all the best M.C.

Comment is about THOUGHTS AT CHRISTMAS - a seasonal re-post (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

and I will most certainly fourthly agree with all previous comments

Comment is about Ruminations (blog)

Original item by Eric Maynard

clever clever clever!

love it.








Rose ?

Comment is about Ruminations (blog)

Original item by Eric Maynard

Ray, Kevin and Eric, thank you for your comments and interest regarding this unusual offering. Kevin, a sequel is swimming around in my mind. The Ray moves on into unchartered territory. Keith

Comment is about The Gay Manta Ray (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thankyou Decota smiling always makes you feel good love Wendy .

Comment is about Smile (blog)

Original item by Dakota Steffen

I like this, for some reason it brings to my mind,Steeleye span, must be the spirit of Christmas past?




Merry Christmas all the best des

Comment is about SOUNDS OF CHRISTMAS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks for your suggestion Ray, I can see how dropping “falling” would make the beginning more dramatic, but I’m not sure if I prefer the softer approach, so you’ve got me pondering and if this poem should ever get printed or something, I would really consider your suggestion. Thanks for commenting.

Have a nice Christmas, all the best Des.

Comment is about Thread (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Some clever ideas and nicely expressed Des. May I suggest to drop "falling like" giving "The words fell like spores." Stronger image I reckon. Just a thought !

Cheers, Ray

Comment is about Thread (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Excellent fare Keith. I was reminded of "The pathetic sharks " from the Viz comic some years back. Just a coincidence i'm sure.

Ray

Comment is about The Gay Manta Ray (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

I can read a lot of potential about relationships in here Eric, a fine thought provoking offering.

Ray

Comment is about Ruminations (blog)

Original item by Eric Maynard

Thank you for them words for bouth of you,
Cynthia I'm actually not religious person,
I'm pure consciousness expressing my self in a body ?

Comment is about Artur Hulboj (poet profile)

Original item by Artur Hulboj

Thank you for you comment on my poema , very kind word. I'm really grateful that you found enjoying it.

I read some of your poems they really beautiful.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Many thanks, each.
I am delighted you enjoyed it, Cynthia, even though it is quite horrible. That is the perfect recipe I was trying to capture in it.
It seems we are a bit more squeamish than other European countries, MC, with their tradition of Krampus. They celebrate him in festivals as this one in Germany (I think) shows.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HrKL7D7QZRA

Comment is about SANTA KRAMPUS (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thank you Cynthia and have a very nice Christmas.


All the best des

Comment is about Thread (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Thank you Cynthia.
Yes, the sumptuous yellows of the Oz "Christmas Tree", the world's largest mistletoe, the impossibly purple Jacarandas, now fading;the ridiculously riotous Bougainvilleas.

Season's Greetings from our hot and colourful city. Only ever been to Bermuda in early Spring, but I can imagine Hamilton in full bloom.
Best wishes for 2018!
Chris

Comment is about Slow Train to Freedom (blog)

Original item by Chris Hubbard

Thanks for the appreciated responses. It happens to be a
personal favourite among my own poems and seems to
fit perfectly to the feeling of life passing by that can be experienced at Christmas, especially as we get older.

Comment is about THOUGHTS AT CHRISTMAS - a seasonal re-post (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I can just see Alfred Hitchcock nodding his approval. Love
the stealthy step-style music that adds much to the menace.
Anyway, don't kids love to be frightened? Check any Panto
for that. A salty antidote to the sweeteners elsewhere.

Comment is about SANTA KRAMPUS (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

IMO, absolutely brilliant, tight, fast-paced and hard-hitting in universal content.

Comment is about Tension (blog)

Original item by Trevor Alexander

A bit like 'unto the day is the fullness thereof' which I can't offhand pinpoint to the specific Biblical resource. It is a fine philosophy for a happy personal life. And fellowship. And poetry.

Comment is about Artur Hulboj (poet profile)

Original item by Artur Hulboj

A splendid turn of the wheel, both lucid and uplifting.

Comment is about Wisdom... (blog)

Original item by Artur Hulboj

Charming - just plain charming, in all the sense of wizardry and wooing that exists in that fine old word.

Comment is about Moonlight (blog)

Original item by Tom

A very interesting metaphor well-presented and maintained. Much enjoyed.

Comment is about Thread (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Absolutely fabulous. You never lost my full attention for one syllable.

Finally, you have to stop 'fixing'. I'm oh-so in the same boat. I have 'fixed things' years later, and for the better, I think. But a little distance works wonders for finesse.

Comment is about A Storm Was Raging (blog)

Original item by Eric Maynard

Welcome to WOL. I look forward to catching up with your work.

Comment is about Eric Maynard (poet profile)

Original item by Eric Maynard

Good one! Much enjoyed.

Comment is about Ruminations (blog)

Original item by Eric Maynard

Excellent repost.

Comment is about THOUGHTS AT CHRISTMAS - a seasonal re-post (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Honest, innocent, thoughtful and very troubling. I'm presuming Luther is the devil?

Comment is about I Can Be That (blog)

Original item by Saniya

Very entertaining in a 'dark' way, with excellent versifying skills. Much enjoyed, even though it's quite horrible.

Maybe I'm too conscious of such attitudes being only too real, to 'discipline' children. And not as a joke.

Comment is about SANTA KRAMPUS (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

You're worth a great deal right now. Otherwise, why would you write? So fulsomely and so passionately?

Comment is about Sidra Shahid (poet profile)

Original item by Sidra Shahid

Very insightful and thoughtful. Also personally strong. The opening is original and interesting. The chameleon copes with danger and lives to tell the tale - not so bad, I'd say. Survival comes under many guises.

Comment is about 'That' girl! (blog)

Original item by Sidra Shahid

Strong thoughts and strong lines which ring true.

Comment is about Stay For Awhile (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

Yes! Well spoken.

Comment is about A Pint of Christmas Pudding - - - Please (blog)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Lots of thought in this piece, and challenging the reader to follow your 'train' of ideas. A neat bit of rhyming/near rhyming.

Merry Christmas to you in Perth, where, I presume, you are surrounded by Christmas flowers in full bloom. The Bermuda landscape was/is magnificent in December.

Comment is about Slow Train to Freedom (blog)

Original item by Chris Hubbard

Hi Stu, to me this poem is a kind of comment on the human condition. We live in a world so volatile and crazy that we're almost too scared to breathe. And there is a silent consensus agreement to pretend that everything's okay really (just watch TV commercials). Maybe this isn't what you were trying to say but that's how I understood it. I think you could probably lose "because he is clumsy" as it's not necessary. But a very good poem which has impact.

Comment is about don't breathe (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hi Nick
Honest and touching. Well done. Lovely poem.... congratulations on POTW mate!

Comment is about 'The Man That Gravity Forgot' by Nick is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I love "Thrall". Tommy

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I seem to remember this one, MC. I liked it then; I like it now.

Comment is about THOUGHTS AT CHRISTMAS - a seasonal re-post (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

It is not only at Christmas but more so at New Year that the remembrance of friends and relations no longer with us must always be brought alongside.

Merry Christmas and Happy New Year Mr Newberry!




Rose ?

Comment is about THOUGHTS AT CHRISTMAS - a seasonal re-post (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Your comment is about right David. Most of it is subconscious really and not open to logical thinking.
Thanks for responding!

Glad Col. that you liked this.

Ray

Comment is about SOUNDS OF CHRISTMAS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Nick what a wonderful poem and a very real image of self deprecating love.
love it

Comment is about The Theif, The Craftsman, The Artist, The Liar. (blog)

Original item by Nick

Nice one Keith. I hope there is going to be a sequel where he finds what he is looking for.
Cheers Kevin.

Comment is about The Gay Manta Ray (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

What a great evening in Marple - you know, I just love the way we all relate to one another, despite us all being quite different: that's the joy of sharing our love of words!
Wishing one and all a blessed Christmas - and thanks to John who faithfully heads our group each month!
With love, Dorinda x

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Festive Fun at the Oldknow

W O L Poets on tour

After last night

bookings galore!

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

I'd be interested to see how you would transform this experience as poetry. Sometimes it helps me to frame my experience as a character in a novel, and then change something. I agree with Cynthia on the last line.

Regarding where you are in this moment, my impression has been that the detours we take from what is expected both bring us something and cost us something. I hope what is brought to you is heartfelt, and what is lost clears a path.

Thank you for sharing

Comment is about My Life (blog)

Original item by Turtle Rawdon

The line "Often mocked by crab and eel" has a great deal of power in it - that line alone could merit an entire poem built around it. I enjoyed the parallel construction of "hooked and caught" with it later. There were some pleasant surprises (mobile phone). Thanks for this!

Comment is about The Gay Manta Ray (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

A really fine thought.

Comment is about Who holds the pen writes the truth (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Tommy, please check your last poem and switch all the 'whom's to 'who' as in 'he who'. I know they're the very devil, but lots of people may surf WOL this week. And check 'thrall';it's an old word.

I so hope you're not pissed. I always enjoy your work.

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Strong and true, with real literary tools brought into play. You are a student of both life and writing technique, a strong combination for power to influence. Your sense of drama and vocabulary is a huge asset. Keep reading everything from all arenas and periods, and hone your skills every day. Get books about writing, especially from second-hand bookstores, or church fair stalls, university book sales where the students sell text books for pennies etc. Maybe they don't want them anymore, but they will be precious to you. I think you are self-motivated; go with it. Get famous! Or at least well-known, and paid for it.

Comment is about The Big Three (blog)

Original item by Turtle Rawdon

The last thought is not new but made with fresh enthusiasm and clout, both to strike new minds and refresh older ones.

Welcome to WOL. And Merry Christmas.

I left a note on your bio.

Comment is about My Life (blog)

Original item by Turtle Rawdon

Nice poem,full of heartfelt sentiment, a true tribute.
Congratulations on POTW.


All the best des

Comment is about 'The Man That Gravity Forgot' by Nick is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman