Thanks for the likes and nice comments, this is my take on lost innocence and lost friendship, based on a song I loved as a child. The original Dragon was called Custard by the way!
Comment is about Jackie Paper (blog)
Original item by Mike Bartram
Alem
I think that it's brilliant, an brave to write and post poetry in a second language.
WOL should be a safe place to post such works. Positive feedback is always appreciated.
Sarcasm is the lowest form of wit.
I think that for someone to pick up on a simple typo, and mock is unfair. As you say, we couldn't write a single word in your first language.
Thanks for posting
Cheers Kevin
Ps I think it should read " hell knows no fury" (no apostrophe in hell and only one r in fury)
Comment is about Hell knows no fury (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Hell-knows-not fury.
I wanted to use compound adjective instead of the expression hell knows no fury. It was deliberate as per poetic license.
Be specific in your comment.
Literary competence is required to give a comment. Simply knowing language doesn't suffice.
I did get a positive feedback from readers who got the gist in other blogs like allpoetry.
"Rhymin Pearl - A well written poem indeed I enjoyed the reading of it ?. Keep going and thanks for sharing"
I write poems in the language to be acquired.Hence I outsmart you as you could not write a single poem in my language even if allowed to toil the rest of your life.
Why is that your profile picture shows a loose mouth?
Comment is about Hell knows no fury (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
And one or two of the lines are inspired by Jack Kerouac! A fine starting point ...
Comment is about The Only People For Me........ (blog)
Original item by mentalelf. Philk.
Sun 23rd Aug 2020 09:44
Te agradezco bastante tu comentario y sobre todo tu tiempo, el silencio es un gran regalo
Comment is about Contemplación 2: El silencio (blog)
Original item by Juan Orlando
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Sun 23rd Aug 2020 09:25
El silencio es realmente hermoso! un hermoso poema en verdad.
Comment is about Contemplación 2: El silencio (blog)
Original item by Juan Orlando
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Sun 23rd Aug 2020 09:14
Comment is about Hindi Erotic Poetry - आम सरे आम! (blog)
Original item by Neilkanth
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Sun 23rd Aug 2020 09:10
Lol!
Nothing can escape your vigilant eyes....hehehe....even I saw that tag.
I just google translated the page and copy pasted it. It's not making much sense when you read. Translation always spoils the beauty n gives another meaning all in itself....absurd at times n funny most of the times. I guess here as well something similar has happened.
These days I'm much drawn to japanese music, find it very soothing...I'll share a link....you'll enjoy it too. While exercising I play shaolin, or japanese exercise music, very energizing n relaxing....they have a strong blend of both in their music. Yin yang so completely blended.
Comment is about Hindi Erotic Poetry - आम सरे आम! (blog)
Original item by Neilkanth
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Sun 23rd Aug 2020 08:33
She came by putting on a yellow suit
We had taken care of the heart
Eyes still slipping but
She was looking at her youth
Today we saw mango Surrey mango!
Lips are jammed by him
He has a sweet message in talk
Kiss me, that lip; So much exercise
Just kept kissing me so much
May I achieve my place!
Today we saw mango Surrey mango!
A dagger in his eyes, kills him
See, I fill her eyes as much as eyes
If we get closer, fire and water rust
For the past few days, his shirt looks tight
She is not getting any color
Today we saw mango Surrey mango!
Made me young so that my heart goes out
Even if I close my eyes, my face comes out
Let the water get wet, then the innocent angel has
Kohinoor will fade, his youth will be like this
I salute his beautiful youth!
Today we saw mango Surrey mango!
Someone seems to have told a few days before that
Why are you hiding
Walks when she eats the serpent's force
Sometimes one night my house will be inhabited
The whole night will do its beauty
Comment is about Hindi Erotic Poetry - आम सरे आम! (blog)
Original item by Neilkanth
Love this one Eric, especially the first stanza. Shine on! ?
Comment is about In the Dark (blog)
Original item by Eric Berard
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Sat 22nd Aug 2020 23:17
My dad died of pancreatic cancer when he was 49, fifty years ago. He was a smoker so it could be argued that he'd caused it, or at least contributed to it. The ones I feel sorry for are those who have lead a completely blameless life and still get it.
Hardly knew my dad but still miss him
Comment is about Cancer...... I hate you. (blog)
Original item by mentalelf. Philk.
Thank you very much Keith, Paul, Stephen, Cathy, Trevor, Shifa, Julie.
Keith Douglas, a tank commander and poet, who fought the Nazis in north Africa, died in 1944 aged 24. He instructed us to:
"Remember me when I am dead and simplify me when I'm dead."
And I suppose that is all history is: a simplification of the myriad and contradictory forces that go to make up the lived reality of the past.
Comment is about The Hardest Day (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
A great insight. Though the grass always looks greener, it so rarely is and envy can cause such suffering. Love it and thanks
Comment is about Deceit tells us: what they have is better than ours (blog)
Original item by Words of Faith
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Sat 22nd Aug 2020 22:28
The message is great, but I find the repetition grates. Sorry.
Comment is about This Developed Nation? (blog)
Original item by Wandering Biku
Sounds like it went well, so well done Mark & Gill, you’re always ahead of the pack! I wanted to see Oz & Hannah & Pam but had a hard day at work. Maybe next month...
Comment is about Poets celebrate return to the pub - but plan to continue on Zoom as well (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Kevin T.S. Tan
Sat 22nd Aug 2020 18:04
Thank you for responding on my profile. I think every nation has something unique to offer. Learning to appreciate that.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
KJ - thank you for your comment.
Comment is about WITH RESPECT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Lesroy returns to the "200 years ago" theme.
Of course, he will know that values given to human life were
considerably different then. Here in England, a child could be
hanged (or transported for life) for stealing a loaf of bread.
Men could be kidnapped off the street without any recourse for
service in His Majesty's navy by the "Press Gangs". Ordinary
people endured a short diseased hand-to-mouth existence with no vote or other legal way of challenging the situation then. Life was,
indeed, very different. During these wretched times the practice
of slavery existed until its abolition by Parliament and the latter's
enforcement on the high seas by the Navy, while other nations
continued with it: on record in North Africa even very recently.
For some, old habits seem hard to break but the world moves
on, despite such egregious aberrations. .
Comment is about BLACK LIVES MATTER (blog)
Original item by Lesroy Mardenborough
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Sat 22nd Aug 2020 12:52
So Lesroy are you going to riot and tear down our town square, or not?
Comment is about BLACK LIVES MATTER (blog)
Original item by Lesroy Mardenborough
Marsha
Sat 22nd Aug 2020 10:47
I guess that must be pet hell then.
Comment is about Hell knows no fury (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
I liked this one, and as Faith said "so true"
Comment is about WITH RESPECT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Eric and PH, thank you for the likes.
Comment is about Masks Pt. 1 (blog)
Original item by Shehariah
Paul, Part 1 is about my own hypocrisy and Part 2 is about the hypocrisy of others. I was someone I despised, but am now becoming someone new, rather, that someone without a mask that I have always been and am meant to be.
Comment is about Masks Pt. 1 (blog)
Original item by Shehariah
Penultimate= next to last or second to last
(Nice!)?.. literal/figurative.. depends
Someone who says that all color lives matter... obviously does not get it..., because all lives matter, obviously.. thats the point!?
Was true 200 years ago just as it is true now.
Thank you Jennifer.. but we (including you) do not have to be ,,, very mild,, and ordinary.. I won't even comment on the last few words you wrote.
Thanks everyone for taking out your time to read my poetry, (basically rhyming?), and thanks for your comments.
Comment is about BLACK LIVES MATTER (blog)
Original item by Lesroy Mardenborough
Such an uplifting poem. Thanks for sharing!
Comment is about Watching Over (blog)
Original item by Eric Berard
Wow, this is beautiful. Written more like a prayer than a poem. Well done.
-J
Comment is about Lord Give Me Strength (blog)
Original item by Lesroy Mardenborough
Paul, there is a lot of hurt in those words, both for me and my wife.
Comment is about Masks Pt.2 (blog)
Original item by Shehariah
Thank you for reading and your feedback. ??
Comment is about Call It What It Is (blog)
Original item by kimberly
Epic poem this, David. Transmits power, the force of nature.
Comment is about In Caves (blog)
Original item by David Blake
It is only by experiencing their absence that I can know that they don't exist. I must be able to not find them before my wanderings can cease. Until then, I'll have to busy myself with poetry and thought. ?
Comment is about d.knape (poet profile)
Original item by d.knape
Thank you for your historic references regarding Pilgrimages in days of yore.
Your gift of the red rose is appreciated Keith.
Comment is about Pilgrim's progress (blog)
Original item by Abdul Ahmad
Good one Trevor! "More teeth are in a jar than in my mouth" made me laugh. Thanks for the smile. ?
Comment is about Tempus Fugit (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Ooh, that was subtle. I didn't notice that jacket before. Beautiful poem my friend. Thank YOU for being an angel of light and love. ?
Comment is about Broken (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Thank you Paul. I think in the moments we feel broken, we forget how resilient we are. I am grateful for poems and songs that remind us of our inner strength.
Comment is about Broken (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
An interesting analogy with enough similarities to get us thinking - always a good thing!
Comment is about Exactly the Same - 1939 (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I really liked your line "makes a cameo during Winter". Winter is never really Winter anymore .We are already seeing effects of global warming/climate change/fake news and still refusing to change.
Comment is about Call It What It Is (blog)
Original item by kimberly
Ha-ha...takes me back to the late lamented Benny Hill. ?
Comment is about A misunderstanding at the chemist (blog)
Original item by hugh
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Fri 21st Aug 2020 16:52
Take comfort if you do not see the daisies from"the perspective of
the roots". You seem unlikely to be pushing up the daisies any time soon then!! ?
Comment is about Tempus Fugit (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Marvellous and moving, from John and Keith. A reminder that today's peaceful, cooperative Europe, however imperfect, is preferable to this madness.
Comment is about The Hardest Day (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Abdul,
A meaningful description of a pilgrimage and its importance. Centuries ago pilgrimages were regarded as journeys both physical and spiritual to a holy place, carried out to gain benefits for the soul. This poem does them great credit.
Thank you for this
Comment is about Pilgrim's progress (blog)
Original item by Abdul Ahmad
Thank you for your kind commend John
Comment is about Deflated (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Thanks for the comment and like John.
Comment is about The Bees Knees (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Tom
Sun 23rd Aug 2020 12:40
Loved this Trevor, Tempus does indeed Fugit. The last two lines are particularly brilliant.
Comment is about Tempus Fugit (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander