Thanks for the comments, ladies.
JJ - the problem with polishing is that it tends to remove
the patina. :-)
Comment is about CREATURE COMFORTS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 21:15
M.C.I also like this poem,however,I respectfully think it is worthy of a teensy weensy 'polishing'
Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about CREATURE COMFORTS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hello Harry,
Thanks for the thoughts. I was an appalling student of Latin at school but value it along with Greek Mythology as completely worthless knowledge of which more should be taught these days.
One of my favourite belters is Byron,
"The Assyrian came down like a wolf on the fold
And his cohorts were gleaming in purple and gold."
Comment is about FALERNIAN WINE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
alseau nonas
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 16:48
This is a very good piece with strong imagery. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Stephanie Gomez
alseau nonas
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 16:41
I enjoyed reading this quite a lot. Very good piece. "The danger past the search resumes" is a great line on many levels.
Comment is about CREATURE COMFORTS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
An ode to self-sufficiency, set out in neatly co-ordinated
consistent style that pleases this lover of rhyme.
I particularly liked the last lines acknowledging the essentially ephemeral nature of life.
Comment is about Some Small Whisper (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
Nice classic Acheronian touch John.
I think you are very interested in Latin.
A professor once told me that reading Homer`s battle
poetry aloud in the Latin, was like listening to a troop of
horses riding in the charge.
The only rhythmic thing in English that I can imagine is
Thompson`s beginning of `The Veteran of Heaven`
(which is actually a religious `victory in defeat` poem.):
O CAPTAIN of the wars, whence won Ye so great scars?
In what fight did Ye smite, and what manner was the foe?
Was it on a day of rout they compassed Thee about,
Or gat Ye these adornings when Ye wrought their overthrow?
It`s the way the meter seems to gallop militarily.
Comment is about FALERNIAN WINE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Five thousand quid!....I`m gobsmacked!
Comment is about American poet Eric Berlin's 'Night Errand' wins National Poetry Competition (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Lynn - please see my comments on Jemima's latest then come and see me in my office please!
Rob
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Russell Jones
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 12:41
Usually it means that the title is longer, and the poem is one word which plays off that title. I don't know if that's a great definition, but that's how mine function and how I've seen them elsewhere. In this collection, there are twenty six of them which sort of interact with one another to build into more of a whole. Here's a short sample:
26 ONE WORD POEMS
Another Bite and Then the Diet Starts
Appetizer
Boyhood Dream, Male Reality (Unfortunately They’re
His Own)
Boobs
Chrissy, 48, Loves Cats, Hates Cheaters, Smoker
Cat-as-trophe?
Comment is about Edinburgh poet Russell Jones to launch first collection (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 10:01
Nice to see you guys back on.
Phew! lot of work gone into this excellent piece.
we see the Falklands issue is rearing its Argentine head again.Just when apparently we haven't sufficient numbers of warships to defend them. (MSN news)
Cheers dears.
P&S
Comment is about Post Frontier (blog)
Original item by Jacqueline Phillips
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 07:52
Love it, Laura, thanks for the chuckle :D
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hi Harry,
Thank you for your comment. It's nice to be back. I hope to stick around this time.
I really appreciate your encouragement. I know formal isn't to everyone's taste but I am pleased that you approve.
Take care.
Helen :)
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Good one, Jemima, ha ha.
Thank you for your kind comments x
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Fri 1st Apr 2016 17:11
she might be tempted to disclose what is under her pinney Lynn,but I hope she doesn't disclose her pin mumbers! haha! good stuff Lynn.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
<Deleted User> (6895)
Fri 1st Apr 2016 14:51
hey Rob Mann-watch out! you've got competition here!
;o)
;o)
P&S
Comment is about Haiku: Easter news (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Laura,
One time - in Greece - a dog chased me off the town
beach and shat on my poems.
Was it weak bowels, or an angry pro-Homeric classic piece of canine criticism? (These things are mysterious)
(That `shittens` is crying out for a rhyming kittens)
This one is a nice antidote for all that pseudo - sentimental treatment that the T.V. is giving to all those monkey and vets programs lately.
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
:D cheers Lynn! Good to see you back too :)
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Love it, Laura, good one, still laughing...
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Topical and bang on, Andy. With the shivering promise of more.
Would you consider changing 'about' to 'on', in that second line?
Comment is about Ghost Story III (Part 1) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Lynn Hamilton
Fri 1st Apr 2016 12:44
Ha! Absolutely Anita. Thank you xx
Comment is about Stumble (blog)
Me too.
Comment is about Martin Figura to judge new award for older poets (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
A lovely poem, it holds that totally calm and at one with the universe whilst being totally insignificant feeling I get when I gaze up at the night sky without actually saying anything about that, if you know what I mean.
Comment is about To Cygnus (blog)
Original item by Victor Grauer
I love the way you write! Less is always more with you!
Anita
Comment is about Stumble (blog)
Thu 31st Mar 2016 23:13
drastic twist in the tail.Great poem Jocelyn.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Writers block (blog)
Original item by Jocelyn Diane
Hey Craig, you're in Portsmouth? Me too. Do you go to Tongues and Grooves?
Comment is about Craig Maskell (poet profile)
Original item by Craig Maskell
Thank you very much Jim and Chizobam, glad you enjoyed.
I was an aunt myself at 7 and a great aunt at the grand old age of 28! :0)
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Very original work, and funny too, I enjoyed it.
Comment is about 5O shades of Bleach (blog)
Original item by Craig Maskell
I regard poetry as a form of entertainment. It should move the audience either with humour, or sadness or make them think, or react in some way. I am not a "performance poet" but I do like performing. A lot of poets don't know how to perform, or engage an audience. They should stay at home and practice in front of a mirror or with friends.I am bored with people who stand up and read into a piece of paper!
Those clubs that don't like applause in between poems I just don't attend.
Comment is about Applause or the sound of silence - should you clap between poems? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I enjoyed this, Adam. Beautifully sung too.
Comment is about "Don't Let this Life pass you" (blog)
Original item by Adam Franks
This is another one of my songs I wrote! (Again my mom is playing it)
Comment is about "Don't Let this Life pass you" (blog)
Original item by Adam Franks
This is my first religious song I ever wrote! Enjoy! (My mom is playing it!)
Comment is about "Though Waters Roar" (blog)
Original item by Adam Franks
Julian you'll def have to be our man in Washington. I love the bit where you said 'Write out Loud' and everyone started writing it down!
Comment is about 'Step back onto the sidewalk, sir': searching for the poetic side of Donald Trump (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I applaud your absolutely-nailed-on-metre! Funny poem too :)
Comment is about Cyberwonky (blog)
Original item by Bill Lythgoe
Thanks for feedback - We are all Gods children ! :)
Comment is about Haiku - Easter (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Hi Alexandra - Thanks for feedback :)
Comment is about Irish and Proud (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
NO ROOM FOR A SHED???!!! What infamy is this, Lancs?
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Aaargh! Will amend, thank you for pointing that one out. Hope you had a lovely Easter break x
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I enjoyed this, Lynn. I wish my aunties had been like that, ha ha!
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thanks for your kind words on 'Morning Mass' Ray. Very much appreciated. DB.
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Although Disappointment was meant as a stand alone poem, it could also have been seen as a follow up to Uncertainty.
That being the case, this poem is the finale.
Just a bit of fun, as they say.
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thank you Cynthia.
I am gratified it works as a stand alone poem, which is what I intended, although it would also serve as a follow up to Uncertainty.
I think the above is probably the most likely outcome, but there is another to follow, which changes things rather.
Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment is about Disappointment (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
What a lovely poem John - and a fitting tribute to your mum. It's good to read something from the heart. Glad to see you're still writing xx
Comment is about Her star (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
I don't get this, Graham. Pubs are places for men to get together to talk man stuff. Sheds are caves for whittling wood in on your own.
Comment is about SHEDS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Helen Elliott
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 21:30
Hello *waves back* :)
How's tricks? Is the poetry scene treating you well??
I haven't been doing much open mic these last few months, I've just been too bloody busy! Going to try and go along this month. I miss it.
Hope you are well x
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor