<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 26th Nov 2017 09:20
really enjoyed this Chris - I started to leave a comment which turned into a poem, it's a little rough and raw just like those times and the music we enjoyed. Cheers, Col.
Comment is about Passing Fashions (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
Hi ray,
Hope all is well with you.
A pithy, witty, small and perfectly formed poem.
Suki
Comment is about FORTIFICATIONS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
They get spoilt as it is with out my credit card!? thanks for liking it!
Comment is about parenthood (blog)
Original item by Scott Villers-Stubbs
Hi David,
Thank you. It took a long time to knock this one into shape after I read an article about the use of Harris Hawks to 'discourage' the pigeons of Eaton Square.
Chris
Comment is about Air Worthiness (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
Hi Cynthia, Hi Jon - thanks for your comments. They are much appreciated.
We do live in an odd world, when you look at it from a certain perspective - we drink fizzy syrup when we're thirsty - not water.
Each line is 12 syllables (so long as I counted right) - which means I would keep the last line as it is, to maintain the structure.
Nice thought, though - and it would work.
Thanks again.
Comment is about Society (blog)
Original item by Rich
Cheers Ray "click" re "Excuse my hand"
And
I remember the outtakes of the same film. Tommy
;- )
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you Keith for your comments re "Excuse my hands", I get your point.
:- )Tommy
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hello Adam, thanks for reading and liking 'If It Started This Christmas', much appreciated. Dave
Comment is about Adam Whitworth (poet profile)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
Well said, it's not the refugees at fault, it is the forces causing them to flee, sometimes natural disasters, but all too often the insanity of wars that few wanted in the first place...
Comment is about Refugees In Peril (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
Ray, thank you for your coments and well thought out response. It is, as always, much appreciated. Keith
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi Keith. Mercifully poets in general are a broad minded bunch and because of that are not trapped by restricted biased thinking on most matters. If they are it would soon be apparent methinks. We like to share our true feelings and I agree with everyone who commented here; I think we can all do well to refine our thinking to exclude homophobia which is at the root of the problem as you say.
Life in some countries would be intolerable today in some societies. We mustn't knock Britain too much - although I remember life before Wolfenden, when gaiety(my own word) was regarded with curiosity and suspicion.
Ray
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi David (Master of the metaphor) How do you think them up? There are very few good prose writers around. That's why I do rhyme.
Keep 'em coming. Ken.
Comment is about David T Jones (poet profile)
Original item by David T Jones
Hi Rich
A really good, if disturbing poem. So true of society and modern Life.
Everything seems to lean towards the immediate, the artificial nowadays doesn't it?
This is a well conceived and executed piece in my opinion.
Comment is about Society (blog)
Original item by Rich
Behold the house that modern thinking built:
You'll find it behind a sign that says "Guilt"! ?
Comment is about TAX EVASION (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks CBT and Jon.
The lines came to me just before I got up. Adding to
my belief that time spent in bed is seldom wasted!?
Comment is about AGE OLD CONCERN (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Not sure if this is done...But wanted to post...
Comment is about All Dead (blog)
Original item by 220August
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 25th Nov 2017 14:01
proud enough of them both eh Scott? so what are you waiting for? get emptying your credit card for them!
they'll love you for it....well for a few days at least!
parenthood...been there.
As to a revisit? no way!
good poem Pater.
P&S xx
Comment is about parenthood (blog)
Original item by Scott Villers-Stubbs
'Words evoke an image, they are so sublime'
Really well communicated piece again Phillip. Great message too. Would love to listen to a full set of your work.
Comment is about Power in the word # (blog)
Original item by Phils Words
Hiya Phillip
Loved this. Brought tears to my eyes. You have a fantastic voice for listening to. Full of depth and it conveys the message of the piece perfectly. Cheers too for recent comments on Remembering James. Much appreciated.
Comment is about Meet me there (blog)
Original item by Phils Words
Haha...great little ditty. Made me chuckle
Comment is about AGE OLD CONCERN (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Very few poems cause me to shed tears but this one did. Beautifully written with unending love. Thank you for this. Keith
Comment is about A Picture of You (blog)
Original item by Pauliegreg
Cynthia, well said, well done and the bell of truth rings loud and clear. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about Worthless Women (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hi Ray
Great poem. I don't think there's a word in it that's not needed.
Really well executed in my opinion. Love this bit 'festivals bring back the hordes, with beer and burgers in place of swords'.
Comment is about FORTIFICATIONS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Hi Maria
I really like this poem. Common emotions I guess when there's been a break up of some kind.
It's honest, worded just right and maybe the person feeling selfish has right to feel that way?
An intriguing piece.
Comment is about 18 (blog)
Original item by Maria Renea
Jon, David and Colin, Thank you for you comments and kind words of support which are greatly appreciated. I regard my fellow poets on Write our Loud with esteem and gratitude for their encouragement and friendship. You are a highly talented group of people in whose company I am honoured to be counted. Thank you again. Keith
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 25th Nov 2017 09:02
yes, well said and well written Keith. More power to your pen and voice for standing up for the rights of all who have suffered prejudice. Col.
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi Colin,
Thanks for your comment, and the url. I have watched a pair of peregrine falcons hunting around the giant spire of St. James' Church in Louth, Lincs. for the last two years. They are breeding in the tower, and have full time CCTV surveillance. I cannot begin to understand why anyone would do anything but watch in awe. When I was there last year several photographers were trying to capture them in the stoop. Good luck there ...!
Chris
Comment is about Air Worthiness (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
Lovely poem Keith, full of pain, pride and righteous disdain, beautifully handled
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 25th Nov 2017 07:41
Excellent poem Chris. Thanks for posting.
Raptor persecution in the UK is still sadly a big problem. Here's an interesting article.
https://raptorpersecutionscotland.wordpress.com/2017/11/24/satellite-tagged-hen-harrier-manu-disappears-in-north-pennines/
Colin.
Comment is about Air Worthiness (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
Thank you Cynthia, wise words and it's good to hear them. I'm always open to learn more about this art.
Comment is about Dawn by the river (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
Hi Keith,
Proud of this poem. A strong, fearless proclamation that is I'm sure a common experience to many of us. I can sense the resilience and determination to rise above society's prejudice in this. Well done mate
Jon
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Ken, thank you for such an honest and sympathic comment to this poem. Your comment raises the issues of looking more closely as to who we really are and admitting some difficult truths. Thank you again. Keith
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi Keith.
Are those cursed with fetid dull conventional minds to be pitied for their inability to appreciate what they're missing out on? everyone (including the fetid dull) at sometime in their lives must have felt just more than friendship for someone of the same sex. The world will eventually be a much better place uncloseted.
A great piece from your natural sensitivity.
Ken
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I'll really try to read more of your work, David. You have a sympathy with words, and people, and imagination. You're well equipped to write.
Comment is about David T Jones (poet profile)
Original item by David T Jones
Colin has made excellent points, and they were well received by David. I commend you both.
You have a deft touch, David, and imagination of association. IMO, I think that's the epitome of writing poetry. Also, that the last thing a serious poet does is look for the words to cast out, utterly. Or to find a better single word for two words. It's a hard lesson to learn, and even harder to exercise. But it works wonders.
Comment is about Dawn by the river (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
Not sure I understand all that, MC, but I am prepared to live with my hypocrisy for the greater good of a fairer society with more morality on paying tax.
Comment is about TAX EVASION (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hi Keith.
Many thanks for your comment. Just my logical take on a soulless? once only existence.
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Much enjoyed.
Would you consider dropping 'Then, and only then.'
into a final line, like snapping a book shut?
Comment is about Society (blog)
Original item by Rich
Many thanks Cynthia.
This one is an updated rehash previously blogged. Crudely exposing me to be an 100% none believer.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Aishah, I'll try to catch up with more of your work. I do like your sample - excellent philosophy..
Comment is about Wonderer (poet profile)
Original item by Wonderer
Some good description in this, quite freshly put. 'For the fifth time' is a great teaser, engaging reader imagination. As is 'glorious and gruesome'. An interesting work.
Comment is about While I wait (blog)
Original item by Wonderer
I'll try to catch up with some more of your work, Mr. Bartram. Your Bio is very interesting.
Comment is about Mike Bartram (poet profile)
Original item by Mike Bartram
And that's why the role of grandparents is so rewarding. Not rushing it, mind you, but hoping those days will come to you. Getting through the 'teens' is the really hard part; one minute - more child than adult. The next - exactly the opposite. A good poem about a very real common experience.
Comment is about Magical Days (blog)
Original item by Mike Bartram
Welcome to WOL, Miranda. Interesting bio. I think the stream of consciousness of all minds is fascinating, neurotic or not. I'll try to check out some more of your works. Time is always at a premium.
Comment is about Miranda Fegan (poet profile)
Original item by Miranda Fegan
Different, and very compelling. Could apply to any 'job', since 'creativity' can be entirely by personal definition, even motherhood.
Comment is about Creative (blog)
Original item by Miranda Fegan
Cynthia, thank you for such a constructive response to my poem Disdain. As a young man prior legalisation in the UK life was intolerable. It was akin to being a Jew in Nazi Germany. The police were tasked to follow men to their homes in the hope of being able to arrest them. Then the press siezed on this. They lost their jobs and were disowned by families and friends. It was a grim existence and the result is bitterness. Gay people generally feel a great empathy for other persecuted minorites. I lost two jobs because of my sexuality and on both occasions it hit like a blow. Thank you again for your response. Keith
Comment is about Disdain (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hello Keith
Thank you for your positive comment and kind words
I also read some of your poems, and I really like the
beautiful expression of feelings.
Kind regards
Artur
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Ditto.
(Brevity can work, too. Haha!)
Comment is about AGE OLD CONCERN (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Becky Sowray
Sun 26th Nov 2017 12:32
there's power in this Miranda - of remembering what certainty feels like - it's very lovely
Comment is about My Ray Of Sunshine (blog)
Original item by Miranda Fegan