Quite beautiful Richard, wish I'd have written it!
Jeff

Comment is about My Eulogy (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hello, Antonio

Quite different write what your style is. I have read this one

"The Mekong delta region encompasses a large portion of south eastern Vietnam of 39,000 km²"

There is also German heavy metal musical group, Mekong Delta (band).

Interesting twist in your poem...:)

Enjoyed reading!
Zuzanna

Comment is about I've never been to Mekong Delta (blog)

Brilliant Richard, the title says it all, really enjoyed that, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Brilliant (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Great stuff Carol, about where i am in my life!!! Ha, Jeff

Comment is about Crossroads (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Interesting poem. I could picture the moon watching the sun stretch and yawn across the sky, casting its sunset colors over the horizon, and then night falls. And it's the moon's shift to shine and light up the sky. :)

Comment is about It's Your Shift (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

An absoluteuly cracking review, Darren. Nourishment for the soul of Write Out Loud. Your sardonic asides slip down as smoothly as a sardine sarnie, yet do so with affection, erudition without affectation.
Your phonetic references, and your phone's tic reference, were consonant with a man of such erudition. Nice one.

Comment is about Drab Curtains & Mustard Walls by Darren Thomas (article)

Thanks for your comment, I enjoyed your poems - I once rather sadly dated someone with a sierra cosworth but it didn't end up the same way, as he had a thing about going sideways around round-a-bouts....

Comment is about ian leslie (poet profile)

Original item by ian leslie

nice one!

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Thanks for a great night of poetry. Brilliant photo's!

Comment is about Len Rosso at Wirral Words, The Scouse House, Birkenhead April 2008 (photo)

Excellent Daniel, my sentiments entirely!!

Cheers Jeffarama, Punk's not Dead!

Comment is about The anarchist in all of us (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Thank you for your visit.

Although I am curious as to why you think I should rhyme more.

David

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

I am tempted to just ask why?

Sometimes I use rhyme, sometimes not - it all depends on the Muse.

Comment is about David Agnew (poet profile)

Original item by David Agnew

thankyou so much! excactly the kind of feedback i needed- really useful and no bullshit! look out for the update and tell me if its improved any... hope i can be so useful in return one day soon xx

Comment is about the butcher's wife (blog)

Hi Alvin
Welcome to Write Out Loud - why not put your event on the gig guide and if you send me some copy and a photo/logo to paul@writeoutloud.net I'll make it a news item

Comment is about Alvin Culzac (poet profile)

Original item by Alvin Culzac

I've read it, re-read it and re - re- read it and, like Jeff, I'm not too sure what it is that you're trying to say? I like the subtle rhyming schemes, or the ones that I detected, but the confusion of trying to work out what the 'message' is, did jarr my thinking about the poem's form or metre.
Is the title a clue or a statement? Sometimes, as I'm sure you're aware, the reader needs a few more clues as to what may be going on, just enough for them to fill in the outline that you provide with your technique, imagery, rhyming schemes etc. You use some phrases that I particularly enjoy, like - 'Monday-pressed trousers'. It's well worth tweaking Sally, just enough so that the subject comes into focus and perhaps it could include a poetic turn too? I love a good turn! Don't forget though that there is nothing more subjective than poetry. One man's poison is another man's meat...

Comment is about the butcher's wife (blog)

Hi Richard, excellent, really identified with a lot of your observations. Having had some times on a downer, you've hit the right spot here, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Manic Depressive (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hi Sally, is this someone you know!?! I'm not 100% sure with what you're trying to say, but its got potential, maybe need to make the message you want to put across bolder. Oh well look forward to final version, any help? Jeff x

Comment is about the butcher's wife (blog)

Glad you managed the return after the excesses!

Comment is about In York again (blog)

I'm not really a Manic Depressive...But the world is :-)

Comment is about Manic Depressive (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

humorous, honest but with a point ro make, loved it. I write alot on trains (I'm presuming you wrote this on a train!) keep up the voyeurism :-)

Comment is about Poem from a train (pathetic am I) parts 1 & 2 (blog)

HI Peter,
Glad you enjoyed it.Metrics are bad I think, they put you up against a national average, everything is measured and watched.They dont take into account bad machinery, computer errors, faulty equip. People at corp that are not entering their info into the system.Bad customers, they are many a problem. I see people that cant swip a CC, or write a check. Or they forget an iteam, and they say "Oh sorry waite please" mean while the clock is ticking on the poor girl, and others are getting mad.Customers yell at and put down the girls, as if they control prices, or the bank that declined their CC or check, they act like its that girls fault.The coupon is expired, the sale is over, the PC wont take it, and its her fault.But the PC is programed by another person. So all be nice, this girl has more then likely had a few bad days in a row. take care Peter

Comment is about I only came to get a pint of milk (blog)

HI Peter,
Yes I always feel the poems, that I write. I feel many that I read, that are the works of others.Most of my love and lost and pain poems I feel so intensly, that to re-read them, hurts, even if its been years.

Now lets see, Im just home from the hospital, so I hope Im reading this and typeing ok.
Many times I feel the poems not finnished, esp if its short, for some reason in my head its to be long, or its not good, or not enough has been said. yet it has all been said.It may be some perfectionistic type personality type.

Comment is about my howling hollow (blog)

Hey Clarissa! Great technical explanation- a poem in itself!

'bad marks on metrics' wow that's a poem title!

Comment is about I only came to get a pint of milk (blog)

Hello, Tomas

Thank you for the latest comments.
It happened that I was living in both systems. In addition, I see not much difference except maybe the working class divided more in a Capitalism versa Communism. Here we do have the Freedom of speech and have your own things like home., car, place to live but the prices you pay having all those goods are tremendous. It is good for those who have good paying jobs. Those who have less paying jobs, then these people live like in a Communism system. I tell you that Communism had good sites too. Like the Education for all was mandatory. Here it is slightly different. If you have money then you do not need to have University to be in Politics. In Communism system one had to be highly educated to be an Economist- this is just an example...Some people left the country and still do, I mean the Communist. Both sites have good trades and as not so good. I need to close here as my comment can go forever, Will come back to read your latest poem...Thank you.

Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

thank you Darren and Clarissa.
Darren I think your work has influenced me in, especially with the 'cardboard spaceships' and that kind of imagary.

I had been stuck in a place for a while, and stubborn me not reading enough needed to just (if just for a while) open and drift.

I always feel the poems partially written
do you find that with your work?
Clarissa / Darren

Comment is about my howling hollow (blog)

A poem to show the other side of the Communist idea!!!

Comment is about Verses on Economics (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

"Instant Soup" is a great little poem.

Comment is about Phil Golding (poet profile)

Original item by Phil Golding

i just wish I'd been there wiv all me chums!

Comment is about Len Rosso at Wirral Words, The Scouse House, Birkenhead April 2008 (photo)

I like the word play and especially 'Gord's army' it sounds cockney, a good poem to perform. Its short for a political poem, so you could say link it up with a couple more and perform them in a row, would be good!

Comment is about Gord's Army (blog)

Hello, Peter

Very creative and imaginative write! Peter you have a wonderful mind.
The metamorphosis, twist, and ties as one after all are great!

FABULOUS WRITE!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Robbie and the White goods (blog)

Dear Peter,
I can answer these questions, as I run the front end.The PC the cashier is on, promps her/him to ask the questions. The bar codes are a mess, if the gun/scanner is off and humidity can do it, storms can do it, old PC crap can do it, dirt can do it, it will slow the machines down.The bar code can be wrong, if a sale is on, and no one from corp updated system, well its going to slow it down.If the bar code has been marred/slashed/messed up in any way its a mess.People will take bar codes from one product and put it on another, and if the girl has a scale then it stops.As the bar code tells weight.If the sales girl does not follow ever prompt , she will get bad marks on METRICS, its part of the PC and cameras that watches all she does.Bad marks on metrics means no job at some point. So be nice to the poor girls behind the counter, they hate the job. But it pays part of her bills. SMILE!! Nice poem man!!!!

Comment is about I only came to get a pint of milk (blog)

HI Peter,

Interesting poem,Not sure what else to say, its riviting.I did not know they made one that could do all that stuff.But no matter, I would not want one.Great stuff. Going in for second surgery in the AM, Im a little strange at this time. take care

Comment is about Robbie and the White goods (blog)

BTW- Forgot to add that there are not many differences between the Capitalism and the Communism. It is Money and Power TALK!

Cheers!

Comment is about The Workers of the World (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

love your poetry Gaia;
there's something magical about it.

alan holdsworth

Comment is about Gaia Holmes (poet profile)

Original item by Gaia Holmes

Hi Tomas - Great take on a Communism!!
One has to live there to experience that...Have YOU.
What you have written based on truth.

Thanks for taking me back the memory lane.

Regards,
Zuzanna

Comment is about The Workers of the World (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Richard,

This poem is very beautiful!
Well expressed and uplifting to those who go different life stages being heart broken.

"Take your time but don’t forget about love
Those who don’t love, probably aren’t loved"

BEAUTIFUL JOB!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Cheer Up Broken Heart (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hello, Antonio

The poem is quite mysterious to me. The first few lines are almost close to my home with the Gordon or Gordy’s hockey player, but then cannot picture Mr. Brown in this, so it has greater mystery there. Then when the Election you wrote about at the end it is almost like the USA nowadays -Thought provoking write!

GREAT POEM!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Gord's Army (blog)

i really enjoyed 'new location'.

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Sorry - also wanted to share a 'hurley' poem which no-one over here (in Australia) understands... it's on my site too.

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Thanks for your comments on my site.
I've just posted a reply on there for you...
Frances

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Youve got a good grasp of language... you should try rhyme a bit more...

Comment is about David Agnew (poet profile)

Original item by David Agnew

I love your poetry, but may I suggest varying the rhyming word ending?

Comment is about Dr T. Ashok Chakravarthy, Litt.D (poet profile)

Original item by Dr T. Ashok Chakravarthy, Litt.D

I have just lkearned his bar went bust, and he is sueing his business partner. Im hoping all works out for Vince Kearney.

Comment is about The Turn of Luck - An Irish Good Luck Story (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Thanks for coming it was brilliant to see you and the contributions from the Wolers were fantastic as ever.

Comment is about Earth to Earth (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

thanks for you comment! keep your poems coming Zuzanna!

take care

Comment is about Do you mind if I don't watch you die? (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

All the good photographs are by Pete Crompton! The rest by me.

Comment is about Len Rosso at Wirral Words, The Scouse House, Birkenhead April 2008 (photo)

Brilliant review Dave.
I nearly made it to this show, just finished work too late.

Lugosi, oh god, I melt then turn into jelly and an emotional wreck the second she speaks.

hypnotic and seductive
also something masterful, I think its the submissive thing ..........I'm off to worship the pvc clad legs of an oak table

be right back.

Comment is about Dropping the Mask by Dave Morgan (article)

Hi Daniel - i read your stuff and enjoy it.

Comment is about All words become me (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Good - I like this one too. Is it me or is Mr Crompton sailing through his mellow period? Great observations Pete, and nice to see a shift in style.

Comment is about my howling hollow (blog)

That's it my boy - give me death. Give me those subtle lines that stroke the hairs on our down of mortality. This is good. This is Peter Crompton doing wheelies on his poetic bicycle, waving at the crowds of fans who gathered to see him jump. They stand open mouthed as his imagery flies through the sky.
Welcome back Mr Crompton. I love this piece. It digs under the reality of funerals. I always think that people who grieve at funerals are usually grieving for themselves and the thought of having to sail through the murky waters of consequence. Nice to see and hear your stuff again.
Congratulations on your placing in the slam!

Comment is about missing (blog)