Bitter sweet and a little self pity in a finely conceived poem.
Hope and promise in the first verse, disillusionment in the second, and resolve in the third is my view. Pretty similar to Colin's reckoning.

Keep this up when you feel the inspiration Michaela.

Ray

Comment is about Obsolescence (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

It feels with your poems that time just suspends and allows for details to be revealed - a great trick and an enviable one Tom. A sense of mystery pervades and also timelessness.

I Can't praise it enough. POTW or i'm a Dutchman.

Comment is about Balcony (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Hello David

The vivid imagery took me back to my own camping experiences - what it's like to spend a night out under the stars. Really liked that line: The day slowly waking up to carry on as it did yesterday. And those audacious line-breaks I usually can't manage, well they're not planned are they?

Comment is about The Woods (blog)

Original item by David T Jones

Evocative, nostalgic. . .I enjoyed it a lot. Loved it!

Comment is about 'Puttin' on the Ritz' (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

OK, I had to get it done - had to. I thought I might just burst if I didn't finally get it done. I know it's long, but someone might enjoy it a bit.

Comment is about 'Puttin' on the Ritz' (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi! I am writing to inquire about the results of the Milestone Poetry Competition. When will the results be available and how will we be notified of the contest's results? Thanks so much! Have an awesome day!

Comment is about Get ready to enter our milestone competition (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

lively and colourful with a touch of frivolity - couldn't help but sing 'The lunatic is on the grass / Remembering games and daisy chains and laughs'.

is Freya real or imagined, friend or myth? There's lots to like in your woods David.

Col.

Comment is about The Woods (blog)

Original item by David T Jones

David, Thank you for the comment. I did not enjoy writing this poem but felt impelled to do so out of pent up anger. The situation is real and ongoing which often adds fuel and vitriol to one´s expression. Thank you again. Keith

Comment is about Damned (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Hi David, as you know I've really enjoyed your poems for all the time I've been on WoL. I really enjoyed this one too. Quality writing. I have just reminded myself to buy your book before I forget again. I will do it later!

Kind regards,

Paul

Comment is about 'For Antoinette' by David Cooke is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Well put Ray. Watch out for The Lum's (thanks Col) new TV show 'Absolutely Ridiculous'.

Normally have great things to say about the lady but now wonder if she's been on vacation from reality too long ?

Aythangyow.

Comment is about THE GARDEN BRIDGE(From Tales of the Unaccepted) (blog)

Original item by ray pool

True! Take note (and more than one!!) and enjoy the
experience of spirits lifted and lightened, continuing to
survive each new day.

Comment is about Music (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

Hi Tom, like this one very much, great atmosphere. As a reader, you can really imagine being there (in Porto Cristo by any chance?). Anyway, lovely poem.

Paul

Comment is about Balcony (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Conflict, personal and general, demands that we take note
and have opinions. The theme is always topical and I
enjoyed this.

Comment is about untitled (blog)

Original item by Dana Lyn

It's refreshing to read the delightfully varied poems from
this source - like this one, with its rewarding "waste not,want not" theme.

Comment is about 'Chipped and grubby like old friends with egg on their faces' (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

One of our more 'poetic' collage efforts.

By the way, I have completed The Complete Marble, a complete collection of our collage poems from 2011 - 17. Over a hundred pages!

Comment is about August 2017 Collage Poem – Obscene (blog)

Original item by Stockport WoL

I love that Keith - really grabbed me and wouldn't let go. Very intense and immediate.

Comment is about Damned (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Nice work, Ray. George Osborne was also behind this folly ... and his fury yesterday in the editorial columns of the Evening Standard was a wonder to behold.

Comment is about THE GARDEN BRIDGE(From Tales of the Unaccepted) (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Adam
Thankyou for 'Liking' my poem ('The Last Train').
I confess that I was wondering whether anybody on this website ever read the poems written and presented by others from outside their usual orbit!
You have re-assuerd me - thankyou.
Richard

Comment is about Adam Whitworth (poet profile)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

enjoyed the sample poem a lot Rhianna.

look forward to reading the others in your blog (:

Comment is about Rhianna Blake (poet profile)

Original item by Rhianna Blake

gutted i missed it guys.

clearly was a mad night (:

see you all tomorrow.

Comment is about August 2017 Collage Poem – Obscene (blog)

Original item by Stockport WoL

They say too much salt is bad for you but under certain conditions I can see no harm in it at all - - - the poem itself I must say is absolutely obscene!

Comment is about August 2017 Collage Poem – Obscene (blog)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Cy Re "Sin" I forgot to include in my earlier reply "transgression" as in:

Cynthia re "Sin" the grating is in the mind of the beholder. Sin as in transgression.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Kevin & Adam, thank you indeed for your comments. Kevin, your comment has sparked considerable interest. A team of research anthropologists has been despatched to Yorkshire to investigate your claim. If you have any more information such as ethnicity, culture, language and history I would be grateful. Could this be the birth place of the Yorkshire Pudding? Goodness knows what will be revealed. Thanks. Keith

Comment is about The Second World (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Lovely, an interesting idea for a poem Michaela. Could also be about faces? Just thinking out loud here - by alluding to something else, like say a face, a poem can benefit from an added layer.

the first verse here shouts 'face' to me. The second speaks of loneliness, lost loves and lack of love, past mistakes etc. The third a reconciling with oneself. 'Maybe I will lay with you for (a) while' is a beautiful line in this context - as if resignation has turned to acceptance.


Col.

Comment is about Obsolescence (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

I read the first few lines and my mind slipped away to Paris but then you took me to Spain - Mallorca? Wherever, it was lovely sitting with you and sharing that glass of wine moment Tom. Cheers! Col.

Comment is about Balcony (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Hi Nicola! - My apologies! - your last e-mail to me did say Wed, not Thur, for Marple event....oops - sorry! I should learn to read more carefully!.....love, Dorinda x

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

The hard hitting truth is all the trouble with taxis and young girls being abused was happening and reported in 1991 in Hx when we were fostering troubled girls and then in later years their remarks were We know to do things better now .i don't think so . Thankyou for your comments Regards Wendy X .

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Absolutely Fabulous Raymondo. I had no idea The Lum was involved in this nonsense which, according to the guardian yesterday, was conceived as a memorial to Diana (ffs!!). And, Lumley’s vision stemmed 'from childhood memories of mountain gardens in Malaysia' (ffs!!). I couldn't believe my eyes and ears when I heard the news last night and the sums of taxpayers' money already squandered.

when our public services are at breaking point we still seem to find money for daft things. I could add to this the millions spent chasing sporting medals but best stop there before my little rant turns into something much grander. Back to the poem. Brilliant. Have a gold medal. Where's Lord Coe for the podium ceremony?

Col.

Comment is about THE GARDEN BRIDGE(From Tales of the Unaccepted) (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Dana

Just want to say that this is soo well written, and it embodies how most people feel, cause everyone is broken in their own way.

You might feel like you are failing at a lot of things, however you will find in time that passes, and you definitely did not fail at writing this poem.

Kind regards

Neill

Comment is about untitled (blog)

Original item by Dana Lyn

Hi Madison

Just wanted to say I Just read this poem and I would like to say its really an awesome poem, you should really add more poems, I like your writing style.

Neill

Comment is about A Shoot Off In Your Room (blog)

Original item by Madison

Dana, if I could like this twice, I would.

I would love to hear your voice on this, Dana..you couldn't fail.

Rachel x

Comment is about untitled (blog)

Original item by Dana Lyn

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n6P0SitRwy8

..believe me, my intent for writing this piece had not a thing to do with the video nor the symbolism contained therein. I just want to say, symbolically, that Americans should never forget that the greatest threat to their 'freedom' comes from within...

Rachel

Comment is about parastasis (blog)

Original item by nunya

The plan described in this blog got publicity via the BBC TV
text news service yesterday (Monday 14th August 2017).
A welcome shot in the arm for the promotion of poetry.

Comment is about Bobowler, cheeselog, dimpsy ... 12 poets to highlight forgotten dialect words (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Topical indeed. Ms Lumley should stick to India and hot air
of a far flung kind!
At £46 million charged to taxpayers they say, some walk in the park.
P.S. More like a walk in the dark!

Comment is about THE GARDEN BRIDGE(From Tales of the Unaccepted) (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I always thought the 'second world' referred to the eastern bloc nations but now you're all making me doubt myself!

Comment is about The Second World (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thank you and welcome to WOL ?

Comment is about Anthony Coviello (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Coviello

It's a little known Yorkshire town, and the language is very similar to English.

Nice one

Kevin

Comment is about The Second World (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Nicely put together Robert , with a grim humour - a sort of antedote to romance. Could actually work in reality if both felt the same! Actually the last two lines do offer a widening of viewpoint.

Ray

Comment is about Fascist Haircut (blog)

Original item by Robert C Gaulke

Thanks Harry and Mark again. "In passing" I don't think a comment could add anything to either of your observations - thanks though...

Ray

Comment is about PUBLIC AMENITIES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Trust Harry to make the eyes water - piping up on the
subject of piping down!

Comment is about PUBLIC AMENITIES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Guys, the path to pissorial freedom
Away from those snobby attendants
Is to sniffily prove you don`t need`m
- Micturationally gain independance -
By engaging the famous Cath Etter
Who`s handily on and off switches
Are attested to make you pee better
Free of all fumblings and twitches.

(just trying to help)

Comment is about PUBLIC AMENITIES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

You will be missed Andy but look forward to seeing you on Wednesday.

Nigel

Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

hey Michaela - setting daily writing targets may well set you up for a fall when distractions get in the way of the words. It can be really frustrating but the trick is to just go with the flow knowing that the words will come back to you when your head is in a better place to put them into some sort of order.

You have regularly proved to us here on WoL that you are more than capable of doing this and I am sure you will again. In fact, a break from writing can be a good thing, although perhaps it is not so obvious at the time. Stay positive.

C?L

Comment is about I Failed, Miserably (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

Thank you Patricia and Graham for your interesting and kind comments. Graham; I think you come close to where the reality of the Second World is. I shall ponder on this. Thank you both again. Keith

Comment is about The Second World (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thank you both, really. I have been going through hard times at the moment and as i would usually post a poem everyday, my heart is set somewhere else. It makes me quite sad actually.

Comment is about I Failed, Miserably (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

gutted i can't make it. i had wrote a poem for it on the theme called cousin in a box. i'll share it next month instead.

looking forward to Weds Night.

Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

It's invisible Keith! it's most likely found under damp archways or in shop doorways but it's really difficult to get a clear glimpse of!

Great idea! good work

Graham

Comment is about The Second World (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

kept expecting it to go somewhere else before realising it had no reason to. a gem.

Comment is about 'For Antoinette' by David Cooke is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Colin, Emer and Tom, thank you for your comments. Keith

Comment is about Trees (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

I was admiring some very tall beech and oak trees yesterday - all-magnificent in their native natural splendour. But below them, and spreading up the hillside, non-native rhododendrons were running amok. Landscapes and our interaction with them over time is quite fascinating. You capture some of that here. Thanks for posting Keith.
Col.

Comment is about Trees (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries