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David Subacchi

Tue 5th Feb 2013 22:39

You can catch more of my work including videos by searching on SUBACCHI+POEM.

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Tue 5th Feb 2013 20:50

Wonderful night, congratulations to Irina and Michael for spawning such a wonderful brainchild. I felt like I'd been transported back - back to Haight Ashbury in the sixties, to the London performance poetry scene in the eighties, to a kind of heaven where words sing and the bizarre, beautiful and brazen are all bedfellows. Thank you.

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Shirley Smothers

Tue 5th Feb 2013 19:25

https://soundcloud.com/professor-doctor/deep-down-inside-by-smothers

Hello Nigel. Thank you for commenting on my poem "Deep Down Inside". Your comment is much better than my poem. I have provided a link to the sound cloud recording. I can't believe someone actually recorded this to audio. LOL!

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Chris Co

Tue 5th Feb 2013 18:50

Note; not the poem - the audio is the poem.

Give me a liberal Christian every day of the week over a Tory. Money as religion disturbs me more than most things in the New Testament..

There's certainly much more dogma in pursuit of it.

5 Loaves 2 fish.
share your sweets.
How many Tory's would?

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Chris Co

Tue 5th Feb 2013 15:16

Thx Frederick - feedback appreciated.

Thank you to all who read.

Best Chris

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Greg Freeman

Tue 5th Feb 2013 12:20

Masterly, John.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 5th Feb 2013 12:08

Just seen your edited version of this, Fiona. Nice work.

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imprisonedbeauty

Tue 5th Feb 2013 10:58

First night was a total success - full house, fantastic performers, incredible atmosphere - went on until 11pm without losing any of its flair. Many of us stayed for drinks afterwards and had a great time. The Library Bar is a perfect venue and a lovely place for sipping red wine and writing poetry :)

Next one on the 4th of March! Don't miss it!

xx
Irina

Review is about Until the Light Goes Out on 4 Feb 2013 (event)

tony sheridan

Tue 5th Feb 2013 10:12

Great poem. I enjoyed reading this. Well done! Take care, Tony.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 5th Feb 2013 08:09

Evocative. Deceptively simple - must have actually been difficult to construct. Enjoyed this, Ray. It nicely pinpoints the double-edged nature of intense positive experiences.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 5th Feb 2013 00:06

You're back! I like this. It invites the reader to both feel life and think about it. The climbing image is effective, doubly so because you're clearly drawing on your own experience.

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Katy Megan Hughes

Mon 4th Feb 2013 21:16

Very beautifully put Nigel! Katy

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Ian Whiteley

Mon 4th Feb 2013 20:28

Steve
Love it mate - how can we MAKE IT happen?

Ian

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Mon 4th Feb 2013 19:51

Enjoyed this very much-very descriptive and it works perfectly. I could feel the ground under my feet!

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Greg Freeman

Mon 4th Feb 2013 19:32

Thanks for the tip about no 5, Robert. It turns that issue no 52 of Magma in which the latest example of Christian Ward's plagiarism appeared was called Putting On The Mask. He obviously felt this was a theme that was just up his street.

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steve pottinger

Mon 4th Feb 2013 17:46

Always make me smile, John! Great stuff. How about "... splash out on as *are* read"?

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steve pottinger

Mon 4th Feb 2013 17:41

Poetry24 published a version of this a few days ago, but I left out one of the stanzas to sneak in under their 40-line limit. ;-)

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John Coopey

Mon 4th Feb 2013 17:40

Ray raises a good point about "he may splash out on as he's read". I agree that it isn't quite right although "when he's read" doesn't do it either. This would mean he's splashing out on his dirty book after he's read it. I'm trying to burn both ends of the pun ("splashed out" = spent money and ejaculated); so clearly he'd have spent money on it before he's read it.
I'm struggling to get these concepts in 10 iambic syllables. Any suggestions would be helpful.
In contrast, I'm happy with my original "wife-man's nagging" rather than "wife's man-nagging". "Wife-man/men" was the forebear of "woman/women".

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Frances Spurrier

Mon 4th Feb 2013 17:28

Great interview and insight into the world of performance poetry. Thanks Mark/Greg. Love the name of the website.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 4th Feb 2013 16:53

Remember - you don't have to live in the county: just have some lines that relate to it. It's a great concept that could be used to enriching effect across all the other counties.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 4th Feb 2013 16:36

To think that people believed that the Bard would never have a "Selby" date! No wonder he headed south where his product is still untainted on the shelf!!

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Mon 4th Feb 2013 14:17

Now we're at 5. Magma Poetry has just issued an apology for publishing Christian Ward's "Newton's First Law of Motion" which is identical, except for a few words, to Matthew Olzmann's "Sir Isaac Newton's First Law of Motion". Ward's version was printed in March 2012. Olzmann's appeared in the New England Review, Winter 2009/2010.

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Ray Miller

Mon 4th Feb 2013 12:45

Great idea, well executed.

And eke he may his wife-man’s nagging halt - I know it's meant to be faux Shakespearean but "eke"!"wife's man - nagging" might be better. Either way it's a line to stop and think about.

Forsooth he may splash out on as he’s read - wouldn't "when he's read" be plainer?
Much enjoyed

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Nigel Astell

Mon 4th Feb 2013 11:50

A promiscuous curse from the tombs of enchantment sealed with the blood of your total sacrifice.

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Travis Brow

Mon 4th Feb 2013 10:30

Thanks John, i've often thought smell the most powerful of the senses. Apparently, some scientists now think there are quantum aspects involved.

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tony sheridan

Mon 4th Feb 2013 10:15

Nice one John! The garden shed.....a castle! Take care, Tony.

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tony sheridan

Mon 4th Feb 2013 10:12

OUCH! Nice one Hugh! Take care, Tony.

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Fkx

Mon 4th Feb 2013 09:30

It would appear that you are new here to WOL, welcome!
Of what your sampler shares with us, I definitely would love to read more of your work. Hope to see more soon. Thanks for sharing.

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Fkx

Mon 4th Feb 2013 09:17

The cadence provided rhythmic symmetry, its rhymes flowing without burden on the listening ear. A pleasant read. Thanks for sharing.

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Fkx

Mon 4th Feb 2013 09:09

Aw! This is an absolute joy to read. Crisp in execution, thank you for sharing.

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John Coopey

Mon 4th Feb 2013 07:59

My days of being "picked up by the fuzz" are long gone, I'm afraid. These days I'm a pillock of the community.

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John Coopey

Mon 4th Feb 2013 07:56

Tom,
Which shop is this?
I generally have to peep under the changing room curtain.

Comment is about Day 1 - Mirrored Glass (blog)

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John Coopey

Mon 4th Feb 2013 07:49

I was knackered just reading it!

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Greg Freeman

Mon 4th Feb 2013 07:46

Good for you, MC! I've just found another one I like, a football poem called Coiled Blue http://www3.hants.gov.uk/poem-85.htm

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John Coopey

Mon 4th Feb 2013 07:43

Thankyou for you comments on "Going Home Time", Yvonne. Good to hear that you're from vergernal stock. I don't suppose it's given you a thing about the uniform, has it?

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John Coopey

Mon 4th Feb 2013 07:41

Thankyou for you comments on "Going Home Time", MC. Yes, the quality of sitting alone in the Abbey owes a lot to the knowledge that timeless thousands have done so before.

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Fkx

Mon 4th Feb 2013 06:14

Shape poem! And with a meaning and wonderful scenes and description. I didn't need the photo to aid my imagination. Thanks for sharing.

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Fkx

Mon 4th Feb 2013 06:02

Hey Wez! Thanks for your much welcome comments:

"Clever piece, and well written. :)"

You are gratefully appreciated. Cheers.

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Fkx

Mon 4th Feb 2013 06:00

Thank you kindly for your kind words of comment on my poem about legal tender:

"Even more binding when you think that money is
usually exchanged for some sort of service."

You are most appreciated, Harry.
Best regards, Frederick

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Fkx

Mon 4th Feb 2013 05:53

Thank you kindly, Yvonne, for your kind words in response to my poem about legal tender:

"clever piece, so much said in so few words. well constructed. I enjoyed it."

You are most appreciated. Cheers.

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Mike Hilton

Sun 3rd Feb 2013 20:38

I like the lay out and the way you have used this to create the picture and I can smell the foliage!

Nice one Yvonne

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 3rd Feb 2013 19:00

I agree with Greg. I have visited the site - and recalling a "Christmas" poem I was inspired to write when visiting family, I submitted it for consideration. I was also moved to comment on another poem on their poetry map. An excellent concept! I hope it reaches its aim of "200" poems.

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Jimmy Andrex

Sun 3rd Feb 2013 18:33

Sorry you feel that way Stephen, but I'm glad you enjoyed the evenings. The last cancellation was outside our control, and we both turned up because we care about our audience. It's very easy to make negative comments, but I can assure you that putting spoken word events on isn't easy, especially as we receive no external funding whatsoever. I don't know what you're trying to achieve by posting negative reports, but you're still always welcome, ( I particularly enjoyed the poem you read in November). In fact, the drinks are on us if you come on Thursday, I think it'll be a really good evening.
All the best
Jimmy Andrex

Review is about Red Shed Readings on 7 Feb 2013 (event)

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 3rd Feb 2013 18:31

Cheers Tom :o)

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Sun 3rd Feb 2013 18:18

Have to stop reading a 'mo Harry-
while I have a scratch....x

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 3rd Feb 2013 17:48

Anarchy equals "Freedom"?? How so? Surely it equates with "chaos".
Let us hope that the organised (as opposed to chaotic) forces of law and order track down those responsible for the crime.

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Sun 3rd Feb 2013 17:46

Very nice Steve.x

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Sun 3rd Feb 2013 17:44

Enjoyed the the descent!x

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 3rd Feb 2013 17:38

How secure can the Emir of Qatar feel if his regime sees fit to punish a poet so harshly for expressing a view? - the function of poets down the ages. There is reason to suspect that the speed of change in the Arab world, shown and perhaps promoted by modern communications like the internet, is causing a whiplash reaction from those who feel threatened by the wider realities of change in that world. Is a poet to be less feared in such an environment? As the question has it: How do you kill an idea?
Let us hope the Qatari judicial system acts to reduce the grotesque sentence and replace it with something more appropriate to a world that will otherwise leave it far behind.

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Wez Jefferies

Sun 3rd Feb 2013 17:06

Yes I probably should have tried to give this piece a bit more of an aim Philip, and I'm no more a socialist than a capitalist.

And Malcom X said many things, it's a shame that his more violent ideas are most of what you see but in many ways he was similar to MLK. And I would say that yes we are lucky to live in one of the parts of the world with relative luxary and freedom, but I would say we are generally only allowed to ask 'why?' within set social boundaries.

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