Hello Richard,

Such life. You have expressed life as it happens.
Floor can get that way at times. It is strong commanding poem.

"fearing my life I did as she said
later, she called me into the lounge
and with a strong voice
"look at that floor!"
what is wrong I asked?
suckering suckatatz! its unholy and unhomely,
to which I sensationally replied
"look at that floor!"

Interesting twist in the conversation.
Thank you...Zuzanna

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Lauretta~ The poem does give another thought. It made me bring one more comment. Who has the right to judge anyone about their how they dress and wear the cloths they love. Or better yet the style of their life. So many thinks you have packed in this wonderful write.
Well done!!

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Me too! This is what, for me, poetry is about: capturing the essence of an idea in a few words. Here it is done with such humour, too. I love the last (punch) line.

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thank you Darren, Zuzanna, and Pete for you comments and encouragement.

I wrote this poem for my sister.

Belinda

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Lines within lines within lines within lines
Lines within lines within lines within lines
Lines within lines within lines within lines
Lines within lines within lines within lines

Mr. Crompton is finding his voice again. Fan - tastic. Ooh, by the way Peter. I shall be at the thirsty scholar on Monday. After all, by coincidence, i shall be a Thirsty Scholar too! Good luck and see you and Scott and Gus Monday.

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Great poem Richard. There is a typo that stopped me in my tracks (dessert) but i got around it! I enjoy reading your work. Just be mindful of those little typo's.
Keep writing...

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The beauty of reading any good poem for the first time that it flows almost effortlessly. I didn't have to re-read as i was reading for the first time. The words just flowed, nothing jarred and it was an altogether, pleasant reading experience. Beautiful.

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Hi - I read this as a sort of death. Although i do seem to have a fixation for it at the moment!
"These are your guests,
Set me a place,
Though I may be a while"
It's as if a soul has been guided toward heaven by yourself or another. The acceptance that heaven or an afterlife exists and the resignation that you too will perhaps one day be with them.
Excellent poem Richard

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Belinda - this is very intimate, very profound and has such a gentle feeling when you read. Super writing.

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Ooh, forgot to mention the, or what I perceive as the multilayered writing.
"Confident she chews candy for a buzz..."
Hoorah.

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I enjoyed this one. Very aware of social prejudice and the idiots who call themselves human.
"Her staccato pace
Accelerates
As she gains confidence
And celebrates her high heel master class
success"
Like this bit especially...

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you are the greatest mark. we love you

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Hello Belinda~Beautiful poem!!
Well written with the visual reflection of those two identical trees added a lot of imagination to your write. Very enjoyable piece to read. Great use of words! The poem fascinates because you gave life to those involved.

Enjoyed reading!
Thank you...Zuzanna

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HI< Richard~Beautifully written thought provoking mysterious poem. It kept me interested from the beginning to the end as I wanted to find out the total reflection from your words.Was not able to guess what you were trying to tell the reader. "Mystery"...Thank you...Zuzanna

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Hello Lauretta~ What a wonderful poem this is!
Fantasy mixed witha picture from a real world. The poem hs been excellent as the picture
I imagined looking great. Loved this stanza...Smile.

"A close escape from an aging man
pervert
Forgotten what to do
With it
shame"

The sound of the shoes on the sidewalk...
The fetish you mentioned very intriguing.
Lovely write ,,,GREAT POEM!!

Thank you...Zuzanna

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HI lauretta,I love the poem and the pic is perfect! I have shoes like that, what fun, and its perfect that they are on top of a mans shirt box.You look much like a friend of mine. Take care Clarissa

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Clarissa and Richard
my thanks to you

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well good it said yes. nice poem!

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nice poem

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this is lovely Belinda.
So often in life the bonding with another, deep.

I like the geisha footsteps. very gentle.

I like the photo too.

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Thankyou Zuzanna and Mel for your comments on my poem.

I wrote this poem because as humans we often punish ourselves, beat ourselves up about the most trivial of things, and we are only hurting ourselves and in the process I feel that this takes us further away from out true self, and we can become detached from others'.

Thank you again

Belinda x :))

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great dark poem, the sort of words I like to write, nice one,

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hmmm I have becom what I hate Dave
Fence sitters are like itching powder.
they shout
but the polarised voices
most often
are the louder ones.

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Nice poem Daniel but shouldn't it be called synthesis, after all that's what a thesis and antithesis produce innit?

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Daniel

This is such a clever poem. I love the line "I'll be the antithesis to your thesis"...wonderful, wonderful.

Mel
xx

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Thanks Dave

Apart from poets, I think I might choose a donkey and a couple of camels for company when I celebrate.

Might get a camel to put a red nose on!

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Hi Honey, I hate myself for this as I'm always wittering on about the genius of young people but I was shocked to see your pic as I figured that poem was written by a much older man, please don't take that as an insult - I think it's cause the character in the poem seems so much older - I don't know I think maybe because of all the religous references in some ways I pictured Jesus talking to Mary Magdelain. I look forward to reading your other stuff - I just read this poem again and every time I find something new in there which is the mark of a good poet!
Good luck with it all.xxx

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Simple Mal

Leave yr family, don't buy a tree, don't eat turkey, stay up all night, don't share your house with a donkey, avoid the path of dusky potentates (and the camel shit), and don't celebrate anything involving other people. A perfect recipe for mid-winter contentment. Most of it's worked for me (other than the other people bit)

Dave

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Peter,say what you mean and get off the fence

Tee hee. nice one.
Dave

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Clarissa and Zuzanna - Once again you make me fill with hope .....Im really happy that you can take something from this important poem. I think it seems if you write when really upset it brings out fantastic work.

You are both writing such crafted pieces of work, I'm feeling overwhelmed.

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David, please let that feeling pass, you dont know what happiness and positivity you have brought. the poem draws influence only from the events of a sunday evening, hurt in context is understandable...and anyway people like yourself and poets here....have a love that draws tears from hardened men.

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Peter you are possibly the most compassionate person i have met, to write this is a supreme act of empathy, you make me feel ashamed.

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HI, Richard

I forgot to say THANK YOU!!
For the comment you left on my page.

Thank you...Zuzanna

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Hello Richard

Your varieties in writing that give more broad spectrum and enjoyment to read. The poem will be very boring if there were only one style. The more styles the better. I see you being very gifted and it is good to have you here. Keep up the great work!
It is mutual pleasure to read your writes.
Welcome to W.O.L World!!...Zuzanna

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Hello Malcolm

Your poem speaks volume. lots of interesting lines from your personal observation and love for animals and Nature. In this poem I found a lot of metaphoric expressions.

"A lone rabbit hops past. His white
Tail flashing its signal of good health.
The small, brown body slips
Down a small brown hole.
Yards later, from that other world,
His white teeth flash their
Message of good will."

EXCELLENT WRITE!

Thank you...Zuzanna

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Hello Pete

I enjoyed the use of the metaphors in your poem. Great write!! Anything that is written about books or poetry I do love.

Thank you for the great treat to read...Zuzanna

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Hello Pete

You are excellent in your creativity and the use of vocabulary in this poem. I thought at first it reminds of a Shakespeare's poetry. Some of your words must admit we do not have in our English on this Continent! You may say well, I do not care. But this is the truth!

Thank you for sharing the special dedication for Pat...Zuzanna

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hi richard, nice poem

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well, Im not good at saying much about your poems,this poem made me feel a little sorry for the man with fists. but Im sure that was not the point.Im having a hard time thinking right. sorry

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This is a nice write. Did you cut part of it out?

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Hello Richard

Another wonderful piece of your great write;
It kept me absorbed and interested in the entire scenarios. Romantic set up on the beach. Love and the kiss, then the Poet became a baptized, what a great imagination!

BEAUTIFUL POEM!!
Thank you...Zuzanna

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nice poem. I like the ending the best! Do you still have that book I gave you? I still have the book you gave to me.

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HI, Richard

Excellent poem!!! I did not like Mondays either.
It was always a day that nothing was going right. Perhaps because on the weekend was more relaxed. I have enjoyed the creative side of your write.
GREAT JOB!

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This is you Dave, this writing. In style, it reminds me so much of that piece you write about meeting Lynda at the Cajun dance. I think THIS is your voice, your genre. You do it so well. It draws the reader (me) in and makes me want to keep reading. Nice circular touch with Walking in the Air.

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what a great great choice! i don't want to be a gusher but this reminded it me why i like poetry and made me think i want to write something good like this. nice one, catherine smith :-)

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I have been looking through some of the profiles and listened to your poem, 'My Dragon Husband'. Celebrated as a 'poem of the month' is a suitable accolade, I loved the imagery. Superb writing Freda.

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The colours that you evoke in this poem are very evocative and fit perfectly with the title of the poem. I love the imagery of 'my jaded eye', as it works on so many levels.

Mel
x

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Hi Melissa

I love the strangly hypnotic quality of this poem. I think porcelain doll is an extremely emotive image. a lovely, lovely poem.

Melx

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A very dark and as Zuzanna says, a very thought provoking poem. Well done

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