Dancer at one five
Knocked Brian out cold so it seems
He dumbstruck poor boy
Where is his comment?
Still getting over bare bod?
He still dumbstruck boy
Oh dear...
Comment is about Naughtiness Unnoticed (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Big Sal
Sat 29th Sep 2018 15:40
They look great together. I've read the one on the left, but still need to order the other one. That's great I could offer a suggestion and see it bear fruit. Thanks for reading the review too Becky!
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Comment is about Taylor's books made it to France too! (photo)
Original item by Becky Who
Big Sal
Sat 29th Sep 2018 15:39
Even bad men love their mamas.
quote from - "3:10 to Yuma"
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Comment is about horror films (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Big Sal
Sat 29th Sep 2018 15:27
Big Sal
Sat 29th Sep 2018 15:22
Something he should keep forever. I still have all the poems I wrote with my mama. When I started writing poetry as a young teen, all I wanted more than anything was to have my own book out with a bunch of collaborators on it. My mom used to write poetry too, and I think that's where I got my idea from.
Either way, a lot better than some of the adult poetry I've seen posted. Great piece.?
Comment is about Message from a 7-year-old (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
<Deleted User> (19836)
Sat 29th Sep 2018 14:57
Excellent! I really loved those last two stanzas!
Comment is about KIDDY WINKS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
<Deleted User> (19836)
Sat 29th Sep 2018 14:50
Becky this is a fabulous poem! I love that you collaborated with your son...Congratulations to the BOTH of you!?
Comment is about Message from a 7-year-old (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
<Deleted User> (19836)
Sat 29th Sep 2018 14:46
Excellent Don! Rhyme, structure and an important message all rolled into one...impressive!
Comment is about Naughtiness Unnoticed (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Very nicely rounded poem. From both perspectives to have or have not excellent. Thank you M.C. ?
Comment is about KIDDY WINKS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Well done Erwann..and mum Becky. My 7yr old grandson loves to write poems too...excellent thank you Erwann and Becky.. XX
Comment is about Message from a 7-year-old (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Dear M.C. Newberry, I was looking at our very short conversation in my profile and taking a second look at my response to your lovely comment on my poem "I can olerate Death" I realized that what I said was quite a humdrum thing to say! The truth is I'm not good at commenting,I'm not good with the literal things, I am also not very crafty with words, or precise, for that matter; sometimes I ask myself why I bother to write, and then I remember: It's cause I got things to say. I'm young, that may be obvious to you who from what I understand are very experienced but I've been places. Places a young person shouldn't pass by that early on and I've seen things. Things that most people see when the greater part of their life has passed things that a few lucky ones will never see. And yes, I got stuff to say. This I do. So thank you for your comment! appreciate it more than you know! And allow me to rephrase my response: Yes, death does intrude into our minds! But God damn it, at my last minute, right before He takes me away I still got the last say with my last words! If I manage to beat him with my words and with my actions he doesn't really have the last say. I'll fight him like hell and even if I lose I'll know that through my fight I will have showed much more power than the only one he hold over us! He only has the power to eliminate us but He can't shut our mouths or the mouths of the ones we leave behind. I urge whoever bothers to listen: Speak up! Write out Loud! because "scripta manent"! And If we have to go before our time, if we can't go in our own terms, if He tries His best to deprive us of the right to hold our heads high and humiliate us we can still go kicking and screaming! And our screams will not be pleas and whimpers and cries of cowardice! They will be glorious curses and triumphant battlecries! Death lasts only a second but our existence, if we are loved, if we have have loved, can last forever. So, since you quoted W.E.Henley I'd like to do so as well:
"It matters not how strait the gate,
how charged with punishments the scroll,
I am the master of my fate
I am the captain of my soul!
P.S. Forgive my fixation. I'm new at exposing my work and any kind of feedback is much sought! And definately deserving something more than: "Live like there's no tomorrow!" True as it may be!
Thanx again!
Mae
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hey Keith!
Thank you!? For standing up and for the "Gloria Gaynor" pun!(Not meant for an ex lover though but still, an honor!)
Mae
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi Becky! Thank you for your nice words about my poem! I like your sample as well!
And I, too, love the idea of expressing oneself in a language other than their native one! For the same reason I like learning foreign languages! So far I know English, French and Turkish plus my mother language! I think it's fascinating to be able to see the world through eyes other than you own, to be able to communicate directly with people fron entirely different cultures. And let's face it, English is "linua franca", a universal language! It brings people who know it together! Keep slamming!
Comment is about Becky Who (poet profile)
Original item by Becky Who
Stuart,
These are well tested and tried words of wisdom which I often need to be reminded of.
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about What’s The Worst That Can Happen? (blog)
Original item by Stuart Clark
What fun it was being filmed this morning! - I thoroughly enjoyed it............Dorinda x
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=71530
Loved your poem... I wrote this a while ago about rhyme and poetry... AnIffy poem! M x
Comment is about "Writing in Rhyme" by Becky Who is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Mike Took
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 29th Sep 2018 10:30
ABSOLUTE PLEASURE! my lovely friend Wendy.
Rose ????
Comment is about Can You Imagine (blog)
Original item by Wendy Higson
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 29th Sep 2018 10:26
so very well done-mum and son!
Rose ?
Comment is about Message from a 7-year-old (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
MC.,
Thank you for this comment. Your summary is accurate indeed. Following this article there are another four which I hope you will find interesting as all are linked to the poets of the day and their verse which comes from first hand experience.
Thank you again.
Keith
Comment is about Poetry & The Great War, a series: 2 The Outbreak of War (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Well done Cynthia. Reminds me of the inquisitiveness of my own childhood ?
Comment is about How Do Girls Pee? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
'Devil's own sown brood' rolls off the tongue nicely. I love the concept too ?
Comment is about KIDDY WINKS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
It's funny you should say that Brian. Completely independently from the fact that I posted our poem this morning, Erwann has spent the morning in his room turning out little poems, and some of them have quite blown me away. I was just thinking I should set up his own profile. Do you think that's allowed? (I wouldn't put a photo)
Comment is about Message from a 7-year-old (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
<Deleted User> (18980)
Sat 29th Sep 2018 07:42
Wel done young Erwann...and also your Mum. Why not ask Mum if you can post your own poems on this site?
Why aren't there more child poets on this site?
Comment is about Message from a 7-year-old (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Thank you. I am delighted that you can relate to my poems. It really means something when someone can relate to your poem.
Comment is about Midnight (blog)
Original item by Elle Shaine
Yes Erwann it's adults pulling triggers
It's adults who are dropping the bombs
And destroying innocent children like you
And sending them into their tombs
I feel for the guy on the ground
Out of loyalty to the country he came
Betrayed by his leaders above him
Who only want to play their war games
I usually am quite reluctant
Putting your child and you in my poem
But your message it left me no choice Beck
But to leave it the way it was sown
D ?
Comment is about Message from a 7-year-old (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Natasha Bowman
Sat 29th Sep 2018 07:13
This poem makes me feel warm. And not because its a warm poem. But because we are alike. I really like your poem.
Comment is about Midnight (blog)
Original item by Elle Shaine
Natasha Bowman
Sat 29th Sep 2018 06:55
Hi, Mae, thanks for commenting my profile! In fact, English is my native tongue, but I live in France, so when I try to put my poetry "out there" it's harder to be fully understood. That's why I've appreciated this website as a place I can share with people who do understand English!
I do sometimes write poetry in French though, and I'm absolutely all for writing in languages other than mother tongue too. We use slam poetry in our English as Second Language programme and the students absolutely love it - some even say it's easier and more liberating to write in English than to write in their own language, as the "rules" seem less constraining!
I've read your sample poem and I think it's great, and even your biography is written very poetically. I look forward to exploring more of your work.
Comment is about Mae Foreman (poet profile)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Thank you again for all your lovely comments, it really means a lot to me! As I say in my poem, I seem unable to stop rhyming, even about serious subjects. (Although if that was really the case this comment should also be in rhyme!)
Comment is about "Writing in Rhyme" by Becky Who is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Sat 29th Sep 2018 02:31
i had to scroll down so far, I fell off the page.
Luckily i had a safety belt on and was able to get back
on.
Is that dog a puppet? (time for a new photo.)
thanks for your continued support.
I think there must be something wrong with you.
but thank you anyway. I appreciate it.
Comment is about Taylor Crowshaw (poet profile)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
<Deleted User> (18980)
Sat 29th Sep 2018 01:30
I'll be using this and something else it doesn't fit this at all.
I'm done with white rappers saying the n word
They have no respect for the culture
That they're making millions from
That coming from an emo kid is pretty sad
Talk about your lean and your coco
Comment is about Crystal City Part 2 lyrics (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
Thanks for the kind comments on my poem about Fred
I don't get o here very much anymore and often miss comments but i just saw yours
Thanks again
Ged
Comment is about hugh (poet profile)
Original item by hugh
Thanks for the kind comments on my poem about Fred
I don't get o here very much anymore and often miss comments but i just saw yours
Thanks again
Ged
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks for the kind comments on my poem about Fred
I don't get o here very much anymore and often miss comments but i just saw yours
Thanks again
Ged
Comment is about Taylor Crowshaw (poet profile)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Big Sal
Sat 29th Sep 2018 00:59
The repetition definitely holds attention like a candle to itself.?
Comment is about Fred (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
Big Sal
Sat 29th Sep 2018 00:57
Would make a potent statement inscribed upon an epitaph.?
Comment is about A Long Life (blog)
Original item by Eric Maynard
Hello Emer,
You are totally welcome.
Comment is about Poetikaly Anointed (poet profile)
Original item by Poetikaly Anointed
I look forward to more evenings in Manchester With interest Cynthia!
Comment is about Never trust a lover who ..... (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
A wonderfully forthright and down to earth poem Cynthia.
Love it
Comment is about How Do Girls Pee? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
The case for parental love is well put from a particular POV.
It might be said that those who decide to bring children into
the world have a duty to do the best they can to ensure
they are a credit to them and others. Anything more is a
bonus for those personally concerned. No one is able to
choose their parents but parents can and do choose to have
children and exercise huge influence for good or bad over the outcome. I would be curious to see something from
the point of view of offspring in a similar context.
Comment is about a letter to my son--for now... (blog)
Original item by nunya
<Deleted User> (19836)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 22:10
Heartfelt emotion coming from a deep place. Beautiful!?
Comment is about Too much to fix (blog)
Original item by Dee
I know, right? Tea is great. I just had a random streak of inspiration and I came up with this. Thank you for the feedback. It’s always helpful!
Comment is about Portrait of a Café (blog)
Original item by Elle Shaine
The time was unique: we don't want to fight, but by jingo,
if we do, we've got the ships, we've got the men, we've got the money too!
Add to that, the women busy handing out white feathers
to men they thought should be in uniform, and the process
is well and truly up and running, with few willing to speak
against it. And who would have, with an aggressive
militaristic Germany seeking to expand its empire to rival
our own and invading its neighbours in pursuit of gain,
ground and glory? It can be said it was just as well we
had the blithe self-confidence to face up to the challenge:
who else would - or could - have? Even our US ally hung
back until 1917 when most of the fighting had been done
and the tide of war was beginning to turn in our favour.
The losses to the vital wartime generation were awful
but the alternative result was even worse to contemplate.
Comment is about Poetry & The Great War, a series: 2 The Outbreak of War (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Is it Levine or Leveen -
Or some pronunciation between?
Who is this name
That seems worthy of blame...
Paraded in your poetical theme?
Comment is about Birdsofafeather : Aussie Poet (in ascendance) to UK Poet (stage of ascendance unknown) (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thank you Keith. It is good to be back. It felt great to write again. Hopefully it won't take 9 months or thereabouts for me to write another. ?
Comment is about Lost (blog)
Original item by Emer Ní Chorra
Big Sal
Fri 28th Sep 2018 21:25
Top notch poetry here. Excellent title and substance. Plus, who doesn't love tea?
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Comment is about Portrait of a Café (blog)
Original item by Elle Shaine
M.C. Newberry
Sat 29th Sep 2018 16:12
It is most encouraging to have children put their minds to poetry.
Sadly, children DO kill other children.
"Lord of the Flies" comes to mind - depicting how children
create their own hierarchies, judgements and actions...
without adult guidance or control. The irony is that the
adults who unleash the weapons of destruction might be
seen as acting out for real the pretence of childhood games,
almost as if one is a rehearsal for the other.
Comment is about Message from a 7-year-old (blog)
Original item by Becky Who