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raypool

Wed 30th Oct 2019 17:44

Thanks Philip. I'm pleased it worked for you. Quite tricky to get the rhyming to scan but it's a challenge!

Ray

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Wed 30th Oct 2019 17:38

Almost a parallel with 'I'm a Celebrity...'

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 30th Oct 2019 17:02

"The grindstone that wears a man into a polished version of himself."

Excellent Ray.

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branwell kent

Wed 30th Oct 2019 16:20

very clever

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 30th Oct 2019 16:05

Thanks Don and thanks Dorothy, and yes you're right Don, it had quite a complex rhyming structure this one, I kind of had to get the full syllabic beats in my head prior to even starting. Although, to be fair I often start with just a rhythm. And also sorry if I bummed you out a bit Dorothy, I'm dead cheerful in real life, honest.?

J. x

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Fred Nicholson

Wed 30th Oct 2019 15:37

Lisa, thank you for responding to my 'Imagine' and my 'Talking Out Loud' works.

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Nigel Astell

Wed 30th Oct 2019 15:12

Lost more than an eyeball
when I got off with a wicked witch
turned me into a frog
so I hopped off home!

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 30th Oct 2019 14:11

I think thaila is secret from Newcastle Don, they oft' say 'pet' there

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 30th Oct 2019 14:10

Nigel,
Love at first sight
That he pretends
Can't admit to
Losing
Contact lens
Now he looks
For second glance
But he lost
His eyeball
At the
Halloween Dance

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:58

Sorry Nige.....Why can't I be italic Don to separate me from you?
Dunno pet.....ask the techs. I have Don and haven't received any reply. Probably got lost in the ether pet. Try again. They're probably overloaded with WOLer problems......I'm not used to all this Don. Life was so simple on Mt Olympus.

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Nigel Astell

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:53

Double cruel Don

Ruth there must be a missing button shop somewhere in town!

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:52

Every one on WOL indirectly contributed to this masterpiece of mix tape nonsense Don! We'll work on finding the button though, must be hiding somewhere.

Nigel where do we go exactly to retrieve missing buttons? ?

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Nigel Astell

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:51

Thalia I told you to keep it a secret x

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:48

They still left you with an edit button didn't they? They wouldn't be so cruel as to snaffle both would they?

?

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Nigel Astell

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:46

delete the bitter taste
to try something new.

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:46

Thalia: You talking about us Nigel?

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:44

Wrong answer Don ?

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Nigel Astell

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:42

Instant glance
eye contact
love at
first sight.

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:32

Complete and utter nonsense.

Your 'meant to delete this' is just a cover. Admit it. Our friends the aliens have done another flyby and snaffled your delete button. Just like they did with Nigel's like button. They keep targeting me with their blip...blip... but all I get is bloody static. If they upgrade their crystal set I might be able to ask for return of your delete button Ruth....

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 13:13

Everything about this I like Jason. Lot of work here. Not an overnighter. The layout draws you in. Well done.....

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 12:33

I like it Keith.....

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 12:24

Looking after oneself is just as important as looking after others. We often forget this.....

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 30th Oct 2019 12:19

I had a post chemo check-up yesterday. All is going well. We now know I'm in the 20% of 'hard to read'. My husband just chuckled.

It was a relief, actually, because I'm finding myself 'hard to read' these days. Writing and WOL really help. Thanks for your tolerance.

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 12:16

'Strong enough to find no shred of shame in your tears'


“Crying is not a sign of weakness
but a sign of strength to have the
courage to show deep emotion”

Maria O'Hare
Ireland

Said in relation to a society which says men shouldn't be seen to cry

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Don Matthews

Wed 30th Oct 2019 12:11

A newt's a salamander
The juvenile brand
Spends half in the water
And half on the land

Well how about that?
Your biology lesson for today

?

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Hugh

Wed 30th Oct 2019 11:17

In Manchester yesterday a photographer nearly got arrested for flashing in public.

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Hugh

Wed 30th Oct 2019 11:02

I am speechless,I've newt more to say.

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 30th Oct 2019 10:47

Very good Hugh...Don....I've got nothing 'negetive' to say about either of you! ?

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 30th Oct 2019 10:44

Pete had better watch that newt, witches are preparing their brews around about now and they are always looking for eye of newt!

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Wed 30th Oct 2019 10:38

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 30th Oct 2019 10:33

Thanks Keith, I really do value your opinion so I'm pleased you like it.

J. x

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keith jeffries

Wed 30th Oct 2019 09:53

John,

Thank you for your comment. Sassoon´s poem "The Menin Gate" although brief speaks volumes of those who died in the most appalling circumstances and the futlility of war. When I stand at the town war memorial every year my mind goes to those who took their own lives and those shot for desertion or cowardice. Bless all their hearts.

Thank you
Keith

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Philip Stevens

Wed 30th Oct 2019 07:14

Poor Rita
Ses got a reputation
For baking and riding
A gangster mol for sure ?

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Philip Stevens

Wed 30th Oct 2019 07:04

Del shannon... now theres a name from the past, do you know hes wanderer, a wanderer he wanders around, around and around. And were pretty girls are you know that he"ll be around beacuse... hes wanderer.

I prefer the royal visit sentence structure and content though ?

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Wed 30th Oct 2019 01:03

I should have said I believe the metaphor to be; the older ways - and generations, still have their uses... are relevant and shouldn't automatically be dismissed or surplanted.

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John Marks

Tue 29th Oct 2019 23:12

I will leave the final words to Siegfried Sassoon:

You smug-faced crowds with kindling eye
Who cheer when soldier lads march by,
Sneak home and pray you'll never know
The hell where youth and laughter go

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John Marks

Tue 29th Oct 2019 23:10

Thank you Keith. You write from lived experience and thus I value your words immensely. Wilfred Owen's friend and mentor, Siegfried Sassoon, illustated the chasm that exists between the civilian's sentimenalising of war and the soldier's lived experience of horror and futility in 'Suicide in the Trenches':


Suicide in the trenches:

I knew a simple soldier boy
Who grinned at life in empty joy,
Slept soundly through the lonesome dark,
And whistled early with the lark.

In winter trenches, cowed and glum
With crumps and lice and lack of rum,
He put a bullet through his brain.
No one spoke of him again.

* * * * *

You smug-faced crowds with kindling eye
Who cheer when soldier lads march by,
Sneak home and pray you'll never know
The hell where youth and laughter go.

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Hugh

Tue 29th Oct 2019 23:02

Keep writing Adalyn,we will become addicted to your honesty and openness .Well done.

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d.knape

Tue 29th Oct 2019 21:19

"may cause Drowsiness" was just a fun poem.
no inner deep meaning. Just a poke at "non-drowsy meds
and ...Myself.

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Don Matthews

Tue 29th Oct 2019 21:16

Clever Ruth....I'm developing a clearer picture of you now....

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 29th Oct 2019 20:55

Welcome Adalyn! I’m so glad you found writing as an outlet at such a young age. It will help see you through the tough times and bring an enhanced awareness of the good times. Your poetry has a raw rhythm that will develop the more you write. Write on!

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Hugh

Tue 29th Oct 2019 20:17

They were candid but there was the occasional snap in the relationship which painted a different picture.

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jennifer Malden

Tue 29th Oct 2019 20:04

Thanks Lisa and Robert for the likes and Philipos for the appreciative comment. If anything things were worse in past ages, but we didn't have the sight of the injustices, cruelties and general indifference to horrors that we now see on the news every day. Corpses are shown at lunchtime and there is no respect at all for their relations' feelings.

We have become immunised against pity, decency and compassion.The bloodier the better as it attracts a bigger audience.

Jennifer

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jennifer Malden

Tue 29th Oct 2019 19:56

Great poem. How many questions which we have been asking ourselves for centuries. The last verse reveals a hope of something afterwards. A lot to think about.

Jennifer

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keith jeffries

Tue 29th Oct 2019 19:44

John,

appropriate and masterful in its significance. A poem worthy of the eleventh day. The line, " make an epiphany of our wasted minutes,hours and years" resonate with me as I recall those, much younger than I, who were never able to live the minutes, hours and years I have had the good fortune to live, thanks to their sacrifice.

Thank you for this

Keith

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keith jeffries

Tue 29th Oct 2019 19:37

Robert,

Thank you for your kind comment. It is much appreciated.

Keith

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 29th Oct 2019 19:11

My family has a strong service connection so I have some idea of
that of which you speak. Father; brother both.... plus maternal
uncle killed in action and my father's cousin killed in action.
I pay tribute to the value of the various organisations that
support ex-personnel, and whilst the latter should be given more
care by government, these worthy bodies speak the same language
as those they support - a hugely important factor when dealing with
the problems faced after service life. Ex-WOL Wolfgar had his own knowledge and attitudes but so, no doubt, does each individual
who has served. Fundamental official attitudes from MoD level need
to improve - no one can argue with that. And the sooner the better. And the MoD
has had a questionable reputation in financial matters, austerity or not, that has not helped those whom it represents.

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Fred Nicholson

Tue 29th Oct 2019 17:59

I thank you Past Participle for your thoughtful observation.

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Adam Rabinowitz

Tue 29th Oct 2019 17:17

Frances,
Thank you so very much for reading and commenting. Honestly I never really know where a poem is going to go...i write and then think what can this mean more broadly. It is a way I discover my own thinking. I am glad you liked it.

Adam

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raypool

Tue 29th Oct 2019 15:50

HI John. I thought it apposite while Wolfgar's name has been brought up to point out that he professed to not be entirely in favour of the spirit of remembrance as an occasion when people come out of the woodwork and dignify the whole ceremonial aspect of death. As you rightly say, you couldn't get closer to the truth without his solemn balanced view on the subject and of the wider context of PTSD and its constant reminders. It is as well for us that you raise such unpleasant topics while the day itself draws near. I see the poppies are there in the media as from yesterday. They are like a red alert which brings us right up against the message. Your poem shows the real story.

Ray

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