Re Deeply Breathing

Cynthia hi, I'm afraid I was having a "moment" of cerebral disconnect - as I was trying to write "cerebral" six goes at it. Cheers for your comment, l came back just now to check. (cerebral disconnect had nothing to do with the drink by the way) Cheers Tommy

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Katy, you got 2 out of 3, hope not being one of them;-) cheers Tommy

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

Cheers Martin, warm and lost sums it up. :-)

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

Cynthia hi, I'm afraid I was having a "moment" of cerebral disconnect - (as I'm trying to write "cerebral" six times at it.) Cheers for your comment, l came back just now to check. (cerebral disconnect had nothing to do with the drink by the way) Cheers Tommy
Consider it rewritten :-)

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

I was persuaded early on that tenacity in life is the prime
requisite when seeking recognition/success, even above
ability - since there are many with the latter who do
not possess the former and become also-rans and casualties along the way.
The subject of this WOL news item clearly qualifies for
the required degree of determination. Good luck to him.
What is the title of his autobiography? "The Ego Has Landed"?
:-))

Comment is about 'Obviously I don't have a self-doubt gene': the thoughts of Attila the Stockbroker (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I "lived" the premise of these lines - thereby admitting to
a certain vintage age-wise! Some really resonate: the
hiss of the locomotive and the "platform alight with puddles"...top stuff for my own boyhood memories of a
country still suffering from the effects of world war,
when bombsites were playgrounds of dreams and we
were lured home by the promise of a fish and chip
supper and the early evening episode of a radio serial.

Comment is about DOVERCOURT BAY HOLIDAY CAMP 1950 (blog)

Original item by ray pool

cheers David. Is this the sweet spot golfers talk of. All griss to us poets. Glad you like the cynical style.

all the best ray.

Comment is about GOLF: THE REAL STORY part the second (blog)

Original item by ray pool

There are always platitudes to fall back on Stu. Or failsafe prejudices ; you've made all that very clear and it is depressing. The trouble is individual deaths leave a vacuum in the long years ahead long after those zealots have passed over, brushed over by the long broom of history. Ray

Comment is about i got those human blues (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

I was only 25 at the time and trying to write a few poems for a small press mag called barfly, which was an angst type thing full of broken people, language, and foul language etc.

I sent a group of poems to them but never had any luck and this was probably the best of the bunch.

I feel it captures one of those arrogant moments we all can have at times when we're young and frustrated. It is a product of its time.

Comment is about IN – BETWEEN DAY (an ansgt poem of the 90's) (blog)

Original item by David Addington

Very evocative and warm Michelle. Captures the moment and metaphor for companiosnship / comfort so well.

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Original item by Michelle

Funny and true. I've just been down into my local town which is a story and poem in itself as it is dying on its arse and all we have are charity shops, ecig shops, cash converters etc. In the cash shop, full of golf equipment and fishing rods too.

What a time we live in. I am planning to write a poem about it all: ecigs, poundshops, smart phones etc...

I love the language in you poem

Cool

Comment is about GOLF: THE REAL STORY part the second (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks for the comment raypool. Yes very much like Hughes as I only first stared writing poetry from 1994 onwards when I was at college studying Hughes as part of English GCSE, so the influence rubbed off a tad. I have another poem about fishing for trout in Lake District which I think I will post up today after editing. That is also very Hughes like.

The Bass was one of my first poems to be published in an anthology (although I suspect it was one of those vanity publishing books), I never bought the book for that reason.

I've been working on a blog now for all my poetry and music, but can't decide on which platform to use: Blogger or Wix make a website. Do you have a blog or website? Well I'll check your profile.

Comment is about The Bass (96) (blog)

Original item by David Addington

Cynthia thank you for taking the time to both read and comment so extensively on Row A Seat 1.

I was daydreaming about people from my past and how I'll never have the opportunity to see their faces again.

The theatre metaphor dropped in like a bombshell but seemed to work.

One is never fully happy ( I think) with a finished product and this one in particular may see another airing.

Anyway, lovely to hear your comments.

Graham

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Cynthia, just read through some of the comments you've made on here today and wanted to say thank you. You are a very kind and generous soul. Always a pleasure to read how you've reviewed the work posted on here, and I always learn something from you. Thank you x

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Not many of us can 'scream from a rooftop'. IMO, that is a superb line, typical of a clear thinker with great poetical ability. Welcome to WOL. I will try to read more of your work.

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A bold and well-expressed message. I especially like the hard honesty about the physical rape and the need to transcend it emotionally and spiritually. And the assurance of 'blamelessness'.

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Splendid poem, bold, honest and luminous. The stanza about 'humility' is superb. Surely there are many kinds of 'conflict' enjoyed by both partners; and we bring to such a poem as this only what we actually know or secretly imagine.

I think you are a great poet, Katy.

Comment is about Ecstasy (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

Indeed...!

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Thank you Colin for sharing your thoughts. I think I understand what you're saying. Repetition sometimes can subdue creativity. Looking forward to your inputs. :)

Comment is about Hollow (blog)

Original item by Lory Gaur

Nice poem David. It reminds me of Ted Hughes in the subject matter. I reckon this must be a fond subject for you. Quite an aggressive style if I may say, which seems to suit the imagery.

regards Ray

Comment is about The Bass (96) (blog)

Original item by David Addington

I love how you are able to convey so much with so few words. this is beautiful.

Comment is about For Janis (blog)

Original item by A.M. Clarke

Cheers for your comments on this David. Summers always seem eternal when your young and no responsibilities.

Comment is about Summers such as these (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks for your kind comments David. i spent my early years close to the coast. Although I was in my early twenties when I went down to Brighton it was the nearest big town where we would go for a night out. It wasn't the trendy expensive place it is now. Although I love the arty side and small shops.

Comment is about Night fishing (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thank you for reading and commenting, which is much appreciated. x

Comment is about Unspoken Trust (blog)

Thanks Martin. Much appreciated x

Comment is about God Save Us (blog)

Moving Journeys

Stalybridge Station Poetry Exhibition

Saturday 14th November
at 2pm
in the Waiting Room
on Platform 4.

The Lines are Clear

Jump on a train
track down poetic line.

In the waiting room
reading walls of poetry.

Voices in your head
repeating same selective words.

From the poets themselves
in clear vocal cords.

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Original item by Stockport WoL

I agree with this Harry. Any manual that tells one person's version of a technique is pretty valueless unless of course it is a dry lesson in the history of the subject - to be passed on dry as well and then dry up the spirit to dust. I've tried it with gardening books only to left sobbing and confused. Vive la Tichmarsh!

Comment is about How not to (blog)

Original item by harry

hello. here's what I do. I look up the journals latest issue, find out who is in it, then hunt for there personal blog/any poems they have online. its the cheapest way! i find the hardest part keeping track of simultaneous submissions.

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Original item by Marnanel Thurman

I call these endeavours museums of inspiration Ledger. Nothing new and all offering the Trump version of ecstasy and frustration in equal measure. Glad to hear of your relief.

Thanks for troubling. Ray

Comment is about GOLF: THE REAL STORY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Ha! good one Ray,

By the way, I'd always thought that once a person got golf it was pretty much incurable-nothing could be done for the poor buggers. So as you can imagine, I was devastated when one of my younger brothers started showing signs of it. But after a few years he came out of it with no apparent after effects: that was about ten years ago and he seems to be fine now.

Comment is about GOLF: THE REAL STORY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Bang goes my next golfing gig too, David . Oh and I forgot to mention the golf shop silly me.
regards Ray

Comment is about GOLF: THE REAL STORY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks for your kind words Martin. :-)

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Great stuff. Love the imagery of fishing in regards to scoring girls.

Did you grow up at the seaside? I did. It's a poetic place because it feels at times like you're at the ends of the earth and I love all that tack of typical British seaside.

Comment is about Night fishing (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks for the comment Martin

Comment is about Kingdom of the fells (blog)

Original item by David Addington

Great poem. I love the style as I have some that are a bit like this, rites of passage kind of stuff and I happen to love Mods and Quadrophenia film.

True about the summer - I have a similar lyric - song I produced about those long gone hot summers, so may adapt it for up on here.

I am going to read some more of your poems.

Comment is about Summers such as these (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Stu this flows along so beautifully like the warm day it describes, such a rich description. keep on keeping on.
M

Comment is about maps (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hi Sara
This seems an incredibly brave piece to write. Wendy is right , keep writing them down. Without wishing to seem patronising well done. Keep going

Comment is about Pain (blog)

Original item by Sara E.

Nice one Stu. Rich to the tongue , poor to the throat, great lines.

Comment is about shot (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Well thanks so much Greg. I know you like the gritty stuff with plenty of detail larruped on ! No romanticism but then again why would there be ! Bless you. I feel like I've hit the bullseye with your encouragement.

ps It really was that grim!

Comment is about AN EVENING AT THE RITZ BALLROOM BRIGHOUSE WITH THE JOE LOSS ORCHESTRA (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Nice to see you placing words on the page again Daniel. This rolls off the tongue quite nicely, feels almost like a song. Good one

Comment is about DEALS ON WHEELS (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

This is so vivid in its description you had me hooked. A great pem bringing the past to life.

Comment is about The Hardown Fyrd (blog)

Original item by STEVE RUDD

I love the whole feeling of warmth with this one Tommy and being lost in the moment.

Comment is about Deeply breathing (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

A magnificent poem, Ray. You should be mighty proud of it.

Comment is about AN EVENING AT THE RITZ BALLROOM BRIGHOUSE WITH THE JOE LOSS ORCHESTRA (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I love the sparseness of words in this one Lynn it works so well.

Comment is about God Save Us (blog)

This is a fantastic poem I love the way it works gathering hope only to have it dashed. It has a great rhythm

Comment is about Bricked In (blog)

Original item by Neil Fawcett

I like the story in this poem and the way you tell it particularly the last Stanza which brings everything to the readers attention. Nice one

Comment is about In...then out (blog)

Original item by Angela McCrimmon

Nice poem David I can picture the scene with all it's serenity.

Comment is about Kingdom of the fells (blog)

Original item by David Addington

Just brilliant Lynn-not one wasted word.

Comment is about Unspoken Trust (blog)

Hi Cynthia, Thank you for your in depth comments and review of my work. You make me feel special.
Much, much appreciated!
Preeti

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for the great comments. Yes, very elemental. I have fond memories of being a cub and my nan was Akela for my district. I wrote this a few years back to accompany a piece of tribal / folk music I recorded - short instrumental. I may post up what I did as audio, but looking at the lyrics again, I saw it was defo a poem with something to say. The past few years have all been about my childhood nostalgia for me as reach 46, and that is now coming into my poetry. Less is more is the key and zooming into symbols / feelings and yes the elements.

Comment is about Campfire song (blog)

Original item by David Addington