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Helen Elliott

Fri 13th Oct 2017 15:13

Thank you all for your lovely responses to this poem.
It's really made my day ?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 13th Oct 2017 12:38

Not to mention 'an affectionate nod' to your father. He had imagination and the desire to interact with his son, likely knowing he wasn't fooling you for a minute. Playing together is the best kind of bonding ever. I'm sure he knew that. I'm presuming you got to keep the 'change'.

How do you think you got your creative genes?

Really enjoyed this poem, both its subject matter and its rich language, its verve - full of action.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 13th Oct 2017 12:19

Good one. My husband said I looked like a cat with cream.

Pop another 'p' in 'suppress'.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 13th Oct 2017 12:11

Jeez, Ray, what are you gentlemen taking in your tea!

I think this is just fabulous, full of energy and superb imagery. The opening line screams originality, and yanks the reader in, full throttle. And then you never let go.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 13th Oct 2017 11:44

Welcome to Wol, Jana. This site is very generous in outlook.

I really like the sample you have shown on this page. For me, it shows a breadth of understanding and great sincerity. Not everybody can bring deep feelings into words.

Keep writing.

I'm thinking: what does she mean 'pin and pad'? And then it hit me. I'm guessing you mean 'pen and pad'. If I'm right, you might take a moment to fix it. If I'm wrong, I'd love to know what you do mean.

If that is you in the photo, you look quite young. But photos can fool 'big time'.

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Philip Stevens

Fri 13th Oct 2017 11:30

An all to familar site.. flowers tied to railings a memory of someone's failing and the heartache that can cause....

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Philip Stevens

Fri 13th Oct 2017 11:24

Vivid... john an excellent read ... i see images not words... emotions stirred...

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Philip Stevens

Fri 13th Oct 2017 11:11

Thanks for comment john ... yeah lots of influence by the "Mod Father " i suppose ... a town called malice etc.. but its a nod to the influnce of "The last poets" a quartet of American performnce poets from late 60's onwards .. and how they inspired me to speak about what i see and feel and to perform it...

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Jon

Fri 13th Oct 2017 10:48

Hey Philip
Enjoyed Loose Change. Reminds me of a song by someone like The Jam,commenting on trying to live in a society where you do your best to get by but are left constantly struggling and hoping for that big win.

A bit like That's Entertainment maybe?
Enjoyed the Temptations reference and cheers for your comment on my recent effort. Much appreciated.

Interesting profile...will have a listen to some of your recorded stuff too.

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Philip Stevens

Fri 13th Oct 2017 09:59

Liked it john... right up until your epilogue and that word " simpleton"

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Fri 13th Oct 2017 09:19

well it was worth waiting a couple of months for Suki although I was secretly wishing for something nasty to happen to the human resources director but hey this is real life drama and in 99.9% of real life nothing much happens aside from winks and teases and smiley faces. Scrape away the modern day references and it has the feel of a 60's film or doc on class division and in some ways nothing much has changed except maybe the bowler hats are gone and the cleaner comes from a different ethnic background. I'm sure further readings of this will send me off in different thought processes. Veronica the cleaner sending smiley faces to everyone everywhere...Yes! ?

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Fri 13th Oct 2017 08:49

I'm with Raj re the last line - maybe 'wishing away' or something similar. Regardless, this is a fab (4) poem with lots to celebrate in Sgt Pepper's 50th year and (I can't believe) your 64th ?. Lovely read Hazel. Thanks, Col.

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David Cooke

Fri 13th Oct 2017 06:03

Hi Steve Glad you liked my poem 'Cities'.

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Ryn

Fri 13th Oct 2017 00:20

i'm not sure i completely understand it but it's good nonetheless.

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suki spangles

Fri 13th Oct 2017 00:11

Hi Rachel,

Just playing a little catch-up at the moment; haven't been able to leave feedback for a while.

A darkest-before-the-dawn vibe to this:

My bubbles once begged
to burst within it..

Then rising to the surface..

Suki

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suki spangles

Thu 12th Oct 2017 23:18

Hi there Ray,

Hope all is well with you!

I love the poem: pithy and affecting. Funnily enough this is probably my favourite time of year, along with spring. But that's only because I have hay fever.

Take care,
Suki

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raypool

Thu 12th Oct 2017 23:12

HI Col. I'm determined to bag up the leaves this year and they can rot for all I care - I want them too to lard on the ground. Thanks for liking.

Thank you Wardah, glad you enjoyed this.

Nice that you were drawn to the last line Hannah. I spontaneously made that up while talking to my wife, and thought it was enough to conjure up a poem . Thanks.

Thanks also Steve, ahh those Autumn Leaves (great tune by the way).

Ray

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Andy N

Thu 12th Oct 2017 22:30

great afternoon. really enjoyed it.

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Jon

Thu 12th Oct 2017 21:58

My Dad and his funny ways! The Sea dog was a fictitious creature he told us of that he'd supposedly seen somewhere down the beach at Rossall.
Some kind of mythical animal that came from the sea and returned to it afterwards.
Not a clue where he got the inspiration from but rumours of it's existence have been passed on to other family members as well.
This is just an affectionate nod to the supernatural beast.

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David Taylor-Jones

Thu 12th Oct 2017 16:36

Thanks Mike!

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John Coopey

Thu 12th Oct 2017 16:30

Penguin, I hope, Steve?

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Thu 12th Oct 2017 16:09

This truly describes Autumn. I feel strongly about the last line. We are helpless against this season as the darkness draws in and leaves start to decay.

Hannah

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mike booth

Thu 12th Oct 2017 15:56

lovely poem - powerful, moving and heartfelt. I was just thinking of trying to write something about the early morning silence and this captures a beautiful melancholy mood. Mike

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 12th Oct 2017 15:00

I don't know how I missed this on the regular blog. Congratulations, Hannah. It's a fine poem.

And thank you for your personal support as well.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:46

I popped back to read this again. And realized the rhyming was so good it just carried the whole poem with it, without effort. Influential but unobtrusive. That is real talent!

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Ryn

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:36

this was really good. I enjoy it the whole time

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steve pottinger

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:35

There's some beautiful writing in this poem, David. Thank you.

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Wardah

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:33

This is sad but lovely.?

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steve pottinger

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:32

You're a brave man, Tommy, taking on Ludwig W!

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Ryn

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:30

Happy birthday! it is really a beautiful write the way i took it

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Wardah

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:29

I love that this ends with hope and love. Beautiful poem of contrasts.?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:28

Bless you dear 'peoples' who have found both interest and time to respond to this piece of 'silly'. What I find constantly, in almost everything, is a bizarre mix of fact and fancy, and then the challenge to 'sort them out' to the best of my ability. It isn't always successful; but it never fails to be fun.

I can't imagine life without 'fun'.

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Ryn

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:27

i like the flow of it.

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Wardah

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:26

I love the last 2 lines, lovely poem.?

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steve pottinger

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:23

"but you've never nutmegged two". I haven't, and that line made me smile, and wish I had...

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steve pottinger

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:19

I chuckled, winced, and ate a chocolate. ?

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Wardah

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:04

This is beautiful. I'm glad all your confusion has dissipated. But don't love too quickly dear Raj. Good things take time.

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steve pottinger

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:03

This poem paints a beautiful picture, Becky.

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Wardah

Thu 12th Oct 2017 14:00

Interesting write. Not sure I get all of it but enjoyed it nonetheless.

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steve pottinger

Thu 12th Oct 2017 13:59

This is beautiful Robert. That second stanza sucked me right in...

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Raj Ferds

Thu 12th Oct 2017 12:29

Happy Birthday Hazel. Now stand up and take a bow.
Some of those lyrics still resonate within me.
Perhaps a more upbeat finale?

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Greg Freeman

Thu 12th Oct 2017 09:45

Good to see you there, Dave, and glad it turned into a welcome break. I think it's fair to say that your anthology poem, 'Three score and Ten: A Life of Biblical Proportions', went down a storm with the Milestone Society members ...

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Raj Ferds

Thu 12th Oct 2017 09:03

I quite like this piece Becki in all its simplicity.
Gates can mean a lot if you dwell on the role they play.

For me they are a silent witness to comings and goings. gates open conversations and shut things out. Gates opens minds. They have a history.

Nice one.
Raj

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Thu 12th Oct 2017 08:33

coming back to this later when I have more time - glad you've finally found some internet Mr Spangles.

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Thu 12th Oct 2017 08:29

loving your work Ray and all the change of season poems here on WoL. Go kick leaves people ?

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Thu 12th Oct 2017 08:09

like Beckett's Godot, feels like we are all waiting for something or someone to show up, to delivery us from whatever. Nice one Desmond. Col.

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keith jeffries

Thu 12th Oct 2017 05:59

Jon, everything you write resonates with me. I read your poems over and over again. There is an affinity. Keep in touch matey and please write more. Keith

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Jon

Wed 11th Oct 2017 23:33

Hi again Keith
I really got a lot from 'Existence', and it conveys the sense of struggle and longing very well.
Insightful and moving.
Thanks also for kind comments Keith ?

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mike booth

Wed 11th Oct 2017 23:15

Thanks for encouraging comments... i felt this one flowed quite smoothly, and captured my thoughts on a phrase I am hearing quite often these days... perhaps symptomatic of a modern age of anxiety?
M x

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Martin Elder

Wed 11th Oct 2017 23:10

Thank you Helen and Philip for reading and showing your appreciation. It never ceases to amaze me what my mind drags up and remembers. some more vivid than others.
I am very grateful
cheers
Martin

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