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Dominic James

Wed 25th Sep 2019 10:56

John, thanks for sharing this, that is the first thought that comes to mind.

I recognise that awful finality in the last act of a despairing life and the aftermath which consumes those left behind. Like many of us - I hadn't realised how many - suicide touches the lives of those around me, and sometimes looms over those closest to me. And the closer the greater the continuing pain. That the pain can be overcome is a warm message to be repeated. And your advice to listen comes at the right time. All credit to you for that.

I weighed up the Icarus story, by the way, my poem shot through with the guilt of Dedalus, re-shaping pride in his successes to figure the loss of a son, that vital part of him. We do what we can for the young: from a distance, I remember then I though time was on my hands, but I was wrong. Life has its term and life is precious.
Dom.

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lisa donohoe

Wed 25th Sep 2019 09:58

Thank you for the lovely comments my fellow poets ??

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keith jeffries

Wed 25th Sep 2019 09:34

Chrystel,
A sad lament and a Tribute to love. When our hearts ache they do so with genuine feeling. Bless you for these fine words.
Keith

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 25th Sep 2019 08:57

Incredibly well written. We lost a few people to cancer now including my wife's mother in 2017. It's an awful things. This really touched me. Thank you.

J. x

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John Coopey

Wed 25th Sep 2019 08:38

Thanks, Becky. I must be one of the few people left who is enjoying all of this. And I don’t buy into the view that politicians have caused this mess. We’ve caused this mess.

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Becky Who

Wed 25th Sep 2019 04:57

This rocks! I love the art of parody. Although I wish it would stay in songs. The whole political shebang seems a joke at the moment.

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Don Matthews

Wed 25th Sep 2019 04:32

What can I say ?......

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Candice Reineke

Wed 25th Sep 2019 04:27

This is hauntingly beautiful. My friend has been through all the steps in your poem this year, and she does not have much longer. The c-word sucks, and I’m sorry. ??

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Wed 25th Sep 2019 02:28

Wow John. You are the Picasso of poetry. Your words always take me on a journey and leave me wanting more. Thank you for sharing your beautiful gift. ?

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Hugh

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:32

A moving flow of words depicting a sad loss.

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Don Matthews

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:30

Thankyou to everyone who liked it. I enjoyed writing it......

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:30

Thank you Chrystel. I lost my Dad recently.
Really good.

J. x

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Don Matthews

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:29

MC

I can live with typos in eemails, but not errors in posts.

I don't like seeing it in anyone's work. unless it is apparent English is their second language or unskilled with English, if you know what I mean.

To me, if someone is obviously proficient with the language it shows carelessness. It happens often.

I liked the linger/finger couplet ?

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Candice Reineke

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:27

? Many thanks, John! I can still picture the gorgeous flight of IPAs and sour beers that Southern Swells Brewing had on tap! ?

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Hugh

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:26

I see that sign in Bury bus station when I'm there ,it is unique and encouraging.

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Don Matthews

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:21

Ruth

I've noticed girl you doing this
You do it quite the most
I wouldn't really mind so much
But please type in 'repost'.....?

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Don Matthews

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:15

Gosh, it's like a three-ring circus
Boris leading pack
Prancing all around the fairground
(Hey ho sugar shack)

Wots sugar shack got to do with it ?

Dunno........?

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Don Matthews

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:08

Is that you?

Love the dress.....

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Don Matthews

Tue 24th Sep 2019 23:01

Makes me feel sad. It could apply to anyone.......

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:51

And what a dull world it would be if we were all the same. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder and I behold beauty.

J. x

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keith jeffries

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:40

Tom,

I was able to read this with a personal understanding of my own dilema with the subject of love. The poem unsettles me but also helps me to see where I have been and where I now need to go.

Thank you for this
Keith

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:39

Sometimes, my dearest friend, you have to walk out of the trees, to be able to see the wood, and sometimes you're pleased you did, but memories are only a curse until you become the master of them.
So beautifully and skillfully written, I felt as if I was standing there with you. Incredible.

J. x

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Don Matthews

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:35

On a different point Lisa its nice to see you identifying yourself as the subject of the poem......

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Jeannot

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:33

Tom,

Thank you for reading the poem and nice to make your acquaintance online.

Regards,

Jeannot

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Tom

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:32

You and me both ?

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Tom

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:31

I enjoyed this very much. These two lines really stuck out and sparked something in me "The teary eyes struggle / Through the crowding haze". Great writing!

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:26

That is so true Lisa, without pain there would be no growth, but also without love and it sounds like you've found that. As ever beautifully raw and true.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:21

Just a quick thanks to Kevin, Ruth and of course Frances for liking.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:19

To me, water is always emotion. When I read this I thought of detachment, to protect your feelings, to keep you safe from hurt, but no-one can live like that for long. We've all sat on the banks sometimes, to scared to get in, to feel the current, the power of it, but in the end, we all have to swim. Beautiful.

J. x

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Jeannot

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:16

Thank you Jason

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 22:10

I've never really thought about my muse, until now. I know, shocking revelation.
This is so expressive of the comfort I get from writing that for the first time ever I had to consider it. I think if I had to really put my finger on it, I'd have to say my shadow. A little slice of night that has followed me, grown with me and occasionally led the way.
But as I say, I've never really thought about it before. I love this for that reason, it is so well written it made me stop and think.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 21:59

I love the imagery of the passage of time, of life. When I was 20, I was eternal, invincible and insatiable. Now, I'm wiser.
And that field of memories looks inviting.

J. x

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kJ Walker

Tue 24th Sep 2019 21:59

thanks for this. I know now that it's not just me.

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Jeannot

Tue 24th Sep 2019 21:18

Keith,

Thank you very much for your thoughtful comments

Jeannot

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keith jeffries

Tue 24th Sep 2019 20:55

The final stanza is quite powerful as it speaks of a person´s life drawing to its conclusion, wondering what it was all about. Or at least that´s how I see it. Life seems to begin with anticipation and ends with meditation. I like this poem as it makes me introspective and thoughtful.

Thank you

Keith

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DESMOND CHILDS

Tue 24th Sep 2019 20:15

Hi John, thank you for your comment, much appreciated. Your right, there should be more poems about fat men. There are a lot of them about, getting fatter by the minute. Thank Julia for the like



All the best des

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Hugh

Tue 24th Sep 2019 19:26

Blind date

She asked her blind date to meet her at the gym.
But he never showed up,she was never to see him.
Without any doubt,
Things didn't work out.
,

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 24th Sep 2019 19:18

Thank you so much for reading and your feedback Tom. ? I love writing poetry that connects with the reader.

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 24th Sep 2019 19:16

Thank you Ruth! I worked on that line the longest, so I’m glad it resonates. I totally agree, when the muse shows up, it’s a fun, creative time indeed. I live for those moments❣️

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 24th Sep 2019 19:11

Thank you so much for reading and your curious cat feedback Dorothy! I imagine readers of poetry that survives a hundred years from now will be trying to figure out the answer to “who” is our muse, but we poets know the truth, which is that is rarely an individual, but a mixture of creative musings and relationship fantasies!

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 24th Sep 2019 19:04

Thanks so much for reading and your feedback Keith. ? Poetry is one of my most palpable passions. I love being able to share it with others that appreciate the art as much as I do.

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 24th Sep 2019 19:02

Thalia. I love that your muse has a name and rises a bike. So creative Don! I enjoyed your muse poem as well. Thanks so much for dropping by and adding your unique feedback. I am grateful for your support. ?

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 24th Sep 2019 18:57

Great poem Ruth. Quite honestly, if I became suddenly single again after such a long time I have absolutely no idea what I'd do. My generation found dates in what is now apparently, the, "Old fashioned way," of actually talking to people face to face. I think I'm old enough now to say bugger it, seen it, done it, got the t-shirt and am choosing not to wear it.?

J. x

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d.knape

Tue 24th Sep 2019 17:37


Your fancy title stunned
yet we accepted it in fun
in fear of looking dumb
"Custodian" it becomes.

?

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John Coopey

Tue 24th Sep 2019 17:31

He stole it off me, Kev.
And thanks, Jason, for the “Like”.

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Hugh

Tue 24th Sep 2019 17:30

A hair raising experience for Bill.
Didn't like the poem at first,but its grown on me.

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kJ Walker

Tue 24th Sep 2019 17:26

M.C. that was easily your best. (Or is it a case that Julia could make anything sound good) either way, it was a treat to listen to. Cheers Kevin.

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d.knape

Tue 24th Sep 2019 17:16

New ideas
can't penetrate
way past my prime
can't concentrate
Acquiring age
we'd rather wait
in the meantime
degenerate.

?
haha

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kJ Walker

Tue 24th Sep 2019 17:16

It was as if Joe Strummer was back with us. ?

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Ruth O'Reilly

Tue 24th Sep 2019 17:14

Good one Hugh... Cilla used to say 'Our Graham' we've our Graham here as well?

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