Sounds perfect!! Only 6 bottles of vodka?! I love the lines -
smile at every opportunity to every one
Avoid everyone

Nice xx

Comment is about Hotel (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Stu,
I`m doddering now, don`t condemn me to live for another 351 years :)

Oh for those happy, days of Newtonian equations when all was so beautifully and deterministically clear -before
those `orrible quantum guys got us all so particulatedly
lost in all those gluons and quarks and photons.

Judging by the scientists sense of bewilderment at the end of a recent quantum program, they seem to be in grave danger of delving into metaphysics via physics...If
so, where will we all be next?

I understand the sense with which you use the word `comprehend`, but a more important question for me is why any of us should be alive.

Comment is about mechanics (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

I'm trying to see what difference the structure of this poem makes.

I'd like to learn when and whether you should use capital letters at the start of all new lines, even if it is still the same clause / sentence.

What's the rule about this? Any feedback please.

Comment is about Just another cover up (blog)

Original item by David Addington

I agree, the enemy is often your own ego.
Well portrayed.

Comment is about The enemy (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Love your outlook on trees, I never looked at them in that specific way. I tend to look at them from a more general point of view admiring their beauty from far. I will now appreciate them a little more :)
Thank you!

Comment is about Trees (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

There's a psychological truth in this - the enemy do exist in the material sense but must first be created in the minds and beliefs to be made real. (My opinion only).
In an international stage enemies can vary according to political expedience. It's all frightening stuff.

Ray

Comment is about The enemy (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

You make peace with yourself
conflict has not been engaged
emotional forces have no choice
the enemy has to retreat.

Comment is about The enemy (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

You take us into a world of a master who has not a slave but a goddess of love who stirs him to be aroused in this erotic sexual dream that no mere mortal can enter.

Comment is about The Temptation of St Anthony (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

A pragmatic and workable solution to the meaning of the universe that we experience in the here and now!

Ray

Comment is about we live alone (blog)

Original item by joe ranter

Thanks for your input Vicki. I don't do church either, but weddings and christenings oblige us on the odd occasion.
Interesting that you have "lapsed" as they say. I suppose you couldn't confess this in the church itself - your membership having run out as it were. !

Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I'm in agreement with the proceeding comments.
Your New Years Eve piece is wonderful Ian.
Cheers.

Comment is about NEW YEARS EVE (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Thanks Stu for your thoughtful comment and yes that line is this backdrop and the sabotaging brackets

Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

thanks for your lovely comment Robert . i think the brackets are something of a counter voice , but i do see what you mean . thanks again

Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

Thanks Vicki for taking the time to comment , glad it resonates and yes the brackets are exactly that

Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

These lines portray a humanity that travels in hope yet
acknowledges despair along our journey to "lights out".
They have a consistency in their content that is indicative
of a fertile imagination allied to an understanding of human
fears and hopes, and the poem is entirely appropriate for a New Year's Eve.

Comment is about NEW YEARS EVE (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Thank you Lynn for reading.

Comment is about brandon sproule (poet profile)

Original item by brandon sproule

I recall a line from long-ago biblical teachings to the effect
that it was sinful to hide one's light under a bushel - or
words to that effect, indicating that we should make the
most of whatever "gifts" we are given that reach out to
others. These lines allow for that whilst accepting the
ultimate solitary nature of creative thinking and the finality
of physical life as we know it - and the acceptance of
that reality without rancour.

Comment is about we live alone (blog)

Original item by joe ranter

I don't do church anymore - I'm a 'recovering catholic' - I like this very much!!

Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I could use this as my mantra - I really enjoyed it & identify on all levels! I also agree with Stu I like the brackets - to me it's like my inner voice talking - you know the one you can't turn off but wish you could! Nice one xx

Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

It does that! Nice one x

Comment is about manifesto (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Harry, I feel that a full conversion is overdue ....
thanks for commenting. Whatever is over there, I think those are human concepts!!

Stu, Don't bug me, man! The passing of wind is a good analogy and highly embarrassing for the deliverer no doubt. Is there humour in church ? Cynicism never bodes well for the aspirant.

Ray

Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)

Original item by ray pool

It's so hard - but remember karma is a bitch & comes back to bite you hard!! One of my favourite quotes

If you sit by the river long enough, the bodies of you're minutes will come floating by

Xx

Comment is about Frustration (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

i dont think we do! i hoped the scattered effect would show the scattershot thoughts and feelings associated with a quest for ones identity. thanks for reading!

Comment is about manifesto (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

It's a wonderful picture you paint Ian - I do not have your age or wisdom but your sentiment is one I follow closely - I especially like the line

What better epitaph can a man leave than he understood hope as a friend ....

Lovely - hope the new year brings everything you hope for xx

Comment is about NEW YEARS EVE (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Do any of us really know? People make up their own minds we can only love ourselves & hope others follow our lead! The scattered layout is an interesting effect - I like it x

Comment is about manifesto (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Very true - I try to not regret & 'live life to the full & to the brim' - lovely x

Comment is about we live alone (blog)

Original item by joe ranter

Hi there stu
The environment was inspired mostly by the mad max universe, and fallout (see also the mad max universe ;) )

There are two giveaways:
The phrase 'big iron holstered on his hip" is from a Marty Robbins song 'big iron' that was featured in New Vegas, and also lead me into a two(?) day tequila soaked binge of 'Have Gun Will Travel.
The song is playing in my head as we speak.

Second, the title of Jack the Chaser from Anarchy Reigns, which is again a sci Fi western. A wreckless bounty hunter mostly motivated by revenge, he has a motherfucking chainsaw for an arm. A common theme in a lot of my sketches or writing is amputation, rewiring, rebuilding, home surgeries and stolen body parts--no matter what it takes to stay together until closure can be found.

The character in this particular piece has been resewn so many times the only thing left of his original form is his intent. I heavily romantisize that model of antihero, and I don't really like to think about what it might be saying about me

Comment is about Jack the Chaser (12/30/2015) (blog)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

Ray,
Tell me where your church is, quick! In mine they have a Guy nailed up on a wooden cross (he doesn`t look a bit happy)and every now and then a priest gets up on the pulpit and blissfully cushions me soothing little bits of information about Death, Judgement, Hell and Heaven.

Your place sounds much more amenable :)

Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)

Original item by ray pool

This is beautiful.

Comment is about Christmas Eve (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

Thanks very much for your kind and thoughtful comments.

Comment is about The View (blog)

Original item by David Lindsay

Hi Stu Thanks fpor kind comment on 'Ode to Cobalt'.

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

ray i like your angry side. i call it 'red ray'. i am also enjoying these shorter pieces. the naughty word stands out like a fart in a silent sermon. excellent.

Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)

Original item by ray pool

great piece. i disagree with robert (purely a personal choice however) and think the brackets add an important fractured backstory. the key line here is 'does she wish i was another'. so much said in so few words

Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

this is very reminscent of the gunslinger by stephen king. was it a source of inspiration? either way its a great piece. very evocative.

Comment is about Jack the Chaser (12/30/2015) (blog)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

Um well thank you

Comment is about bluelit 2 (12/23/2015) (blog)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

I very much enjoyed this. I've come to read it a few times in the last couple of days and have been hoping for some words to show up to express how much I liked it beyond 'i liked it' but sorry that's all I have. Like Lea has said it is beautiful :)

Comment is about bluelit 2 (12/23/2015) (blog)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

Mr Sproule

You have such a distinctive way with words. Read each of your blogs which makes very good reading.

Mrs Hamilton

Comment is about brandon sproule (poet profile)

Original item by brandon sproule

I like this work on many levels, but I'm not sure on the bracketed passages - do they add enough to halt the flow, as they seem to in my mind?
Love the flavour of regret, and the false conviction in the quest to quit.

Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

Thank you all for your comments on Lunacy. I must admit this is a result of brain damage, as a friend recently introduced me to Chambord and Prosecco! I do remember reading something about moons and thought - Oh go on then, I'll have a go at that. I did have to look through my fingers at what I had wrote the next day. Phew..... I may just have got away with it. Cheers all. xxx

Comment is about Lunacy (blog)

I like this very much - I too have a sideways point of view!

Comment is about strangers' meeting (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I live in boots - comfort all the way! I like the disjointedness (if that's even a word!) of this, it works really well xx

Comment is about ...and a new pair of shoes (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Not sure Patrico of your purpose at a rhyming slag on my post but well done ... If you don't like please feel free not to comment

Happy new year

Comment is about Urgh.... (blog)

Original item by Ria Richardson

Hey Spotty xx

Comment is about steve pottinger (poet profile)

Original item by steve pottinger

That`s not schmaltz John, that line eleven chimes too sadly upwards and downwards for it to be schmaltz.

Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Many thanks for your kind comments, George. It is a strange time for dads in particular as they grow older and their interests move from playing with Daft Dad to clothes and make-up and boyfriends.
I was quite pleased with the way it's got a big cog in the last verse, Harry, moving out of rinky-dinky schmaltz to a more powerful plane. It seems to work well in performance with a bit of ham acting!

Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks for your comments guys.

Comment is about I Love You Mum (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

That's a beautiful poem John. I have a daughter who is 4, and I am enjoying her sense of innocence, joy and wonder of the world. I get anxious thinking about her growing up, but know that all I can do is to be there when she needs me. Great poem.

Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks sir .Looking forward to it .

Comment is about Divya Rathod (poet profile)

Original item by Divya Rathod

Especially yours ;)

Comment is about Sandra Meryem (poet profile)

Original item by Sandra Meryem

John,
What a lovely poem!

I`ve just been experimenting with the Limerick form for satire, and herè`s you demonstrating what can be done with it at the tender edge of poetry...it`s something - to me at least - of a revelation.

(I like the metrically canny way you`ve apostrophised the
you`re)

Regarding the top four...watch your back! (and again, will you sell us Kane?

Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)

Original item by John Coopey