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John Embley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 23:41

Just been reading a book on the 'Anthropic Cosmological Principle', which seems to argue, in its strongest case, that the Universe exists as it does because we're in it ... I can't quite get my head around that one, so wrote this, trying to reason it out ...

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Dave Bradley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 23:37

Enjoyed this John. I still remember the sense of shock at John White's death - he was a great player in a great team. I saw Spurs beat Sheffield Wednesday 4-0 7th April 1962 and wish I could remember more about the day - I think he was playing but Google won't confirm.

Dave (Evertonian)

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Dave Bradley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 23:15

I can't remember one of yours that I've liked as much Jeff (doesn't mean there isn't one, I've got a rotten memory). I go up on the hills in these sort of conditions and am barmy enough to enjoy it and it really brought memories to life for me. Excellent!

PS You could try a GPS unit but maybe the poetry would suffer

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Dave Bradley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 23:06

Found this and thought it excellent then noticed you posting another one as I write, which is completely different - experimental. Both of them work for me.

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 21st Jul 2011 22:45

Hi Amy, like the two part thing, some great lines as I would expect from you, now you had best get some gardening done! See ya soon Jeff X

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 21st Jul 2011 22:32

Hi John, I had tears in my eyes the last night at Burnden Park, in those immortal words Kenneth Wolstenholme, life long Bolton fan said 'They think its all over, it is now' Theres a sadness that wipes out an old football stadium things can never be the same.

I didnt know Spurs had a ghost in John White, bit before my time - I thought Martin Peters was the ghost! Anyway really enjoyed this, nice memories of great times and players, know you like my poem about Nat, all the best Jeff

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Rachel Bond

Thu 21st Jul 2011 22:05

great poem jeff :)

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jul 2011 21:53

John White - struck by lightning in 1964.

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 21st Jul 2011 21:37

Really like this mate, conjures up fond images of a seaside holiday, love the analogy with the Beatles song and nice ended, nice one! Jeff

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 21st Jul 2011 20:56

Fantastic poem Stella, took me back a good few yesrs, lovely lines and images, really enjoyed it. Mind you main thing I remember is the bloody tide coming in too quick just as I had sorted the flamin moat out! Jeff X

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Lizzie

Thu 21st Jul 2011 20:50

Thanks.
I think the paragraphs represent the sense of urgency I felt when I wrote it.

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Philipos

Thu 21st Jul 2011 20:19

Delightful - thought you wrote recently about writer's block somewhere or am I thinking of someone else!

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Philipos

Thu 21st Jul 2011 20:08

Hi Cynthia - I agree with what others have said and water never fails to inspire me either be it coastal or inland rivers

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Mysty Brett

Thu 21st Jul 2011 19:43

Hi Cynthia,

replying to your comment on my page; yep that is really weird! It was nice to meet you yesterday, and I look forwards to reading some of your poetry here soon.

: - ) Mary

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Dave Carr

Thu 21st Jul 2011 18:18

Thanks for the comments.
Ray. I wasn't too happy about the double use of all although they are in a different context. W.B Yeats gets away with it twice in 'He wishes for the cloths of heaven.'
I could change it to
All for one and one for all, pull together is the call
Maybe that sounds better.
"Tread softly because you tread on my dreams"
Dave

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Francine

Thu 21st Jul 2011 17:35

Nothing else can compare - I have already told you how much I LOVE
this one - so happy to read it again : )

xxx

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Francine

Thu 21st Jul 2011 17:30

'Excess Memories' is a compassionate write.

Especially liked these lines:

'At a man she then barely knew who tried to overwrite
Jaundiced views of men gained from events afore that night
Shaking from exhaustion as dryness came to end that spell
Face bathed with flannel and water to freshen her well'


Hope you are well...

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Dave Bradley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 17:23

What an interesting form. Knowing nothing of it previously, I suspect these are good examples of it - they certainly work for me.

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Francine

Thu 21st Jul 2011 17:21

You can read so much into this... Descriptive and intense.

These lines stand out for me:

'unfurnished heart'
'slick and vindictive'
'torpid, into the gulf'

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Dave Bradley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 17:16

I like this very much, Stella

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Francine

Thu 21st Jul 2011 17:16

Beautiful little gems, Cynthia, written about things I love.
I have felt so uninspired to write anything lately...
I will try a few Diamante's : )

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 21st Jul 2011 17:06

Stefan is right. This is brief and powerful - I like 'toxic like kisses' which brings 'kisses' into place to highlight 'misses'. Well done. How did the exams go?

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jul 2011 16:50

Interesting vehicle Cynthia. I might give it a go.
It works well. It make waves both pictorially and, more importantly, audibly.
Very enjoyable, especially the alliteration of rippling, rocking, rolling (sounds like Chuck Berry!) and the sibillence of lisping, slipping, glistening.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 21st Jul 2011 16:37

A simple form of Diamante

1 noun
2 adjectives
3 present participles
4 nouns
3 present participles
2 adjectives
1 noun

I find it a great exercise to stimulate figurative vocabulary, to practice musicality within words, and to develop poetic precision. There are other 'parameters' also used for this type of structure.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 21st Jul 2011 16:14

Tommy, what have I got all wrong? I don't recognize the quote. I even scouted a bit, but no go. It's fab to have you back on blog.

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Isobel

Thu 21st Jul 2011 12:04

Thanks for reading Laura - always appreciate your comments - I think we are similar in some respects :) x

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Isobel

Thu 21st Jul 2011 12:03

Yay - piss poems rule!

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Isobel

Thu 21st Jul 2011 12:02

Is there any end to your perversions Coopey? You'll have to write a poem about it. Am I glad to be your muse? I shall have to think about that one!

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Neil Fawcett

Thu 21st Jul 2011 11:29

Wow that was quick Laura. Thanks for the kindness of your comments mi lady. yes this is a poem about a bloke I found dead in an olive grove many years ago.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 11:15

Howdy John - yeh, my brother always used to get in first with the accusatory finger pointing and the 'SHE started it'

Did him no good mind, we both got a battering for it.

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Neil Fawcett

Thu 21st Jul 2011 11:14

I like the ethereal feel of this. For what it's worth I think it would benefit from a bit of trimming.

What's life minus soul.

Soaking up rain and still dry to the core.

Bathing in sound but caught in encompassing silence.

I feel drops on my cheeks,

then the thirst subsides.

I am deafened by waves of laughter.

I shower in life's rain.

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Neil Fawcett

Thu 21st Jul 2011 11:01

Women Like Stars- gorgeous poem. Like it all, but especially the last line-brilliant!

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:53

Ooo I shall look forward to that then darlin...am proper intrigued now! Something much deeper going on here then. Mmmm.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:50

Hola my dear - many thanks for your comment on Crucifixion. I was brought up an atheist, but might have mentioned to you that I've been reading the bible over the last year or so, and it's really hit me hard. Had sooo many ideas from and about it, and organised religion in general. Been a great source for material have to say!


So! when you doing your first open mic then? ;p

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John Embley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:49

I'll second that, John!
Dave, we could've done with you reading this at the Durham Miners Gala -- we were missing Tony Benn and Ken Livingstone this year, Milliband didn't show, and what with the rain and all, the thing was pretty flat -- this would've woken them up!

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:46

Very pictorial, Iz.
I can't help look back on School Nativity plays and such like with a warm nostalgia. I'd swop back to those times in a heart beat.
(You don't still have those knickers, I suppose?)

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John Embley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:42

mmmm ... I recall seemingly endless summer holidays spent on the beach stretched out before us as school ended, and it never used to rain, either, did it? ;)
Lovely images,Stella - got the ould nostalgia bug again!

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:41

Enjoyed this, Dave.
' Course, it helps to be a pensioner already. You young uns - keep pushing on the wheel! I need your contributions for my pension!

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:38

Hahaa!!! Love this bit:

Then I wonder if it is me

Could I inadvertently

have worn the same knickers

three weeks running

then forgotten to shower?


hehe :D I like the ongoing piss references actually, that's my favourite part :D

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:37

Aww, I always loved the school plays. I was a bit embarrassing though - always started snivelling during nativity plays. They get me every time.

I once played the Virgin Mary you know, when I was 5. No lines, but Joseph smelled of lovely posh soap. I remember that clearly.

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:35

A bit different from most of your previous stuff, Richard.
I missed some of the emphases first time I read it but then listened to the audio which helped me out.
I bet it performs well.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:34

Yup - done this myself, it's how I got busted over tooth fairy AND father christmas - she interrogated me over the veracity of the tooth fairy claim, and well, one thing led to another. Funny how an 8 year old can humiliate a parent into confession, innit? ;D

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:32

Ha - bang on Dave. Hey - you would be the most perfect person to write something about the Murdoch hearing tother day - did you see it? Jesus, I nearly choked laughing :D

Enjoyed this - you've got a great sense of humour and rhythm :)

Isobel - half FULL room according to Dave ;D

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:27

So is this linked to Birth of a Rose then? With there not being a part 2 of Rose, or part 1 of Thistle? Interesting, if so.

Tiny typo? In the line 'She withers, to stem as petals fall to soils to [should this be TOO?] hard to nourish'

Across the sea...why am I thinking Mary Queen of Scots? Thistle reference, must be.

Interesting piece Amy - lots to think about in here.

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:27

Excellent again, CD.
Pity more don't use the discipline of form - it really does add to and not subtract from the whole.
(I too loved "sashayed", even though I had to look it up!).

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:22

Some lovely lines in this...particularly like:

Crumpled sandcastles rebuilt
with lolly-stick towers,
shell battlements
and a bucketed moat,
sea filled, then derelict,
as we ran the blonde grit
never looking back

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Julian (Admin)

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:17

It is indeed. Thank you to Fatima for translating part o fthe offending poem. now, where are all the poems about the Murdoch scandal? Or has he paid you all off?

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:14

Is there a particular reason why you've chosen not to structure this in lines? I mean, rather than the paragraph style shown here?

I like that last line...assisting my soul in being saved. More common than I thought, that feeling.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:06

Hahaa - that's a killer last line :D

Beautiful imagery in here, and 'sashayed' is a criminally under-used word!

Great poem, really enjoyed it :)

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Isobel

Thu 21st Jul 2011 09:06

Thanks for your comment on Tainted Wings - yes - it was probably more than 2 - and it's happened more than once! I think it kind of led to the premature realisation that there was no tooth fairy. I never screwed up with father christmas though! x

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