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Mon 18th Jan 2010 22:38

I enjoyed this poem and the sentiment portrayed.
I agree, there is an element of sadness in it, not sure though if that is intentional or whether the readers would feel empathy when reading. I guess most people would love fidelity to be by their side at all times. Nice one Beulah.

Janet.x

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Mon 18th Jan 2010 20:27

Glad you enjoyed it John. I can do short and concise, but that one is my personal favourite because it's so long-winded and it gives the substance some personification. Your work is good, I like :) S x

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neil gardiner

Mon 18th Jan 2010 20:27

Hi guys. Just a brief note re "Grief Voyeur"
The piece is not a slight at the hard working and conscientious counsellors I have known. It is a humorous poem and is not meant to be a critique of the profession. Sometimes poetry is challenging in its humour and I like to think this is one of those.
Thanks for the posts.
Neil.

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John Aikman

Mon 18th Jan 2010 20:11

Now...that's a poem.

:)

Jx

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Mon 18th Jan 2010 20:11

Ace! Full of colour and texture. Very engaging. Didnt see the end coming, but i was impressed when it arrived. Well in.

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Mon 18th Jan 2010 20:07

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John Aikman

Mon 18th Jan 2010 19:50

Too many cliches man...too many!There might be an engaging poem about a dark subject here...but too many words...too many old words.:)Jx

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John Aikman

Mon 18th Jan 2010 19:43

I used to do counselling with amongst other folk, the police...I never touted myself, they used to call me in when they'd had a 'death in custody'. In my experience they are as traumatised by such an experience as anybody else...they needed to talk about it. I do, however 'recognise' the subject of the poem...I have met 'counsellors' who just seem a bit 'too into it'... Very thought provoking stuff.

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Jx

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Noetic-fret!

Mon 18th Jan 2010 19:18

I wasnt going to add any comments today. I just wanted to peruse the poetry and see what people were writing about this monday. But had to log on to the site just to say that for this poem - WOW!
Brilliant.

Mike

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John Aikman

Mon 18th Jan 2010 19:13

"with witless blinks, or a pickled amputee, sound-swabbed
and time taut."

Lovely line...

The first line makes no sense to me...a mixture of tenses. What's wrong with 'The inhuman hour descends'?

"tasting your lips with a muzzled army" is...well, clever, and...provoking, and...good!

Jx

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 18th Jan 2010 17:48

You are all very optimistic re my age, I was at grammar school at the time! But thanks for all the comments!

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Isobel

Mon 18th Jan 2010 17:15

Love the thought processes in this. I think you could be forgiven for your child like reaction - many adults are far worse. My old dad (semi paralysed at the age of 52) would get quite energised when one of his old work colleagues popped their clogs. He just loved out-living people - got a quiet satisfaction from it cos they'd all visited him on what they thought was his death bed...Sorry for wandering off topic - I do like a poem that makes me reflect on my own experiences though - and this one does. Don't remember that actual day - was so very very young and our telly never worked anyway. LOL xx

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neil gardiner

Mon 18th Jan 2010 16:04

Hey Ann. Did't realise you were an octopus. Respect in that department.

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neil gardiner

Mon 18th Jan 2010 15:58

Hi John. Ta for the comments. Can't believe you can convey so much in a poem of 60 words. Nice one man.

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John Aikman

Mon 18th Jan 2010 15:09

I can't sing...I ain't pretty, and my legs are thin.

Tough confessional stuff. I like the aura of the fedora.

:)

jx

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John Aikman

Mon 18th Jan 2010 15:07

I never have trouble remembering the date...it was my birthday! Useful in a quiz every now and again. I'd hesitate to say 'nice' 'cos it's better than nice...it does have a fizzing central conceit...and a terrific ending. Grand poem.

Thank you.

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jx

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neil gardiner

Mon 18th Jan 2010 14:47

Hey Ann. Don't beat youself up for something you said in all innocence when you were a child. Your poem makes a great analogy with the "Great Step" we all eventually take. Nice poem. Did't think you were that old to remember 1969!

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Mon 18th Jan 2010 14:22

hi Nells-with respect to you,you forgot to mention something else you are-honest,my friend.As i said recently to another gent on here,and the wording is not meant to be jocular,but to me has a deeper significance-keep your biscuits dry,and flowers to hand-and the world will turn,ASAP i hope for you.or in more stronger terms-don,t let the b******s get to you! sincere regards friend-Stefan

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 18th Jan 2010 13:13

Cynthia, I am sure you could never sound like a twit! And all my poems are "toss-offs" as you call them. The only one I've ever planned out was South with Endurance, and no one seemed very struck with it. Regarding this poem, not sure if I quite get it. Half way through I thought you were having an argument with your SAT NAV. But I guess that's a metaphor, or the road of life is. Will read it a few more times. But thanks for all your comments, esp recent one for Mon Girl.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:29

I believe poets are compassionate and dispassionate observers at the same time, and so innately have a sense of apartness that enables them to see situations in embracing language.
I sound like a twit, but I'm not monitoring my words much.

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Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:15

Yes it is easy to critcise those who take when they have nothing,Thougtful albeit a dark poem, and if anybody does try to shoot you Beula, I would be one of the first inline with my shield ;-)
TC XX

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:14

Thank you Cynthia. This event always worried me a bit, as I thought my reaction could be seen as being heartless, even a bit weird. But of course at the time, I was not aware of loss. Also, my Dad had this way of thinking all his life, he wasn't heartless, but could be diverted from sorrow by exciting things that were happening around him. It kept him young, I think. Or maybe it's that thing that poets and writers sometimes have, in the middle of a disaster/broken heart/whatever, there is a bit of them thinking "This might make a good poem."

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:09

Excellent. Completely captivating. This is a great universal topic for personal exploration. Mine is expressed in Television Moon on my Blogs here.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:03

You have got to become famous!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 18th Jan 2010 11:59

Me too. Your poetry offers a kind of exotic collage for me rather than distorted cubism, but it sometimes seems to cross over even these boundaries.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 18th Jan 2010 11:44

I am so divided about the value of 'toss-offs' being posted before a period of 'settling' has passed, for further consideration of ideas and expressions. I'm messing around too. This is my third effort at relative spontaneity.

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Beulah

Mon 18th Jan 2010 09:00

hi, thanks for the comments. Will pop another look aother time.

Beulah Ben'Adam

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Andy N

Mon 18th Jan 2010 08:30

I agree with Cynthia here, Dave but it is a nice change off pace in the second stanza.. nice one

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Andy N

Mon 18th Jan 2010 08:29

interesting stuff - i wasn't expecting the poem to develop the way it did from the first line.. but i like it - last two lines in particular..

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 18th Jan 2010 07:18

Another splatter of wonderful images, I really love your poetry.

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clarissa mckone

Mon 18th Jan 2010 03:54

hI ANN, NICE POEMS!

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clarissa mckone

Mon 18th Jan 2010 03:52

hi dave, your poems are nice.

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Andy Sewina aka Danny Wise

Mon 18th Jan 2010 00:27

Thanks for reading this there's loads more on my home page at: http://properjoes.blogspot.com

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Emma Robinson

Sun 17th Jan 2010 23:43

Thanks for your comments Dave, I really enjoyed your Churchill poem and look forward to reading more of your poems if I can ever get this baby off to sleep! :)

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Dave Bradley

Sun 17th Jan 2010 20:47

Welcome Richard. Nicely quirky -reads like a good performance piece. Looking forward to seeing more

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Dave Bradley

Sun 17th Jan 2010 20:40

Hi Emma

Checking out new poets and came across yours - have to agree with Graham - good stuff - looking forward to seeing some blogs

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Sun 17th Jan 2010 20:25

Hi Emma, Yes I liked your samples so far. Enjoy the site. Maybe see you again at wigan. Winston

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Sun 17th Jan 2010 20:12

A good rhythm to this one. what a great thing to do with your son. Keep it coming. Winston

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Natasha

Sun 17th Jan 2010 20:02

Hi Barrie! Just noticed your entry, sorry-still getting used to this site., its "lost in" pretty much ( like all Russian sound rows, for example) but its got some new ideas and some of them I find interesting.. I ve got a lot work to do with translating my poetry but I am enjoying it so far. Its hard work through..

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Sun 17th Jan 2010 19:56

Hi Richard, Welcome to WOL. Hope to see what you're writting at the moment on our blog posts. Winston

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steve mellor

Sun 17th Jan 2010 19:52

Hello Beulah
Just to thank you for taking the time to read and comment on Handle with Care. Very much appreciated
Steve

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Sun 17th Jan 2010 19:48

Hi Nells,well done for getting stuck in and posting up 3 blogs recently. Some interesting stuff in there. enjoy the site. Winston

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Emma Robinson

Sun 17th Jan 2010 15:53

Thanks Graham :)

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chris stevenson

Sun 17th Jan 2010 15:14

...hello Ann..thanks..don't know why it's in a paragraph?....'hand on your arm' is because she touched the coffin..they kept showing it on the news, after the plane landed.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 17th Jan 2010 14:54

Get well soon cherub!

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kath hewitt

Sun 17th Jan 2010 14:49

Hi, just wanted to say thanks to everyone who has commented.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 17th Jan 2010 14:21

This is a telling poem, Dave. The premise is wholesome and hopeful, presuming you actually can execute the 'I wills ...'

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 17th Jan 2010 13:53

Hello Kathryn and welcome to WOL.
I liked you poem but think that children's poetry is a really difficult genre to write in. To me they almost need to be like a pantomime (something in there for the adults too). Good luck and can't wait for more posts.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 17th Jan 2010 13:50

Hello Emma and welcome to WOL.
Just read your samples and admire your original approach. some lovely words in there.

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Pete Crompton

Sun 17th Jan 2010 12:55

I'm missing you a lot Steve, so glad you are still out there, thanks for all your events, I hope to be feeling better soon and get out there and see you and the crew. Miss it so much, your warmth, passion and enthusuasim leads to the most nurtered of poetry nights, long live the bards and the Regan scene

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