Well, Colin - re the closing verses - I just edited a bit as you wrote ? - they kind of sit there and itch a bit - so I tinker - maybe in a few revisions I'll have them right.

Your title is better than mine too - I've modified it ?

p.s. The high rise apartments in Mumbai (taller than the Parsi towers) now suffer from vultures dropping bit of bodies onto their balconies - that'll spoil anyone's al fresco din dins :)

Comment is about A Tower In Silence (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

yes Keith - I just made it up - you read it here first!

Kevin - according to Wikipedia the word 'sheeple' dates to the 1940's which surprised me as I thought it was much more recent than that.

I don't advocate throwing anything from steeples btw. And lemmings committing mass suicide is fake news. But I digress. It's Father's Day and I'm being allowed to do what I want so I'm keeping out the hot sun and chilling with my lappy in a quiet corner.

Enjoy your Sunday,
Col

Comment is about Sheeple (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Hello Colin, are you by any chance referring to Lemmings? Keith

Comment is about Sheeple (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

throw 'em from the steeples - with the Lemmples too

Comment is about Sheeple (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

aitchoo

Comment is about The Prisoner of Pollen (blog)

Original item by Neil Robertson

You're welcome, Keith. The lyric is mostly faithful to the fit of the structure of the original. Thanks for your kind comment.

Comment is about LADY IN RED (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

The two adulterous lovers kill the wife who has discovered their affair. She finds the lipstick on his collar giving him away and so to be rid of her they kill her and walk away.

Comment is about Staple Gun Lover (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

Topical, funny and horrendously true. Thank fo this. Keith

Comment is about LADY IN RED (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks guys. You might suggest my singing on this post constitutes an improvement.

Comment is about LADY IN RED (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thank you so much Jem. Hope you are well, smiling and celebrating life. Do stay connected.

Raj x

Comment is about Nothing's changed (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

very lyrical. i know Euston a bit, can really see this (:

Comment is about Meeting At Euston (blog)

Original item by Karen Ankers

as always Raj,delicious word's.Thank you.Jemima.

Comment is about Nothing's changed (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Keith, I think you've invented a new word. nice one.

Cheers Kevin

Comment is about Sheeple (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Hi Kae-Jan. I've just read your sample poem and your debut (tales of a penny). I was really impressed with both. your biography says you want to have an impact on the world, I'm sure you will do that. keep posting, you'll get lots of positive feedback on this site.

Cheers Kevin

Comment is about Kae-Jan (poet profile)

Original item by Kae-Jan

Hi friends,

First of all, many thanks for your feedback and taking the time to read this. I'm sure you must know how much I appreciate your input and feedback.

Stu, of course you can share. I'm honoured!

Col, I know what you mean, but sometimes I just have to get all that stuff out. It actually took me many hours over many days to get this right. Believe it or not, I have edited it down to its "bare bones" lol!

And David, as always many thanks. Glad you got the humour in this.

There is a prevailing mood here on WoL with all that is going on, but thank goodness for that. It's a gentle form of resistance I suppose, but it's also about trying to make sense/nonsense of this increasingly weird/worrisome time we are in. All we need now is for Yellowstone to become active; a banking flash-crash, or a nuclear accident somewhere. But that can wait until next week. Let's at least have a chilled out Sunday with a Pimms!!

SS



Cheers to you all.

Comment is about Now That's What I Call War On Terror Music (Volumes 22-33) (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Poignant. Real. And beautifully read - and written, Ray.

Thanks for sharing.

Suki

Comment is about MOTHER'S RUIN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks Colin, Keith. I am here to learn more about writing. Your comments are most helpful and perpetually welcome.

Comment is about A Poem (blog)

Original item by Mithun Nair

Louise - I would change only one word in this piece - try 'Counsellors to set them free'. I think it flows. Great poem about the state of NHS mental health support though.
Rob

Comment is about Pay the price (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

Well,Keith - this brings into stark relief the chasm between the 'haves' and 'won't ever haves' - the former have much to answer for - thanks for your kind words ?

Comment is about A Tower In Silence (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Louise - personally I think the first and last stanzas need re-editing to tidy this one up. Nice idea though.
Rob

Comment is about Poison Fairies (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

Louise - I have to admit that the last two lines threw me. 'Together' and 'that adulterous pair' - who died? Like the work a lot though.
Rob

Comment is about Staple Gun Lover (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

Hello Rick, This poem echoes the words of the Queen who today spoke of the sombre mood which has engulfed the nation. I hope her words and the the words of your poem will advance people´s thinking when it comes to the way we so readily dismiss the voices of the poor and dispossessed at the expense of those who show them nothing but disdain. Thank you for this. Keith

Comment is about A Tower In Silence (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Hello David, Thank you for this very poignant poem which speaks more in what remains unsaid which in turn provokes a good deal of thought. Thank you again. Keith

Comment is about Kensington and Chelsea (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

I can see the house in my mind´s eye as I am familiar with such houses having lived in a few. A poem rich in sentiment and very well expressed. Thank you. Keith

Comment is about MOTHER'S RUIN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Kevin, Thank you for your comment. Yes I did have someone in mind namely Bashir Assad who would be at the top of a long list. Thanks again. Keith

Comment is about Hold onto Power (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

I do not do stuff about contemporary issues but this subject is timeless in the dismissal of the poor as less than human.

Comment is about A Tower In Silence (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Nice work Ray - A very touching and emotive reflection. ?

Comment is about MOTHER'S RUIN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thank you Mark,and indeed to anyone who liked my poem and left comments,my confidence in my ability to write has had a huge boost.

Comment is about 'The day my dad went mad' by Patricia Hughes is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

beautifully written Ray, the repetition in verse one works really well as does the two by's in the next. I stumbled a little at the end of the first verse and wondered if those two lines need shortening, but it might just be me:

father's arrival every day
before he finally went his way..

apart from that I think this is top notch and packed with pathos.

Col.

Comment is about MOTHER'S RUIN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

enough emotion in this to fill another of those skips. very moving, I will re-visit this one often.

Kevin

Comment is about MOTHER'S RUIN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

a bit strong, to say the least. did you have anyone in particular in mind, or was it a case of 'if the cap fits'

cheers Kevin

Comment is about Hold onto Power (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Hi Keith thanks for commenting on 'the foundling', and thanks too for recommending my stuff to the 'highbrow lady' I don't know what she'd make of my drivel, but don't be surprised if she gives you a wide berth next time you meet.
Cheers kevin

Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)

Original item by keith jeffries

hi Keith. another good one. the first line said it all then the rest just fell in nicely.
cheers Kevin

Comment is about The Eyes (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

M.C.
I`m in the process of re-reading Jonathan Raban`s `The Society of the poem` (so I couldn`t really comment on poetry judges at the moment without swearing).

Thank goodness the universities stlll have to teach the long-term academically tried `Canon` for some of the newer stuff to fruitlessly knock it`s head against as it learns.

I agree that much of the stuff we admire these days are really very nice short pieces of prose.

Comment is about THE POETRY JUDGE (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

coolio

Comment is about Native Blood (blog)

Original item by Ryan Decorah

Lovely to see another poem from you Karen. A real joy of simple heartwarming fare. This is humanity at its best and a salvation for us all. The complete lack of judging is the best of it. I particularly like "city faded eyes" but it's all nicely minted.

Ray

Comment is about Meeting At Euston (blog)

Original item by Karen Ankers

this is absolutely outstanding poetry
ive shared it, hope you dont mind

Comment is about Now That's What I Call War On Terror Music (Volumes 22-33) (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Brilliant Karen. And very touching indeed.

Thanks for sharing. Be Blessed.
Raj

Comment is about Meeting At Euston (blog)

Original item by Karen Ankers

Same as David, Suki - i'll come back later for the full monty reading - so much to take in at the mo'.

Ray

Comment is about Now That's What I Call War On Terror Music (Volumes 22-33) (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Thank you for sharing this genuine and wonderful poem Rob. I feel privileged to be appreciating the multitude of considerations and insights. A real breath of fresh air, thankyou so much.

Comment is about Walking with water walking with love (blog)

Original item by Rob Cullen

Thank you for your much appreciated Suki. Sometimes you try to summarize actions into thoughts and if you're lucky you get a sort of hole in one, other times things seem to unravel. It is nice as you know to get a result. This one seemed to hit of dead spot, so I'm very happy that you like it!

Ray

Comment is about ENGAGEMENT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

good morning and goodbye Mr Ferds.One is getting on ones Asda bound bike asap.



cheer's m'dear.


Rose x

Comment is about Chakraj (poet profile)

Original item by Chakraj

do poetry judge's have the equivalent
of a casting couch?
upon which I can willingly,nakedly slouch
I have this sexual way you see
of gaining their favouring me
as long as I leave with the award in my pouch!



Rose x

Comment is about THE POETRY JUDGE (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

very good advice Wendy,take care dear Lady.



Rose x

Comment is about Don't (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

anger, despair, numbness, disbelief, exasperation - it's all there and like David's 'Raw' audio it's bubbling over. Feels like we're in some sort of humanity end game these days.

Get out, enjoy the sun. I'm off to a food fair at a National Trust property to buy some artisan bread and happy pig sausages or whatever waffles. Act like there's nothing happening elsewhere. Breathe fresh air in my own little world-bubble away from the news-feeds for a few hours. Because knowing what to think or how to react to each new day gets progressively more difficult. Will this anger eventually turn to acquiescence and submission and acceptance? Is that what they want?

David could provide a good audio for this I'm sure - when he's finished running round his house trying to get dressed.

all the best
Col

Comment is about Now That's What I Call War On Terror Music (Volumes 22-33) (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

The first line is strong and the last line is (in my opinion) stronger. In between it is personal, original and screams authenticity.

Comment is about 'The day my dad went mad' by Patricia Hughes is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks all for the positive comments.

It has been a very emotional time for London, and for all with compassion or empathy.

X

Comment is about Stay Put (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

of darkly serving co-ordinated bliss..

That one line pretty much says it for me. Brilliant poem.

Suki

Comment is about ENGAGEMENT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hmm I'm still tryna digest ur statements

Comment is about The Bad Omen To My Happiness (blog)

Original item by Abdul-Aziz Abdul-Rahman

Thanks chaps - Tommy

Comment is about The end of an affair (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll