I love the thought of a directorial debut for life and love. Scripted caution and scenes prepared in advance. Just beware of actors who like to go off script and ad lib. đ
Thought provoking Manish, well done.
Comment is about Debut (blog)
Original item by Manish
Thanks a lot, HĂŠlène. Just trying new ways and I'm glad that it's working out for me.đ
Thanks for all the likes as well, they're very much appreciated.
Comment is about Debut (blog)
Original item by Manish
The fragility of love and the human experience comes full circle in a few lines finely crafted.
Excellent work Martin.
Comment is about Two into one won't go (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Matthew, welcome to WOL. I have been with this site since 2017 and find it a tremendous resource for submitting one's poetry and receiving constructive criticism. I found your two samples very interesting. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Keith
Comment is about Matthew P. Nicholson (poet profile)
Original item by Matthew P. Nicholson
Romantic drama in poetic form as its very best. Each line an invitation to read on and on. The passion and other emotions are entangled in a way not often portrayed, as to do so would unveil the inner pain felt by such abandonment. 'As emotions slam one into another', this line defines emotions so difficult to describe, but you Sir have accomplished this. Martin I salute you for this masterpiece.
Thank you indeed for such a poem,
Keith
Comment is about Two into one won't go (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Thank you, very kind of you to comment
Comment is about Greater than Alexander (blog)
Original item by JD Russell
Thank you to all who 'liked' and made comments on this poem.
Thank you for your interest,
Keith
Comment is about An Obscure World (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thank you to all who expressed 'likes' and commented on this poem. I appreciate your interest.
Thanks,
Keith
Comment is about A Tropical Downpour (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thank you for your kind words Martin and Graham.
Comment is about Passion Poem (blog)
Original item by Patricia Ziel
I like the interplay between the stanzas beginning with unlike her suburban home and the other lines. Nice one
Comment is about Greater than Alexander (blog)
Original item by JD Russell
Beautiful poem in which I can feel the intended passion
Comment is about Passion Poem (blog)
Original item by Patricia Ziel
Very clever . I love it
Comment is about Mouthful of Words Poem after Brian Moses (blog)
Original item by Kay Medway
Love the rhythm and pace of this as well as the words. Nice one
Comment is about FINISHED ink pad began in July last year! Here's final thing today. (blog)
Original item by Aaron Murdoch
Good to remember the sacrifices made, particularly by those first ashore, in these very troubled times, MC.
Comment is about BEACH - June 6, 1944 (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
A truly original, important poem, David. It made me stop and think.
Comment is about Literary Lemmings (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
I love the pace and optimism of this poem, Aisha.
Comment is about Diversity (blog)
Original item by Aisha Suleman
Here is my effort, entitled 'Ashes'.
ASHES
Though many fail and most do not succeed,
All humans crave ambitions they will tend,
And those who bag the cash through stealth and greed
Will finish up as ashes in the end.
We may bring up the rear as also-rans,
While others imbibe chemicals to win,
But we wonât risk suspensions or life bans,
As they digest their tainted meal of sin.
Perhaps it is a part of natureâs law
That some will strive to rise above the crowd,
With practices close to the edge and raw,
Which sometimes travel past what is allowed.
Yet we know such success will fade to guilt,
As milk begins to boil and tears are spilt.
Comment is about Why is the sonnet still popular? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
A really fine poem, RA, with a John Betjeman flavour about it. You have mastered the sonnet form with this one!
Comment is about Go Live Day (blog)
Original item by R A Porter
Thanks guys. And Rose - you made me blush! đ
Comment is about The Game (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
There are some lovely words in this piece Patricia, the final two lines particularly. Good work!
G
Comment is about Passion Poem (blog)
Original item by Patricia Ziel
It was a burden carried for us, the following generations who have not experienced anything like that.
So sweet, it's through the memories and your kind retelling that your granddad will live on.
Comment is about Disembarkation Day memories (blog)
Original item by Bethany Sallis
Fun version in an election year.
BUT....
does anyone actually know if Starmer has any commitment to
anything except his desire for occupancy of Number 10?
Comment is about 'When the vote comes in'! Geordie poet adds poll twist to Northumberland folk song (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I really enjoyed this. The setting, the language... highly evocative writing.
Comment is about Tents in the Desert (blog)
Original item by M Lane
I caught the tail end of this lack of colour in the late fifties and the early sixties. I think you have painted an excellent picture that I can well remember . Even the taxi cabs were pretty well all black except for the odd rogue one which was white. I also remember my father coming home from work with his heavy beige raincoat sodden and dripping.
Thanks for this Keith
Comment is about An Obscure World (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thanks Rose. How are you. Hope you are keeping well and keeping your quill busy.
M
Comment is about The woman of her dreams (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Today's Post office has taken one on its collective hooter,
With management dependent on the defective computer!
Comment is about Go Live Day (blog)
Original item by R A Porter
Post-WW2 Britain reflected the parlous financial state of the
country, which had basically bankrupted itself in the pursuit of
a war that obtained wider freedom, but was faced with having
to repay money borrowed from friends who would have gone
under had Nazi Germany and its Japanese allies prevailed.
Irony in the form of a long-term debt only recently paid off.
I have my own memories of ration books and living frugally for
years after that war ended. But it was what we, the emerging
generation of youth, knew and accepted as we got busy
making the country a better brighter place, inspired by the example of those who had fought and died for us.
Comment is about An Obscure World (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
An enjoyable "nod" to the simple often unspoken "servants" of
our lives.
Comment is about Slipperstale (blog)
Original item by Sunshine
It is a great asset of modern technology that we are able to
share the recollections of some of those who lived and fought
through momentous days in our island story Living history
indeed...with the extraordinary bonus that some remain in advanced old age to remind us as we approach the 80th
anniversary of the greatest event in replacing tyranny with hard
won freedom in our history. My own father who died when I
was barely five, served in the trenches of WW1 as a teenager
and was barely 20 and an officer when that "War to end all wars" ended. He was in uniform again for WW2 and fell victim to TB, in 1949, leaving a widow and six children. Who said life was fair? It has never been so and it is up to every one of us to
pause and acknowledge those who endured and prevailed... and do our own bit in their memory..
Comment is about Disembarkation Day memories (blog)
Original item by Bethany Sallis
Thank you, Holden, Helene, Manish, Rose, Ciaran.
Bethany
Comment is about Unbreakable (blog)
Original item by Bethany Sallis
In a dozy state while waking up
I curse and turn the air blue
Finding only the one to put on
My dog watching smiles while gripping tight
Stepping back as I grab it quick!đ
Comment is about Slipperstale (blog)
Original item by Sunshine
These latest poems are a different style than earlier ones you posted. (I like both styles.) Shorter sentences that pack an emotional punch.
"But wisdom is
Comprehended and
Implemented only
With time and
Refined age."
Awesome writing, Manish!
Comment is about Debut (blog)
Original item by Manish
Romantic and thus very Shakespearean, Russell. Well done!
Comment is about Why is the sonnet still popular? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
@bethanysallis @grahamsherwood @davidrlmoore @rosegcasserley - thank you all for the very kind comments. This was written as a mask poem, from the perspective of a white wall I climbed most days as a young boy. In the original I had an extra verse but sometimes less is more. đ
Means a lot that you like it.
Comment is about AN BALLA BĂN (blog)
Original item by CiaranPCunningham
Thanks for updated likes.
I have had a few responses to this from former collegues and friends.
As it can be taken to refer to Incarceration, Warfare and Domestic Violence (not exclusively) the responses have been varied. Those three subjects are connected by a fine thread which in some cases connect seperate life events in individual lives . Sadly many lives are tarnished by all three of these objectionable states, each one somehow influencing the other.
A friend reminded me that 28-29 May is the anniversary of The Battle of Goose Green, a fact I had forgotten at the time of writing this although one that is pogniant in my recall now. I joined the army in 1983 and my early years brought me into contact with many who had fought at Goose Green.
I remember hearing horror stories of trench clearing and night fighting, many of the story-tellers fell into despair in the later years of their lives...marriages disintigrating into chaos and damage some of them finding themselves outcasts and inmates. Many also thrived and survived, the nature of survival seemingly random but surely not.
This poem was not specifically written with these circumstances in mind but some of the responses it has received have highlighted their sad reality.
Thank you if you have read.
David
Comment is about Hiatus (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Thank you, Greg. Yes, what is happening in Ukraine and Gaza is truly unspeakable, as were the actions of Hamas on 7 October. I sometimes wonder why we dignify this cowardly violence with the word 'war'. 'State-sponsored murder' seems closer to the mark.
Thanks once again for your support.
Comment is about Magnet (Kharkiv, 25 May 2024) (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Rose Casserley
Wed 29th May 2024 08:02
Keep that quill busy dude!
Rose đ
Comment is about The woman of her dreams (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Rose Casserley
Wed 29th May 2024 07:54
Unbelievably stunning CPC!
Rose đ
Comment is about AN BALLA BĂN (blog)
Original item by CiaranPCunningham
To love a woman,
Love's sweetened dance. Youâll charm the other's sway.
Securely bonded to an outstretched hand,
Rhythmic gyrations as the music plays
Flawlessly footed beat, timed to the band
Hold on to her dreams, they're now your concern,
Safeguard delicate wings so she may fly,
Joyousness, yes, though often tears may burn,
Stand close by her side. Let love never die.
Listen frequently with an open mind,
Seek to understand her darkness and fears.
Together, as you journey, you may find
In your love's embrace, all doubts disappear.
As in days of yore, be her armoured knight,
Dedicate love, screen wrong, embody right
Comment is about Why is the sonnet still popular? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thank you - Iâm happy you think I captured something. Sonnets are tricky, but they do keep you concise & Post Offices always had their own rhythm, so maybe putting the two together wasnât so daft after all (!)
Comment is about Go Live Day (blog)
Original item by R A Porter
Cheers, Dave! Over the years I've enjoyed doing an occasional sonnet. Finding the rhymes can take you in a different direction to where you thought you were going, and there's something enjoyable about that ... that it's somehow taken out of your hands
Comment is about Moving like Jagger (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Nice work, and certainly topical, RA. I particularly like 'orison' and 'Horizon'.
Comment is about Why is the sonnet still popular? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
This is indeed a very accomplished piece Ciaran, weâre lucky to have you. I was going to pick out some favourite words but it would be futile thereâs too many.
G
Comment is about AN BALLA BĂN (blog)
Original item by CiaranPCunningham
Ciaran, I could read this beautiful poem, over and over again and enjoy it each time, as if it was the first time.
Boy! Do you know your stuff and I'm very glad, that you do.
Thank you very much.
Bethany
P.S. What does the title mean?
Comment is about AN BALLA BĂN (blog)
Original item by CiaranPCunningham
Thank you, Hugh, Stephen, Aisha, Holden, Manish, Auracle, Rose.
{ just a try at something a little different }
Bethany
Comment is about Off beat! (blog)
Original item by Bethany Sallis
Great stuff RAP, perfectly describes what life was like at the sharp end. Good rhyming, fitted well with the story.
Comment is about Go Live Day (blog)
Original item by R A Porter
Manish Singh Rajput
Thu 30th May 2024 15:19
Having worked on the farmland, I can understand the excitement and pain involved in this poem. Well written.
Thank you.
Comment is about An Arid land (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries