Keith
Masterfully done word painting of your Grandpa. I should have liked to know him, but you introduced him here in a deeply living way.
Comment is about Grandpa (blog)
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Keith,
Natrun. You capture the bleak nature of this environment. Yes, this is the place of the Desert Fathers. I have been to desert regions like this. Wow, great writing my friend. You capture the inner and outer in a beautiful and troubling blend. Well done.
Thank You for the experience of this poem.
Brian
Comment is about Retreat to Natrun (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Screaming can be heard
they say from the woods
but you can never be sure
could be just
another u f o sighting.
Comment is about Consequences XVI (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Thanks also to those who have clicked 'Like' for this poem. ?
Comment is about Elsewheres And Might Have Beens (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thanks for your likes
Nazia
Stephen G
Aviva Rifka
Aisha
deanfraser and
Your Royal Poetess.
Comment is about When Cold Nights Just Got Better (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
It was always a talking point when getting undressed for PE to see whether that day’s miscreant had had a corporal or a sargeant!
Comment is about SCHOOL RITUAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks, Attila! You're always a good ally to have on our side!
Comment is about A huge thank-you to everyone that supported our fundraising appeal - you did us proud! (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Keith, many thanks for your eye and ear on this poem. This poem is one of the creations that I like. It speaks to an inner contradiction.
Gratitude,
Brian
Comment is about Since a Warrior (blog)
Original item by Brian Hodgkinson Jr.
Thankyou, Branwell and MC.
I confess that I am such a volunteer and it is, of course, tongue-in-cheek. But you can’t be too careful with the Thought Police who may censor me for inciting people to smack pensioners with a spade in their garden.
And thanks for the Like, Brian, Aisha and Holden.
Comment is about TO BE A VOLUNTEER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
A tumultuous ride through an exuberant vocabulary which left me breathless with wonder at what I had read.
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about Since a Warrior (blog)
Original item by Brian Hodgkinson Jr.
Stephen,
Thank you for your comment. It is greatly appreciated.
Keith
Comment is about Retreat to Natrun (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Cheers Andy re "Under Broken Masonry" your 'like' is appreciated. ?
Comment is about andy simons (poet profile)
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Thanks for the likes Nazia and Stephen G. Thanks for the comments Nigel and Stephen G, glad you liked it.
Comment is about Last Summer I Was A Rainbow (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Thank you for your comment Nigel, and the footfall of fate passing will seem especially loud if we haven't even had time to ask, but fate passes still even when we do ask, and although we think the footfall seems softer in truth that's just how we hear it. Is it not?
Thanks also Stephen for your comment, yes, I think sometimes it is best not to know the answers, and after all, what could stop us from knowing how our own past ought to affect us going forwards except unbearable complexity of what even happened and what we might even be able to make happen or ought to want to make happen. And so we create a story for ourselves of what we wish to have felt and wish to feel, do we not?
Or perhaps it is only me.... ?
Actually I'm thinking this is probably only a truth for some, but then that's ok as it does start with the word 'sometimes' ?
Comment is about Elsewheres And Might Have Beens (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Art work by: https://www.desktopbackground.org/wallpaper/akumu-yume-nikki-by-jcm2-on-deviantart-571911
Comment is about 悪夢 | Akumu (blog)
Original item by Your Royal Poetess
Enjoyed this, Keith. You make a detailed, challenging text a pleasure to read.
Comment is about Retreat to Natrun (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Shades of a UK Tom Lehrer - and deliciously enjoyable for that reason. ?
Comment is about TO BE A VOLUNTEER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Oh yes, this is real poetry. And what a story.
Comment is about Hobo (blog)
Original item by Brian Hodgkinson Jr.
A fine poem culminating in optimism.
Comment is about The Taste of May (blog)
Original item by J.D. Bardo
So many of us must have stood beside the ocean beneath an endless sky and found our minds considering the power and mystery
of the infinite before our eyes. Marvelling and questioning at the
same time at what is yet to be made fully comprehensible to our
limited intellects. The wonder persists and long may it do so for
humanity on its progress to ultimate awareness.
Comment is about Look at the ocean (blog)
Original item by Mahira
Intriguing poem, Aviva. Are there occasions when it is best not to know the answers?
Comment is about Elsewheres And Might Have Beens (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
I really like this one, Julie.
Comment is about Last Summer I Was A Rainbow (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Ah - for trees a jolly good fellow! ?
Comment is about Shivering Timbers (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Thank you so so so much, Martin and Stephen for your generous comments and roses!
A huge thanks to Adam and Holden as well for the lovely roses!
Comment is about Lonesome Backwoods (blog)
Original item by Shifa Maqba
Those flying pieces of chalk were invariably accurate and often
aroused a reluctant admiration among their recalcitrant recipients. ???
Small (and not so small) boys always had an unerring instinct
for perceived "weakness" in teachers and could make the life of
a chosen target something that must have been passing hell for
some. i recall a female teacher of French leaving our class-room
in tears and had enough self-awareness to feel a sense of shame
and remorse for the behaviour that had brought it about. In short,
teaching was no occupation for the "wrong" sort of personality and
either you had it or you didn't when it came to controlling a class.
Hard to define but recognisable in short order to any would-be trouble maker. The fact that I can recall the names of certain teachers even now is a sure guide to how they could leave their
mark (so to speak!) on a youngster.
.
Comment is about SCHOOL RITUAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Ray,
Another poem to endorse the fact that we are contemporaries of age and memories. I recall bamboo canes which were on the top of the blackboard and barely visible. As some recalcitrant pupil incurred the master's wrath he would move toward the blackboard and reach up toward where the cane lay. If the insubordinate behaviour continued then the cane was brought down into full view. The offending minor made to come out to the front of the class and bend over. Thwack, the number dependent on the severity of the offence. Other weapons in the armoury were blackboard erasers thrown at the offender or pieces of chalk aimed directly at their target. Little mercy and pleas for clemency seldom had any effect.
Thank you for this
Keith ( a former victim )
Comment is about SCHOOL RITUAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you Stephen A and Martin for your comments which are greatly appreciated and also to D Joshi and Holden for your 'likes'.
Keith
Comment is about Retreat to Natrun (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Inside this poem
each image seen
shows the real
you on screen.
Comment is about Last Summer I Was A Rainbow (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Given no time to ask
fate has already passed.
Comment is about Elsewheres And Might Have Beens (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Ooh, that's a good poem.
Comment is about Under Broken Masonry (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Sat 13th Feb 2021 02:25
those are "Northers".
Down here in Texas, the weather can change in a heartbeat
in the wintertime. It may be sunshine and 70 degrees, then Boom,
a "Norther" blows in and the temp. can drop 30-40 degrees.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Sat 13th Feb 2021 02:23
you always read more into my poems
than I do. I wish I was that smart! ?
Comment is about Aviva Rifka Bhandari (poet profile)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
It is a new one Martin
after someone had shared how much it has helped them helping others in getting through these difficult times.
Comment is about Giving Something Back (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Thanks all, yes this new version will be recorded by Silas and Carbuncle. ?
Comment is about THE SOUND OF BARKING (blog)
Original item by Rick Varden
Strident words in the final stanza, but true. Bugger complacency!
Keith
Comment is about Grace under pressure (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
I like the "puffy doves" in this poem, and the way that vowelsound is still going when you get to the verb "hunker down." ?
Comment is about OPEN DOOR (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Thankyou to those who have clicked 'Like' for this poem. ?
Comment is about Breath On The Mirror (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thanks also for the likes, Stephen A, Branwell and Holden
Comment is about Green Eyed Monster (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Thanks as always for the eyes, Mart. B
Comment is about More research (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
That snow weight toot Rita
Know under Europe set
Comment is about Lost Love (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
An excellent poetic journey from beginning to end! Top notch poetry ?
Comment is about Retreat to Natrun (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Wonderful use of words, and, as Martin says, imagery, Shifa.
Superb ?
Comment is about Lonesome Backwoods (blog)
Original item by Shifa Maqba
keith jeffries
Sun 14th Feb 2021 07:49
Brian and Shifa, thank you for your comments.
Keith
Comment is about Grandpa (blog)
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