Hi Chandana

This is a beautiful poem which I really enjoyed. I could almost smell the incense and spices.

I love the reflective sadness, and was shaken by the almost casual acceptance that the cherished memories will fade.

Lovely, lovely poem.

Comment is about A Place Like a Poem (blog)

Original item by Chandana

your comments means much... thank you.... its great to have a venue where people... actually 'GET IT"

peace

Comment is about I AM AFRAID (blog)

Original item by GeeProcessor

Yes, from Bangalore. Thank you.

Comment is about Nameless (blog)

Original item by Chandana

I really enjoyed these lines. I came back to read them a couple times now. Great stuff.
I Have Wept
Fasted
Wept
and
Prayed
I am No Prophet
Yet
Upon Platter
I Have Seen
My Head

Comment is about I AM AFRAID (blog)

Original item by GeeProcessor

This poem really resonates with me having suffered panic attacks anxiety flash backs oh that tthe ghost would stay in the closet or is that the skeletons . ( : x

Comment is about Haunted (blog)

Original item by Pauliegreg

it's good news that the death sentence has been lifted

even if the remaining punishment is incredibly severe

Comment is about Poet reprieved from execution but still faces 800 lashes and long jail term (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks Greg , I'm glad you enjoyed the sleaze! A good night , and a tough spot to go on first but upwards and onwards.

Ray

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

F**k the government indeed - oops just swore x I like your poetry Tommy and you said it first in your Biography x

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

This is brilliant.

We find ourselves shifting from the mundane drawing of the curtains to the making of the tea, and in between experiencing the sudden storm in all of its glory.

I love those shifts, and the wonderful imagery

Comment is about Wind from my Window (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Vicki
The crux of the haiku form is there, the correct syllabic content and you have even put the 'pivot' line in the middle. A fine first attempt!

Comment is about Your Words (Haiku) (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

this is fine indeed! the main bother i have with the winds here in the valleys are that they are so strong whenever we have them the cats refuse to go out and do their business so i end up with litter trays everywhere. anyway, such musical language and phrasing. a nice snapshot and i can see you writing it, which gives it extra charm.

Comment is about Wind from my Window (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Martin - apologies - I missed your kind comments regarding 'I Am The Scarecrow' - pleased that you liked it and thanks for commenting
Ian

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks all for commenting. Although I must admit I was not expecting any as it was a 'drifting off' few lines that I knew I would not remember in the morning so popped them directly on here.

Anita you have earned yourself a packet of chocolate hob nobs to dunk with our next brew for your lovely and very generous comment about my scribble. This is based on something one of my new work colleagues said to me which did make me laugh out loud. Don't think the poor souls know what to make of me but they are adjusting very well under the circumstances.

I totally agree, David.

Thanks again Vicky and keep up the good work.

XXX

Comment is about normal (blog)

Enjoyed hearing this last night at the Keystone, Ray. "Sony this and sony that" is one of my favourite lines ... plus scrubbing out the old Cortina with toilet cleaner, of course.

Comment is about THAT WAS THE SEVENTIES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I empathize with those words...

Comment is about Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Taylor

Enjoyed the 'feel' of this one David.P&S. xx

Comment is about River (blog)

Original item by David Blake

I thought I had put a comment here before. I absolutely LOVE this. I could never write in this way; (I don't think - but, then, I've never tried.) Anyway, I so enjoy your work, for itself, and also, because you stretch me.

Comment is about Anthony and Katypatra (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

Hi Cynthia, You have so much going on in this poem, all cleverly described and entwined, I love it. I especially like the "puppy neck-wrestling a rag doll", and my favourite bit "specimens pinned to the sky board" - both perfect images! M:)

Comment is about Wind from my Window (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Oh, how sad. On his own, lonely, staring at the walls. Beautifully told.
M:)

Comment is about And the Walls did Weep (blog)

Original item by Jim Trott

Lynn, this made me laugh out loud, probably cos I know you so well! Love your poetry and your so abnormal personality!

Comment is about normal (blog)

Thank you both for your comments - yes Wolfie I like that - thrashing (almost like that better than spiralling!) but yes the idea being its the 'flowers' tanacity keeping it the whirlpool of its own making. I also like your suggestion Cynthia - but it has an entirely different meaning that way - somehow sadder - thanks again xx

Comment is about Aftermath (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Yes me too!! Who the hell WANs to be 'normal'!! Nice one xx

Comment is about normal (blog)

No! That's the first I've heard of Paul kantner passing away. Airplane were great, Cheers David.

Comment is about PAUL KANTNER (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

You can find more of my poetry on line simply by searching on my name.

Comment is about PAUL KANTNER (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

Thanks, David. I've just watched the clip and it relates very well. Thanks for the link. PJH is an exceptional talent and well worthy of promotion! X

Comment is about Sweet Heart (blog)

Thanks all, hic

Comment is about Killing the Long Game (blog)

Original item by Jim Trott

I find a flowing lovely lyricism describing/capturing harsh physical reality or a poignant metaphor of great love, whether religious or human. I admire/applaud the care taken in structure.

Comment is about River (blog)

Original item by David Blake

Having put words on both the printed page and via the
CD format at my own expense, the pleasure is having
them in permanent formats - with the added luxury of
calling the shots as far as pricing and promotion is concerned.
The "value" is very much a personal thing as this is
basically a product and if you are in search of a market
for it, you will need to be open minded, patient and adaptable when seeking your public.
I once put an ad. as a "gift" item in a quality magazine
at some expense and got no replies at all. But there is
some truth in "You have to speculate to accumulate",
even if it's just recovering outlay.
Self-publication has an honourable tradition and shows
confidence in one's own efforts.
Good luck - whatever!

Comment is about First poetry collection nearly ready (blog)

Original item by David Addington

Thank you Cynthia : )

Taking on board your comment, have posted a re-draft of The Temptation of St Anthony to try and de-mystify it a little!

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Or a "hole for one" in some distant windswept northern golf course, perhaps?!
:-)

Comment is about DONALD THE ELEPHANT (TRUMP TRUMP TRUMP) (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Interesting that Wolfgar makes this comment, because my first reaction was to eliminate the 'whirlpool' line entirely, leaving the 'flower' image in its 'muddy waters of life.' Just an opinion, of course, with respect.

Comment is about Aftermath (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Yvonne - where have you been? This piece is very illuminating for we mere men. The invisible bond between mother and child, which can only be germinated in the womb. We can only marvel at a connection we can not come close to.
Let's have less gaps in your postings please.
Rob

Comment is about THE BIRTH (blog)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

I do enjoy the almost casual style you write in, the words and sense of what you're saying flow easliy. I absotivley agree with your thoughts on this one.
M:)

Comment is about Killing the Long Game (blog)

Original item by Jim Trott

Love it! And it's nearly always the guitarist who feeds back, in my experience!

Comment is about Feedback (blog)

Original item by Anna Ghislena

That's lovely, Michelle. I could almost hear the sea!

In fact, I think I'll pop down to the beach now.........

Jim

Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)

Original item by Michelle

Michelle - this piece is truly dreamy, but it feels like the main protagonist is struggling to find release from some pain or suffering. I am sure this means many different things to many different people. Well written Michelle.
Rob

Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)

Original item by Michelle

Thanks everyone so much on your comments, particularly on this piece. I was worried about the reception it would receive.

David, I think you may have spotted the gap where the missing verse was. I took it out as I thought it was nasty enough. I have a hunch that this trade is now a lot closer to home.

I agree, Robert, about exposure, and I hoped that people would see that, that is the intention and not about using shock tactics to boost my ego.

Stu, I felt guilty and sick when I wrote it!

A totally agree with your 'creepy' comment Ray but hope that only refers to the piece! ;)

Thanks again for your comments, much appreciated X

Comment is about Sweet Heart (blog)

Had to spend some time reading and appreciating several times over, this is exactly what good poetry does.

Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)

Original item by Michelle

Congratulations comrade!:)

Comment is about Stepping up to the mic: Steve Pottinger is Write Out Loud's new chief executive (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hahaha, thank you :) someone who sees what I see. Not that I felt anyone would really have anything negative to say, I just feel like it may seem like a weird piece

Comment is about Even when the light inside the Mind goes very dim (blog)

Original item by Eric Berard

I like the poem. It paints a vivid picture of a war torn event. And breaks freely to focus on God.

Steven Jacobson

Comment is about River (blog)

Original item by David Blake

Thanks Lea - glad you enjoyed it! And yes he deserves every word!

Comment is about No Mercy! (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Thanks for posting an extract from your wonderful Zones of Avoidance here, Maggie. Speaking as one who's reviewed the book! http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=48795

Comment is about Zones of Avoidance (blog)

Original item by Maggie Sawkins

Welcome to Write Out Loud, Rob. Enjoyed this poem about the ramsons - didn't know that was another name for wild garlic. I like the "star-white flowers" that "burst like fireworks". And if you're looking for feedback, I just stumbled over the phrase "a floating balloon", where the rhythm feels slightly wrong on that line, I thought.

Comment is about Rob Baylis (poet profile)

Original item by Rob Baylis

I think a couple of old dinosaurs like you and I, MC, are a bit to derriere garde to "trouble the scorers" of any poetry competition.

Comment is about THE POETRY JUDGE (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I tried to comment Stu and nothing materialized - how weird is that? I wanted to say that I'm all a-quiver and all a-shiver and so pleased you liked it. I like a dose of the old mysticicity (?)

Comment is about PSYCHIC VISION (blog)

Original item by ray pool

A real sting in the tail - almost a fairy tale sense of false security and that adds horror to the telling.
David has fleshed out the subject nicely. The word Sweetheart is creepy.

Ray

Comment is about Sweet Heart (blog)

Maggie - I can feel the narrator's pain throughout this piece. Even though drugs have only been a minimal intrusion on my working life, I do wonder at the self destruct button some people are unable to avoid. A fitting closure might also be 'You've made your bed. Lie on it. Lie on it. Die on it.' Well written Maggie.
Rob

Comment is about Zones of Avoidance (blog)

Original item by Maggie Sawkins

"American Wake", captures a mood. Captures something at least that stops the reader stampeding past it, giving it the attention it deserves.

Comment is about Maggie Sawkins (poet profile)

Original item by Maggie Sawkins

Jon - nicely conceived and portrayed. Makes the limited years in front of me seem like a blessing.
Rob

Comment is about By the light of the local Spar (blog)

Original item by Jon Darby