Sat 6th Feb 2016 21:24
Hi Steven.Reading this poem gave me such a lovely warm feeling.So easy to 'sink into'
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Lynn Hamilton
Sat 6th Feb 2016 19:27
Hi Colin. I'm breathing in and out slowly and counting backwards from one hundred. X
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Sat 6th Feb 2016 18:59
is this to do with a bad choice in women Alem? Reads that way.I love poems that aren't too long winded.
Comment is about Ego-rocking words (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 6th Feb 2016 17:59
can't say I took much notice of the words Lynn - just gazed in wonder at the format - how does it feel?
I'll read again later. That's a promise. x
Comment is about EQUILIBRIUM (blog)
"Differences make themselves" Tommy x
Comment is about Just in Time (blog)
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Thank you for getting the gist!
Comment is about Must Your Gratitude Be A Knife? (blog)
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lovely ray. you paint a picture of someone who fell in love with music but then realised the worst place to love music was in a band. gentle recollections but tinged with sadness i feel.
Comment is about MUSICIANS ON THE MOVE (blog)
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Your tales of life on the road, Ray ... I see the beginnings of a collection here
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thanks michelle! i actually went to school with michelle, and she did have an awful compulsion to turn off switches. However, I am happy to report she lives with a husband and two kids in Berlin now. I agree, kids are extremely cruel!
Comment is about switch (for michelle) (blog)
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Just came across this. Love your writing Stu. This should be a compulsory read when you arrive at Secondary School. M:)
Comment is about switch (for michelle) (blog)
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Thank you for your ongoing feedback Cynthia, it is really appreciated. I enjoyed writing that one and it still makes me smile when I read it : )
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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Thank you Nigel, your comments and feedback always drive me on too
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
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yes a second to that from Stu Buck.
the last two that i posted here are meant to be written with an epic scale :) i m trying to push the boundaries i do love a big poem. in scale in theme :) these excerpts are also interesting in themselves.
I have never got all the way through Milton's Lost. these days its all about the netflix series haha.
good stuffs
Comment is about the muslim's tale xii (blog)
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I've commented on the next part..
It is very similar to the 'lady of Shallot' in ways like that of which they are locked away and waiting for a man to come.The style is similar.
The verse concerning the broken horses is a particular wow..i wrote a poem with these lines
'...at the glacious stare of the long dead, long suffering, lacerated mare. Mating flies and festering there...gruesome horses indeed.
i think this is great writing.
Comment is about the muslim's tale xiii (blog)
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wow this is great.
i love the form and the telling of the tale.
some great imagery.
'they knew enough of bees and flowers
and the stamen touched in midnight hours'
its reminiscent of Tennyson.
brava
Comment is about the muslim's tale xiv (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13947)
Sat 6th Feb 2016 01:39
I look forward to it Gee :) No apologies. Use all the words you want xx
Comment is about THOSE DAMN DUCKS (blog)
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thanks stu.
i have written much for this site for a while. a few years ago i was writing all the time here...anyway with my degree and actual life i don't have as much time for poetry. But it has been nice to be welcomed with your comments on the 'miracle' and nice to remember how much fun there is in feed backing others stuff.
you're poems are cool.
(congrats on baby) please don't write loads of gooey poetry about it tho hahah only joke xxx
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
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I understand why you are annoyed Laura but I am confused by your declaration of clarity
you appear to believe that there is some version of islam is just like the quakers - and in doing so you disrespect the bravery of mr fayadh, in writing what he did - and the other poets imprisoned for writing in a similar candid fashion
Comment is about Poet reprieved from execution but still faces 800 lashes and long jail term (article)
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RM I have GOt Life complete will load up after weekend.. and thanks for your words.. means much.. i apologize for taking excerpts of your work.. it was soooo good... peace..
Comment is about THOSE DAMN DUCKS (blog)
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What would any bloke have in his fridge, Stoopid!
Comment is about 70m DASH (blog)
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You are right, Stu. But you will have to use your imagination as to what he did on his stag night that attracted the attention of the police.
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Fri 5th Feb 2016 20:11
hence the better choice of being vegetarian.
Comment is about Must Your Gratitude Be A Knife? (blog)
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i love the line 'a dream in a froth of white'
personally i think it wraps itself up nicely. not a whodunnit rather a satire on marriage.
Comment is about The Wedding (blog)
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a cracking bit of razor sharp satire.
Comment is about The Gnome and his Snakes (blog)
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All the assiduously rehearsed protocols for first contact
Evaporated in the suddenly deafening silence.
“Hello,” I said.
thats brilliant. i love the melding of science and poetry and this is a fine example.
Comment is about Event Horizon (blog)
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Fri 5th Feb 2016 19:01
Neat and very sweet Rachael.Thank you.
Comment is about Rib Cage (blog)
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Nice poem Peter, love your description of supermarket trollies. welcome to WOL
Comment is about Peter Ray (poet profile)
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Thanks guys much appreciated. Anybody know an accordion player,I might have to do a tour!
Comment is about Drowned (blog)
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I'm caught on the horns of a dilemma now - but Laura has exposed my weakness, so I must take stock and use effects wisely! Stu
Thanks for noticing.
Comment is about A RESTORER'S LOT (blog)
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you're on Greg! It's really not that embarrassing as you get old enough - people probably think "poor old bugger"
but then that's only Prince Charles. I also have a Brian Sewell hopefully forthcoming. Coffees, anyone?
Comment is about IN THE PIZZA EXPRESS TRINITY ROAD WANDSWORTH (blog)
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Graham - Apparently the shot putter Geoff Capes held the 100m world record for a long number of years. But it was the specialist discipline of Carrying a 300lb Fridge for 100m.
I daren't believe, Graham. I just daren't.
Comment is about 70m DASH (blog)
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Trevor,
A good job I read this after watching `What is reality` on tele.
I am intrigued by the way you have pinched your metaphors from the modern space spiel to describe an attraction and meeting in a crowded room.
I have`nt time to go into this just now, but the bits I like best are lines sixteen and seventeen.
Get back later.
Comment is about Event Horizon (blog)
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Get Me to the Church on Time
Scary Monsters
on a trip to Mars.
Modern Love
to the church on time.
We could
be heroes ashes to ashes.
Star Man
in the sky looking down.
The theme for Monday night is a poem to celebrate the life of David Bowie.
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
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Loved it. Can identify with it as well although I like to think most of the nearly people can get their chance to shine now and then.
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Very nice! Really like the images and feelings it evokes of a hot far away land and expectant young women waiting for what might never come...
Comment is about the muslim's tale xiii (blog)
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It can't be easy running with that defibrillator strapped to your back JC!
No3 believe believe!!!
Comment is about 70m DASH (blog)
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Harry says that you are not invited unless you bring your boots and crop. He says he needs the encouragement these days.
Comment is about 70m DASH (blog)
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Oh Yes, I know this man, his Lodge his Rugby Club and where he has his unpaid petrol account.
In my opinion He's a pathetic specimen but so much the common beast.
Comment is about My Noble Valentine (blog)
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It gets me thinking- yes, what has been done? what's the big deal? married, not married- nothing has really been done.
Comment is about The Wedding (blog)
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hi rachel
thanks for giving my stuff a read and commenting. always nice to wake up to a few interesting points.
cheers
stu
Comment is about Rachel Bond (poet profile)
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Thanks Jemima, yes that is what I wanted to convey. However always pleased to receive input, so thank you Ray for your observations - I do see what you mean - but on balance prefer to keep it in line with my first thoughts
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I look forward to you reading a poem in the voice of Prince Charles at Guildford some time, Ray!
Comment is about IN THE PIZZA EXPRESS TRINITY ROAD WANDSWORTH (blog)
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Fri 5th Feb 2016 10:51
Hi again Michael-glad you left this poem as it was.I think in a funny way the 'ands' add to the doggy momentum.A sort of canine 'Night mail' rhythm,if you know what I mean.
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Fri 5th Feb 2016 10:43
The mystery deepens.Will we ever know? Is there going to be a follow up Yvonne? Hope so!
Comment is about The Wedding (blog)
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raypool
Sat 6th Feb 2016 23:13
Greatly appreciate your sharing this, Greg and Stu.
I have numerous tales to recall - I could muster up some more musical bile in that direction, I'm sure!
I remember a line from Bill Withers' a Lovely Day "bears heavy on my mind." The problem with the bigger bands is the lack of personal expression - just being a jigsaw piece when the picture was all too familiar.
ps mortgages have to be paid.
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