<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 1st Jun 2017 12:02
hello America! awesome poem Connor.Lot of lines we agree with.Fer sure! fer sure pard'ner.
yippy-ky-hey!
P&S x
Comment is about Paper Planet Spinner Kid (blog)
Original item by Connor Lannes
<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 1st Jun 2017 11:52
oh to be a two faced fat cat eh Keith? No way! wethinks
as we continue holding onto our/Lennons long held battle-cry-
-power to the people!
good gear man.
P&S x
Comment is about Politicians (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Dear Raj I've come across your work and would love to exclaim how well you paint your writing. There's no doubt I see your word illustrate the embodiment of you, in your big moment, little moments, and quit moment. ?
Comment is about An Unborn Union (blog)
Original item by Chakraj
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Thu 1st Jun 2017 08:17
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Thu 1st Jun 2017 08:12
Debbie
Thu 1st Jun 2017 08:08
You have a beautiful way with words that far exceeds expectations. Publish this, Andres!
Comment is about Seeing Blindly (blog)
Original item by Andres S.
I'm so pleased you enjoyed this Cynthia. I don't know where the idea came from, just a sense of the ridiculous I suppose - but as it fleshed out i'm glad it provided a few laughs. I aim to please.
Ray
Comment is about HOME STRAIGHT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
When I read your poems I see the badge of authenticity and a control of words to convey a defined imagery. I love the idea of shoes as companions with equal rights and personalities . A great concept.
Ray
Comment is about Your Shoes (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
I'm a pensioner and agree with means testing on winter
fuel payments.
I'm a pensioner who says every generation should make
its own way and not depend of others who have gone before.
I'm a pensioner who puts proper parliamentary rule of country before rule by others, pocket and easy travel.
And this pensioner remembers a pub customer, a socialist
in local government, who stood at the bar and stated that nursing was a "vocation" that should not guided by
earnings!
May or Corbyn? Cold wind or hot air? Take your choice!
Comment is about The End of May (blog)
Original item by Tim Ellis
An important subject sensitively and squarely handled, with dignity.
Comment is about Numb (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
You have some strong views to share, and you do so with intense eloquence. Keep writing.
Comment is about The Exam (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
Powerful, whether personal or not. It highlights that which is only too possible.
Comment is about The Shed (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
This is a tough read. On a very tough theme. And you get it off with a severe first verse that captures the reader's attention. Well done for bringing the subject so clearly into focus.
Comment is about The Mules (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
Fine thoughts, well expressed. I just missed this earlier.
Comment is about Take Steps (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
Hilarious, and aptly penned with flair and care. Your opening line is a showstopper! And picked up again later, which may imply another round, this time with staff?
Oh, I laughed.
Comment is about HOME STRAIGHT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Good one, in premise and presentation. Much food for thought.
Comment is about BY ANY OTHER NAME (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
You strum the heart strings with ideas of fine theme and words like music. You are a master artist.
Comment is about Your Shoes (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Sounds like a great family. I presume they 'call you out' for many good things as well?
I saw the snow scene on your bio with great envy (I'm a Canadian by birth. Lots of cold weather in my childhood. You never forget the glory of winter.)
Comment is about poem on my family (blog)
Original item by Ben Chronister
Hello Wayne, and there I was in suspense. Keith
Comment is about My Wife (blog)
Original item by Wayne Riley
Hello Cynthia, Thank you for your comment. Point taken but I take some delight being nice before going in for the kill. Thanks again. Keith
Comment is about Politicians (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
There's nothing depressing about thinking, unless you feel that you, and only you, have the 'right' answers. Now that would be DEPRESSING.
Enjoy the journey. Read a lot, listen a lot, and say little until you have something to say which is worth sharing. Poetry is an excellent medium for practising opinions, because writing in 'shorthand' requires precision of ideas and adequate vocabulary to express them.
Is that you in the photo up top?
Comment is about Ben Chronister (poet profile)
Original item by Ben Chronister
Good question. Keep thinking. And writing.
Comment is about yin yang (blog)
Original item by Ben Chronister
What started like a fair and valid question quickly became a stolid opinion entirely off the point first made. IMO,leave off the first four lines and get right into what you really intend to say.
Good rhyming.
Comment is about Politicians (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hello Laura .. thanks for your kind comment. Not a happy subject but I wrote it quickly to get my thoughts out of the way, it's easy to go on dwelling on sad news for ever .. Cheers!
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hello Martin.thanks very much for your comment. The 'chords of flowers' refers to him being a musician and of course all the flowers that my wife had to receive . Thanks.
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
Hello Ben ... thank-you for your comment on my recent poem. It's great when people find something in your words .. Cheers.
Comment is about Ben Chronister (poet profile)
Original item by Ben Chronister
Thank you for the feedback Cynthia - useful and constructive as ever. I had already edited out quite a few words but maybe not enough. I was going for the richness of the moment - smelling the roses as life speeds past us - but need to reflect more on this. Perhaps I can't have both.
Comment is about Earsplitting (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
This seems interesting but has no contact details, I found out about it last week through a friend at an open mic. I have contacted Radio Leeds with my details and am waiting their reply which hopefully they will.
Comment is about National Poetry Day and BBC team up with OED to unearth local words for poems (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wed 31st May 2017 12:09
my questions are Raj,doesn't someone like you have enough of the opposite sex to last you a lifetime,and beyond? Or are you simply keeping yourself until Mrs Right comes along?Not a hermit by any chance are you?Loved the poem.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Are you out there? (blog)
Original item by Chakraj
Breathing in
Breathing out
Laughing
Crying
Love
Hate
Pain
Pleasure
Agony
Ecstasy
Morning
Night
Black
White
Birth
Death
All two sides to the coin Ben. All to be accepted wholeheartedly as part of our lives.
Thanks so much for sharing
Comment is about yin yang (blog)
Original item by Ben Chronister
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 31st May 2017 08:03
there are elements of this which IMO work really well and I love the section from 'You are why love poems are written' to 'the big bad strong one'. Thanks for posting, Colin
Comment is about that moment is so golden (blog)
Original item by Dana Lyn
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 31st May 2017 07:40
I'm never quite sure whether to mention that a poem reminds me of something else when the intention of the author is to write something original and in their own voice - which this so obviously does. But the way the first half particularly is written put me in mind of Elvis Costello and his punchy, short, staccato lyrics. I'm a great fan of his writing so I hope that's a compliment to you Tom as I very much enjoy your writing too. All the best, Colin.
Comment is about Your Shoes (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Cheers muchly all!
Just me doing my Mystic Meg impression. It will happen, or at least a variant of it. A pledge, not a promise, Colin!
Suki
Comment is about Sanitary Towels For Men (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
Thank you so much fot your kind words Kim. I shall do just that ?
Comment is about Kim Whysall-Hammond (poet profile)
Original item by Kim Whysall-Hammond
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 30th May 2017 21:34
always room for a good laugh John,and you've given me one(not literally,one hastens to add!?) with this well worked pearler.
ta muchly.
R?se....?
Comment is about Cock's Away! (blog)
Original item by John Andrew Nield
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 30th May 2017 21:27
Tue 30th May 2017 20:22
Thank you Colin. I tend to get in the flow and just write it how it comes to me. I think that some of the 'rawness' is lost once the poem is tinkered with. I do think that if I took time to edit, then I could avoid repeating words and other possibly 'lazy' aspects of my writing. I think WoL is a great forum to get some critique and feedback. I may enter some competitions, & see how that goes. I would love to one day be a published writer. In the meantime I shall continue to take on board any feedback and improve. Thank you for taking the time to comment.
Comment is about Life Loved To Death (blog)
Original item by Liam
Just wanted to say thanks a lot for liking my poem Home Straight, Connor. Hope your original work continues to thrive on WOL!
Ray
Comment is about Connor Lannes (poet profile)
Original item by Connor Lannes
Thanks gents for liking my extravaganza. I should have said that no reputations were harmed in the writing of this poem.
Keith I thank you for reading and listening.
I enjoyed your comment, David. No reason why experiments should not be indulged in in confined spaces, even to having government funded visitations by professionals to ease those long nights, surely? Health and safety may of course be a problem.
Col. I apologize for your brevity but the thought was there!
Thanks.
Mark, I loved your small but highly significant true story, told in the best possible taste, unlike my own . Silverlawns is such a great name too. Perhaps I may use it in a future poem?
Love to all. Ray
Comment is about HOME STRAIGHT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
cheers all. i dont believe i suffer any more or less than anyone else subjectively. objectively of course, i go through an absolute fraction of what some people face. grief always struck me as a very personal thing, relative to age. when a bird i rescued died after three nights i believe my ten year old self mourned the way one may mourn the death of a child or a parent. whose suffering is greater, the child who loses his teddy bear or the adult who loses a son or daughter. objectively, its a no contest. but at the time i expect the sense of injustice and disarray is quite the same.
who knows. this didnt start out as a poem about manchester, but im pleased people enjoyed it and shoots grew out of it.
Comment is about my pain and sadness is more sad and painful than yours (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I have been entranced with the ancient relics left in Wessex since a child. I'm glad you liked my attempt to show what still fascinates me.
Comment is about Chalklands (blog)
Original item by Kim Whysall-Hammond
Nice one. I could imagine this being a whole children's book , with a verse per page, and someone like Quentin Blake illustrating it.
Comment is about 'Pet Project'! (blog)
Original item by John Andrew Nield
MC. Thank you for a poem which deals well with man´s´unwarranted intervention with nature. Keith
Comment is about BY ANY OTHER NAME (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hi John. Thanks for commenting on "shut thi Clack" & "Sylvie".
I'm reading and enjoying some of your stuff at present, and I'll leave some comments when I've read more.
Welcome to the site by the way. I hope you get as much out of it as I do. I'm new to writing poetry so it's only by receiving comments that I know how I'm doing. All the best.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about John Andrew Nield (poet profile)
Original item by John Andrew Nield
Thank you all of you for your kind and encouraging words. I'm not even sure of how to respond to comments yet as it isn't obvious?
I have hundreds of poems already written and hundreds to come I am sure. Feeling lucky to have found a platform with like-minded lovelies ?
Comment is about Milestones (blog)
Original item by Candi
Good one, Hazel. Much enjoyed.
Since you want the idea of 'speed', would you read this aloud to yourself, to judge whether there are a few words that could be omitted? Words that block the headlong plunge being described? It would make a huge difference. Like your haiku.
Always with respect,
Cynthia
Comment is about Earsplitting (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Kim Whysall-Hammond
Thu 1st Jun 2017 13:54
I really like this one. I get a bit lost at the end, but I guess that's the point!
Comment is about A Poem on the Purpose of Metaphor and Simile (blog)
Original item by Dana Lyn