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raypool

Tue 19th Apr 2016 17:02

Cheers Stu. Yes, that line does hit out a bit with the consonants, thanks. A masculine feminine crossroads with a barrier, is that It? That line you quote is a classic.
The idea of a sort of dry cough orgasm appeals!
I might suggest a book to check out (booker prize winner) I'm reading called The Narrow road to the deep north by Richard Flanagan about the Burma railway.

all the best.

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Robert Mann

Tue 19th Apr 2016 16:12

Stu - I've worked with Andrew and I'm sure he'd be delighted to have rubbed off on you. Lovely imagery here, with tones of R.C. doctrines lurking. Nice one.
Rob

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Stu Buck

Tue 19th Apr 2016 16:06

cheers david. again, im not entirely sure what it is. ive been reading a book called physical by Andrew McMillan and its very erotic and quite dark. I think this may be rubbing off on me, if you pardon the pun.

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frankloogan

Tue 19th Apr 2016 14:15

nice poem reallyyyy nice job

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Stu Buck

Tue 19th Apr 2016 14:13

lovely writing. lots said in few words. minimal and quieting.

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frankloogan

Tue 19th Apr 2016 14:11

wowwww nice poems nice job heaven

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Tue 19th Apr 2016 08:56

Thanks I don't normally explain my poetry but it's in memory of the junior Doctor who was found not long ago.Her name was Rose

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Angela Rae

Mon 18th Apr 2016 22:17

I was on a diet when I wrote it Rose lol. You're welcome Harry. Thanks for your nice comment :-)

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Gareth Glyn Roberts

Mon 18th Apr 2016 21:06

Thank you kind sir!

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Matthew James

Mon 18th Apr 2016 19:41

Haha, cheers Colin. I try to do these every now and then when an idea strikes me. Are there some of yours that you can direct me to?

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Matthew James

Mon 18th Apr 2016 19:39

Thanks Colin. Hopefully making something meaningful from a difficult time.

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Matthew James

Mon 18th Apr 2016 19:37

Thank you Colin

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Stu Buck

Mon 18th Apr 2016 19:29

incidentally, i read a fantastic line today in a book by andrew mcmillan and can find no better place to quote it than here...

'when he came he made a sound that still hatches in my throat each morning'

nothing to do with your poem but a fine line i think you'll agree.

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Lynn Hamilton

Mon 18th Apr 2016 19:29

Joyti, You're forgiven. If there's a free t shirt and a sticker involved.... I'm in that gang! I'll bring the cheese grater.

Lynn x

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Stu Buck

Mon 18th Apr 2016 19:28

fists of force legitimize.

that is a fine line to be read out loud.

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Stu Buck

Mon 18th Apr 2016 19:27

excellent. ray has summed it all up nicely. like a literate peeping tom. great stuff.

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John Coopey

Mon 18th Apr 2016 17:56

As a Spurs fan of 50+ years, like Graham, I am hoping for an unlikely Leicester slip-up. But if it can't be the Mighty Spurs as champions then I root for the Foxes.

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Ande Norvel

Mon 18th Apr 2016 16:52

Thank you Jemima

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Mon 18th Apr 2016 15:03

Angela,whhattt! no chips!? come on,please!

haha.

Lovely!

Rose.x

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 18th Apr 2016 14:37

Angela,
A lovely `breath of fresh air` antidote to a lot of the
`nobody knows the troubles I`ve seen` stuff we`ve been getting on here lately...thanks.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 18th Apr 2016 13:35

You'll be delighted to see that Leicester survive
If only via the effort of an outrageous dive
I for one will be happy to see your team croak
If we can get three points tonight up at Stoke!

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 18th Apr 2016 12:55

During this unfashionable club's unexpected success, there
have been a number of 1-0 scorelines - hence my
interest in seeing whether it would continue against West
Ham. I discovered later the score had turned to 2-1
in favour of the latter club - only for Leicester to get a
very late penalty to draw level.
To be fair, as far as footie is concerned, I'm more of an Arsenal fan...and that's only because my sister and her hubby follow the club.

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Mon 18th Apr 2016 12:02

Honey drips, parted lips; heat and sensuality, works for me, like it.

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Nigel Astell

Mon 18th Apr 2016 12:02

Cheers Andy

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raypool

Mon 18th Apr 2016 11:13

Lovely subtlety and turn of phrasing make this a must-see. I like the idea of voyeurism and suburban mayhem, almost a sense of gratification. I'm with you all the way.
Ray

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raypool

Mon 18th Apr 2016 11:09

A perfect description of sensuousness and anticipation Tommy. Very enjoyable - reminiscent of the Magnum adverts if I may say !

Ray

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raypool

Mon 18th Apr 2016 11:04

Both: I changed the title, as I realized there might be a sexual connotation - a whole different ball game. xx

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raypool

Mon 18th Apr 2016 11:03

thanks for comments Lynn and Wolfie.

My aim with this was to give a feminine credence to the mystic east (if that actually exists today) and maybe point out the threat of western influence or the benefits of it in its bringing women's plight into the open. A complex issue and not to be taken lightly. Prophecy would fit in certainly , and I wanted to indicate a sense of history spreading back and then meeting an obstacle. I think a lot of problems today are the result of a sort of buckling of opposing forces mostly subconscious with all sorts of mayhem as a result.

I hope that does not confuse - it almost confused me!

Ray x

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Stu Buck

Mon 18th Apr 2016 10:53

cheers guys. i had a workmate who went to cambodia a few years back and encountered some pretty dark stuff there. men living in hotels (for fuck all money), hiring young girls every night (again, for no money) and drinking the place dry. its a big culture over there, or it was. tragic really.

joyti - you are bang on! he's the worst one.

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Joyti

Mon 18th Apr 2016 10:38

Lynn, is he asking "whose gang you want to be in" please forgive me I couldn't resist. If I met him I would skin him alive with a potato peeler.

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Lynn Hamilton

Mon 18th Apr 2016 10:13

I have visions of a British holidaymaker, filled to the brim with alcohol, stains on his shirt and leering.

Thanks Stu! ;)

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Lynn Hamilton

Mon 18th Apr 2016 10:09

I rolled down this piece Ray. If that makes sense. Lynn x

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Lynn Hamilton

Mon 18th Apr 2016 10:06

Yummy! x

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Nicola Hulme

Mon 18th Apr 2016 10:02

Well if you put it that way, I suppose I'm not on the Southern Comfort yet. Perspective is a wonderful thing! Thanks guys.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 18th Apr 2016 07:53

Beautiful. I enjoyed this, Tommy.

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Jemima Jones

Sun 17th Apr 2016 22:55

great little poem Ande.Thank you.Jemima.

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Stu Buck

Sun 17th Apr 2016 21:53

thanks ray. the song just appeared on shuffle and this is what came out!

the deerhunter, what a fine film.

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raypool

Sun 17th Apr 2016 21:40

I'm crash landing on your profile page Stu. I came in low to avoid detection and now I walk unaided to meet and greet a poet whose comments always cheer me up. I'm flattered that you consider The Boghole a triumph. I love the word, it has a Seamus Heaney credibility for me, and of course can be a rectal equivalent. I never once thought of cancer but in this context would be about as scary as you could get.

Thanks again. Ray.

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raypool

Sun 17th Apr 2016 21:33

Exceptional, Stu. A crushing of innocence or at least its conversion into something sullied like the history therein. I was thinking of The Deer Hunter.

Ray

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Stu Buck

Sun 17th Apr 2016 21:19

ive read this three times now and each time i can see something different. i can totally see cancer, i can totally see writers block and im imagining some train ride to hell. i think this is a triumph. and now all i can think is how wonderful the word boghole is for the rectum.

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raypool

Sun 17th Apr 2016 21:16

Why can't I write something frivolous and trivial and everyday or pseudo impressive or blatantly expressive
and funnel all those lovely gratifying satisfying ego boosting tickety boo comments into my insatiable inbox?

Thanks Wolfie , you're the one, but then you know that.

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Lynn Dye

Sun 17th Apr 2016 20:21

Thank you both!

Well, I think most women do really, LCPTB ;o)

And Rose, goodness thanks for 'girly' - don't get called that too often at my age, ha ha.

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Andy N

Sun 17th Apr 2016 20:01

you could see Nigel's influence on this piece (:

but top stuff as always

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Andy N

Sun 17th Apr 2016 19:58

great stuff last week.

already done my piece for next month.

see you then.

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Andy N

Sun 17th Apr 2016 19:54

very you but very very well wrote

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Andy N

Sun 17th Apr 2016 19:52

thanks Martin. Yeah, i think you could tell it was me. was thinking about putting it out under a alias, but i think people would have realised it was me (:

but thank you

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Andy N

Sun 17th Apr 2016 19:50

thanks guys. one of these kind of pieces which got wrote fairly quickly but yeah...

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Andy N

Sun 17th Apr 2016 19:49

thanks guys. hope to get this on the stage soon with my band

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Andy N

Sun 17th Apr 2016 19:48

thanks guys. great doing these again. missed the characters i must admit.

yeah, i will amend this Laura defo.

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Andy N

Sun 17th Apr 2016 19:40

thanks Lancashire... NaPwriMo tends to bring more unusual descriptions off me (:

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