Very well observed, and a great surprise ending!

Comment is about pinny (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

They didn't let ye down tonight!

Comment is about You Spurs! (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Interesting work mike. Hope you get something out of our site and keep on posting. Winston

Comment is about Mark Gillies (poet profile)

Original item by Mark Gillies

I love this! so nostalgic and beautiful! such fine detail and strong imagery: the sights and smells are so clear. It transports the reader through your experience as you saw it and felt it. LOVELY! xxx

Comment is about From Kurashiki to Manchester (blog)

Original item by Belinda

HI Belinda! was lovely to meet you too, shame we didn't get to chat more in the cafe or pub afterwards due to dashing back to Chester. We will catch up next week! Thank you for commenting and Im glad you like it. I too agree with you. I would have liked to make the poem consistently abstract and will work on that. I will be sure to read your work and leave a comment. Take care. em xxx

Comment is about Belinda (poet profile)

Original item by Belinda

There is some good language here, and the flow/rythm is nice and easy to read.

Comment is about Peat's Silent Secret (Guy's - I'm a newbie, feel free to comment and let me know what you think) (blog)

Reminds me of my home town, everything is in the open, its a disgrace to solice.

Comment is about No Secret Place (blog)

Original item by Tom

i dont have audios but if you need some content feel free to record one of mine and put it up.

Comment is about For anyone who may be interested and I hope there is at least one ... (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

Really good theme, tension is powerful and clear, there is an air of uncertainty stamped on this one which makes an interesting narrative.

Comment is about Old Woman Waiting for a Bus (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

i hope there are people as nice as you when I'm this old person in the poem :)

Your admiration for these 'mature adults' is clear and fair play 2u

Comment is about Old Woman Waiting for a Bus (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I am violently in love with Andre Breton (!) and like to dabble in abit of free writing, take an idea and just go with it. I find it very cathartic.
Thanks for the comments.

Comment is about Picking up a broken mirror... (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I too like this a lot, for all the reasons given by Ray Miller. Plus the internal alliteration is superb. You don't seem to have any problem with being constantly 'different'.

Comment is about In the shadow of silence. (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

oh wytchy! would this poor humble wordsmith ever let you down? no way! as for the rocket science of pc work-forget it! I know as much about that as I do of writing decent poetry-but be warned Carol Ann Duffy-I,m on my way,see you when the world ends!hope having my pleasant presence felt didst verily suffice enough for starters--cheers Wytchers-Stefan.

Comment is about For anyone who may be interested and I hope there is at least one ... (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

Very original, and compelling. Much to absorb and unravel. It seems quite different from your 'usual' in choice of diction and format. Was the 'prose' approach to disguise its length?

Comment is about Picking up a broken mirror... (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

An excellent description of such an attack.

Comment is about White (blog)

I like the idea of the 'torrential rain' and 'eyes will be blinking so furiously'.

Comment is about No Secret Place (blog)

Original item by Tom

oh bloody hell! I,m feeling all uneccessary now,having read another good one by you Kath-off to the doctors!ha!-cheers Kath-Stef-x

Comment is about White (blog)

haha! long time no blog Dan? nice to read your stuff again-cheers-Stefan.

Comment is about my superstitions are eating me whole (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Thanks Pete and good spot; the cpastline is Mafia Island in Tanzania during my day job.

Comment is about Mark Gillies (poet profile)

Original item by Mark Gillies

Good morning kiddo,from an old duffer! lot of feeling for the suffering of others,in what am I right in saying refers to the Moors murders? Well composed and arranged.bigtime welcome,by the way-rock on Lucy girl! now back to bird scaring-Stef.

Comment is about Peat's Silent Secret (Guy's - I'm a newbie, feel free to comment and let me know what you think) (blog)

Such is the style I have come to love with sentiments that echo
from the heart : )

'Endure this challenge
Forging bonds in the black sea
The hardest of salt
Cannot touch your myriad faults
As imperfection waves its withered hand'

'So glad to discover you
So glad to endure
The world is about loving
After all.'

xxxxx

Comment is about ankle chain (blog)

Nothing less than brilliant Pete.C.A.Duffy-eat your heart out!-Best regards-Stef.

Comment is about making graves to fall in (blog)

Hiya John, yes, that is my email below. Get in touch and we'll work something out.

Comment is about John Turner (poet profile)

Original item by John Turner

Welcome aboard, I like the 'memories / room ' metaphor especially 'memories are a room we dress together' the duality of this is great dress/decorate dress/clothes. Also the idea of a room as a stage to live out stages of life, the poem touches on some of my favourite emotions.

p.s is that the African coastline on your pic.>? Peter.

Comment is about Mark Gillies (poet profile)

Original item by Mark Gillies

This is very good.
The final couplet is excellent. I think perhaps a colon after 'start' might be better, but that's just a very minor point.

Comment is about First Sonnet (blog)

Good stuff Kathryn and I read this twice, the first as it is and the 2nd losing some of the linking words.(a slightly more tightened version).

I agree with the other comments and they're well deserved, your writing does connect and I really respect that.

The first stanza reeled me in and for the most part its consistent with images, tone, structure and conclusion. the longer words tripped up the flow a little I think and let me explain more what I mean by losing the linking words:

Line 7 you don't need roll and forward, roll does that anyway.
Line 8 I would be decisive and lose almost.
Line 11 you lose 'is' and the'
Line 16 you could lose 'as'

I'm always more critical to the poems I like and mean it as a compliment.

Comment is about (blog)

You capture the moments and moods very well.
This is delightful.

Wonderful!

Augusta xx

Comment is about For When the Wind Sighs + Audio (blog)

Original item by Max Wallis

A Pussy Singing... whatever next...

lovely voice too!

Augusta xx

Comment is about for my gem (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Blown away!absolute class Kath-Stef-X

Comment is about (blog)

thank you for the kind comment , i like yo mum it is a mile away from your first offering which shows the depth of your work, nice one

Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)

Original item by Alison Smiles

This is beautiful Kathryn - seductive and melancholic even though the last stanza is full of promise (/reward). i really enjoyed.

Comment is about (blog)

great bits in this piece, suede tongue and shadows stain the face my favourites.. enjoyed this1

Comment is about In the shadow of silence. (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

have you seen the utube vid of Simon's cat xxx

Comment is about She comes to me (blog)

Thanks Tom, I never thought of Claret and Blue as a psalm, but now you mention it...Spurs haven't broken into the top 4, though, that place will go with the money.I do see the attraction in a relegation battle, that's one of the ideas in the poem, promotion battles must be even better. Who do you support?

Comment is about Tom Harding (poet profile)

Original item by Tom Harding

Thank you for commenting on the rap mickey take - it felt a brave move and I thought oh my word was that something people look down their noses at initially. Then oh hang them, I enjoyed doing it! So thank you.

Comment is about Write Out Loud Outstanding Poem For March (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I enjoyed this Alison. It communicates the raw, optimistic, in-your-face, 'world is my oyster' energy of teenagers. Mine are way past this stage but it brings it all back

Comment is about Yo Mum (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

that the days are long and night's a bitch?
good poem x

Comment is about As The Moon Prevails. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

dead on that...truth is always near...deadly

Comment is about I Wanted to be a War Photographer. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

I think it's very cruel to draw everybody's attention to Paul's 'accident' with the UFO .... you can see by his pained expression that he's desperately upset by it all ... the knowledge that he wiped out all those tiny alien lives is very hard for him to live with y'know!
Cx

Comment is about Paul Blackburn, UFO killer (blog)

this one i like for a few reasons. I have pink red purple and blue lillies tattoed on my arm.this should be a good thing but Im not sure id want to kiss a wrinkly boy from the pond. We all have murky depths...some people want to stare at the slime and algae in hope that life might come of it as if from the primieval swamp.

Comment is about my botanist (blog)

I once had a cat that woke me in the morning by biting my nose with increasing hardness till I finally got up! Winston

Comment is about She comes to me (blog)

Hi There Bohdan. Great to hear what you are up to. Post up some of your work and we will read/comment. Hope you enjoy WOL. Winston

Comment is about Bohdan Piasecki (poet profile)

Original item by Bohdan Piasecki

Find your labyrinth of chosen words a fulfilling read.Impulsive expressions,and strong values.Inspirational.

Comment is about Superficial burns. (blog)

Hi Ann - thank you for commenting on 'What's In Store' - much appreciated :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

You sound such a nice person! xx

Comment is about What's In Store (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

i love the minutiae of this. it's the detail of each scenario that makes the impact. for example 'Serve sausages and water
In crystal dishes'

Comment is about Poverty Is (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

a wonderful psalm for upper middle table mediocrity. how true is this 'Who can celebrate coming seventh or eighth?'
i feel for villa, everton etc. don't you wish sometimes you were in a relegation fight just to make the season memorable? mind you if spurs can break into the top four i guess anyone can.

Comment is about Claret and Blue (blog)

Many thanks for the comments. this poem took awhile to brew. i had a lot of lines floating round- the twists of tissue line was one of those. it fit a certain need but i accept it's perhaps a stretch of the metaphor too far. thanks for all the encouragement.

Comment is about To A Teacher (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Thanks again Andy :-)

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Winston,

Thanks again for reading and commenting, glad i managed to surprise you lol x

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes