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Tue 4th Apr 2017 20:43

I loved this when I first read it and had to come back for another helping. According to the Almighty Google Font of All Knowledge 'spaghettification' is sometimes referred to as the noodle effect. Add to that Suki's 'respaghettify' and what more could we ask for? Terrific. Col.

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Paul Waring

Tue 4th Apr 2017 20:39

Thank you Cynthia and David for your kind words, I am so grateful to you both.

Cynthia, I feel very encouraged by your praise.

David, I do hope I managed to capture something about those 'worst of all days' you mention, the days that every one of us has faced, or will face, in our lives.

Paul

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Paul Waring

Tue 4th Apr 2017 20:22

Wonderfully atmospheric Stu, and you've got me intrigued.

Paul

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Tue 4th Apr 2017 20:17

I've been driving up and down motorways all day and my mind is befuddled. I'm still not sure I fully understand this poem but I wanted to stop by and revisit it again because it is definitely a worthy winner of POTW.

I have my own grasp on it and I very much like what I am grasping at. Whether or not it is fully correct is perhaps immaterial when a piece of writing inspires readers in varied ways. It's the kind of poem that makes one want to jump back in and swim around in. Well done Simon.

Colin

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Tue 4th Apr 2017 20:02

I was reminded of Elvis Costello's 'Watching the Detectives' - link below with lyrics. Your last line had me thinking of his: 'it only took my little fingers to blow you away'.

Both stories have a threatening feel and heady atmosphere and although not that similar in theme and content it is where my mind wandered. Perhaps a touch of the Gothic in yours Cynthia which I very much like. Good to hear that song again too. All the best, Colin.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xO_sDtI2bYk

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Paul Waring

Tue 4th Apr 2017 20:00

Oh Ray, you play-on-wordster, you. I love the cleverness of night errors / night terrors. And I really like the bonkersness of this very much.

And aythangyow,

Paul

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 4th Apr 2017 19:58

Cynthia re "Sin" the grating is in the mind of the beholder.


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raypool

Tue 4th Apr 2017 19:15

A profusion of illusion all a dream, is she a mermaid or not what she may seem? I find the sensuality of it very appealing and dare I say stimulating? It feels like an invasion of innocence by the "black mass". Not sure what that line represents but it seems pivotal to the poem!

Persuasive stuff Cynthia.

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raypool

Tue 4th Apr 2017 19:09

Enchanting Stu, and I like the use of Oh, open and over to give a sort of open - mouthed sense of wonder to the piece.
Highly effective. I wasn't sure if glass-like wings represents sails or not. Excellent stuff.

Ray

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:52

Delightful, truthful and engagingly put.

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Paul Waring

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:51

Hi elP, real menace here, with revenge hanging heavy in the air....I really like 'pull the plug from his circuit box' -
could be the fate of a dalek (cue David...exterminate!).

Paul

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:44

A very fine read, Ian, well thought, and well-crafted.

Would you consider, given the density and intensity of the subject, bringing some lines into closer association? I found it hard to keep a straight line of intent as I was constantly sliding downhill, so to speak. I realize it would look a bit 'prosy' but that's not a sin after all. Just a thought.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:37

Great piece,Tommy, beautifully crafted. It's my problem that 'sin' and 'sexuality' grate needlessly against each other.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:22

Really catches the spirit of despair with fine imagery. The mood is pervasive, superbly ending with 'watching dust'.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:17

I much like the thought in this, but I find the punctuation distracting. Would you consider dropping the word 'cup' to just 'aimlessly stirring a lukewarm coffee'? I'd actually like to see the other version, to be honest.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:11

Just plain lovely, with a thrilling choice of words: 'agape, aghast, at sea at last' is fabulous, followed by 'glass' and 'solace' Real wordsmanship. (My computer doesn't like that word - tough!)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:06

Free and easy, and delightful.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 4th Apr 2017 17:03

Wrote this a zillion (almost) years ago. Not satisfied with it yet; but I still find it interesting to work on.

Comments of any tenor would be taken aboard and considered. Maybe I could throw all the words individually into a pot and select at random, or scatter them around with a leaf blower, and spear them erratically with a trash stick. Now that's a thought or two!

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Paul Waring

Tue 4th Apr 2017 16:41

Frances, we must have been writing and posting at the same time, so you won't have seen my comment just now. Yes, I really wanted to capture extreme sadness.

Many thanks for commenting Frances.

Paul

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Tue 4th Apr 2017 16:37

So sad...

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Paul Waring

Tue 4th Apr 2017 16:37

Thanks Stu, pleased you liked it. I'm now glad I took a chance with the rotten teeth line!

And thanks too, Ray. Glad you liked the 4th verse in particular. I must have re-written that 20 times until it seemed right! The poem is not autobiographical, it's my take on the how dreadful the experience of loss/grief and depression can be. I just wanted to play around with the notion of being stuck and how, on some days, it can seem like time is standing still and there is just you and your thoughts/memories.

Oops, getting a bit deep now, aren't I? ?

Paul

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raypool

Tue 4th Apr 2017 16:19

Nicely served on a bed of acceptance - I like the bathos implied in the Fuchsia offer.

Ray

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raypool

Tue 4th Apr 2017 16:14

This is the shadow that dogs us and sometimes reigns supreme. It needs letting into the light and vaporising!

A poem can help !

Ray

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raypool

Tue 4th Apr 2017 16:12

I especially the fourth verse Paul - it reminds me of the rain on the lake in "Don't Look Now." Circles can be sad. Rather an unsettling poem for such as yourself.

Ray

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Stu Buck

Tue 4th Apr 2017 15:52

good one this, i especially love 'the rotten teeth of the crowd'

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elPintor

Tue 4th Apr 2017 11:57

this, for mercy's sake...I like it.

elP

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 4th Apr 2017 09:18

Really good one Tommy.
You say so much with so little. what poetry should say!

Good work

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ken eaton-dykes

Tue 4th Apr 2017 08:57

Thanks MC

Nicely put.

Ken

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Tue 4th Apr 2017 05:52

I like it too.
Lyrical and clever.

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Tue 4th Apr 2017 05:49

Sensual whilst restrained... but very effective.
Well done.

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Gopika_n

Tue 4th Apr 2017 04:33

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elPintor

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 23:10

I'm so glad this was chosen, Simon. It really is a well-written piece of work--maybe showing how we attribute divine characteristics to those we admire. I liked it from the start.

elP

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Andy N

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 21:05

love Zima Junction. one of my fav pieces growing up

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Andy N

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 21:03

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John Coopey

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 21:00

If the rumours are true, MC, it would make a better story than anything JlC could write.

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keith jeffries

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 20:13

Hello Hazel, it was your comment on Kevin´s poem ´Sylvie´which drew my attention to your profile and some of your poetry. Your style is enticing and also enigmatic. I have enjoyed most, if not all, but particularly liked Í lived my life that way´and ´The End is Nigh´. Please write more. An aspiring fan. Thanks. Keith

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Paul Waring

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 18:17

Thank you Graham for a lovely compliment.

I think you, David and I, the 'tree fellas', agree that in reality a tree cannot fall silently. And if anyone doubts this they should ask TIM BURR ?

Oh, how we laughed......

Paul

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 14:12

I recall a poem by Betjeman about a lady and her admirer
in the nook of a cafe (the title eludes me) and these
lines do an excellent job of maintaining the theme of a
secret liaison that Betjeman himself would recognise and
enjoy.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 13:52

Courtly! This could only come from a certain stage in
life when a hot attachment has cooled...but not extinguished. To borrow from the immortal W.S. Gilbert:
"Modified rapture".

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 13:44

I certainly agree with the essence expressed in this blog.
Many's the time I've found my mind busy conjuring up
stuff not remotely connected with the job in (literally)
hand.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 13:39

Or as I sometimes think: beady-eyed Old Mother Nature's
replacements - humanity's consumer obsolescence in
winsome and delightfully deceitful action!

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 13:34

An absorbing literary analogy - the book of life itself.
All things age and in some - but not all - instances may
be preserved for consideration by future generations.

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Ian Whiteley

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 13:00

thanks for commenting on 'returning home' MC - you have picked up the mood and feel very well in your summary - and, indeed, the references within the lines - thanks for commenting
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 12:59

thanks for the kind comments on 'returning home' Ray - you have understood EXACTLY the meaning of this piece - thanks very much for taking the time to comment
Ian

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 12:15

A great allegory Paul in so many ways.

On the matter of do trees fall silently, I do not subscribe to the notion that they do. We know they don't because we can witness the falling and hear the associated noise. So they obviously make the same noise whether we're there to hear it or not. Whoever dreamed that up is bonkers surely?

more to the point "In space, no-one can hear you scream"

Good work!

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Paul Waring

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 12:07

Thanks David and Hazel for your comments.

David, interesting perspectives, a tree does effectively fall in silence if no-one is around. The silence in this poem, of course, is the end/death of a relationship, characterised as a tree that is eventually felled by the one who is hell-bent on breaking up. And, how true, this 'falling in silence' could happen in what appear to us as perfect relationships.

Hazel, such lovely words, I really am grateful to you.

Thanks again to you both,

Paul

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Hazel ettridge

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 10:12

I always love your images. They bring me closer to the truth - peeling off the bark.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 10:02

Your rhyming sequences in this piece are very effective Alexandra. One of your briefest offerings too, meaning every word is important and will be scrutinised.
It feels tightly written like a small parcel. I rather like it!

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Hazel ettridge

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 10:01

How could she Resist?

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Rick Gammon

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 08:10

The woman has no idea of my devotion - I told her she'd inspired a poem - it's like a buried land mine - hope it doesn't blow my nuts off ?

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