<Deleted User> (8659)
Mon 5th Nov 2012 09:26
Thanks for your comments on 'The Vikings' John - as usual your grasp of the situation is uncanny: In the 'ead, right I certainly aint!
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
As you say Greg, familiar themes, a ready identification, and a style of autobioographical poetic story telling we of a certain age are comfortable with. Amazing how a phrase or sentence carries a whole page or chapter of meaning.
Comment is about Work Horses: David Cooke (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I saw this the other day and wanted to come back to comment on it.
It struck me as funny, profound, and sad in many ways...
Communicating with people around the world is just a click away these days! How some people conduct their relationships - both in a public forum, and void of any delicate, intimate interactions, that in the past would be necessary to cement any long lasting relationship, has become quite complex. I think though that if modern technology is used appropriately, and only as an introduction - can lead to something more substantial, but there has to be interest beyond the fascade often presented online and in ambiguous text messages for it to develop and endure - otherwise you are living in la la land...
Comment is about Modern love (blog)
Original item by Freda Davis
"becoming a bit of a grumpy old woman recently."
Hmm, can only give you one out of three there Ann. :)
Regards, A.E :)
Comment is about absent friends (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Hi Wez,
I've been reading through your posts (you may wish to post them at wider intervals, they stay up longer and don't disappear from view, giving people longer to read and comment.) Interesting and relevant social/political observation. The best way to get feedback is usually to comment on other blogged poems - and respond via profiles. Welcome to WOL by the way! Hope you enjoy it here.
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about I might look like a mortal man to you (blog)
Original item by Wez Jefferies
Hi Freda,
Reminded me very much of Wendy Cope's style this one - not a bad thing in my humble estimation!
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Modern love (blog)
Original item by Freda Davis
Am definitely setting my alarm clock after reading this Yvonne! "Procrastination . . . " etc!
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Forever (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
The most important words in this poem are those you so eloquently don't use. :)
Regards,
A.E. x
Comment is about Small Talk (blog)
Original item by Isobel
John, you've answered a question that's been on my mind forever . . . "What should our natural reaction be to politicians?"
Maybe, when WE recognise . . .
As always - cause for thought.
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Ape Shit (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
"Oh what a tangled web we weave,
When first we practise to deceive!"
Sir walter Scott - "Marmion."
"The blood still runs the same."
Great conclusion Katy; love and hormones have a lot to answer for! :)
Regards,
A.E. :)
Comment is about Hidden Agendas (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Thanks for your comment Greg - glad you liked it. I think my poetic juices have started flowing again - phewwww. I've got one brewing about dog fouling at the moment - that one will be for the poetry tree :)
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Yep - sure was complicated at the time!! Quirky was the intention. Thanks for your comment, will try and make it a bit sharper : )
katy
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Funny, but ewww...
If you haven't - you should send it in for the Poet-Tree!
kingwilliam@kingsland.wakefield.sch.uk
Comment is about A contented nit (blog)
Original item by hugh
Beautifully said - love it - completely : )
Comment is about Small Talk (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Ann - your poem is so delightful - love it!
Comment is about Your poems wanted for school’s poet tree (article)
Original item by Julian Jordon
This is a fine poem, Isobel, that says a hell of a lot in just a few lines. That thing about the weather is clever, too.
Comment is about Small Talk (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Thanks for the feedback :) I only started writing a few weeks ago.
I'm against violent uprisings, they only end in a violent system and it just means the person with the most guns wins. But I think some sort of profound change in people's perceptions of the way goverments and big businesses run would be a good start!
Comment is about Lack of information is obscene and cronic (blog)
Original item by Wez Jefferies
tony sheridan
Sun 4th Nov 2012 19:22
Love this! Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Wez Jefferies (poet profile)
Original item by Wez Jefferies
It sounds like you have a complicated life - it took me some time to work out the first verse :)
If you chopped the odd syllable, particularly in the second verse, it could skip along like a child's rhyme.
Comment is about Hidden Agendas (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Thanks for your comments on mine John. Yes - I'm experimenting with a more simple style at the moment. I need to get back to comedy at some point - will have to hone my rhyming talent for that :)
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
This made me laugh. Great social commentary and the introduction was hilarious.
Comment is about Posh Tramps (blog)
Original item by Cathy Crabb
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Sun 4th Nov 2012 18:56
Hi Wez
I think what you've written is brilliant.
But please postpone the Western spring till I'm dead and gone, I wouldn't wish to inhabit a world where it's going take another five hundred years while you fill the vacuum with a society, which would no doubt eventually, mirror the one we live in today.
Upheaval of the system on a scale you have in mind will create just as much misery and injustice,(probably more) than we enjoy at the present. We're still evolving! there'll be no peace until, in maybe a thousand years, when religion is a past superstition. And we live in a United States of the World.
Great stuff though. KED.
Comment is about Lack of information is obscene and cronic (blog)
Original item by Wez Jefferies
Thanks for your comments everyone.
Yes Chris, I could probably have made it sparser and made a neater point about small talk. I don't think I could have made it sparser and also got across the mood and mental images I wanted to create though.
Cathy's comment says it all for me, in not many words - huge small talk. :)
Comment is about Small Talk (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Haha - yes you've hit the nail on the head with those posters and that is most certainly the type of thing I'm referring to.
Your reaction I must say is very much my own on this one lol. The odd thing is that so many genuinely nice people and friends say/promote such things.
I reserve condemnation for the issue and don't think of it in the context of the people involved - I absolve them - no blame here.
I usually just walk off and sigh - like so many others.
But whoa!!!
When you learn to do that
thing that you fear more; the
more you become fearless.
And then you discover that
the only power fear ever had;
Was the power you gave it.
Ohhhh dear!
Or you realize nothing because it's too late and maybe your dead lol. Fear is obviously a very important emotion that has evolved - it has done so to protect us. For the most part it not only does a good job; it is absolutely vital!
In modern life it could be that having no fear sees you; wave goodbye to your job, house, stocks, marriage etc etc.
Again one of those all encompassing pearls of wisdom :( Mmmmm marvellous.
P.S
Facebook like many other tools will outlive its use, become outmoded, or be ditched for one reason or another. Perception is crucial in its success, if that fades then it's all over for Facebook.
How long it lasts will be based to some degree on the ability of those running it; to identify problem issues and tackle them.
Comment is about Superstition (blog)
Original item by Chris Co
I was surprised by the relative sparseness of the language. Sparse-ish short-ish, neat, implied yet accessible.
Good to confound expectations with differing styles now and then. Far more interesting than a certain red wheelbarrow imo.
Could the poem be tighter, truly sparse and still retain its essence? I think it could, with some work. But either way - Enjoyable -
Best
Chris
Comment is about Small Talk (blog)
Original item by Isobel
It reminds me of the final verse of Bob Dylan's Desolation Row.
"Yes, I received your letter yesterday
About the time that the door-knob
broke
Then you ask me how I'm doing,
Is that some kind of joke?"
It's what Paul Simon called "The Dangling Conversation".
Comment is about Small Talk (blog)
Original item by Isobel
This would go well with an audio, Y. It would put me out my misery of deciding whether it has deliberate metre or deliberately not.
Comment is about Forever (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Hello y. I'm afraid 'nick nocky' is entirely the work of kd. It was my tribute and cheeky contribution to the discussion on experimental poetry in the blog 'william carlos williams red wheelbarrow'.
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
<Deleted User> (8659)
Sun 4th Nov 2012 11:38
Liked the way you pulled it around at the end-good poem Ann, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment is about absent friends (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
steve mellor
Sun 4th Nov 2012 11:31
'Like' is probably the wrong word, but I do find it a painfully accurate reflection of the lives of many people.
How does one get past the minutae, into a more meaningful discussion/relationship?
Who takes the first step, or are both sides of the conversation culpable?
Comment is about Small Talk (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Yuk yuk yuk! I love the idea of the teacher being the source of all nits - the turning on the head of conventional thought :))
Very funny. Did you write this for the school poetry tree?
Comment is about A contented nit (blog)
Original item by hugh
Mikhail, thank you so much x
Comment is about Mikhail Smith (poet profile)
Original item by Mikhail Smith
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 4th Nov 2012 09:41
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 4th Nov 2012 09:39
So very enjoyable.
(in a sad way)
Comment is about THE LONG HARM OF LOVE (blog)
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 4th Nov 2012 09:37
Oh Yvonne!
we thank you for this one.
(no rhyme intended)xx
Comment is about Forever (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
One from me...
Cats and dogs
When I go walking in the park
(promise I won’t go when it’s dark!)
I like to take my friend with me
He is a dog, he’s called Pippy!
He’s quite small but his tail is big
He’s got long hair, not like a pig!
He always smiles, he just can’t frown
He cheers me up when things seem down.
We love to jump into the leaves
All piled up beneath the trees
Sometimes we’re muddy – we don’t care!
With wet raincoat and soggy hair!
But when I get back where it’s warm
Another friend sits by my arm
All cosy on the red settee
My lovely cat – called Anne-Marie!
Comment is about Your poems wanted for school’s poet tree (article)
Original item by Julian Jordon
Thanks guys - was written as a bit of a mickey-take of myself really - becoming a bit of a grumpy old woman recently! :)
Comment is about absent friends (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
I find this one a tough read. To me it speaks of bitterness of how things are. I like the line that says................the guilt of love becomes a quilt of soot. So very true in more ways than one.
Nice work Yosh!
Keep posting.
Best wishes
Mike
Comment is about THE LONG HARM OF LOVE (blog)
Hi Tommy, I like this one, or rather, it intrigues me. Not sure why, but it might be the second stanza whereby you say....as all that is will come about with out you being ready!
I am wondering what it is you refer to here. Looking at the poem as whole I get the drift of it, but still it leaves me feeling that perhaps there is a missing stanza. Maybe you intended this, maybe not. It is quite clever in its shortness and brevity, and leaves you wanting more.
Best wishes,
Mike
Comment is about Applause (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
steve mellor
Sun 4th Nov 2012 06:36
Yvonne, thanks for taking the time to read and comment
The Ofsted thing is part of my ongoing battle to stop writing about people who may go into a school, which came about with the little WOL campaign to write/submit poems that would go on the Poet-tree at Kingsland School
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
steve mellor
Sun 4th Nov 2012 06:34
The perfect girl, paying for my drinks while I pub ramble . .good one Hugh .
Comment is about Completely Bald (blog)
Original item by hugh
Gentle humour releasing the tension from fraught circumstances. Well done, love it. xx
Comment is about A forgotten proposal (blog)
Original item by hugh
I trust that this is not plagiarism, John, and that Doddy has not registered these words as intellectual property.
To be hypercritical for a moment I feel that the alliteration is a little overworked but apart from that, if this is a tribute to the great and wonderful Ken, penned by your own fair hand ( not that I've had a close-up of your hand so the bit about fair is poetic licence and you can feel free to ignore it if you so wish) erm where was I? Oh yes, If you wrote it then all the literary analysis by our learned colleagues in praise of its poetic skill and artistry is actually praising you and your work not Doddy's.
Comment is about Experimental Poetry (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Anthony Emmerson
Mon 5th Nov 2012 10:32
Testing? Yes it is, especially the pronunciation. Any chance of an audio - and link to the original? SW will love this!
Regards,
A.E. :)
Comment is about testing (blog)
Original item by Poetry in Translation Group