Sun 10th Jan 2021 23:18
the poem itself
was an exercise
in absurdity.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Sun 10th Jan 2021 23:16
Good Point but...
I'm partial to women!
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Comment is about Aviva Rifka Bhandari (poet profile)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thanks for reading & likeing Holden & Aisha.
Comment is about Broken Friends (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Reading this is like falling down a rabbit hole & landing at the bottom with a thump! Love it.
Comment is about Teletubbie Television (blog)
Original item by Rob Cohen
<Deleted User> (18980)
Sun 10th Jan 2021 22:21
Keith, I live in hope that you will balance out this doom and gloom piece in the next few days with something uplifting. We are all stuck in our homes feeling sorry for ourselves and the last thing we need is a poem telling us how awful our world is. Are you trying to get us to top ourselves???!!!
Comment is about The Predicament (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (13740)
Sun 10th Jan 2021 21:16
Hi Tony - thanks for feedback. Thanks for like Adam. T ?
Comment is about Twilight Run (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
This reminds me of 'Ring a Ring o Roses' which was a simplistic and lively rhyme about the plague. And this tells of a different sort of social, behavioural and philosophical affliction in a similar sort of hypnotic and fast-footed way. 'An Old Tale' told very well.
Comment is about An Old Tale (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
Really like this, Ray. I can’t stand those newspaper columns urging us during lockdown to read more, exercise more, drink less, take up a new hobby - the list is endless. Is it my imagination or are you using rhyme more these days? Tony
Comment is about COVID AVOIDANCE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
The term "poetry world" intrigues me. It sounds like some sort of
cosy club - a literary "order" to which entry is obtained via
selective-through-acquaintance processes. ?
Comment is about 'Walking generates poetic ideas ... I always come back with a couple of good adverbs': Simon Armitage on BBC's Saturday Live (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
A follow-up to remind us how what is said and done can be
distorted for whatever purpose. I've always been curious how/
why Trump - the ultimate "outsider" to an entrenched political
establishment, has been treated prior to - and throughout the
term of his incumbency. Demonisation is a word that comes to
mind, not least in the MSM...itself in the grip of powerful vested
interests closely connected with the established political power
base. As for my points raised about words attributed to Trump
when he addressed the crowd prior to the march to Capitol Hill -
let us consider the words he ACTUALLY used, and with audible emphasis on the first three - "peacefully and patriotically make
your voices heard". That has me asking - WHY would the MSM
choose to place blame when his words give the lie to its actions?
The answer is perhaps best left to the cool detachment of historians, free from the hyperbole and hysteria that is evident
"of the present".
Comment is about Insurrection (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Thanks for your thoughts, Aviva, Tom and MC. Of one thing you can be quite sure, MC; that things won’t remain as they are. If this were the case we’s both still be feudal serfs.
Comment is about SHIT HAPPENS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
How I see it is there's a stream of brilliant consciousness that runs through your work, it's just that I feel that sometimes 'more is less'.
Excellent
Comment is about Teletubbie Television (blog)
Original item by Rob Cohen
I'm not sure if this is poetry to my ears - but it's stimulating the
thought processes on a dreary Sunday afternoon in this diseased
metropolis. I wonder what generation ever existing prior to our own
has ever been so fixated (obsessed?) on what happens to the world
in the future. Nature cares naught for our concerns, only her own -
to adapt some words borrowed from a favourite poem. I think we
had far more to worry about in the early days of nuclear power and
we have survived that very real worry thus far - with the caveat of a
parallel concern that reports the sudden sabre-rattling of North
Korea at this time...when the only president to step up and get
some sort of future relationship with a real rogue state is now under
siege within his own country. Coincidence would be a fine thing!!
Comment is about SHIT HAPPENS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thank you MC, no mask but it was very brief, outside and at 2 metre distance. Thanks for the likes Greg, MC and JD.
What a difference a day makes to a walk and a blog entry!
Comment is about I Preferred Yesterday’s Walk (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
The manipulation of language is a tool intended to achieve an object.
But it becomes risible and self-defeating when the absurdity of the
exercise appeals to the latent sense of the ridiculous in all of us.
Comment is about GENDER NEUTRALITY (blog)
Original item by d.knape
An enjoyable rural ramble in suitably rhythmic stepping time.
But there is one question I must ask
Was your chat carried out from behind a mask? ?
Comment is about I Preferred Yesterday’s Walk (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
We both too have re-evaluated many of the things that seemed important once and can no longer be enjoyed. Quite a few things we are ambivalent about. We have done no shopping (other than for food) since March 2020 without missing a thing.
However, the insidious protection of personal space does leave us both feeling, 'will we ever go back to shaking a hand, slapping a back, giving a hug' to anyone outside of our closest family. I sincerely hope so.
Thought provoking in its brevity as always Ray. Stay safe!
Comment is about COVID AVOIDANCE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Why is your poem only bemoaning the 'loss' of the female relationships? Surely by this reasoning you'd have lost your father, your grandfathers, your brothers, your uncles, your nephews, your male cousins and your sons too?
Comment is about GENDER NEUTRALITY (blog)
Original item by d.knape
I think you're supposed to get off and then the world stops ?
Comment is about SHIT HAPPENS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Stop the world - I want to get off ?
Comment is about SHIT HAPPENS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
It’s worth getting a bet on, Stephen. If only we’d be around to collect.
Comment is about SHIT HAPPENS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Nice one David. That reminds me to post something new on WOL.
John
Comment is about LOVE IN A LOCKDOWN (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Thank you, John. Much appreciated
Comment is about Broken Friends (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Thanks for the likes, Aviva, JD, Stephen A, Stephen G, John and Aisha. The weather is much different here today, think I may be finishing off the cream cakes without burning off any calories?
Comment is about Today's Walk (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Thanks for reading and commenting Keith. I totally agree about the whole camera scenario. I have found that when I take photographs these days with my phone the subject is not always reflected the way that I have perceived it which talks as much of my photographic inadequacies as it does the phone. But I am learning. I think this is also comment about how we would like to be seen ourselves.
Thanks again Keith
Comment is about My life in mirrors (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Probably be a nice little combo: pandemic will decimate the population, economies will start to crumble, fighting amongst themselves, Yellowstone will erupt causing catastrophic tsunamis & those that remain will be wiped out by a random asteroid. The only thing to remain will be Trump's product-enhanced hair. ?
Comment is about SHIT HAPPENS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Unplugged may be just what we all need in 2021! As always, thank you for your support Paul. I hope you and your bride are enjoying your time together in nature.
Comment is about Christmas Wishes 2020 (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
My pleasure Nicola. ❤️ Thank you! ?
Comment is about Transcendent Love (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
"If I can help somebody as I pass along....", Brian.
Comment is about SHIT HAPPENS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Excellent stuff, Trevor, matched to great technique. abab rhymes are a bugger requiring tight turn rounds and not easy to stray off the narrative. (I shall tell people I wrote this).
Greg - I think denying defeat and "Stop the Steal" should apply to football results too.
Comment is about Insurrection (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
True beauty, Stephen. Summer days seem to outshine the truth for all of us. A lovely line.
Comment is about Broken Friends (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
<Deleted User> (18980)
Sat 9th Jan 2021 23:41
You're a little ray of sunshine John!
Comment is about SHIT HAPPENS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thank you Stephen, I came to think, and I hoped the poem conveys, that being dreamers, lovers and seekers goes beyond the concept of right or wrong or good or bad but is simply our innate and essential nature, something that if we know it can help us to understand, accept and tolerate ourselves and eachother better. As for being children I think this also is our innate and essential nature but it is a crammed concept hinged on the core premise that we can only be what we have been helped to be, and that even the ability to change what we are is a behaviour some haven't had the chance to learn. If this be the case then we cannot lose the innocence we are born with and this magical connection between what we have been able to experience and what we have been able to become doesn't end just because we have reached legal maturity. Your comment makes me think that the poem does suggest either all or enough of that.
Isn't it so difficult to work out what our poems really say to others when we have the background reasons already in our mind and can't easily tell how a fresh mind will read the words.
Comment is about We Are All Of Us (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Awe, thank you Paul. This poetic adventure is so much more fun with you here. I wish you a healthy, happy, magic carpet ride year!
Comment is about Vautaw (poet profile)
Original item by Vautaw
Thank you very much Julie (must stop making you cry! ?) and Aviva for taking the time to read.
My friend is a musician & was a huge fan of Chester & Linkin Park
But I wrote this for anybody & everybody who ever feels lost or hopeless. Hopefully, letting them know they're not alone & that light always follows darkness. ?
And thanks for the likes & continuing support Stephen G & J.D.
Comment is about Broken Friends (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Philipos
Sat 9th Jan 2021 19:43
Great well constructed piece of nostalgia - enjoyed.
P
Comment is about Gimme Shelter (blog)
Original item by Mike McPeek
Sat 9th Jan 2021 18:32
Your post was a lot to digest.
In fact
I ate the post.
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Comment is about SURGERY INSTRUCTIONS (blog)
Original item by d.knape
<Deleted User> (18980)
Sat 9th Jan 2021 17:59
Trevor, once again yours is the best of the bunch on a popular subject.
Comment is about Insurrection (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
This is such an interesting and thought provoking poem. Mirrors not only reflect what we see but also how we see the reflection which is highly subjective, especially if we don't like what we see. Cameras can have a similar effect. How often have we heard the cry ,"that's not me". We look for what we want to see and hope others do the same but invariably do not.
An intriguing poem
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about My life in mirrors (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
This beautifully written and and so much about who we are, as Keith says.
Perhaps it is no bad thing that we are still children, dreamers, lovers and seekers!
Comment is about We Are All Of Us (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Dear Aviva
Many thanks for the interesting comments. The metre and rhyme pattern was (mostly) planned, although mainly by trial and error. I love the idea of the "ghost message" in understanding the poem.
Thinking about it, would the third line be better as:
'And so enjoy our fun' ?
This might be more logical, if logic is what we're looking for.
Best wishes Steve
Comment is about Pain (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
You can find many more of my poems on this web site and also on line including videos. Just search on David Subacchi.
Comment is about LOVE IN A LOCKDOWN (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Trump was defeated on the popular vote in 2016. If they're doing any revising of the voting process, it would be good to start there.
Comment is about HOW TO MAKE A MONSTER (A rumination on The Capitol Hill Riot) (blog)
Original item by Terry McArthur
A lot of other news reports said the same thing, MC. You have staunchly defended your man on these blogs for the last four years, but is he really still your kinda guy? We will indeed watch how events unfold. Good thing that he won't be at the inauguration, I think. Not the greatest or most gracious of losers. But maybe you don't think he lost?
Comment is about Insurrection (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
This is beautiful writing and I imagine you must have a beautiful friendship to have pulled this into existence.
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Comment is about Broken Friends (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Nigel Astell
Mon 11th Jan 2021 02:23
It was about ten years ago when I went to see the reformed group appear in Stockport.
Gerry was well known for his stories and before singing this song explained how he had broken up with his girlfriend then writing from just raw emotion won her back.
Comment is about Don't Let The Sun Catch You Crying (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell