<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 6th Nov 2018 08:01
A tragic story told in a simple way. No need for obscure language or hidden meanings. Good one Mark.
Comment is about LAST CHARGE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks for all your comments. There used to be that catch phrase years ago about Nokia connecting people and one night about 2003 I was sitting with a Greek friend in central Athens and he remarked about the barking connecting dogs. Never thought that years later that casual comment would become the basis for a poem.
Becky, I never considered this as a poem to read aloud as it's a not very long but as I'm going to an open mic tonight in Liverpool who knows?
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘The Dogs of Athens’ by John Short (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
I can relate to this fine poem - it reminds me of the times I just want to stay at home as the whole world feels unsafe.
Comment is about i’m sure you won’t (blog)
Original item by TAY
Wow, a powerful and - in a way - beautiful poem about a very dramatic subject.
Comment is about LAST CHARGE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
A sensitive portrait of someone just at the edge. What you are asking for is not too much to ask.
Comment is about Swollen eyes and faith (blog)
Original item by VHH
You guys probably know me enough by now that I have a good controversial run, end up away for a while, write a few crap poems then suddenly whip out a decent one with a good point behind it out of the blue haha ?
Just want this to change. Tired of those in need being constant sh4t on by those in power who don't have to worry for anything whilst others literally make themselves unwell from stress and worry caused by just simply not having enough money or support for their health.
Comment is about The horrible truth about benefits (blog)
Original item by HayzTee
Thankyou all. This was written after new found knowledge came about earlier today on the way home. It was the kind of poem that just writes itself.
I'm so shocked that people on job seekers and universal credit get free prescriptions, yet people on disability do not?
People on disability are paid less than those on universal credit or jobseekers.
People on disability are more likely to be removed from the system and told they can work, when they clearly are unable. For example people who cannot move/walk or are terminally ill are still "fit to work" in their eyes more often than not.
Things need to change.
Because the sick are less likely to start earning money or indulging in things that are highly taxed and will return money to the government, they give them less money as it's non-profit for them.
Yet how can someone who is unwell get better if they can barely pay for transport, medication, and in most instances where they don't live with parents, even barely afford rent and bills?
They're dooming the sick to get sicker.
And it needs to change.
I am very well considering sending this to theresa May, tagging her in it, mailing her it and even send it to other MP's.
Not that it would change anything, but it'll be more known
Comment is about The horrible truth about benefits (blog)
Original item by HayzTee
Keith, the inspiration for my response to your own powerful words came very quickly - and with some slight changes, I'm posting it on the blogs
page under the title "LAST CHARGE" - now that Remembrance Sunday approaches.
I owned a copy of Hiscock's book many years ago and it is a young man's account that speaks to us across the years but with a voice
we might find hard to properly understand for its generational
attitude to what was faced and dealt
with back then.
Comment is about Poetry & The Great War, a series: 5 Harsh Realities (article)
Original item by Mike Took
A well spoken protest ?
Comment is about The horrible truth about benefits (blog)
Original item by HayzTee
Mon 5th Nov 2018 22:28
thanks Keith for you kind comment.
I don't know what to say.
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Mon 5th Nov 2018 22:27
Thank you Taylor for your kind comment
on my poem. I am at a loss for words.
Comment is about Taylor Crowshaw (poet profile)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Strong meaning in “l am here and here and here”. Good encapsulation of the unfair situation of being overlooked.
Comment is about Modern Slavery 2018 (blog)
Original item by eve nortley
A good poem about being at the inevitable crossroads.
Comment is about How do you know? (blog)
Original item by Hayley Louise
Thank you Brian & Keith! Tough times indeed.
Comment is about Miraculous (blog)
Original item by Douglas MacGowan
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 5th Nov 2018 21:28
I'm guessing you've experienced a loss of faith Douglas.I'm not a believer myself but I can appreciate what this loss means to you. Hope you rediscover it.
Comment is about Miraculous (blog)
Original item by Douglas MacGowan
Well done Hayley ,a great poetic protest.Send it in to Theresa May see what response you get.
Comment is about The horrible truth about benefits (blog)
Original item by HayzTee
Douglas,
This brief poem conjures up so much in my imagination. I shall have to read it a few more times.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Miraculous (blog)
Original item by Douglas MacGowan
The Quality of Mersey Poets after performing their marathon read at Liverpool Central Library on October 4th 2018.
Thanks to all involved with this event.
Comment is about The Quality of Mersey Poets (photo)
Original item by Barry Woods
Very vivid and also works well read aloud. Congratulations.
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘The Dogs of Athens’ by John Short (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
<Deleted User> (18118)
Mon 5th Nov 2018 20:00
Big important questions.
Your work is brave and strong.
Hannah
Comment is about Can the Vice be Broken (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Mon 5th Nov 2018 20:00
Thank you Martin, I’m glad you like the mystery. Much appreciated. Thank you Damon for the like.
All the best des
Comment is about The beauty of Age (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Hayley,
Never were truer words spoken. Say it loud and clear so that those who dish out the dosh know what misery they cause.
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about The horrible truth about benefits (blog)
Original item by HayzTee
Excellent Hugh and I totally agree...?
Comment is about Keep feeling young singing a song. (blog)
Original item by hugh
Definitely one of your best..love it...
Comment is about Leaves From A Tree (blog)
Original item by d.knape
So sad..and true..
Comment is about The horrible truth about benefits (blog)
Original item by HayzTee
Hi Tim! You forgot doolally! Too old perhaps. Loved it.
Jennifer
Comment is about One sandwich short (blog)
Original item by Tim Ellis
Great writing! In my family there are a great many outings of emotions!
Jennifer
Comment is about Embrace (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
Great as usual Ray -somehow remins me of the trumped up reasons for the war in Iraq!
Jennifer
Comment is about DREAMS AND LIES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Hi Tim! Am very flattered by your kind comment on The Legacy. It's an Aberdeenshire garden, so nearly Highland. Glad you liked it.
Jennifer
Comment is about Tim Ellis (poet profile)
Original item by Tim Ellis
Hi Stu! Thanks for the favourable comment on The Legacy
Jennifer
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
MC.,
Thank you again for an interesting poetic comment to this series of articles on the Great War. I shall most certainly acquaint myself with the works of Hiscock.
Thank you indeed.
Keith
Comment is about Poetry & The Great War, a series: 5 Harsh Realities (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Shot and shell,
Blown to hell,
And to think it had all begun so well.
Consigned to death and its mouldering stench
Close companions in a mud-filled trench.
The whistles blow -
Away they go,
Over the top in frantic show
Towards an enemy yet unseen
Through air of bilious yellow and green.
The rat-a-tat-tat
Soon tells them that
They will grow neither old nor fat;
They will never live to remember
Their charge took place on the Tenth of November.
......................................................................
P.S. One of the more affecting memoirs of that conflict is Eric Hiscock's "The Bells of Hell Go Ting-A-Ling-A-Ling" - WELL worth seeking out and available online.
Comment is about Poetry & The Great War, a series: 5 Harsh Realities (article)
Original item by Mike Took
I can certainly envisage what you describe here in your poem with the sounds and the hard worn streets where these dogs roam. Congratulations on this piece.
Nice one John
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘The Dogs of Athens’ by John Short (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Tranquility is a state of mind
No more, no less, I tend to find;
Noise is relative to the brain
Too much? too little? - both a strain
On what our human hi-fi needs,
Trying to balance incoming "feeds". ?
Comment is about Sensory Intensity (blog)
Original item by Janey Colbourne
Your poem is a gentle cry from the heart not a shrill complaint, yet it holds the secret of your inner suffering. You must write more as you have the talent to write poetry and more important a voice against an appalling crime. We poets are the voice of dissent and protest. Join us.
Well done and thank you for this brave piece of work.
Keith
Comment is about Modern Slavery 2018 (blog)
Original item by eve nortley
It happens. And provides the reason why we should never
underestimate the lingering inhumanity that seeps across
borders and stifles awareness.
Comment is about Modern Slavery 2018 (blog)
Original item by eve nortley
Franglais fun - with some inspired content. Good idee - mon
ami!
Comment is about A Cup Of Franglais (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Excellent encouragement towards living a fulfilled life.
True Hugh:
Do, do,
Think, think
Blink, blink,
Wink, wink,
Sigh, sigh,
Bye, bye! ?
Comment is about Keep feeling young singing a song. (blog)
Original item by hugh
Big Sal
Mon 5th Nov 2018 16:36
Humorous piece you have written here. Well done on the poetic explanations within the lines - it gave way to its strengths.?
Comment is about Billy the Grey (blog)
Original item by eve nortley
A voice against injustice? Amen to that. This sounds like a great idea and a worthy cause. Giving a voice to people through poetry is what Write Out Loud is all about, so let's get behind it, eh?
Comment is about New anthology inspired by outsiders to help Shelter, Crisis Aid (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Youth tends to take old age to task
And affix the badge of blame,
When all they have to do is ask:
Common sense is its unsought name!
Comment is about A Treasure Trove (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 5th Nov 2018 16:08
A good theme Keith, and yes we older people are too often ignored or taken for granted. However, we often prevent ourselves from being included because of our age. We need to disregard our actual age and do what we feel like and what we can. Doctors think they're helping by prescribing certain drugs at a particular age whether we need them or not.
Comment is about A Treasure Trove (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
In this poem you have given of your best.
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about Leaves From A Tree (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Big Sal
Mon 5th Nov 2018 14:51
Excellent piece with matching imagery.?
Comment is about Without You, a Burden (blog)
Original item by Sam Khan-McIntyre
keith jeffries
Tue 6th Nov 2018 08:23
MC.,
Thank you as always for your interest. I shall look forward to reading this. As the week progresses I am reading once again many of the war poets and one book I find as a great resource is ¨Up the Line to Death ¨, by Brian Gardner who composed the anthology. I am sure that this coming Sunday will see us both standing before our respective monunments to pay tribute to those brave souls who gave their all.
Thank you again.
Keith
Comment is about Poetry & The Great War, a series: 5 Harsh Realities (article)
Original item by Mike Took