...
Lines full of incredible imagery:

'I am married to mirrors of regret.'

'when you were different
by being too much the same to me
I was indifferent to you.'

Comment is about Antony Owen (poet profile)

Original item by Antony Owen

Cate
Thanks for the kind words about my Uncle Fester.
I've been doing this as a performance piece about a month but support it by revealing books with Fester's Old Title crossed out and Bill Shakespeare's replacing it. I thought it needed this help so I was bit loath to post it bare, as it were.
I'm wrestling with the audio files at home so if I'm successful I'll try to add a reading to it.
Also just read If I Could. Beautiful. Mine are teenager/early twenties now, but the old saying is very true; "When they're young they break your arms and when their older they break your heart".

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Just read your Divorced Children poem on Hanah's profile. I found it very touching and sad and beautifully written. There must be billions of children in similar circumstances - my own included - let's hope they all manage to rise above it, like your wife.

Comment is about Antony Owen (poet profile)

Original item by Antony Owen

Amen to this Dave. Lets hope before its not too late for our future generations.
Cate xx

Comment is about Blue Planet (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

I don't know what rwally means.

Comment is about The Art of War (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

I rwally like the way this one builds and then falls with this sorry silent battlefield at the end, relationship graveyard :(

Comment is about The Art of War (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

i agree with TC, wherever you go you always have to take yourself!
I like this one Kenny it, theres lots of quite soft language in it which reminded me of someone sitting near the sea and goes with the reflective mood of your poem. :)

Comment is about Thoughts on Travelling (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Hey Antony, thanks for your comment, just read through your biography and poems and yes, we do! I think your poems are excellent and full of depth, which is exactly what I want and 'try' to add into mine.
I love The Black Hole! Amazing stuff! x

Comment is about Antony Owen (poet profile)

Original item by Antony Owen

Is this a reference to the phoenix Beulah? It has a note of optimism about the ending that would suggest so.
Cate xx

Comment is about Birdsong (blog)

Original item by Beulah

A fun poem - and I agree with Graham, very concise and neat. I have never smoked so do not know what giving up feels like, but I imagine it can't be easy! :-)

Comment is about Cigarettes (blog)

Original item by Emma Robinson

Hi Emma, thanks so much for your suggestions regarding my poem 'The bed years' - I've added my own comments in response :-)

Comment is about Emma Robinson (poet profile)

Original item by Emma Robinson

Well now this is a clever little ditty. There has always been an ongoing debate as to who wrote Shakespeare`s works, with many countries claiming he plagiarized ideas from their poets. But its obvious that John Coopeys got the last word.... twas his ancestor!!!
Cate xx

Comment is about Shakespeare Poem (blog)

Original item by Alain English

Very funny and very very clever!! Its good to see someone with the innate ability to rhyme like Shakespeare {and yes it is a skill that few here can do well!!} I went back to look at the poem that provoked this reply and saw what a clever little chappy you are!
Cate xx

Comment is about The Plays of William Shakespeare (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I like the quote 'Every moment has its own truth' in your biography, I agree!
Your poems have really good rhythm throughout, I really like 'Each Dawn I Die' x

Comment is about Richard Krason (poet profile)

Original item by Richard Krason

This is nice.... little Jamaican Icarus

Comment is about About Jamaica (blog)

Original item by Raymond Antrobus

Cynthia - it was lovely to meet you properly too last night! I think our paths may have crossed before at WOL in Sale around autumn last year, where we both read?

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Dave, Hope your move went well. glad to see you back with us again and posting blogs once more. Win x

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

I love the life affirming rawness of this - that desperate maternal instinct to protect offset against the knowledge that we can't and in some instances shouldn't.

Comment is about If I Could (blog)

Original item by Cate

I see you, I see all, maybe not always in the right way, but I am awakened and I see.It is good to discuss Philospohy albeit in an abbrieviated manner.Have a really nice day ;-)TC XX

Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)

Original item by Beulah

Well done for giving up (I hope). Neat little concise piece here, all hanging on the last line. Resist.

Comment is about Cigarettes (blog)

Original item by Emma Robinson

It's such a helpless feeling wanting to protect and yet to let them live and make their own mistakes and joyful experiences.

Lovely poem Cate.
Janet.x

Comment is about If I Could (blog)

Original item by Cate