Ray, I liked this very much. I hope I've made the right connections with it and understood it correctly.
Are you a retired teacher?
There is sadness in the poem. I think you will miss tending your garden this winter like you miss tending your class room? Or am I reading too much here. I don't think this is going to be a very long winter Ray. Spring is just around the corner.
Your guidance and support on this website is very much appreciated.
You don't sound like your photo?

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Thank you Beno,


Let me say I'm sorry for the late reply cuz I'm new to this site and I'm still working everything out and it's taking me time to get back to some of the comments because of me being new here but now to answer your question://


Yes this is a very sad emotional over flooded with words of hurt anguish, emotions, sadness, pain from her love which makes her feel so sad like she isn't wanted or needed or even loved so at night sometimes she cries without him waking up and the reason why he could sleep so easily is because he basically puts ear plugs in his ears and drowns the sounds of her crying completely out and he could care less whether or not his girl is so upset as she lays there beside of him in their bed crying at night because he makes her feel this way and this is a touching deep messed up piece that I've written with so much emotion to it and I hope I answered your question if not let me know and I will do my best to answer it the best way I can and I can I am so sorry for the late reply cuz I honestly didn't see it until now and thank you for reading my work and leaving me nice comments on them I do appreciate that ?


Sincerely Tina,

Comment is about Tears In Her Eye's (blog)

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Fabulously detailed and relevatory Paulie. A real splash of technicolour fantasies brought down to earth. A joy to read and uniquely revealing.

Ray

Comment is about "Diana Prince Forever!" (blog)

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Rhyme is where it's at. Cool poem.

Comment is about An Iffy Poem (blog)

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Stu, thanks mate. correction done and appreciated. Keith

Comment is about A Fire Screen for Learning (blog)

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Cleverly written i sense the hopelessness of this person through the simplicity of your words and the comparison between "the beautiful clever "
Well written thought provoking.
Christine x

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Such nostalgia Paul a touching tale of your childhood you certainly new you were different and you pursued your uniquieness one on a million keep these poems coming love the insight into your childhood .
Christine x

Comment is about "Diana Prince Forever!" (blog)

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Wow thank you Andy n for sharing your link because I have just started working my through it but so far I am liking what I am reading and I do love ghost stories the thrill, chills of surprise and you are giving that in your writing wow and another wow ?


Sincerely Tina,

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Thanks Fred. I mean to sing it outside the fracking site in Yorkshire sometime, but it's many years since I last played a guitar and this song has a very difficult tune, as do many of Elvis Costello's compositions, so it may be a while...

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Beno


Wow thank you for the lovely comment on this one Beno and I am glad you liked it so much yes I write a lot of love, romantic poems, poetry, quotes and stories and things that comes to my mind or heart


Yes it beautifully written on paper and I was hoping it would be on screen to and I do appreciate your support and encouragement of my post and for that I am grateful for and the all the bloggers here sure has been nice so far and made me feel welcomed


So thank you once again Beno stay blessed and I'll be checking out your writing to shortly



Sincerely Tina,
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Comment is about He Told Her Today He Doesn't Love Her Anymore (blog)

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Andy n

Thank you for the nice comment on this piece and I'm glad you enjoyed it and let me thank you for reading it I do so much appreciate it!

Have a blessed day andy n?

Comment is about He Told Her Today He Doesn't Love Her Anymore (blog)

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Thanks Stu. I hope this is not a character assassination. The cheese wire would be much slower you devil! I had been thinking of you and good to see you back for a bit! Take care my friend.

Ray

Comment is about QUEEN IN THE KITCHEN (blog)

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brilliant. cant help but imagine mary berry getting split in two by a cheese wire though. but, i guess its imagery all the same!

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superb reminiscing keith. loads of imagery and took me back to my own days of learning. not that i have left them mind you...

small typo on line 4 - should be alpine (sorry, i used to be a proof reader, old habits die hard)

Comment is about A Fire Screen for Learning (blog)

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lovely tale well told, full of nostalgia

Comment is about "Diana Prince Forever!" (blog)

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enjoyed (:

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Jon, thank you for for latest favourable comments. Much appreciated. Keith

Comment is about The Najd (blog)

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Absolutely wonderful - truly a delight to read!

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Hi Keith
So descriptive. I can feel the heat of the sun, the starkness of the landscape. A really well executed poem mate.
Jon

Comment is about The Najd (blog)

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Perfect. Bloody lovely. Love it. So romantic. So nice to see, sorry and acceptance, so beautifully placed on paper (screen).

Comment is about He Told Her Today He Doesn't Love Her Anymore (blog)

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Very Sad Tina. The flood of words without and full stops adds to the flood of emotion. The girl blames herself ( a familiar story). What has he done, and why can he sleep so easily (even if he hasn't done anything)? When his girl is so upset.
Lovely piece of of work.
Thanks. Beno.

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Haha..love the pic of Lynda Carter as Wonder Woman and the tale itself.
Great story, very well expressed and really funny.
The last stanza in particular paints a telling picture of the playground tormentor.

Comment is about "Diana Prince Forever!" (blog)

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Really liked this poem dude. It was a very lovely intimate peek into your childhood. It's written well, little stories with in a story. It's strewn with feelings and emotion. Super poem. Really, really liked it.
My kids don't seem to see girl and boy toys. They just play with stuff. Maybe things are changing in that respect. Hope so.

Comment is about "Diana Prince Forever!" (blog)

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Touching sample.

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Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated.

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Keith,
This is a delight to read.. I've never really had one but I love firescreens. I can just imagine the tapestry, it's colours and feel.
Plus the dual purpose elevates it further as an object and your description of time spent sitting at it learning is wonderful. I love this piece. Nostalgic and heartwarming.

Comment is about A Fire Screen for Learning (blog)

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Brilliant.. I actually expected it to end “and you can all frack off”. Great poem

Comment is about Accidents Will Happen (blog)

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Thank you Rose and Keith for your comments much appreciated

All the best des

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Thank you and I'm glad you liked the cool picture that I used with it and yes I do agree with you about there's always strength in nature and good positivity and have a great day! ??

Comment is about My Chiari Journey (blog)

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Great poem, and cool picture to apply it to. There's always strength in nature and positivity.

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Doesn't he just play himself but with changes of costume?
Thanks Rose. I did this as an exercise for seasonal sonnets. Glad you liked it. ?

Comment is about The Seasons Pass (blog)

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Hi Jon, thanks mate. I re-hashed this completely then came back and baked it again, as it were. I thought about the nursery rhyme idea as vaguely threatening - something Mary is not. More like an Inside no 9 version maybe.


Blimey David that has got me worked up . I see Nigella coming from behind a curtain in a leotard with a whip - but I don't think the Beeb is quite ready for that kind of libido.
Back in the day I worked at the Ritz and was fed in the basement on Xmas day (cold hard salad under cling film). What could be more sexy than that?

Hannah, thanks for liking. It is Mary Berry- I always call her the deaths head moth - not fair I know. She is truly at home in front of the camera and a joy to watch.

Hi Jennifer. Excellent ideas there. We always do well to learn early. I used to help my mum in the kitchen. What a creep!

Love all the likes thanks everybody Pauli, Col Suki Richard and Fred. Your tower of likes was like a multi tier wedding cake of satisfaction!

Comment is about QUEEN IN THE KITCHEN (blog)

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and not easy at all to escape from Des.

bitter food for thought without doubt.

cheers matey





Rose ?

Comment is about cell (blog)

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quite Wordsworthian Mr A.Reminds me of that tv prog about a year in the Yorkshire Dales I watched last night narrated by the droning voice of Sean Bean.

best stick to acting?? Sean


best of of 'em Trev.


Rose ?

Comment is about The Seasons Pass (blog)

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Hey, just wanted to thank you for your comment on my poem and that I look forward to reading your works! ^_^

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Hi Ray!

Loved Queen in the kitchen! From when I was a child loved coming home to the smell of a newly baked cake. Almost reconciled one to homework. A bite there and an equation there.

Jennifer Malden

Comment is about QUEEN IN THE KITCHEN (blog)

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I want to reread this with more time to be truly attentive. See you later.

Comment is about The Glowering Mists of Autumn (blog)

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Cynthia, thank you as always. I understand what you mean, You do not take any liberties as I appreciate your comments which are invariably very pertinent and valid. Please don´t stop. Keith

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Superb. Just splendid! I so hope you have family and friends who appreciate you totally.

Beno's comments are a fine indication of the power of your influence through your writing.

Comment is about A Fire Screen for Learning (blog)

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You are more than welcome!

Comment is about Talking Eyes (blog)

Original item by Rick Varden

In Canada we called them 'wind devils'. And often, the windows were wide open. Lots of good imagery in this work.

I'm going to be real bold once again, because I do feel I can 'converse' with you. I so enjoyed poetry companions kibbitzing around a large table, exchanging opinions about each other's 'works'. There was no mercy, lots of respect, and I learned so much.

I remember the ruthless 'cutting' that the group practised on each other, and subsequently, on themselves. eg. 'The curtains blew about in panic/as window panes and shutters rattled' anything that makes the consonants and syllables tight and strong, pushing powerfully into the mind. 'Panic' is, by definition, a 'frenzy'.

If I take too much liberty, then just say so. I do miss the group a lot.

Comment is about The Visitor (blog)

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Oh thank you so much Kayleigh, yes life and it’s people are fascinating. It’s actually based on someone I know whom the moment I met them her eyes told me there was pain, and there was I discovered. The rest of it is ‘fictional’ but you have worked out that I deliberately wanted to draw others in to a concept that we all have to admit we experience. I definitely think you are on a similar wavelength, although I do write some comedy pieces to cheer myself, and hopefully others up. Don’t apologise for your lovely comments

Comment is about Talking Eyes (blog)

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.... distant memories that you can touch and smell and breath in....fantastic

Comment is about The Dresser (blog)

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For me one of the best poet's around. John's words are like textures and grain in wood, opening or cracking the oak few are able to carve and truly emote the inanimate like what's given here. We are often in your shadow but happy to be there.
Great words

Comment is about 'The Dresser' by Jon Darby is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Desmond, few people could articulate this as well as you have in this poem. I shall ponder on its content for some time to come. Thank you. Keith

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Writing the poems is all about writing the things which you assume and you have just started writing the poems and have already written more then 100 poems that really great thing. http://www.ritewaytowingnyc.com/

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I love the honesty in this, and the structure you used really drew me in as though I was there in your process and with your struggle. Thank you for sharing

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Thanks appreciated the comments, so glad the audio works

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Thank you jon

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I have to say Fred, I adore this piece. Your writing truly is a thing of beauty, and your talent is undeniable.

I specifically enjoy how alongside the air of romance flowing through this poem, there is also an undertone of suspense. It keeps the reader wanting more, wondering, as if it were the beginning of a novel or the like.

The repitition within the last few lines, when read aloud, sound almost as if one were falling into a dream-like state. Which to me is a wonderful thing, as it beautifully portrays the notion of finding a person's eyes so captivating that one finds themself "lost in" them.

Apologies for the long comment, I felt compelled to divulge my appreciation for your writing.
Your words are astounding.

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