a little birdie told me, the notes were so heavy it set them down on the ground and prayed for new wings, for all its company of coloured birds had shed their feathers and the crows were coming...
i like these short short stories :)
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Thx for the feedback on my latest Isobel appreciated X
Hope things are good.
Missed 3 Tudors in a row with differing problems one way or another...grrr. If the M58 still exists I wont miss next months lol.
My Best
Chris
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Thx for the feedback on my latest Laura- appreciated X
Hopefully catch ya at the next Wigan.
My Best
Chris
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Thanks for the compliments. This poem is actually very old I first wrote it in 1981 after watching some hares play in a field near to where I used to live, it was during a very hot late summer and very dusty. It was during my 'Ted Hughes' period.
Comment is about Hares (blog)
Original item by Peter Asher
Love it!
Internal dialogues - I shit 'em. They are a constant - I have to find 'ways' of dampening them down cos they drive me insane if I don't.
Nice rhythms in this too
Comment is about Everything I Am Not And More (blog)
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Hi Lynn, thanks for commenting on 'There Be Fairies' - I always enjoy those little flights of fancy that we can employ while writing for children (of all ages). :)
Best wishes, Dave
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 14th Sep 2011 13:58
lovely poem Pete.
has a 'watership down'
feeling to it.
anything at all to do
with nature is fine by us.
thanks.
Patricia & Stef.
Comment is about Hares (blog)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 14th Sep 2011 13:22
'aint history fascinating John.
I,like a lot of people can relate to
the feeling of 'connection'
when we visit museums and the like.
the one exhibit that blows my mind away
is the Bayeux tapestry-wowsers!
neat poem-glad you are back
between the shafts.
Stef & Patricia.
Comment is about Mutemwia (blog)
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Hey, cheers Andy me love for your comment on Gordon, much appreciated :) Hope you're feeling on the up now mate, take care x
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Nice little poem, Dave. I must admit to a soft spot for fairies...
Comment is about There Be Fairies... (blog)
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I like the line "Autumn burst through without reason". You can almost taste the season's chill.
Looking forward to seeing the other 2/3 poems in the sequence x
Comment is about The End of Summer (II) (blog)
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Thank you Stef'n'fingy for commenting on my little ditties, just a little fun really, oh and hey, my socks don't get dirty, ha! (Yeah, right....)
Lorra lerv back,
Lynn xx
Comment is about New Bed (blog)
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Thanks Andy, was ace to see you in Stockky on Tues (after a long time).
I think it makes more sense as a written rather than performed piece. (And please excuse the rather poor art.)
Glad you enjoyed it! x
Comment is about "Damage Limitation" in The Ritz Toilets, 1997 (blog)
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i think we should have a poem in an anthology do. i think its better that your works going out like that. you can see its standard in relation to the other work. I spose online books are all the thing these days but it proves to me how new writers have all the fresh talent x well done x
ps i love that its got something to do with me...ah my young protege miss taylor is doing so well...particularly as sometimes you cant see why youre reading, what is the point. when your on stage and the lights in your eyes and its a circus. Im so glad i got the message of that poem through. makes it all worthwhile. i may have said this aready but i am now ready to retire ;)
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Thanks Neil - chuffed that you think so :) Hopefully see you at the next Tudor?
Comment is about Neil Fawcett (poet profile)
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Thanks Isobel for the notes on me profile and No One Called You...
You know, Biting the Bullet wasn't saucy at all. It really wasn't! But it proper tickles me that you can find such a different meaning in it than my original :D :D I was gobsmacked that one was chosen - but the publisher specialises in 'funny', and as you know, I don't DO funny very much! :D
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Thanks Anne!! Am proper chuffed :D :D
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I agree with Jo here as it does seem a little sad. Love the first line however possibly as I can relate to it.
A image could be a good idea I think however.
Comment is about Ever After (blog)
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I agree with Jo here as it does seem a little sad. Love the first line however possibly as I can relate to it.
A image could be a good idea I think however.
Comment is about Ever After (blog)
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nice stuff - have you considered swapping the second and third stanza around as it could work and give it a slight different touch.. otherwise, enjoyed it - keep em coming x
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not sure what is the end of an era for you, but good luck x
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Hi Jennie; - remember you doing this at Stockport the other night and really enjoyed it - it's certainly amazing how long it can take to get a final draft of something sometime.
I like a lot of this - in particularly the use of italics.. excellent stuff x
Comment is about "Damage Limitation" in The Ritz Toilets, 1997 (blog)
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Cheers for the comments, y'all!
Comment is about One Bum To Another (blog)
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thats great laura, your poetry is quality and your a great example for new comers to the art.
are you having a book launch do?
great great news xx
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Thanks for commenting Ann and good luck with The Poetry Mine.
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 13th Sep 2011 22:11
oh Mr Dye!!
put a sock in it!
make sure its not one of Lynns dertee ones
loved em both Lynn.
ta chuck.
lorra lerv
Stef'n'fingy.xx
Comment is about New Bed (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Yes - but you'd probably end up with a very wobbly prick that wouldn't do the trick and then you'd start relying on liposuction again...
Comment is about Liposuction (blog)
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Lol, had to laugh at this, John, and you called me a dirty gerty!!!
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Thanks, Isobel.I don't know how I think them up. If I did I might stop. It's kind of automatic....but you still have to be there.
Comment is about Tipping Point (blog)
Join the queue, ladies, join the queue.
Comment is about Liposuction (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I like this - I've never seen a hare! It's one of my ambitions.
Comment is about Hares (blog)
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You are rapidly becoming one of my fave poets on here (big deal maybe! - but I mean it!!)
Comment is about SPACEGHOST (poet profile)
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This website needs more culture like this.
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darren thomas
Tue 13th Sep 2011 17:51
An ILLUSTRATOR!? Why don't you attach party balloons to it as well?! Sorry but this young man's poetry requires NO illustration. His words are, more often than not, enough.
Comment is about Ever After (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Well I'm totally delighted to hear that you are being published and even more so to think that it is a poem that you wrote for one of our little on line competitions. It makes it feel all the more worthwhile running them. That was a very saucy poem! x
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Cheers Laura. Now back to work! Congrats on being published, you work certainly merits it.
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Hi Cynthia. Thanks very much for your kind comments, much appreciated.
Warm regards
Neil.
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I enjoyed this too, very amusing. :)
Comment is about One Bum To Another (blog)
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<Deleted User> (8692)
Tue 13th Sep 2011 16:35
Surreal, lyrical, a little bit sad somehow. I really like this. It would work really well with an accompanying image, if you know any illustrators. On it's own it feels a little incomplete, like it just needs a final touch.
Comment is about Ever After (blog)
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Philipos
Tue 13th Sep 2011 16:08
Hi Cynthia, re; 'Website' this is a much changed poem anyway so other ideas are welcomed. Please go ahead and change as you think appropriate.
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Brilliant. A steady diet of your poems is a sure cure for nearly everything.
Comment is about One Bum To Another (blog)
Original item by David Mac
Hi, David. I've been off-line for ages. Thanks for your comment on 'Considering Colour'. The last night of the Proms featured a poem by Wendy Cade or Code, about the orchestra, a child's view approach. I appreciated that it was in line with what I was trying to do with Colour, but I thought the verse was awful. And she was COMMISSIONED! - and presumably PAID! Oh, the pain. BTW, Colour is on the news this week with surveys being conducted with a COLOUR WHEEL, to ascertain the happiness level of Mancunians according to the colour of their choice. Am I en vogue or what! I enjoy hearing from you.
Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)
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I don't remember the original enough to spot the differences Andy - but you don't appear to have made it any worse so that's a plus! I would just change the two an s to a s int the penultimate verse. I think they are typos but they just distract a little. x
Comment is about The End of Summer (II) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Hi Isobel - thanks for your comment over End of Summer II and I'm pleased you like it - always pleased when you comment - this one of my favourites must admit and there is certainly other pieces to come in this sequence (Currently aiming for 4 or 5)..
Hope you are good. Maybe see you soon at either Salford or Tyldesley maybe? xx
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Glad you like this, Isobel... one of my favourites must admit and there is certainly other pieces to come in this sequence (Currently aiming for 4 or 5).. x
Comment is about The End of Summer (II) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Belated thanks to Mel & Pete :) Am trying to be less sporadic about my WOL entries! xx
Comment is about When You're Happy You're Beautiful (blog)
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Thanks for your comments on Bagni di Lucca, Isobel. It's true, my stuff does teeter on the edge of prose a lot of the time. This one still needs a bit more work on it.
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John F Keane
Wed 14th Sep 2011 20:10
I like this one a lot. It reads as well as it sounded on Monday night.
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