<Deleted User> (9882)
Wed 4th Nov 2020 23:13
Stephen, I echo the previous comments with one respectful suggestion-
' I fear the blanket that will one day be the soil of my grave?'
nevertheless, it is still a great poem without my suggestion.
Rose ?
Comment is about Nirvana (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
As always thank you for the Likes Keith, Vautaw, Jordyn, Stephen &. J.D.
And for the much appreciated comments From Keith & Ray... I'll just leave it as a little, intriguing, heady maze poem. ? Thanks again
Comment is about Nirvana (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
An intriguing poem, leaving us entering a maze. A heady experience
Stephen.
Ray
Comment is about Nirvana (blog)
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Movingly straightforward and delivers a body blow John.
Ray
Comment is about Along the Unhallowed way (blog)
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Thank you sincerely Ghazala, Cathy, Keith and Stephen. Yes Keith but folk have enormous resilience. The English working class have coped with the first industrial revolution, total war, Nazism, mass demographic change, the defeat of the miners, the chaos of politically correct identity politics, all kinds of shit. But we're still alive, and kicking.
Comment is about Along the Unhallowed way (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Wed 4th Nov 2020 20:59
Perhaps a dream, perhaps a subliminal message re the afterlife. Either way an enigma Keith which has hooked me and others.
Comment is about A Mysterious Warmth (blog)
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Loved your sample. It's South Shields isn't it. One of my favourite places.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about Crystal Stouf (poet profile)
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Tha should o ' put t'wood it t'ole before wondering off with em. But I'm glad that you managed to get a warm bi t'fire.
Comment is about A Mysterious Warmth (blog)
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Hello, Crystal and welcome to WOL from me, JD, looking forward to sharing poetry. I like your sample poem very much. i would like to see more.
Pat, S.
Comment is about Crystal Stouf (poet profile)
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Hi Ghazala, thanks for your lovely supportive and encouraging comments on The Lighthouse Keeper's Song. I appreciate it. Tom.
Comment is about Ghazala lari (poet profile)
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Stephen G has already said what I was thinking.
A little mysterious gem.
Comment is about A Mysterious Warmth (blog)
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Keith
I think the title says it all. This is a beautiful narrative with a real (or perhaps unreal) sense of mystery, perhaps even menace.
Comment is about A Mysterious Warmth (blog)
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Thanks Trevor. There's more pleasure in the four line pattern I agree, but I fitted it to see if I could successfully, and was quite pleased with the discipline and slightly one foot on the kerb one on the road lilt!
Ray
Comment is about ENDING UP A VEGETABLE (blog)
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I value all your comments Trevor, with no wish to escape . It seems hard to avoid the virus in words...
Ray
Comment is about SECOND WAVE (blog)
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Thanks for looking in Trevor. solid comment..
Ray
Comment is about MANTRA (blog)
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Sorry for the delay folks for unavoidable reasons.
Thanks Graham for sharing your thoughts. It's a sort of spontaneity that involves napkins - moved on since then of course! Each period we go through brings more awareness, not always in our favour. Your coat awaits.
I enjoyed your story about La Mer Mark. A poem in itself. Trains should always go south for the sun.
Brilliant Paul. Flattery indeed.
Never underestimate the napkin Martin. Thanks.
Thanks John, very appropriate.
Thanks Brian and Stephen for your likes.
Ray
Trevor, that's a salient point about the first person. It was an experience first hand so thanks for the observation.
Comment is about NINETEEN SIXTY TWO (blog)
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Thanks Victoria, I've done so much, "Soul searchy," stuff just recently that I've enjoyed writing something a bit more flippant.
J. x
Comment is about Cricket Bats & Persian Cats (blog)
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Stephen,
Your imagination in this poem is superb in its content The last three lines evoke scenes which are final.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Nirvana (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Philipos
Wed 4th Nov 2020 12:33
You have an incredibly interesting CV - I miss not having travelled to India in earlier times when following a maritime occupation, although I have seen much of the world both from a ship and later via the air.
Some say Kipling isn't as welcome in India as in my own country but he helped shape my imagination and pathways into writing poetry nevertheless.
If the OHM you refer to is the vibrational level of meditation practiced by Theosophists (Blavatski) and other thinkers - that is something I try getting my kids to engage upon during stressful times.
Thank you for visiting WOL like you do, and for being the breath of fresh air that indeed you are.
Blessings.
P
Comment is about Ghazala lari (poet profile)
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Thank you so much. And for the suggestion ?
Comment is about City Life - Follow Your Bliss (blog)
Original item by Dean Fraser
Is it sad or a happy write
Will people take any delight
Many get chance to prove themselves
But lose their character in deep well
For power and money corrupts even a saint
So what to talk about an already tainted nail
Hugh?
Comment is about Heads or tails-Trump or Biden ? (blog)
Original item by hugh
Tom keep smiling n sharing. You are a brilliant poet. Your works are lovely dark and deep and will help many long after we are gone permanently to sleep buddy?
Comment is about The Lighthouse Keeper's Song (blog)
Original item by Tom
A contradictory write. The way your poem progresses from gloom to hope shows the strength of a fighter. That's the spirit keith, keep going on buddy. You'll be victorious rather you already are?
Comment is about Darkness and Light (blog)
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To Jennifer, Paul, Jordyn and Stephen,
Once again, many thanks for your support of my poetic efforts.
As Clive James pointed out: once bitten and you're a "lifer".
Chris
Comment is about First Light (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
Hopes are wings with feathers. Gentle and light to keep them intact within our tiny hearts. Till you hope you survive.?
Comment is about Twinkie Defense (blog)
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Hi Paul,
Thank you for your thoughts. I think Martha's husband knew that war was closing in.
Chris
Comment is about A Crystal Ball (blog)
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Thanks also to Rose, Ghazala, Kimberly and Jordyn for reading and the 'likes', And thanks Jennifer, I'm with you there. I hope that boat is close.
Thanks for the virtual hug Nicola. I feel a lot better now. ?
Aww, thank you Ghazala! You're absolutely right; writing and patience are a great combo as well as all our lovely WoL comrades. Thanks for reading and sending some positivity!
Comment is about The Lighthouse Keeper's Song (blog)
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Keep going. Soon we all will be in our peaceful world. Patience is all we need. Keep writing your your heart out. We are here to feel and share. You aren't alone. We are all with you always.... smile?
Comment is about The Lighthouse Keeper's Song (blog)
Original item by Tom
Yes!! You'll be just fine. Inner fears are mostly baseless?
Comment is about Full Moon Rising (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Patience
If you face a storm climb through,
Sunshine will be there for you.
Comment is about Patience (blog)
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This drags me into your picturesque write. Amazing effects n after effects...beautifully portrayed?
Comment is about Coastal Wanderers (blog)
Original item by kimberly
This should be published. A peace generating write. Spread peace n love across the globe?
Comment is about Hatred (blog)
Original item by Aisha Suleman
Awesomely inspiring n motivating...harbinger of true hope?
Comment is about Patience (blog)
Original item by J.D. Bardo
Trust me dean you've an amazing voice. You should try as a voice artist. You'll be in great demand. ?
Your poems sound amazing when you read them. ?
Comment is about City Life - Follow Your Bliss (blog)
Original item by Dean Fraser
<Deleted User> (18980)
Wed 4th Nov 2020 08:41
Hugh, I think you may be onto something here. Instead of claiming benefits from the State, why doesn't everything get themselves a posh mate like Paul who could provide them with a comfortable, worry-free lifestyle?
Comment is about The benefits of being working class. (blog)
Original item by hugh
A message for Boris
Boris you need to have another think,
Schools and colleges are a serious spreading link.
Virus levels are 50 times higher in secondary schools,
Than in September, the virus rules.
Boris !Colleges and schools you must shut,
As Infections in these we MUST cut !!!
Comment is about Don't dither and delay ,make covid go away. Close schools (blog)
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So much fun playing with words. Love it!
Comment is about Cricket Bats & Persian Cats (blog)
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Wed 4th Nov 2020 02:30
Comment is about Platform Guidelines (blog)
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Thank you for your warm wishes and blessings....?
Comment is about hugh (poet profile)
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This really is the coal face of humanity; those forgotten and neglected. It speaks of a broken society and the fragmentation of communities. It makes me fear for the future.
John, thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Along the Unhallowed way (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13740)
Tue 3rd Nov 2020 21:57
This is beautiful. Although I don't believe in, the one for some folk, there's a lingering sadness about this though, it makes you want to hug the writer.........
Comment is about Her Sunset Came Too Early (blog)
Original item by simon lucan
Cheers Stephen for your liking of my “New Worlds Collide “
Tommy ?
Comment is about Stephen W Atkinson (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 3rd Nov 2020 16:27
Very moving and heartfelt RK
Rose ?
Comment is about Letter to Dad (blog)
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 3rd Nov 2020 15:45
Hi Dean. Sorry for not thanking you for your ' like ' on my poem-
' illicit alternatives '
so yes, thank you so much!
Rose ?
Comment is about Dean Fraser (poet profile)
Original item by Dean Fraser
Thank you both kindly. Much appreciated.
Comment is about Now Truly Living (blog)
Original item by Dean Fraser
Beautiful, and loved all the light metaphors, sunlight, moonlight, cnadle, flash of radiance, lingering rays etc. A very clever way to describe a person who possessed qualities which lit up a life, but which set to soon. Loved it.
Jennifer
Comment is about Her Sunset Came Too Early (blog)
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<Deleted User> (9882)
Wed 4th Nov 2020 23:16
Surreal and spooky food for thought Keith.
Great read!
Rose ?
Comment is about A Mysterious Warmth (blog)
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