I agree with John, Holden; and think this is one of your best. The poet Simon Pomery explores this topic too, in a poem called 'Owl' and more recently 'Divina Lux'. I think you'd like his work, because with him there's always something behind the words, as there is in this poem you have written.

Comment is about Limitless... (blog)

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This made my day Hugh! 😂

Comment is about A passion for spiders my lad had. (blog)

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Julie, we are governed by an elitist group of the highly incompetent . I am amazed that out of a population of nearly 60 million people we are left with a choice of the most mediocrity available.
Good poem.
Thanks
Keith

Comment is about Magic Wand (blog)

Original item by julie callaghan

Frederick, in my childhood the warning was "little boys should be seen and not heard". We were crippled by this nonsense. Thank you for this
Keith

Comment is about reminiscing (blog)

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Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment, Jennifer, I really appreciate it! 😊

Comment is about Ensnared. (blog)

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Thank you Graham; love the phrase “charismatic word picture” 😌

Comment is about Dry eyes in the house (blog)

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Thanks for the likes and kind comment Stephen A. 🌈

Comment is about The MPs Big Bro Show (blog)

Original item by julie callaghan

Footprints you leave for all to see

thanks Moonlight❤

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

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Your path forward is set alight by his power of love.❤

Comment is about Conquered (blog)

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All have moved on to another world of peace
names are left of another life in which you walk
they whisper words in the wind you can only hear
when your name is seen by others and you are there.🌷

Comment is about Garden of sleep (blog)

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I once lived in a crowded house
when asked which room
I liked the best
I said I like each one the same
my mind is set to myself
even if not alone and you are there.

Comment is about Pause (blog)

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“I was listening to John Coltrane on repeat. Like a cliché, Unshowered, way after noon”.

What a charismatic word picture. These three lines stand out.

Comment is about Dry eyes in the house (blog)

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😁

Comment is about A passion for spiders my lad had. (blog)

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Hello MC! Don't see why you are being got at for writing somethig which is not a poem? The site is Write Out Loud, mainly poetry but not all. Anyway poetry or not I agree with most of what you say absolutely. 'Self deception that believes the lie' has it in a nutshell. Keep up the good work!

Comment is about WOKE IS NO JOKE (blog)

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Lovely Keith! Still make daisy chains for my grandaughter, and my boys used to bring back those wretched goldfish. they kept on strangely disappearing, until we discovered the cat had learnt to fish, poor things! Pressed flowers too, and The Observer's Book of birds, flowers and dogs. We didn't have TV, so had to make our own amusements, but were never bored.My sister wasn't the favourite, but a much prettier child than I was, so I once emptied Mum's fountain pen into her mouth. She started blowing blue bubbles, so retribution wasn't short in coming. No ill effects luckily.

Comment is about Days of Innocence (blog)

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Decency, as you say, is definitely not 'in' nowadays, with some exceptions. Courage become rarer perhaps, but would say is still easier to find, as our lives so often unexpectedly require it.Like the image of 'our better angels with clipped wings'. Says it in a few words. Jennifer

Comment is about Ensnared. (blog)

Original item by Holden Moncrieff

lovely as usual Hugh!

Comment is about A passion for spiders my lad had. (blog)

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Wow! never expected such positive reactions, very encouraging. Thanks so much Frederick, Tom, Adam, Keith, Stephen G and Stephen A, Holden, for the likes, and Ray and Keith for the kind comments. Keith, your Moroccan sounds very like this one, he was so upset at the idea of his hair being shorn off, quite understandably, the only beautiful thing he had left. As you saw, Ray, his image stayed with me for a long time. I don't know who had brought him in, probably the police. H could whisper Italian, French, English and presumably Arabic too. Thanks again to all.

Comment is about The Moroccan (blog)

Original item by Jennifer Malden

Thank you Jennifer it is truly shocking and the mind set of someone who could ever do this

Comment is about (For Salman Rushdie) (blog)

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you make a very good point Uileam many groups are being violently silenced in society now

Comment is about (For Salman Rushdie) (blog)

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Thank you John & Tom for your encouraging comments! Much appreciated & fir the like, Jordyn 🌈

Comment is about The Garden (blog)

Original item by Stephen W Atkinson

Have just seen how prolific you are Tom, plenty of your back catalogue for me to work through 🙂 And very true re: the joy of poetry as memories to revisit.

Comment is about Bryony Partridge (poet profile)

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I enjoyed this one, Joe.

Comment is about If Only I'd Made the Team (blog)

Original item by Joe Williams

Your poem reminds me of a beautiful Indian song. I'm leaving the lyrics of the song here but in hindi. I'm sure you'll appreciate the translation of the lyrics.
Childhood memories are the best memories, but for some. There are many unlucky children who go through hell of hardships and tortures, still their innocent hearts remember the good old times they were able to somehow grab during childhood.

Beautiful poem


ये दौलत भी ले लो, ये शोहरत भी ले लो
भले छीन लो मुझसे मेरी जवानी
मगर मुझको लौटा दो बचपन का सावन
वो कागज़ की कश्ती, वो बारिश का पानी


मुहल्ले की सबसे निशानी पुरानी
वो बुढ़िया जिसे बच्चे कहते थे नानी
वो नानी की बातों में परियों का डेरा
वो चेहरे की झुरिर्यों में सदियों का फेरा
भुलाए नहीं भूल सकता है कोई
वो छोटी सी रातें वो लम्बी कहानी


कड़ी धूप में अपने घर से निकलना
वो चिड़िया वो बुलबुल वो तितली पकड़ना
वो गुड़िया की शादी में लड़ना झगड़ना
वो झूलों से गिरना वो गिर के सम्भलना
वो पीतल के छल्लों के प्यारे से तोहफ़े
वो टूटी हुई चूड़ियों की निशानी


कभी रेत के ऊँचे टीलों पे जाना
घरौंदे बनाना बनाके मिटाना
वो मासूम चहत की तस्वीर अपनी
वो ख़्वाबों खिलौनों की जागीर अपनी
न दुनिया का ग़म था न रिश्तों के बंधन
बड़ी खूबसूरत थी वो ज़िंदगानी

Comment is about Days of Innocence (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thank you Hugh for the words of appreciation and like for the poem Closeness to Allah.

Thanks n peace
💐🌷💐🌷

Comment is about hugh (poet profile)

Original item by hugh

The spiritual vibes resonates. The awakened souls are sensitive to words of gratitude and repentance to almighty. I'm glad The spiritual poems are still appreciated although not by many. All thanks to wicked world's no God theories. Sad, but a bitter reality.
Thank you for appreciating the poem.💐

Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thank you both for the comments 😁 I appreciate the feedback on here.

After a nice break it feels good to be back .

Comment is about June. (blog)

Original item by Jordyn Elizabeth

Hi Bryony, welcome to WriteOutLoud! Thanks for your comment on 'Greenland', was a bit of an experiment that one but I'm glad you enjoyed.

As for what you said about 'Untitled Pillows' that's one of the joys of writing poetry; bottling up those bittersweet or somewhat uncanny memories and then being able to revisit them if you choose. Looking forward to reading more. 😀

Comment is about Bryony Partridge (poet profile)

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I Remember all that, Keith. Nowadays they just shoot things on the Xbox or stare at phones!

Comment is about Days of Innocence (blog)

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I'm not into reality shows, Julie, but I'd give this one a go! 😃. They'd probably only last a day or two! Nice one 🌈

Comment is about The MPs Big Bro Show (blog)

Original item by julie callaghan

Superb flow & rhyme, Russell! 👏

Comment is about Within your eyes (blog)

Original item by JD Russell

A lot of loo-it, Uilleam.

Comment is about IF IT WA'N'T FO' THEE (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

So lovely - and taught me a new word ‘binky’ 🐰

Comment is about Who Knew? (blog)

Original item by julie callaghan

Thank you, Stephen, very kind to say.

Comment is about To the man wanking at us on the nudist beach (blog)

Original item by Bryony Partridge

Ten lines of near-perfection, Ray. Beautiful and not a word wasted. Still waiting for the rain where I am.

Comment is about THE STORM (blog)

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Impossible not to like this, Bryony. The joyous aspect of the poem makes it rise above the ordinary.

Comment is about To the man wanking at us on the nudist beach (blog)

Original item by Bryony Partridge

With the news that Jeremy Paxman is quitting University Challenge after the next series, events related in my poem 'If Only I'd Made the Team' will now never come to pass. Maybe I should apply for the job though. This is the opening poem from my Maytree Press pamphlet 'The Taking Part', available from my website https://joewilliams.co.uk/

Comment is about If Only I'd Made the Team (blog)

Original item by Joe Williams

Thanks Tom 🙂. This is quite an old one I wrote over a decade ago that helps me relive a certain time and place (and the sweetness and rawness of it!)

Comment is about untitled pillows (blog)

Original item by Bryony Partridge

When women peacefully protesting their hard-earned freedoms, (including freedom of speech) on the streets of Manchester, are manhandled ie. physically assaulted, by masked men who want to silence them; when police officers stand by and refuse to come to their defence, we are in a dark and dangerous place.

Comment is about (For Salman Rushdie) (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

Fantastic (again). I especially enjoyed the phrase "Reveling in a freelance body next to me"

Comment is about untitled pillows (blog)

Original item by Bryony Partridge

You paint a lovely picture.

I've never met Humpty Dumpty - but I did have my face painted the other day at a 3 year old's birthday party-great fun.
🎂

Comment is about Wasteland Made Good (blog)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

"...avian aerobats" Nice one.

Comment is about When we were young (blog)

Original item by JD Russell

"...watchmen to the watchers

Of each and every back"

Several recent personal experiences had made me realise just how fortunate I am despite my whingeing; I must be less selfish.

Comment is about Potholes and craters (blog)

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Thank you, Greg - and I felt there was no other possible title for this one 😆

Comment is about To the man wanking at us on the nudist beach (blog)

Original item by Bryony Partridge

I recently had a trip to the Lakes -similar gorgeous views over Ullswater and Derwent Water.

Comment is about # Upside (blog)

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Back with a bang Jordyn! Beautifully written, as always 🌈

Comment is about June. (blog)

Original item by Jordyn Elizabeth

I can only echo the previous enthusiastic comments, Bryony. And a very arresting title!

Comment is about To the man wanking at us on the nudist beach (blog)

Original item by Bryony Partridge

Thanks, Stephen!

Comment is about To the man wanking at us on the nudist beach (blog)

Original item by Bryony Partridge

I believe them pantaloo-ins went for a considerable sum.

Comment is about IF IT WA'N'T FO' THEE (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

It happens frequently to me. I get in the kitchen, and forget why I went in.

Comment is about Fridge (blog)

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