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Lynn Hamilton

Sun 6th Sep 2015 21:00

Great poem but I disagree folks about the last three lines - they need to be there .

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Lynn Hamilton

Sun 6th Sep 2015 20:52

Hi Graham. Thank you for reading and your comments on Camera Many of. My thoughts were slightly different from yours but that is the beauty allowed your own interpretation. x

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 6th Sep 2015 20:19

Ian,
The question is: What are they building these days to match them?

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Emma

Sun 6th Sep 2015 20:10

I agree with Harry! Good though

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 6th Sep 2015 20:09


Nice bit of nifty metaphoring Cathy,

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 6th Sep 2015 20:03


Lines of a contented man.

(maybe the last three lines not needed?)

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 6th Sep 2015 18:27

Kohl I recall
But
Her eyes semaphored
Another's name...hi :-)

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 6th Sep 2015 14:15

Re The Astronomer Hi Cynthia it's a re-edit but l have been having trouble for 9 months or so. I have been editing work using the in-house programming language. It has been murder. I've been in touch with the organisers but l still have to hand type the programme eg: <p> this is an example</p> and so on for each separate line. :-(

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John Coopey

Sun 6th Sep 2015 11:32

These experiences are certainly formative, Graham. The best we hope for is that they are not damaging.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 6th Sep 2015 10:29

Lynn, this was first thought when seeing that incredibly sad picture. How could anyone not act before thinking of how much money that picture would make in the world's newspapers.

Very sad times indeed.

Graham

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Stu Buck

Sun 6th Sep 2015 08:40

thanks guys. its sad that some things get no attention and some things get too much. i guess we can never solve everything!

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Stu Buck

Sun 6th Sep 2015 08:36

ray, this is fantastic. the things i love about it are myriad, but heres a few;
1. the use of childish language (dinky pinging, bestest) to symbolise the youth of the protagonist.
2. 'An online profile soon emerged

a simple tragedy half submerged.'
3. the poem is particularly cutting for me - i both met my wife online in a blog/chat room and know people who have lived miserable periods of time due to cyber-relationships.
4. the last lines, which betray the parents but sympathises at the same time. it can be so hard to monitor what goes on in a childs life can it not?

it really is a great poem ray.

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 6th Sep 2015 00:09

Hi Cynthia it's a re-edit but l have been having trouble for 9 months or so. I have been editing work using the in-house programming language. It has been murder. I've been in touch with the organisers but l still have to hand type the programme eg: <p> this is an example</p> and so on for each separate line. :-(

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raypool

Sat 5th Sep 2015 23:50

particularly powerful is the social disease that seems to characterize the piece, Stu. Apparently the caste system is absolutely endemic and will never be eradicated. Here is the rub.

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raypool

Sat 5th Sep 2015 23:46

I've not had the pleasure of reading you before Ian, but here I am enthralled with the picture . Great line is "blackening on a slow spit./2 The whole piece reminds me of an early postcard and carries so much nostalgia and humour. cheers Ray

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Martin Elder

Sat 5th Sep 2015 23:36

A strong piece this one Stu and well written with some feeling.

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Martin Elder

Sat 5th Sep 2015 23:33

Hi Stu
thanks for your comments on 'your turn'. Domestic violence has always irritated me to put it mildly. I have come across it time and again and it can be very difficult for the victim to break away from the abuser because of the associated attachments. Anyway it was a chance for me to vent my spleen. thanks again.
Martin

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Sat 5th Sep 2015 21:33

Thank you Martin for your comment on 'Burning Bridges'. So very appreciated.

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Sat 5th Sep 2015 21:31

Hi Cynthia. Thanks for the comment on 'Burning Bridges' and your lovely comment on my profile picture. You are so kind :)

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Sat 5th Sep 2015 21:28

Heya Stu! Thanks for the comment on 'Burning Bridges'.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Sep 2015 18:26

Tommy, take a moment to check your original blog. The keys are acting up somewhere between your personal copy and WOL's printout. The same thing happened to me this week. Perhaps this poem is a re-post?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Sep 2015 17:54

Splendid writing. IMO, the observations themselves and the resultant imagery are outstanding. Intriguing association of ideas, thrown against each other like raw knives. (Unless the title is a mistake. Or I totally misread it.)

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raypool

Sat 5th Sep 2015 16:19

Lovely of you Stu to point out that line in Two doors down
it did seem quite a quite blatant kick in the arse for respect.

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Stu Buck

Sat 5th Sep 2015 11:44

this is excellent. i have always wondered why the women/men stay with abusive partners. but it may just one of those things we cannot understand until we have been in the situation. this is very well written, with nice touches (a rhyme here and there, nice use of alliteration) breaking up the monologue. its clearly been written with heart and soul.

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 5th Sep 2015 00:43

Isn't it a life skill?

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 5th Sep 2015 00:37

Tender words Laura.

But I am afraid that heart wrenching picture needed no words at all.

These are truly cataclysmic times indeed.

That little scrap of rags, skin and bone will sadly define this whole sorry mess.

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Stu Buck

Fri 4th Sep 2015 16:30

a skip heavy with defeated memories. best thing ive read in ages.

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Nigel Astell

Fri 4th Sep 2015 15:55

News Flash

The Enchanted Art Gallery Weekend
26 & 27th September 2015.

If any of you have done a poem on last months theme of Enchantment please bring it along to this months meeting on Monday the 14th September.

Could you also bring the registration form if you have put the poem on A4 sized paper the Art Gallery will put it up on display.

Any framed work must be mirror plated with your name and the title of your poem on the back of the frame.



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Stu Buck

Fri 4th Sep 2015 15:18

thanks all. sorry for not responding sooner, i have been on holiday. its lovely to come back to an appreciative comment or two.
i look forward to catching up on all your fine work in the next few hours (no internet in the deep south (of wales))

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John Coopey

Fri 4th Sep 2015 12:56

I half expected howls of outrage myself, MC. But presumably how I felt about is my ownership.

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raypool

Fri 4th Sep 2015 12:19

You are right in what you say, Mark about the bigger picture. In this specific case one can never know all the ins and outs of the really personal stuff - it would be nice to think he would have dealt with it in good time. I suppose it was the public display going on for weeks on end that galled me and prompted me to put thoughts into words. I know there was no love lost with the son who only visited him rarely. Sad but there we are.
Thanks for your input.

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 4th Sep 2015 11:16

How many lost to the interest of the media Laura? A terrible point that needs to be made again and again until there is no longer such need.

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Jackie Phillips

Fri 4th Sep 2015 10:11

Hi - I haven't been on WOL for what seems an eternity but I am just having a catch up and a read through some of your more recent posts. There is always lot of angst and pain in your poetry but it doesn't come across as being full of hatred and anger, your work now, still conveys that sensitivity and feeling for others that I enjoyed when I first read some of your work. I am so glad I made the effort to take another look and will continue to do so.
Jackie x

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Fri 4th Sep 2015 06:18

flightless

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Fri 4th Sep 2015 02:05

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Fri 4th Sep 2015 01:59

Cynthia, thank you for posting this again. There are only so many minutes in a day that I can devote to searching through this site. My fear is I will never discover all of the goodness that is here to be read. So I thank you for making it easier for me to find this :) Another beautifully sad one from you.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 4th Sep 2015 00:45

Cue - cries of outrage accompanied by misspellings of an
uninformed sort.
You appear to have emerged from this encounter with
some humour and no swing in your moral compass to
persuade you down the paths of proselytising perversity.
N.B. I'm minded to wonder whether over-reaction by
adults can occasionally inflict more damage and guilt
than such a passing experience does - or would if
undiscovered and unremarked.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 4th Sep 2015 00:23

This rings true in so many ways - not least the humanity
that mundane life often treats with something akin to
contempt...as if life itself is little more than a joke on us.
The everlasting question that hangs over "possessions"
can be dealt with by an instruction in the will that they
be sold off and money (always welcomed!) obtained be
divided between pre-death choices where it is hoped it
can do most good. That's my action plan. Nothing is
more dismal than the thought of people arguing over
who gets what after the benefactor has taken the trip
beyond this mortal coil. I'm minded to note my will "Action
this day!" just to make sure the message is not lost. :-)

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Robert Mann

Thu 3rd Sep 2015 23:58

Not suicide, but a desire for peace of mind, which no-one else can understand let alone provide. I feel your angst through the eloquence of your work.
If you would be so kind as to view my poem Black Dog, I hope you can see that there is hope, and more importantly an appreciation of life when you can battle through the 'episodes'.
Many thanks for sharing.

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Thu 3rd Sep 2015 20:56

nice one Tommy - Graham will be pleased - and after reading his previous comment I have to agree - made me read it in a completely different way - thanks to you both - clever stuff.

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 3rd Sep 2015 09:15

Hello Ray,
thanks for reading the Koan on a Wish. This dictionary definition of a koan might explain better than I can.

"a koan is a paradox to be meditated upon that is used to train Zen Buddhist monks to abandon ultimate dependence on reason and to force them into gaining sudden intuitive enlightenment".

I was reading some Murakami short stories and this conundrum offered itself up as a koan.

best regards,

Graham

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 3rd Sep 2015 07:20

I wasn't taking the p*** Tommy. I think your piece has an easy rhythm especially if read as only four lines. Well done.

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Thu 3rd Sep 2015 06:43

enjoyed this one Ray - skips are such sad repositories (depositories?) for all the crap we can't take with us.

deferred pain
silent stalker
hidden killer
ticking timebomb
to the grave

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Andy N

Wed 2nd Sep 2015 19:51

thanks M.C... not a easy topic to write about as you may have guessed - this will form a collection that will take some time to finish but writing the early stages (i have done a few more so far), i know it's a project that will be rewarding. thank you (:

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Wed 2nd Sep 2015 19:48

Once again Tommy I read one of your poems and think; "Damn, damn, damn! why didn't I write that?!"
(Is it 'cos I'm not a Liverpudlian?) Ledger

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 2nd Sep 2015 18:32

hmm

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 2nd Sep 2015 14:38

The theme is pursued with a recognisable sense of
continuity in the eternal business of life and death.
Personal and all-pervading at the same time.
I can recall being summoned back on the day of my own
mother's passing and the expression - a smile of
serenity it seemed - on her face in death: everything
now relaxed and released from mortal pain and indignity.

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 2nd Sep 2015 12:14

You're very brave Cynthia. I have work that I wrote when I was eighteen but daren't put it into the public domain.

I do however find the whole issue of deathbed revelations quite fascinating. As an atheist, I'm assuming I won't get any but the whole subject of how they occur is interesting.

As to the piece itself, the passing of the mantle from mother to daughter is dealt with tenderly, as it should be.

Well done and bravo!

Graham

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 2nd Sep 2015 12:06

This could be Shakespeare Tommy! It has that rhyme of romeo and Juliet about it.

"too early seen unknown and known too late".

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 2nd Sep 2015 11:19

I hope I can be forgiven for reposting this from years ago. in the hope that it might resonate with some of our new writers.

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