love the new style, direct and honest observations enable us all to get stuck into the words, monologue and poem fused, a performance slant, the reiteration sounds louder line by line, keep tapping into these themes Chris

Comment is about What I Share With A Screaming Toddler. (blog)

Bienvenue chez nous, Michel.
wonderful alliteration and imagery.
not to mention such erudition: I had to look up whipperwill and procellous.
one line had me puzzling though, and wondering if there was a word missing from it (find, perhaps?):
those who could now themselves strewn

did you write this in English? Do you have it in French, too?
J'attend ta réponse.
cheers

Comment is about Michel Francois (poet profile)

Original item by Michel Francois

Would that we could all live lives of such vibrancy and warmth; would that each humnan life was full of music, colour, laughter, shining eyes etc.

I fear too many of us live diminished lives - of the sort you suggest with the coffin metaphor of the poem (and the pic).

If, in reading it, people are tempted to break out of their coffins and live a little, then it will have done a lot

I think it has the power to do that.Steve.

Comment is about Coffin Life (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Yeah, that's fine. I feel 'nowt' detracts from the power of the poem but as with all assessments, mine is as subjective (and as faulty) as the next person's.

Comment is about John Turner (poet profile)

Original item by John Turner

..thanks for the comment John...yes, I wrote it very quickly and so won't be changing any words (including 'nowt')..if you look at chris co's comment he advised lots of edits which I don't understand...you can't edit a sudden verbal outburst, so why this?..having said that I am re-assessing stuff I wrote in my 20s...but I wasn't so concerned with life's mistakes and errors then..!

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I missed this one as it passed through Andy, Watching snow fall evokes these feeling in me too, I always thought it was the excitment of the ever present child within, but as the years advance I realise it is more than that, it is the peace which falling snow brings with it that is also to be cherished. Great poem.TC

Comment is about Early January Snow Blues (blog)

Original item by Andy N

This is funny... Many men I think feel this pain ; )

Comment is about What I Share With A Screaming Toddler. (blog)

I love this Beulah!


The ending is powerful, and I totally agree...

'what ever I do I do alone
because the one I want
to sit, to stand , to walk
to be with me
is not here
and if I should die
I'd rather die alone
than to have you
when I cannot have her beside me.
i love you Fidelity..'

Francine x

Comment is about For Fidelity. (blog)

Original item by Beulah

This is fabulous Ann!

Love these lines...
'It would be so simple just to take,
but I must not.
I must not drag you in.
To enslave you in this hollow hell.'

Francine x

Comment is about The lovesong of a lonely vampire (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

touch of the Stevie Nicks!yumyum!

Comment is about Rachel Bond at the Howcroft, Bolton December 2009 (photo)

Superb pic one agrees with nick.

Comment is about Rachel Bond at the Howcroft, Bolton December 2009 (photo)

Hi Neil-extremely good poem.Wonder if there is an element of becoming hardened to suffering in this person.Dangerously all too common methinks,sadly.But the gloomy doomy news sometimes has that affect? But definitely a very good poem in its self-thank you-Stefan

Comment is about GRIEF VOYEUR (blog)

Original item by Nells

Hi Beulah. Thanks for your recent comments. I think all good poetry should sound "familiar" and to an extent it should appeal to the inner child. Thank you for your comments which I find mostly cryptic and difficult to interpret. But ta anyway. Not sure that the type face in "As Is. . "is the easiest to scan but hey ho.

Comment is about As Is--.He Is As He He Is. (blog)

Original item by Beulah

Nice to see you posting!

Comment is about As yet untitled (blog)

Lonely noble sentiments, delicately expressed. And thanks for commenting on my poem too.

Comment is about For Fidelity. (blog)

Original item by Beulah

The world is full of paradoxes, probably why there is so much conflict. Keep writing and posting Neil. Aye, read your blog on my showcase. Yes, it did, it really screwed with my head. I shall always live with an inner conflict within because of my experiences.

stay well niel

Mike

Comment is about ALL THESE THINGS I KNOW (blog)

Original item by Nells

Erm! Such a voice. I can even imagine the picture with your voice. Nice poem, voice to die for, good work ann.

Mike

Comment is about The lovesong of a lonely vampire (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Beulah, thank you for your thoughtful comments, and thereby leading me to your own work.I suppose I hide my real feelings, whatever they might be I'm not too sure, behind smart arse reportage. I admire people like yourself who can speak from the heart.

Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)

Original item by Beulah

A sad one Beulah. Wish I knew what else to say.

Isobel x

Comment is about For Fidelity. (blog)

Original item by Beulah

Hi Kathryn, i like it. Although i cant help but feel that a more comical ending could have been thought of. I can think of some but they would be bordering on milliganish. So i will abstain. Not bad though, a good effort. Keep writing and keep posting.

Mike

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Aye Beulah, i have to say i agree with TC. The poem does seem simple until the last few lines where you do realize its complexity. Again i would add that it is tinged with sadness. Nice one

Mike

Comment is about For Fidelity. (blog)

Original item by Beulah

Very touching, and a bit sad too, the last line made me think a little too, because the poem was more complex than it first seemed to be...
TC XX

Comment is about For Fidelity. (blog)

Original item by Beulah

Saturday

the stoic regret of too much money spent
the cold stretch of sleep and weariness of Asda
And the stuck in wall boredom knowing that jeffs gone out and i am reading poems.

But this is a good one.

Comment is about A Week In Words. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

I like this one too. Not sure that many men know how to articulate the important things - but that's maybe a jaundiced view. Like your new style Star Garter.

Comment is about What I Share With A Screaming Toddler. (blog)

I'd agree that discussion is good, and say that even that banter and mickey-taking are good in regard to other people's beliefs. What I was objecting to in this one were a) the idea of claiming superiority, and b) the strawman arguments (i.e. not finding out what another person's beliefs, making an assumption as to what they are, and then arguing against your own assumption).

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Original item by Dermot Glennon

I like it , it's cute, your son is lucky to have such encouragement.
Maybe 'Elly the Tiny traveller'??
TC X

Comment is about As yet untitled (blog)

you care too much. look to your own. now. That is true non-p.c.

Comment is about Handle with Care (blog)

Thanks for your amusing comments ;-on RHRH ha ha, I was thinking of 'white hot' maybe I should have put it in there..... (just did thanks);-))I haven't seen that documentry thank goodness lolLuv TC XX

Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)

Original item by Beulah

sniff the coke!!

Comment is about BRAIN SPLEEN (blog)

Original item by Barrie Singleton

if stars were awarded this is a five star-where I would pleasant abide awhile.

Comment is about Today (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

milton loves you too. and yea satire and but truth; requiem and historical record; and the tongue is somewhat in the cheek.

take it to the churches let them sing--hallelujah the bible holders; take it to the rapper, let them wrap it in dollars; take it to a registry let them register the rhythm, the drum beat of the funeral maarch. But let us not cry, for to cry would be to profane.
beautifully done.

i am being so 'blessed' today reading all you poets, you artists that know.

Comment is about Today (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Comment is about Paul Wright at the Waterside Arts Centre, Sale May 2009 (photo)

where are your poems?

Comment is about Paul Wright at the Waterside Arts Centre, Sale May 2009 (photo)

this is art. More my style- basic simple This is visual and perfected in the mode of delivery..painting after painting
The artist is poet scribe, painter, sculptor and you have done it. the pleasure is ours.

Comment is about After Fern Hill (blog)

Original item by Paul Conneally

probably not. nicely titled and a man thing I so dare to add.

Comment is about Lots of Thoughts to Think About, but Probably Not. I'm Tired, Not Deep. (blog)

didn't know vampires had love for anyone. This is a must read re-read.

Comment is about The lovesong of a lonely vampire (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

thank you very much for your kind words.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Merci, merci, mercy!

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This is marvellous. There are so many superb lines I'm not going to pick and choose. You have a gifted touch.

Comment is about A Week In Words. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Hey, Girl, just plain bloomin' brilliant. 'and strangers that hurt like mirrors' is an outstanding example of many such.

Comment is about Prelude (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

This is good. Which 'she' is it - the wife or the child's mother?

Comment is about What I Share With A Screaming Toddler. (blog)

Hi Nick
Thank you for your lovely comment on my poem. So glad you liked it. Sorry so late replying I don't go on my site very much. Hope I get to hear you read.

Lynda x

Comment is about NICK ARMBRISTER (poet profile)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

I will check the library on Monday for the novel you recommend.
One winter while visiting my sister in Canada I got completely snowed in for three days. She had a 'heritage' Bible from the late 1800's, a tome so big I had to spread it on a table to read. But I amused myself by reading completely through Paul's contributions to the canon. It was one of the happiest three days of my life; I was mesmerised once more, and privileged to stay with my reading for hours, immersion in 'his' words and philosophy. I never use the word 'doctrine' anymore. The fine aspects of Paul far outweigh the nonsense, although he has much to answer for in strait-jacketing Christian concepts about men and women. Well, hardly more than St. Augustine who really did a number with 'original sin'.

Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Regan

Oy Oy, I'll attempt to fuse our words for the mail poem

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I find the stories that lead into poems very intersting in thier own way, I can picture you at the bar on this one, I understand how that spark sets off the poem, I get it a lot with TV ads. What tends to happen is i will just write the whole lot as a blurb in one go, not making any efforts to make it look like a poem, but as I write it tends to form its own rant poem. This way when you come back to perform it you have a pure image of your thoughts. I often wonder if anyone else does the same. Do you think that if you have to take time to arrange the ideas into a classical arrangement its harder to do?

I like the pure/obscene coupling! and the circumstances surrounding the poem make for intersting reading, wanting to know what happens next, where, how , why
with your career in the force you must have some huge stories to draw from, ones that involve th epublic and therefore are gonna lend themselves to a huge audience.

Comment is about ALL THESE THINGS I KNOW (blog)

Original item by Nells

There is plenty of ego driven badness out there, but there is good too, as janet says. The news is rigged to frighten us into giving away what little freedom we have left. Powerfully written stuff though, would be easier to read if you split it up as Chris suggeste.TC

Comment is about EVIL IN PEOPLE...... (blog)

Wow!!.... listening to it, makes it sound almost worth the price...
Luv TC XX

Comment is about The lovesong of a lonely vampire (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Mike, never less than intense, moving and troubling, addressing the immediate human tragedy of this earthquake seems to be stretching our capabilities to the limit, but it all seems a metaphor for something deeper and darker.

Comment is about When We of Poverty, Where Next? (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Hey Star. Get a hat from the big hat shop in York. I think it would suit you. I like the poem about the Screaming Toddler it reminds me of when my kiddies were small.
Keep safe, Neil

Comment is about What I Share With A Screaming Toddler. (blog)

Hey Ann, Cool poem. I thought it had a real Victoian flavour. It was concise but enthralling. Well read, a favourite of mine.
I don't think you are being "thick" in any way re your comments and value you taking the trouble to read and post, thanks again, Neil

Comment is about The lovesong of a lonely vampire (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove