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afishamongmany

Fri 14th Jun 2019 10:39

A good poem Mae. I'm not sure about it being a Haiku. Do category labels matter? Probably not when it is such a good poem.
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afishamongmany

Fri 14th Jun 2019 10:33

Thanks Ray, glad it gave you something. Where I was in Cardiff it was rosebay willowherb (also known as fireweed) that filled up those bombsites with their red flower spikes. You'll probably also remember ration cards, horse and cart ragbone men, the coronation.street parties? Ahh, ok back to the future ?
Go well
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Wayne McLellan

Fri 14th Jun 2019 09:54

Thanks for reading and taking the time to give feedback, especially Don's rhyming feedback!
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Tom

Fri 14th Jun 2019 09:48

Hi Lisa, thanks for your comment on Don't Look Into Their Eyes. Much appreciated. Tx

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Tom

Fri 14th Jun 2019 09:48

Hi Martin, thanks for your comment on Don't Look Into Their Eyes (and all the other ones too!). Much appreciated ? Tx

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Tom

Fri 14th Jun 2019 09:47

Hi Jennifer, thanks for your comment on Don't Look Into Their Eyes. Much appreciated ? Tx

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Don Matthews

Fri 14th Jun 2019 09:46

The problem here Wayne
Was Coco the Clown
Happened to come
From some western town

Where fed with their takeaways
Chemicals and all
Taste strange to the bone lot
Which did not enthral ?

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Don Matthews

Fri 14th Jun 2019 09:35

I don't believe in hiding mental illness.
Mine is kept in check with drugs.
Everyone is happy.

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<Deleted User> (21487)

Fri 14th Jun 2019 08:20

I love a giggle

Dorothy

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eve nortley

Fri 14th Jun 2019 07:14

Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. I'm a big fan of Bhangra - which was born in Brum and we have exported it to India and Pakistan, which always makes me smile!
So if you have time to twist the light bulb and pat the dog....

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Don Matthews

Fri 14th Jun 2019 05:38

This rhyme is for the master
The master of the wink
I'd like to wink more often but
Damn eye is on the blink

blink blink....?

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Gaëtane Prézeau

Fri 14th Jun 2019 03:00

All I could say was Mmm you speak the truth. Not going to lie when you said “Fuck that nigga,” I started laughing so hard.

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Don Matthews

Fri 14th Jun 2019 00:58

Maryon is our new guy
Life of Brian passe
Scary picture shows us
He's not here for child's play

Brian sounds insipid
For use in edgy poem
Maryon the scary one's
Come back, come back to show 'em

MC I didn't want to
Give Maryon swell head
Bring aristocracy into it
Refer him 'Sir' instead

Maryon I am afraid
You just can't just can't win
Fish is kicking kicking up
Kicking up a din

And I'm listening....?




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Devon Brock

Thu 13th Jun 2019 23:35

Bu-duh-dum. Nice pun tale.

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Wayne McLellan

Thu 13th Jun 2019 23:00

I think I need to wink more ?

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d.knape

Thu 13th Jun 2019 22:52


yeah, can't believe people buy those $1000 + phones.

soon they will implant phones in your head.
(that way you won't lose it.)
hahaha

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Wayne McLellan

Thu 13th Jun 2019 22:50

Mums eh, you gotta love theme, lol?

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Wayne McLellan

Thu 13th Jun 2019 22:47

Not a lover of jazz but you had me enthralled with this tale. It felt like I was a bystander witnessing the session. ?

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Devon Brock

Thu 13th Jun 2019 22:42

Digging on the inherent loneliness in this poem. The feeling of "leashed abandonment" is all over this piece. Only the oystercatchers are in their intended place. Wonderfully crafted.

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220August

Thu 13th Jun 2019 22:27

Fun read.

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Devon Brock

Thu 13th Jun 2019 22:11

Aw man - this brings back a flood of memories. Late night apartment jams w/ neighbors banging on the walls, landlord knocking all drowned out by glorious noise. Fabulous.

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afishamongmany

Thu 13th Jun 2019 22:09

Come on Don! You can do it!
Take your courage and up screw it.
Push that envelope to the brink,
Over the edge, into the sink.
Pushit down the drain
Then suck it up and push it again.

Be a man! Talk Anglo-saxon!
It's easy just let your tongue run.
Stoke up your anger. Throw a tantrum.
Kicking shins is such great fun.

Edgy! Edgy! Edgy! Go! Go! Go!
Come on Don, join the show.
Edge loving lemmings get in the flow
And to the edge go, go ,go.

Seriously Don - don't take the bait mate! Be free, be wise, be kind and keep creating. ><>

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Tom Harding

Thu 13th Jun 2019 21:03

thank you all!
ray, i love don't look back but haven't seen it in years, i will have to dig it out again!

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DESMOND CHILDS

Thu 13th Jun 2019 21:02

Thank you Martin for your comments, much appreciated, glad you love it. Thank you Jennifer for the like.

All the best des

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Tom Harding

Thu 13th Jun 2019 20:59

it grows beautifully, there's a mystery and magic here

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raypool

Thu 13th Jun 2019 20:46

A journey through a maze, amazing and full of twists and turns reaching through the tendrils of thoughts and taking us pell mell to the end. Your mind in this context is unique as far as I can see on WOL. As if you are in the grip of a muse squeezing you . Wonderful stuff Peter.

Ray

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raypool

Thu 13th Jun 2019 20:37

I guess that the whole essence of this is whether the comment was made in humour or seriously Cynthia. Kids usually know and I'm sure you took it on the chin. It made me feel uncomfortable in the memory of my father who was unconsciously critical, even though I learnt from his skills.

Ray

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raypool

Thu 13th Jun 2019 20:34

There's magic in the air here Martin. I love the writing and the solid thoughts as they emerge. I fell for music at a very young age, but sadly never experienced that guitar buzz. A keyboard is just a slave driver, but I twisted its arm and it earned me money . Enough said, i'll get that coat.

I hope you're ok now after a rough period.

Ray

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Mae Foreman

Thu 13th Jun 2019 17:39

Thank you so much! I'd dedicate it to you dear Dorothy but , alas, Starchild's gotten me under her spell!
Thank you ?
Mae

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Thu 13th Jun 2019 17:29

Don't forget what happens when you go 'over the edge' - six weeks of 'One Finger Poems' and mushy mushy.
Mmmm! - maybe that was a different sort of edge

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Joshua Van-Cook

Thu 13th Jun 2019 17:23

Hi Martin, thank you so much for your kind words on 'Arrival'. I was asked by my sister to write a poem concerning immigrants/ immigration but given how things are so polarised at the moment, I have tried to be very careful in my framing. Granted, less so in the last stanza. ?
Anywho, thanks again,
- Josh

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<Deleted User> (21487)

Thu 13th Jun 2019 17:19

OOH! I like this, you have managed to take a swipe at an industry that
manipulates excess. Need isn't the issue, sheer wanton greed is king.
well done - and it is entertaining.

Dorothy

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 13th Jun 2019 17:16

I hope to be there too, Martin. Stu Buck is the guest poet - and that will be a treat!

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 13th Jun 2019 17:14

I recall the lament from the late Devon writer and artist Brian Carter
about the disappearing Devon dialect which he put down to the
rate of incomers arriving from beyond the borders of England's
second largest county. Dialect must be preserved wherever and
whenever possible but in the wider sense, the prime object of a
creative spirit is to be understood. That provides something of a
conundrum. Would a Yorkie be understood in deepest Devon -
or vice versa?

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Thu 13th Jun 2019 17:12

"Fluff and flowery stuff"? - I love fluff and flowery stuff -

this poem is not about April showers
or fluffy fluffs
it's all about pretty flowers
and teeny cute baby ducks.

There now, is that not beautiful?

Forget edgy - think fluffy

Dorothy

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Jun 2019 17:03

I love these slices of life that write. they are great.
love it

I hope to be at Sale next Tuesday maybe I will see you there
Cheers
Martin

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:54

This is superb Desmond simple in its texture and words , yet so rich in all that its says.

Love it

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:53

There is certainly plenty of colour evoked in this piece

Nice one

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:52

Its those last few lines that make this poem wonderful.

Nice one

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:50

its hard to imagine hanging gardens in the depths of Surrey which makes this all the more intriguing and certainly worth the read. beautifully put as ever Peter

Nice one

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:47

I had not realised until the end precisely what this poem was about, assuming that was some sort of love lorn piece of china. But that in itself is a good allegory
Excellently put
nice one

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:42

Very clever

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:36

Sounds idyllic. You certainly drew me there from the first stanza.


Nice one

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:28

Ah...I've had comments in which I have been addressed by my
last name only. But no complaint...remembering that it is the
custom among the aristocracy to expect to be addressed in that
manner. ?

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:20

Boom-boom!
You certainly had us reading and thinking
Before your winking that saw us blinking!

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Thu 13th Jun 2019 16:12

i love your work - so glad you are PoTW - congratulations.
Dorothy

give my love to Fred (fine figure of a man) just in case he gets upset

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john short

Thu 13th Jun 2019 15:25

Thanks Chloe

I wasn't sure about this poem - if people would really get anything from it. Your positive response has given me the signal it probably will be okay to submit somewhere. Look forward to reading more of your stuff.

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jennifer Malden

Thu 13th Jun 2019 15:20

Thanks Mona, Don and Devon for the very generous comments. Delighted to hear i use poetic devices!!!! (Do get it.)
Devon - I did add another line - 'hoping to see the dawn again', but preferred the original as perhaps it gives a sense that something, anything, or nothing might happen. This is a place we go to, and at night I always have a sense of expectancy - exactly for what i don't know.

Thanks again. jennifer

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jennifer Malden

Thu 13th Jun 2019 15:10

Great writing, someone with no illusiions at all about himself, and no hypocrisy either - 'people sin and i join in'.

Jennifer

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jennifer Malden

Thu 13th Jun 2019 15:03

Lovely! Jennifer

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