Hi Larisa - I can't resist making jokes. It's quite a risky thing to do but it's a good way of finding friends with a similar sense of humour!!

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

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Good evening lovely Odessa Lady! absolutely brilliant poem-and picture-can I respectfully suggest to you Larisa to change the line...'we have not enough time and flies to 'we have not enough time and time flies'I think thats probably what you intended to put but like us all,made a tiny mistake? lots of loveStefan-xx(M-xx)ps-lovely title indeed-too!

Comment is about Falls And Flights (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Yeh, it's brill! ;-)

Comment is about watching sparrows (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

That's a very appropriate extended simile, Dave (I think - mustn't get too technical about these things as i could be wrong!)

Comment is about The Loft (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I couldn't read this cos i couldn't find my reading glasses - but i'm sure it's very good!

Comment is about watching sparrows (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Fantastic poem, John. The theme is immense, yet captured so succinctly with the power of a blow in the face that I just gulped, as though I had been hit myself.

Comment is about The Psychology of Doodles (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Thank you Cynthia. I do have lots of sparrows in my garden, yes. But do all take on board that the poet is not necessarily writing about herself or indeed her neighbourhood sparrows!

Comment is about watching sparrows (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Perhaps 'a sodden woman sitting on a bench in autumn watching sparrows' reaps even more empathy. It would certainly imply 'ridiculous'. This is a good poem, and a good umbrella theme too, Ann: LOVE IS. You are so fortunate to still have sparrows; Sale is completely barren.

Comment is about watching sparrows (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

You are quite possibly right Ann. It's just that I don't associate that mundanity of conversation with a girlfriend/boyfriend relationship - much more a long term married thing - and even then... don't think I ever regaled my ex husband with the contents of my stomach for the day. Hey ho - I do my best to interpret...

Comment is about The Psychology of Doodles (blog)

Original item by John Togher

hi Ann, Nice snapshot... ending better still. loved this little one. Win x

Comment is about camille, emily and me (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Feather light , yet heavy... I like that. thankyou Anne. Win x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Hi Iso. I have done the arms and legs thing in the window. but actually in the actual harry worth window. I was a fan. Win x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Very intriguing, John.
What I am most focused on is his 'chaotic spiral without end', and the last verse:
'As I put down the phone
I slowly erase you
like the darkness rubs out the day.'

I see these as signs that he wants out... The chaotic spiral without end represents how he sees his life, and 'I slowly erase you' represents his wanting to get rid of her somehow... Hmmm...

Comment is about The Psychology of Doodles (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Hi Andy, thank you so much for kindly commenting on my last two blogs. Cheers, Lynn xx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Cynthia, thank you very much for your lovely, kind comments on Deceived (She Bites the Bullet) With warm regards, Lynn xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Surely the two people are on the phone to each other so there's no confusion Isobel? I'm thinking that the chap is so familiar with the (presumably) lady on the other end of the line he is picturing her with her favourite cushion etc, and knows her so well he can imagine exactly what she is drawing. As to the stars in the eyes, they are the eyes of a clown - so maybe not so good!

Comment is about The Psychology of Doodles (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Thank you for your lovely comments, Cynthia, Andy and Stefan.
I did once throw a yoghurt at my other half, but that was more in fun - it left my hand before I'd had time to think!

Comment is about Deceived (She Bites the Bullet) (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Lol, Andy, I can't say it's my usual style, but thought I'd try it here! Thanks for comment, glad you enjoyed. xx
Stefan, thank you as always for your support. xx

Comment is about Biting the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I've thought about the phone some more. I suppose you must be mentally disconnecting - that is probably quite a significant line.

Comment is about The Psychology of Doodles (blog)

Original item by John Togher

This is really good John. I like the subtle way the doodles highlight the underlying currents under the mundane conversation. Very ominous that she sees you with stars in your eyes, and you "slowly erase" her when its finished!
Cate xx

Comment is about The Psychology of Doodles (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Oh God this could only have been written by a man! Love it Dave, and the sentiment it invokes, but Ive never known nature be quick or slick!
However the protective feeling you have for your newborn is beautifully drawn.
Cate xx

Comment is about The Moment (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Wow ! - at last Cyn - one I can both unnerstand and unashamedly heap praise upon. xx
(because of the former)

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I really like this a lot. You've implied so much about two people and their relationship, just by their doodles. x (Mine are always spirals coming off more spirals. God knows what that means about me!)

Comment is about The Psychology of Doodles (blog)

Original item by John Togher

I prefer this to 'Paper' - same underlying theme but expressed more subtly.
Not sure how it has ended up being her on the phone and then you putting it down at the end. The very different perceptions of each other are neatly described in the doodle idea though.
It works well as a poem. x

Comment is about The Psychology of Doodles (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Profound messages indeed - that the majority of men can't handle committment or long term relationships! Love the whimsical ending also.

So glad you are on board. x

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

hiya john...could you send me that turkish pulling poem please. My car is very dirty and needs washing again (it has a couple of marks on it)...will have to go see the lovely abdul x

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

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Good morning Mrs H-hope alls well with you and yours-best regards-Stef-xx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

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Good morning lovely Odessa Lady! warm regards to you-and yours!hope you have a nice peacful day-see you soon Larisa-love-Stefan-xx(M-xx)

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi Greg... thanks for comments on my recent haiku, If I have done what you say then I have done a good job. Economy of words with maximum meaning could be a good haiku writters motto. Win

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Steven, I thought I had left a comment, but obviously not. I think this is really good with many outstanding lines. I like the conversational style too, and the ordering of the stanzas. One suggestion perhaps: 'Dying' is used in a slang sense, perhaps by intention to really infer 'Death', but maybe you did mean 'Longing'. "Longing' might be a very apt word here, that would pull all the ideas together. Entirely my opinion.

Comment is about Same Old Tired Shit (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

A great read Andy. You are at home in this style mate. Win

Comment is about First Holiday in Ireland (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Some great scenes in this mixture of strong images Andy. not sure how you intend it to be performed ? it would make a great song maybe. Win

Comment is about Chamber Music XIII (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Andy, Thanks for your kind words re my recent haiku posting. Whilst you are spot on with your comments on this one (In that the reader gets a snapshot and is left in suspense) I don't thik this is always the case with haikus. Win x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

close to a song this Dali in places, I must admit - reminds me of my last train journey to London (the other week).. it has that long, endless feel to me!

good stuff!

Comment is about ALMOST ALONE ON PLANET LONDON (blog)

Original item by Dali

great use of language here again Marianne, must admit i thought it was going to carry on for a bit longer than i thought it would be (always a good idea to catch the reader out - lol)..

nice stuff again! x

Comment is about Harpy (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

the note at the end was a wise move, dave but tone wise, the piece is a tender and soft, gentle and understated (at least to me).

love it, m8

(I am still working on my bite to bullet piece - you do realise there is a track by Machinehead who are a really loud rock band called this don't you??? lol)

Comment is about The Moment (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

i have a similar opinion like Jo here, Marianne as in the fact i don't have a clue what is going on with the narrative, but the language is brilliant... the first line for example 'Affectionate and shapely fingers, forking fast but sometimes falling feline' which is a terrific opening for example..

top stuff, Marianne (Would hate to have to try and perform this however!) x

Comment is about The Eighty Eight Handshake (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Cynthia - particularly like the ending here.. Nice one and great stuff on the rest of the piece also! x

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

The more I read it, the more I like it. There are some profound messages in this.

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks a lot!

Comment is about ALMOST ALONE ON PLANET LONDON (blog)

Original item by Dali

Ooh, this is delicious! I love the way that you play fast and loose with alliterative sounds, and it all trips off the brain-tongue in a VERY satisfying way. I don't pretend to understand what's going on in terms of a narrative, but I suspect there's more to it than I'm picking up. Is there more to say? I feel like I want more on 'the precipice' and its repercussions.

Comment is about The Eighty Eight Handshake (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I'm glad you added the footnote; I was ready to condemn all men to sheer idiocy. It is a lovely poem about an incredible 'moment'

Comment is about The Moment (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

It is pure coincidence that 'obsession' appears here right after Steven's good poem. Normally, for that reason I would remove mine, but not this time since it is a 'themed' poem.

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Dave. Thanks for looking at and commenting on my recent haiku. Liking the "bite the bullet" idea/comp. I will see if i can russle something up. Win

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Cheersonionioni, there was an underlying message here as I threw this together, your point is in there too!

Comment is about 2 mins (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

This is very good - very economical but each line adds a lot!

Comment is about ALMOST ALONE ON PLANET LONDON (blog)

Original item by Dali

It's a shame you added that footnote Dave - I was looking forward to lambasting you! Yes - a quick delivery is the best a woman can ask for - there is nothing quite like that moment when all the pain is over though and you are handed this perfect being. You must be very in touch with your feminine side to understand that - the poet in you maybe.

I love the protective note that you end on - raw nature at its best. x

Comment is about The Moment (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Andy... thanks for your comments on my Pakistan Ghazal. Its a massive subject isnt it. And one difficult to do justice to therefore. Win

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Greg, Thankyou for your comments as ever on Ghazal (Pakistan) The line "Footsteps dissolved in our wake, signatures erased" was supposed to suggest fleeing from the flood waters which disolve and erase traces of their owners. but then again I suspect your know that. Win x

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Very sporty, Lynne, feisty, fast paced and strong; well written, keeps the reader totally with you. I have dumped a full G&T over a man's head; my rage was so great my mind blanked it out almost simultaneously so that I had no explanation to offer, even to myself.

Comment is about Deceived (She Bites the Bullet) (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye