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Stephen Atkinson

Wed 16th Sep 2020 12:20

Great, atmospheric work

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julie callaghan

Wed 16th Sep 2020 12:18

Hope you are doing well. If this poem is about yourself, just wanted to let you know that my mum had major surgery on her nose and face a couple of years ago and her recovery was amazing to say the least. Her scars healed very well and she did not need any further treatment. I hope this brings you some comfort.

Comment is about The Man We Used To Know (blog)

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Tom

Wed 16th Sep 2020 11:04

Thank you Victoria and Shifa. I'm so pleased you stopped by to read this one. I've had a few of the lines from this buzzing around in my head for the last few weeks and it felt really good to finally get them down on paper.

Also, thank you so much to Neressa, Emer and Jordyn for reading and the 'likes'. ?

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Abdul Ahmad

Wed 16th Sep 2020 10:32

Shifa many thanks for your recent visit and the encouraging remarks left. The like is much appreciated.

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 16th Sep 2020 10:14

Thanks Keith, that's high praise indeed. I don't know what to say, except I'm really pleased it connected with you and that I'm genuinely humbled by your kind comment. It's really gratifying to know that what I was trying to say came across. ❤

J. x

Comment is about Dry Your Eyes (blog)

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Nigel Astell

Wed 16th Sep 2020 10:04

A train of thought
always travels unmasked
because it can.

Comment is about Underground Part 16 to 21 (blog)

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Nigel Astell

Wed 16th Sep 2020 09:56

Slowly disgusted with lies,deceits,shameful stories - - -
this was one bad ghost.

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Ray Miller

Wed 16th Sep 2020 09:15

Good poem, Greg. Malvern is where I live. I read somewhere recently that at 338 yards high the Worcestershire Beacon just about qualifies as a mountain. It seems unlikely, though.

Comment is about Climbing the Malverns (blog)

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Ray Miller

Wed 16th Sep 2020 09:09

Thanks both. A cocktail sausage should be hurled hamfistedly, of course.

Comment is about Fixated Threats (blog)

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Usama Niazi

Wed 16th Sep 2020 07:54

Guys just sharing, I've found this interesting! Check it out! http://twolinespoetry.com/

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Shehariah

Wed 16th Sep 2020 04:51

Thank you for the like, Shifa! ☺️

Comment is about Tension (blog)

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Shifa Maqba

Wed 16th Sep 2020 04:30

Thank you, Kevin and D.W. Hamilton for your beautiful comments!
And thank you, Vautaw, for leaving a generous rose!

Comment is about Bubble Of Oblivion (blog)

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Shifa Maqba

Wed 16th Sep 2020 04:28

Fantastic piece! Poignant and honest.

Comment is about Marriage (blog)

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Shifa Maqba

Wed 16th Sep 2020 04:24

One of those poems that really makes you pause and reflect. Warrants multiple re-reads, because it's just that great. Amazing!

Comment is about A Wobbly Leg (blog)

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Shifa Maqba

Wed 16th Sep 2020 04:21

there's so much beauty in this concise poem. very well written!

Comment is about Fall from grace (blog)

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Wed 16th Sep 2020 03:02

You know what you want and you’re writing it down, that’s the hoist out of the pit of despair. Keep hoisting. We’ll keep cheering! ?

Comment is about Soy Sauce Flavor (blog)

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Jordyn Elizabeth

Wed 16th Sep 2020 02:45

This is a beautiful piece! I absolutely loved reading. Well done.

-J

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 16th Sep 2020 00:10

Comments appreciated - thank you.
Thanks also to those taking the trouble to click on "like".
Brian - I fully intend to match my late mother who reached 4 score
and ten before she passed, encouraged by the fact that the number
you quoted had its origins in the bible and evolution alone has
overtaken that life-time limitation. ?

Comment is about MISS ME BUT LET ME GO (blog)

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Maria Elena

Tue 15th Sep 2020 22:58

well... it's definitely interesting.
Although, I'd much prefer to be a friend

Comment is about Who is the bully? (blog)

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Tue 15th Sep 2020 22:22

Poor old Russell
Not quite a cabbage
More a couch potato
Hardly moves a muscle

Comment is about ENDING UP A VEGETABLE (blog)

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julie callaghan

Tue 15th Sep 2020 20:39

Keeping with the childrens song theme ?

Comment is about Hands, Face, Space (blog)

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raypool

Tue 15th Sep 2020 19:25

The unmistakeable long look back, the sweet nostalgia of true experience and an almost Betjemanesque love for detail make this a real goodie Greg in your delightful loping style.

Ray

Comment is about Climbing the Malverns (blog)

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d.knape

Tue 15th Sep 2020 17:52

At this stage
our talents fade-
what's left is me
and my old age.
?

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d.knape

Tue 15th Sep 2020 17:50

thanks for your comment
on my poem.
one leads to another
there is no end to them.?

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Stephen Gospage

Tue 15th Sep 2020 16:17

A beautiful poem. Thank you.

Comment is about MISS ME BUT LET ME GO (blog)

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keith jeffries

Tue 15th Sep 2020 16:13

M,C.,

I am drawn to these lines as they speak from the soul of someone not afraid of death, not wanting to be forgotten but resigned to a fate which awaits us all. A poem to treasure as we continue along life's road.

Thank you for this
Keith

Comment is about MISS ME BUT LET ME GO (blog)

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keith jeffries

Tue 15th Sep 2020 16:08

Jason,

You have excelled yourself with this poem as it immediately captures the reader and in such a way that the reader can relate to the emotions of which you so eloquently write.

Thank you for this
Keith

Comment is about Dry Your Eyes (blog)

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keith jeffries

Tue 15th Sep 2020 16:04

John,

A philosophical poem rich in imagery and very appropriate for a day in which we languish, drinking chilled Pinot Grigio. The opening lines are an excellent introduction for what follows. Another glass calls.

Thank you for this

Keith

Comment is about A collection of aphorisms (blog)

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Tue 15th Sep 2020 15:29

You've had your three score years and ten, who can ask for more?

My wife and her sister commemorate their parents' birthdays, wedding anniverary, dates of passing etc. Each one a full blown affair. They've been dead about 5 years. They can't let go.

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trevor homer

Tue 15th Sep 2020 14:52

Struck a chord there mate [pardon the pun]. Poetry should be thought provoking, and this does just that. The line up featuring Jeremy Spencer [?] was brilliant.

Comment is about Climbing the Malverns (blog)

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John Marks

Tue 15th Sep 2020 14:38

Thank you penguin.

You will have memories
Because of what we did back then
When we were new at this,

Yes, we did many things, then - all
Beautiful...

Sappho, Come Close

Comment is about A collection of aphorisms (blog)

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John Marks

Tue 15th Sep 2020 14:30

Thank you penguin.

Comment is about Dust motes for Dante Alighieri 1265 - 1321 (blog)

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 15th Sep 2020 14:30

He stood up to be counted and It is just so very sad that someone acting on behalf
of us all should lose his life in such cruel avoidable circumstances.

Comment is about For PC Harper (blog)

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 15th Sep 2020 14:25

Sage and age. A formidable combination!

Comment is about Act Your Age (blog)

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John Marks

Tue 15th Sep 2020 13:54

A tour de force! How do you hurl a cocktail sausage? Slowly? Piggily?

Comment is about Fixated Threats (blog)

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keith jeffries

Tue 15th Sep 2020 11:34

Mike,

Good words which need to be said.
I salute this officer.

Keith

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keith jeffries

Tue 15th Sep 2020 11:32

Emeka,

This poem is quite amazing in many respects. Beautifully descriptive also. Your repertoire grows and matures with each poem.

Well done
Keith

Comment is about "Dry Season" (blog)

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Greg Freeman

Tue 15th Sep 2020 11:07

Epic, Ray! Masterful rhyming as always. Down in Chertsey, eh? Not far from us.

Comment is about Fixated Threats (blog)

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Flavia Gordon

Tue 15th Sep 2020 10:48

Hello Penguin,
Thank you so much for your constructive feedback. I agree and have made the changes.
I appreciate the like and welcome any and all feedback you may have in future.xx

Comment is about Palm to Palm, Skin to Skin (blog)

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Ray Miller

Tue 15th Sep 2020 10:00

I feel like you could end at "I do not dare to think of it." and have a good poem. What followed felt like a collection of aphorisms.

Comment is about Dust motes for Dante Alighieri 1265 - 1321 (blog)

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Emer Ni Chorra

Tue 15th Sep 2020 09:59

Beautiful writing.

Comment is about She Tends My Wounds (blog)

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Ray Miller

Tue 15th Sep 2020 09:56

Nice final line.

reveals wants I have forgotten and was dormant - I think desires would be better than wants, you've "want" in the following line. Also, "were dormant" is more correct.

Comment is about Palm to Palm, Skin to Skin (blog)

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Ray Miller

Tue 15th Sep 2020 09:51

I like the 3rd line. It just feels like the start of a poem, these 4 lines. I'd love to see the rest.

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Tue 15th Sep 2020 07:13

Tom, I hope you are right. But look how easily power-mad leaders get themselves elected and look at how Trump has fostered an anti-Mexican feeling.

Comment is about Die Wahrheit macht frei ('The truth sets you free') (blog)

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 15th Sep 2020 05:08

I am all for writing your truth. Don’t hold back on my account. I have published three anthologies for CSAS. It is indeed very cathartic to release toxic thoughts. You never know where your healing journey will take you! Wishing you much light and love. ❤️

Comment is about Duality at Play (inner monologue of a childhood sexual abuse survivor (blog)

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Flavia Gordon

Tue 15th Sep 2020 02:01

Thank you Vautaw!
I am sorry that being a CSAS is one of the things we have in common. I appreciate your encouragement and hope that nothing I have written so far is triggering for you.

I must confess and I am quite red in the face as a result, that it hadn't crossed my mind about who my audience might be and how my words might affect...

Selfishly I was seeking my own catharsis. I will be more mindful of what I add from here on out....maybe not be so blunt in my expressions??

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Dan Holtan

Tue 15th Sep 2020 00:03

Not really complaining but I've just scrolled down past several million other comments or reviews of your work. If you are able to answer, you are a genius. To write is a gift.
To engage takes work.

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Tom

Mon 14th Sep 2020 23:27

I can perhaps understand what you’re saying in a historical context. However, to put it politely, do you not think the idea of a collective national psyche in countries such as the UK and Germany is a little outdated these days? In light of progressive moral attitudes, access to information and multiculturalism... these tasty new ingredients in our culture’s soup will hopefully dilute some of the more carcinogenic ones. There is a lot of hope, if you choose to see it.

As for your poem John, it’s short and to the point. My own visit there was filled with bricks to the head. From kids taking selfies in buildings filled with shaved hair and prosthetics, to the oppressive eeriness of the furnaces. It was unremittingly brutal, depressing, eye opening and necessary. I’ll never go back, but I value having gone. Absolutely, worth remembering in poems.

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Mon 14th Sep 2020 23:12

Thank you Tom for sharing your beautiful poetry! I feel the same way about the ocean. There is something magical about the sea. ❤️

Comment is about Marriage (blog)

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Mon 14th Sep 2020 23:04

Love that last stanza Flavia. As a CSAS, I can attest, it’s true. Write on and be healed! ?

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