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Tommy Carroll

Wed 27th May 2015 20:47

CBT indeed - 50 shades of water :)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 17:20

If breasts are naturally bare, there is no shame about them. What creates 'shame' is the deliberate and provocative peep-show. As for the nipple business - pure idiocy! I have always thought the real allure of sensationalised female breasts is the male's desire to suckle - like a baby - with little thought to the erotic arousal of the female sex urge.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 17:08

I, too, really like this. It requires more than one whip-through - with vocabulary and images that are challenging but very well-chosen both for meaning and music.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:35

I shall try to catch up on some more of your work. I was not very active on-line in April.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:33

Totally engaging from start to finish. And it leaves the reader to fill in any scenario desired - very good 'poet-ing'.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:27

Dark times = dark water?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:24

Welcome to WOL. I'm sure you will enjoy this site. The management staff is excellent, and ready to help you.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 27th May 2015 16:20

This is a very strong poem, and by no means simple.

I see it is the same one on your profile, but appearing there in a more poetic form of broken lines. Did you have difficulty posting this here, in this format?

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Wed 27th May 2015 14:23

nice one Travis. Shifty, yes.
x

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John F Keane

Wed 27th May 2015 13:07

Who is that ugly devil scribbling on the left?

Oh, its me...

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Lynn Hamilton

Tue 26th May 2015 11:47

Thanks Tommy. That's spot on! Bloody technology.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 26th May 2015 11:41

You can read one of the best, certainly one of the longest, and possibly the most enjoyable article I've seen about Simon Armitage in the Guardian here http://www.theguardian.com/books/2015/may/26/simon-armitage-making-poetry-pay. You'll note that the interview was done in and around Marsden, Julian - poetry centre of the universe!

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Julian (Admin)

Tue 26th May 2015 11:10

I beg to differ, M.C. There is humour aplenty among open-mic/open-floor poets, in most of the many events I have attended in the past few years. I would agree that there is a tendency amongst some modern poets to eschew humour but the best deliver their serious messages in a deceptively humorous package. I love this from Billy Collins:

Introduction to poetry

I ask them to take a poem
and hold it up to the light
like a color slide
or press an ear against its hive.

I say drop a mouse into a poem
and watch him probe his way out,
or walk inside the poem's room
and feel the walls for a light switch.

I want them to waterski
across the surface of a poem
waving at the author's name on the shore.

But all they want to do
is tie the poem to a chair with rope
and torture a confession out of it.

They begin beating it with a hose
to find out what it really means.

As I mention in my review of Armitage's gig in Washington, we would all have been proud of his dry humour interspersing the serious messages within some of his poetry.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 26th May 2015 09:34

I'm a thief who steals the truth from your words


Well crafted Chloe!

Graham

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 26th May 2015 09:30

Correct Graham, this is a re-edit. :)

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 26th May 2015 09:29

This is hard to read for me Lynn.
I think there are some good words swallowed up in here.

The laugh he threw back Hit my face.

Graham

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 26th May 2015 09:26

Tommy I think I must have missed this first time around (that's if you posted before).
There are some good words here.

We snatched the time

to make our marks

with sweat

and firm commitments.

and the last two lines are brilliant.

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Richard

Tue 26th May 2015 08:18

Wow I really like your poem! It is well thought out and always on point of the subject. I look forward to seeing more from you.

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Tue 26th May 2015 07:38

Hey, I like this one, has the feel of an early-morning-waking-up-dream. x

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Lynn Hamilton

Tue 26th May 2015 00:00

Preeti,

I'm not qualified to say what works but I really enjoy reading your written words.

Please stick with your instincts. Xx

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Lynn Hamilton

Mon 25th May 2015 23:34

In reply to your comment on 'My God' Mr TC, no need to think too hard. The soul destroying experience of internet dating, the isolation of technology and being subjected, as a child, to a host of spaghetti westerns where 'hey blondie' was god.

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Mon 25th May 2015 22:45

Brilliant.Deep,as most of your work is Paul,but this one is at a very enjoyable depth.x

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Helen Elliott

Mon 25th May 2015 22:17

Yes, I think it is a great venue and it was a very special night indeed. I think Maggie's response to your review is the most important and she was moved by it.
I performed at the recent Mayfly Festival of Arts at the Square Tower, it was on the last May bank holiday and there was a great atmosphere. I think the owners are very willing to support the arts here in Portsmouth and it was great to have artists, musicians and poets sharing a platform.
I hear that you are a featured poet at the next Guildford event? That should be good. Have you ever been to a Tongues and Grooves open mic night?

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Helen Elliott

Mon 25th May 2015 22:06

Harry, this is lovely. I agree with Travis, the rhythm is spot on. Perhaps if you'd have substituted 'mummy' for 'daddy' in that last verse, the element of surprise would have worked in your favour. Enjoyed!

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Greg Freeman

Mon 25th May 2015 21:07

Hi Helen, thanks for your kind words about Maggie's book launch write-up. It was quite an occasion that night, and a privilege to be there. Glad you felt that the words did the job. There was a sense that a whole community was involved, and felt that it had played its part. I'd never been to the Old Square Tower before; it's a wonderful venue. And outside you can watch all the ferries coming in and out. Greg

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 25th May 2015 21:03

Shame on the magazine say I, they should have recognized real talent! I raised my 3 kids after their mum died so I know all too well how frenetic that life can be... Best wishes, Dave

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 25th May 2015 20:48

Thanks for commenting on 'The Family' Harry, much appreciated. :)

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David R Mellor

Mon 25th May 2015 15:05

thanks i"I am Lost" for words thanks

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 25th May 2015 10:00

First two lines were spot on Preeti. Persevere!

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I am lost

Sun 24th May 2015 22:22

Raypool, thanks.

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Steve Smith

Sun 24th May 2015 21:33

Thank you Harry, I appreciate your opinion a lot -I really enjoyed your poems too!Hope to see you in June!
Steve Smith

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raypool

Sun 24th May 2015 20:46

Thanks for these comments David. I suppose it is corporate theft and usuary made respectable - so yes we do have to put faith in these people. They are just pawns in the bigger game after all and are to be pitied.
And, yes it is autobiographical, but I am old enough not to worry about it any more.!!

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raypool

Sun 24th May 2015 20:37

Though you call yourself "I am lost," you have nothing to lose by expressing any personal thoughts, and that is a great thing in itself. Treat your mind like a blank canvas and dot some I's and cross T's and you will surely find a format that suits you, and I'm sure people will accept that as a unique effort. Nobody can have all the answers, but I think inspiration is very close to desperation and there may be a clue there somewhere!
Happy writing!!

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Helen Elliott

Sun 24th May 2015 19:31

Hi Greg,

Just thought I'd stop by to say hello. I was at Maggie Sawkin's book launch at the Square Tower. Your review of the evening was spot on. Such a powerful and emotional collection.

Helen :)

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David Subacchi

Sun 24th May 2015 17:12

Thanks very much for this useful feedback Harry. Much appreciated.

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jane wilcock

Sun 24th May 2015 16:51

love. we poets have a theme and they are the truths of life. I enjoyed this thanks

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jane wilcock

Sun 24th May 2015 16:48

a perfectly judged moment.

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 24th May 2015 15:49

It makes one think.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 24th May 2015 14:27

M.C.
Fair is Fair, and - after all I`ve said - I stand humbly (and rhythmically)...F...d.

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Emma Stradling

Sun 24th May 2015 11:23

Thanks for your comments.

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Sun 24th May 2015 10:13

so cleverly constructed.x

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Sun 24th May 2015 10:03

hi chaps.Do you know where I could purchase a pair of those 'boots?' x

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 23rd May 2015 23:44

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Sat 23rd May 2015 23:07

Thanks all! xx

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Sat 23rd May 2015 22:02

brilliant!

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Sat 23rd May 2015 21:57

Great dedication Jane to a true hero who wil never ever be forgotten.xx

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raypool

Sat 23rd May 2015 21:29

As an afterthought, Greg, have you seen any of Colin Gifford's books on UK railways. Great shots of the industrial areas in the sixties . Two reside on my bookshelf.... all the best.

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raypool

Sat 23rd May 2015 21:23

I'm so glad you enjoyed the tank graveyard. I tried one about pillboxes, but it didn't quite work. Plenty of atmosphere, which you like, I know! The final line perhaps was inspired by the Turner painting Steam Smoke and Speed(I think). Who know where these ideas come from, but that poem was an experience I had as a kid.
I enjoyed your poem Wrecks a lot. It drips with images of the sea.

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 23rd May 2015 20:37

enigmatic pencilling...

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