Hi Kathryn, should imagine you'll have a few women doing the same! nothing wrong with a bit of fantasy and you've made the situation more intense with every line, good stuff Jeff X

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If you hunt about on here there's quite a few similar poems (not that I have, you understand) but they are nearly always 'unsatisfying' as they rarely add anything to the genre. I can, again 'see where you are coming from' but I agree with Graham, you need to get a few ideas that are, at the very least, new to you. As a personal description of something, it's OK, but for me a poem has to fizz a bit...add something to the mix...smell of sulphur...or have an oblique empty hollow that others can pour their own stuff into. As Cynthia says...it's a fairly common pastime (well, it is in our household) so, go on....make it new!

:)

jx

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Great stuff Mia, sounds quite a push-up tempo number ha, see you soon Jeff X

Comment is about Going Tits Up (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

Kathryn, I like what you are trying to do with these pieces and wonder if you have read any of DH Lawrence's descriptions of passion etc. They might give you some great ideas.

Comment is about Her private pleasure. (blog)

Having read this several times and the comments listed before this, I do have to agree a little with the confusion idea, although I would rather say lack of clarity is more important. I wouldn't have left the highway, I would have turned from the highway into etc etc. Headlights in the countryside shouldn't be bizarre? piercing works better etc.
There is no point in making any other recommendations as the writer knows what she wants to say. However unless one is trying to confuse, clearer descriptions are necessary.

Comment is about Communion (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

hey
1. i really love your dad poem. the end line makes me want to cry and laugh at the same time.
2. i enjoyed your performance at word soup last night- i think you have a very likeable stage presence and your poems were nice and light and entertaining. all good!

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Dear me Ann! You really don't like creme eggs?! I didn't know there was such a person lol glad you were tempted though! x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Cynthia
Thank you for your kind comments on my latest waffles! I do feel it's a little undeserved though!
I hadn't thought about the contradictions re the flowers. I just liked how it sounded. Oops!x

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I really love this Emma.
The ending is awesome. I like the shaping too, like stairs.
Well done.
Janet.x

Comment is about She Waits in the Dark (blog)

Original item by Emma Robinson

This makes me wish I liked creme eggs! They are so SWEET! Yuk! I feel sorry for them in the TV ad when they get squished! Boo Hoo!

Comment is about A silly homage to Cadburys Creme Eggs. (blog)

I have no problem with the invisible grass - I think the poem gives a good impression of misty wet twilight. I just wonder why you cried, also the juxtaposition of fear and joy puzzles me a little. But I like a puzzle!

Comment is about Communion (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I read this three times before reading TC's comment because i didn't want it to influence my thoughts.
To be honest i'm a little confused.
The title suggests a communion with nature as it doesn't include 'holy'. I'm fine with that part and i love the images, particularly 'a black barn swelled out of the fog.'
However, invisible grass doesn't sit quite right. How would anyone know where the rabbit came from if it's invisible, or is this an intentional imagined image?
and is it possible for anyone to walk fearfully with joy?

Perhaps it's me who's missing something. I'd love you to explain further Cynthia. You got me interested in your thought patterns here because i really love the idea behind it and it is powerful. Of course these are only my own thoughts and as you know, i learn a lot from reading other peoples work so hope you don't mind this kind of feedback. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Communion (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

A lovely poem Beulah - I'm glad the old rig rat isn't proving too much of a nuisance on here. He has many sides to his character - most of them mischevious. Beware if he every offers you his hand - many is the time he has sent an electric shot shooting up mine...I once wrote a poem about it called 'Retribution' but I doubt he would ever let me post it on here - far too rude and revealing...Hope you are well Beulah.xx

Comment is about To TC and the loud writers (blog)

Original item by Beulah

Good images and the juxtaposition of words bonds well to the subject. You could tell you've been there. Good to see the image of minarets being used and some experimental form.

Comment is about Taj At Sunset (blog)

Original item by Cate

I listened your vocals almost whisperlike as if not to disturb the fox. The curled image of the fox is my favourite. An engaging poem full of respect and warmth.

Comment is about fox dreaming (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

thank you for your comments , always a pleasure to know that at least someone likes my work

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Very clever, very short, very funny - (says Han)
Cx

Comment is about The Man With A Cloud For His Head (blog)

Hi Ann
"Somehow sweet, somehow chilling. A lonely slightly odd love poem."
- it harks back to a time long ago when I was indeed lonely & probably slightly odd as well !

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Really lovely poem this Annipoo... I like the sound track too. I watch my dog sleeping in her basket, she never seem to be worried about much, except her dinner maybe ;-)
Luv TC XX

Comment is about fox dreaming (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I had to write this for a fox I saw sleeping under a tree near the train track on my way up to London yesterday.

Comment is about fox dreaming (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Well what can I say ;-)except I am real honest, and thank you, I met Chris and Dave right proper guys too ha ha, we had a great night....My Avatar is the evil twin heh heh... the bandannered Hippy is me, Yes this is a really good place I agree with all of you ;-))TC XX

Comment is about To TC and the loud writers (blog)

Original item by Beulah

I wonder if this is about the passage life, eventually from youth to ripeness of age and then to harvest..... wet harvested fields always look sad, somehow bare denuded and used. As ever Cynthia powerful and full of mystery.TC X

Comment is about Communion (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

You had become almost an obsessive thought with me: 'Is Nicky all right?'

I don't presume that the poem expresses your return to WOL, but it sure epitomises a fresh start of any kind, with great sensitivity and poetic inspiration.

Comment is about Renewal (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

This has real charm. It honestly underscores that awkward late teens/early twenties period when the sexes often separate emotionally, and quite dramatically too. Cheers to the young man who recognizes the change and chooses to adapt also. But, the girl/woman in question may not appreciate the 'wife and mother' angle.

Comment is about I Watch As You Become A Woman (blog)

Original item by Tom

Very well turned lines about a common past-time. At least the object of fantasy is a real man. And, by the way, when 'she looks away' - too late - he knows.

Comment is about Her private pleasure. (blog)

Kathy, you know I do admire your work.
I'm a bit confused with the last verse which sounds good, but seems out of kilter with the seasons used to make your poetic point. If it is stacked in November for winter heat, how could it have spring/summer flowers on it? I know 'indifferently ...woodpile...decorated...and dandelions' is alliteratively handy, but is it sensible. If I'm whistling in the wind, blow me over.

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TC is my idol ; )

Comment is about To TC and the loud writers (blog)

Original item by Beulah

Aw Beulah, thankyou for the credit of my input to this space being worthwhile.

TC is a good poet and great when it comes to commenting and so are you when you spend time here.
I certainly didn't think you were him and people have met him in the company of his sister Isobel.
There are many here who have a separate profile. Their reasons are their own, some of them take on a role when performing some of their work. Like an alter ego. I guess those who MIGHT be fooling others are only really fooling themselves. I know, i've done it myself in the past. :-)

Love to you too,
Janet.x

Comment is about To TC and the loud writers (blog)

Original item by Beulah

Hi Nichola, Im fine thanks. Im still posting occassionaly, but like to log on to see whats happening up here. You have to sift through tons of blogs however these days to find peeps you know you like, to comment on. Its impossible to comment on them all so Im a lot more selective than I used to be!!! Nice to see you back hope everything is going well with the baby.
Cate xx

Comment is about Nicky Burrows (poet profile)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Avast there young Cate,you have shivered me timbers with your piratical observations re 'piering'-heres raisin' a noggin'o'grog to ye!-Stefanxx

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Thanks Cate. Pregnant, frumpy and fed up Cate, had a break and concentrated on the family and home for a while. How are you?xx

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Hi Nicky, I was wondering the other day where you were, have you been ill? Great to see you posting, and I love your new poem!
Cate xx

Comment is about Renewal (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

15 weeks to go and counting!Whatever happened to the stork??!xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

And a good morning and thanks to you Dave,yes indeed I have seen Chris,s wonderful pier poem.Would I dare to compare? the answer is,nay lad!I absolutely love Chris,s work.Keep well smiler-Stefan.

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I am ashamed to say I did blanch when I first read this, Rachel, but have come back to it more than once. What I most admire is the way you manage to contain your pain and anger within controlled form and technique. That's what makes it so effective, for me. Greg

Comment is about My Dead Dad (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Miranda sounds intriguing, John. Amazing who you bump into on the net. I've gone back to the Sandy Denny poem because I wasn't happy with it and am trying to improve it, to do her a bit more justice. Haven't managed to work in the one- night stand with Hendrix yet, though. Greg

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

Original item by John Aikman

Thanks for your message, Isobel. It's true, working on a paper over the years has usually been absorbing and always kept me on my toes. But I rediscovered poetry a few years ago after not writing any since my teens, and am lured by the things it expresses that journalism can't. You may be surprised to know that I find time to monitor WOL fairly regularly, even at work! It keeps me thinking about poetry every day. (Sounds a bit like a laxative?) Greg

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Not much has happened in my world Nicky - I'm not pregnant or anything... but tomorrow is another day!

xx

Comment is about Nicky Burrows (poet profile)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Just read your Poem of the Month. I like it a lot. The last line is a killer.
I love poetry that has something to say and lets itself be understood - particularly when it does it so well.

Comment is about Mandy Coe (poet profile)

Original item by Mandy Coe

Hi Isobel, Great Pic!! You look fab. Whose the glamourous mum now hey!! Good to be back. Have missed you all. Anything interesting been going on?xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks guys for the great comments and welcome back. It's good to be back and writing again. Hope your all well.xx

Comment is about Renewal (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Smashing stuff again Rachel... well done. Win

Comment is about Death Comes To Fleetwood (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Hi Andy... Hope you're good. thx for reading my Rainy City Stories poem. Its a good site isnt it? You should submit something Andy, Win

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

You have captured the feelings well...

'Frozen momentarily on the threshold
of that first tentative step,
out of the warm embrace of the darkness
into the soulless glare
of an abyss of nothingness.'

Wonderful to have you posting again Nicky : )

Francine x

Comment is about Renewal (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

I very nearly fell for that - and I thought you were being sincere: Definitely a 'feel good' poem Banksy - you do have a heart. Will restrain myself from writing anything rude - I am capable of leaving bog standard comments, you know...
oh yeah? "bog standard"? - perv!

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

I've read this several times and it's a very moving poem which tugged at my heart strings.

Janet.x

Comment is about One of Us Was Right to Leave (blog)

Original item by Tom

So which one did you prefer to use then?

Comment is about How You Can Tell She's Not For You (blog)

Hi Thomas - I very much enjoyed reading your poem "Pull Apart The Perfect Nest". Beautifully structured and very clever, love the imagery which this conjures.

Comment is about Tom (poet profile)

Original item by Tom

I had a friend who said she was 'half German' - she only shaved under one arm pit.

Comment is about How You Can Tell She's Not For You (blog)

Not sharing my most ingongruous oddities Isobel, think my hairy tufts may ruin my glamourous image for life. lol.x

And come on guys, women wax, shave, pluck and god only knows what else. Wonder how many men would put up with legs as hairy as a yheti and Norman Lamont eyebrows - not to mention...... - hairy armpits. etc etc. Interesting.

Comment is about How You Can Tell She's Not For You (blog)