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Gray Nicholls

Wed 19th Aug 2015 13:01

interesting man by the look of things.. enjoyed this.. very clever

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Gray Nicholls

Wed 19th Aug 2015 13:01

excellent Laura. Simply.. wow..

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Stu Buck

Wed 19th Aug 2015 12:47

what an interesting character he was. this piece has inspired me to read up on him, and he certainly lived! i love the last verse and send off line here, they transcend a character study to something philosophical and wonderful.

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Stu Buck

Wed 19th Aug 2015 10:28

i love this. 'tempest swells the brass intent.' is as attractive a line as 'cellar door' ever was. it just rolls so beautifully off the tongue and in the mind. fanboy moment aside, the whole thing is building to such a nice climax. i have so many theories as to where this is going, each time i reread it i think something else. at the moment, im reading it as sibelius soundtracks reincarnation and even if im off the mark by a mile thats what i love about poetry.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 19th Aug 2015 09:40

I'm going to repeat this note in case anyone happens upon one of these poems at a time.

This is the fourth part of a series of five interconnecting poems. Recent events in my life were preceded by hearing Finlandia, by Jean Sibelius, on the radio, and it so completely described how I was feeling that it took me over, and informs the whole series.

As a big nod to Sibelius, I've decided to use a loosely-based symphonic structure, so the parts are laid out like this:

The Melting of the Ice

Movements:

1. Prelude
2. Tableau 1: Return of the Snow Queen
3. Tableau 2: Night of Years
4. Tableau 3: Tempest
5. Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice

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Laura Taylor

Wed 19th Aug 2015 09:36

This gave me delicious shivers, laced through with terror and awe. Wonderful writing Cynth - you've captured so perfectly that truly staggering epiphany that really does shake our realities every now and again.

I think I only joined WOL around about the first time this was posted, and was in no way ready to comment on people's poems! It's great to revisit old ones, and obviously you performed this last night. I'd have loved to have heard it.

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Wed 19th Aug 2015 07:34

glad you found it RM. I looked for the poem I mentioned in my comment to The Crumbling but it was not one but many, mostly doodles with garbled thoughts between. Your reply about sounds and voices in our heads on any normal basic day got me thinking.

btw, yours is a great title - 'crumbling' sets in motion so many images of slow deterioration whether geological, mental or pastry. Check out Pink Floyd's beautiful 'Crumbling Land' song on YouTube and if you get chance the film 'Zabriskie Point' in which it was featured - dreamlike, lyrical, colourful - how I enjoy and try to write although I suspect not very fashionable.

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Darren Lea-grime

Tue 18th Aug 2015 23:08

loved hearing this at sale tonight, the written word just lacks your fantastic voice and delivery, love it

daz

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Darren Lea-grime

Tue 18th Aug 2015 23:08

loved hearing this at sale tonight, the written word just lacks your fantastic voice and delivery

daz

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Tue 18th Aug 2015 23:01

Colin, thank you so much for sharing. A few lines stuck out to me and I am evious and wish they were mine. 'scars upon stars'. I really enjoyed all of the celestial mentions. I have always felt a connection to stars, planets, the giant wide open everything that is out there that hasn't been discovered yet. I read and re-read this to take all the little bits in piece by piece.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 18th Aug 2015 17:05

Tia here is a link to the Canterbury Tales translated into English.

english.fsu.edu/canterbury/

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 18th Aug 2015 15:07

Perhaps... Chet Baker fell from his window balcony late at night, perhaps he too was enthralled by the moon... Tommy

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 14:33

Absolutely BANG.ON.

I can't think of anything other to say. You have managed to capture, in just a few lines, the absolute essence of it for me. Wow.

Sorry this is so late btw. There was a lot going on.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 14:25

:D

Now what could possibly have inspired this little gem?!

Heh. I just said to Cynth, I never really 'got' classical until Finlandia, but I will admit to drinking mint tea every day. Seeds? Only good seeds are poppy seeds ;)

Very funny poem Stu, nice one :)

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 14:23

Howdy Cynth :)

Ha, well I have a confession to make. Although I've been a total music anorak for almost all my life, I never really 'got' classical. It wasn't around me, I never listened to it, and the only time I did it was coming in or out of assembly in primary school.

So hearing Finlandia had a massive effect on me. Not only did it sound EXACTLY how I was feeling, it was also the first real bit of classical music I had ever liked. It's kickstarted a total obsession btw - I am listening to classical AND Finlandia itself all the time now!

Your deal sounds ace btw :D

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 14:23

Howdy Cynth :)

Ha, well I have a confession to make. Although I've been a total music anorak for almost all my life, I never really 'got' classical. It wasn't around me, I never listened to it, and the only time I did it was coming in or out of assembly in primary school.

So hearing Finlandia had a massive effect on me. Not only did it sound EXACTLY how I was feeling, it was also the first real bit of classical music I had ever liked. It's kickstarted a total obsession btw - I am listening to classical AND Finlandia itself all the time now!

Your deal sounds ace btw :D

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 18th Aug 2015 12:32

This is delightful, very atmospheric as you build a character.

Now, this is just plain mean-minded, but - if you see him only 'sometimes', how do you know he's 'always there'? Short works fill your eyes all at once.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 18th Aug 2015 12:01

OK,Laura. I'm back in business with a fixed computer once more. I'm starting at the beginning.

BTW, Sibelius' 'Finlandia' was the first major classical piece that blew my mind when I was fifteen. I accepted a baby-sitting job regularly because this family had the record. When the kids were finally put to bed, the HiFi was MINE. And I made extensive use of it. All that privilege and a bit of money too. It was a good deal.

You sure are cerebral. My compliments. My envy.

Glen Gould for a quid! I was thinking of him only two days ago. Small world.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 18th Aug 2015 11:47

This is terrific, so COOL, and funny, and true. My smile kept getting wider and wider until it was laughter of appreciation.

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John Coopey

Tue 18th Aug 2015 11:25

Harry - she knows I'm the Boss (and I've her permission to say so).
No Graham, I'm holding my breath till I post, "I'm Sitting on Top of the World".

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raypool

Tue 18th Aug 2015 10:59

I was a bit taken aback having read today that a headless corpse was found on the beach at Blackpool!
I won't make any tasteless comments but still it is tempting .... poor sod.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 10:14

Thank you Graham - it's always a big compliment for one poet to give to another is that. Very much appreciated.

Well yes, I think so too. I'd like them to be able to stand alone as well, but they do work better as a whole series. That's why I'm breaking my usual rule of leaving a poem up for at least two weeks before blogging another.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 18th Aug 2015 09:59

"we sit and tell in every tense"

another, I wish I'd written that line.

I have a feeling that these pieces will only strike home when they are all complete Laura. This one is haunting already though.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 18th Aug 2015 09:56

When did the missus write this one for you then JC?

I think it's time for another of your musical inspired THFC masterpieces. Can I suggest "we threw it all away"

best etc etc

Graham

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 18th Aug 2015 09:46


Couldn`t wait to comment on this John...That`s it Keep them in their place!

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 09:45

This is the third part of a series of five interconnecting poems - see the previous two poems. The series was inspired by hearing Finlandia by Jean Sibelius on the radio, preceding recent events in my life. As a big nod to Sibelius, I've decided to use a loosely-based symphonic structure, so the parts are laid out like this:

The Melting of the Ice

Movements:

1. Prelude
2. Tableau 1: Return of the Snow Queen
3. Tableau 2: Night of Years
4. Tableau 3: Tempest
5. Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 09:39

Thank you ray - appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I thought this idea would either be totally up itself, or it would work. Your comment gives me hope :)

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 09:37

Many thanks for reading and taking the time to comment Martin, appreciate that.

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John Coopey

Tue 18th Aug 2015 07:59

Thank MC. I always think a poem makes a nice present. Cheap too.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 17th Aug 2015 23:51

Ooh...you ARE a card JC!! I almost felt guilty laughing!
I think the other JC might have revised "Hurt" to "Gert"
in his famous song version.
"I focus on the pain
The only thing that's real
Her punches came like rain
And boy, that made me feel!"
:-))

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raypool

Mon 17th Aug 2015 22:04

great imaginative work and such a good idea to work the mind to the grandeur of this particular music . I'll watch with interest! Ray

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mollie learmonth

Mon 17th Aug 2015 20:22

This is an amazing poem I have no constructive criticism to give it is fluent, artistic and unique.

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Martin Elder

Mon 17th Aug 2015 20:20

Nice one Andy I remember this one from last week.

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Martin Elder

Mon 17th Aug 2015 20:18

Thought provoking stuff Lynn. Thank goodness we can't totally rely on a mathematical equation to find the answer to everything. otherwise I would have been sunk long ago. Great poem

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Martin Elder

Mon 17th Aug 2015 20:10

Fab Tommy fabulous

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Martin Elder

Mon 17th Aug 2015 20:08

This is a great one Ian. It had me laughing out loud. Hope you are going to add this to your performance pieces.

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Martin Elder

Mon 17th Aug 2015 20:00

Nice one Katy. I love the lines' your body is numb, your mind in hibernation'

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Martin Elder

Mon 17th Aug 2015 19:56

Have you also 'seen something nasty in the wood shed' then Stu.
I love both of theses poems Laura and looked forward to the others. Return of the snow queen was particularly moving.

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Martin Elder

Mon 17th Aug 2015 19:12

Last September my wife and myself found ourselves in a caravan a few miles round the coast in the next village. it was with great delight I discovered on the way home the boathouse at Laugharne and I realised why D.T. would want to be there. It is a fabulous place. For a great poet. It not only made my day but my month. I felt an inner glow for many days afterwards. And to think I almost missed it!

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 17th Aug 2015 15:19

The author of this post deserves his own place of renown
on WOL. The subject of the article was unknown to me
but through the writer's words I think of him as someone
whose presence in this world was notable and worth
remembering for many reasons. That in itself does poetry-
despite its inbuilt prejudices <see "Patience Strong">
and preferences, a signal service.

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raypool

Mon 17th Aug 2015 11:33

Cheers for the input on Blackpool. You have it in the bag there. I find it a sad place from my perspective, and had to work there for long periods. Out of season is beyond depression, especially on the long outskirts.
I'm glad you like my quirky simple stuff!

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Stu Buck

Mon 17th Aug 2015 10:36

like moths to a light, one flash of shiny things and we flock to it.

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Stu Buck

Mon 17th Aug 2015 10:36

funny and sad. a welcome like a cleavage is a brilliant line, exposing (pun intended) both the primal desire felt when approaching lights, noise etc and the shallowness of what is actually given.

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Stu Buck

Mon 17th Aug 2015 09:45

this is very good. benefits repeat readings, also has some great punchy syllable repetition (i am sure there is a technical term for that). angry and surreal. i like.

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Stu Buck

Mon 17th Aug 2015 09:40

thanks ray. its a fairly ancient form in itself (17th century i think) and I am sure it goes back further. its a great way to start writing i think, as it gives you discipline (less words more meaning) but also allows you to create and finish poems quickly, which helped me when i was starting as it meant i had something finished to be proud of.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 17th Aug 2015 09:34

This is the second part of a series of five interconnecting poems. Recent events in my life were preceded by hearing Finlandia, by Jean Sibelius, on the radio, and it so completely described how I was feeling that it took me over, and informs the whole series.

As a big nod to Sibelius, I've decided to use a loosely-based symphonic structure, so the parts are laid out like this:

The Melting of the Ice

Movements:

1. Prelude
2. Tableau 1: Return of the Snow Queen
3. Tableau 2: Night of Years
4. Tableau 3: Tempest
5. Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice

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Laura Taylor

Mon 17th Aug 2015 09:32

Heh - cold comfort farm!

Thanks Stu, and nice one on the vinyl!

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Katy Megan Hughes

Sun 16th Aug 2015 21:34

Sure does, Nigel!

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Katy Megan Hughes

Sun 16th Aug 2015 21:31

Love this one! : )

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Katy Megan Hughes

Sun 16th Aug 2015 21:29

Thank you Cynthia, when I read your poem "The Parting", it stirs up that same sad but lovely feeling...

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