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raypool

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:41

I think your title is a a perfect one Peter. The worried convolutions of your thoughts are like the pages of some weighty book of knowledge, or rather lack of it, indicating an ever enquiring mind. As always some cracking lines to ponder over, and it is never an easy ride, but you do this so well.

Ray

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Barry Woods

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:35

Copies at £3.99 plus 50p postage. Email barrywoods211@hotmail.com

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Wallflower

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:34

Thank you for your kindness.

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Wallflower

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:34

Thank you for your kindness.

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Lisa C Bassignani

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:28

Another job well done. Congrats!

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afishamongmany

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:25

Congratulations Devon - A story told, a memory thread woven from 'new' to 'Now'
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John Marks

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:22

They do now Laura.

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raypool

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:20

Thanks Jason. Watch Straw Dogs to see one in action, pretty fearsome. They're outlawed these days but they do crop up, I spy 500 points at least.

That's a really fine like David thanks. The line I stumbled on , a sort of twist of early retirement ! Perversion of phrases often works for me. Glad it worked for you.

Mindy thanks for stopping and reading. You did well picking up that aspect, and I would think the landed classes were pretty hardy and used to dispatching animals , even embraced it (they might do again if given the chance).

Laura, what can I say ? A very useful exchange- thanks for that!

Thank you Eve, Lisa and Devon for liking this.

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afishamongmany

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:20

Thanks Devon, Lisa, DoRoThY and Don;
Devon - Congratulations on getting POTW.
Don - I've successfully resisted the urge to google 'Little Boy Blue Tech Ltd' ?
Go well
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afishamongmany

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:14

Thanks Jon, Jason, John, MCN and DoRoThY.
For me the important thing is to remember that I will be called to account for what I've done with it all, both silver and time.
Go well
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raypool

Mon 8th Jul 2019 20:11

An engaging read with a long reach of time in its grasp Devon! Good stuff indeed.

Ray

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Mon 8th Jul 2019 19:36

Wanting to prove I do "show up:" "It" is the caring/love/affection "she" used to feel and proclaim.

It's a marvelously original way to ponder an ages-old and anciently painful question.

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Rick Varden

Mon 8th Jul 2019 19:02

Thanks for the feed back. The whole piece evolved just from that one Alice line. Cheers?

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Tom

Mon 8th Jul 2019 18:52

Wow, this is magnificent. So expertly constructed. Really impressed and can’t wait to read more!

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Dean Fraser

Mon 8th Jul 2019 18:49

with a little help from google for the dates! ?

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Mon 8th Jul 2019 18:33

Lovely. Yes, lovely!
So deeply self-aware. Promising everlasting friendship without using that embarrassing word.

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 8th Jul 2019 18:07

For me this could be about me and one of my friends, in the old days. We haven't parted our friendship but we don't go torching the world anymore either. But could equally refer to an ex girlfriend. Great poem.

J. x

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Jonathan Humble

Mon 8th Jul 2019 18:02

Wonderful stuff Devon : )

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 8th Jul 2019 17:46

Tom It walks the walk and listens. I suppose I like this though I shouldn't .

TOMMY

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Tom

Mon 8th Jul 2019 17:43

Really enjoyed this Tommy. It's got me thinking... where does it go?! Excellent piece. Thanks for sharing.

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Mon 8th Jul 2019 16:15

Great fun!
Must agree with Sophie about the opening.
"...old, unbold, geriatric shocker" is so cute.

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Mae Foreman

Mon 8th Jul 2019 16:08

Thank you Dorothy! ? We always got a lot to say to ourselves!
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 8th Jul 2019 15:42

The burning hot, passionate privacy of the company of one you love, so all encompassing that it can block out all the pressures and woes of the world just by being together. Beautifully expressed.

J. x

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 15:31

Sooo much better now!! That really works now without the eye being interrupted. Give the reader credit ?

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 8th Jul 2019 15:23

Ok, I will admit I didn't see the news report and actually, now I've seen it and realise that they're actually talking about kids, I take back the comment about natural selection. Kids are kids, not yet fully formed and educated adults, so that was a bit harsh.
But seriously, are we getting to the stage as a species where we have to put traffic lights on the ground to stop people being run over because they can't tear their eyes away from a screen as they walk?
I fear for our future, I really do.

J.

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Mae Foreman

Mon 8th Jul 2019 15:22

Hi Mindy! Thank you for taking the time to read! You are correct! I love the way you put it, too! It's exactly that. The way I see it it's a plea... and it's answered, if it can be answered at all, by the same person who's pleaing! Painful and hopeful at the same time, as you said. In Greece we have a whole bunch of words that mean "two opposite things happening at the same time" like "bittersweet". In English that's the only one I know of... In Greek we have a word for that mixed feeling of sorrow and joy which I assume it's a universal thing and not just Greek ?. We also have a word for that thing you sometimes get when you start laughing amidst an intense crying session and/or vice verca which I'm REALLY hoping is a universal thing and not just Greek and so on! If I had to use one word for what you called painful but hopeful I'd say it would go along the lines of "hopainful"!
Thank you Mindy ?
Mae

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Mon 8th Jul 2019 15:18

Lovely picture. Perfect for this poem.

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Sophie Morley

Mon 8th Jul 2019 15:16

Hahaha the Alice in wonderland line sets the informal, easy, and comical tone. A fun read x

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Mon 8th Jul 2019 15:14

So biased! Shame!
Though phone's not named,
An addiction still,
Is an ill.

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Mon 8th Jul 2019 15:02

"I can't believe you wrote this whole thing!"*

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<Deleted User> (22247)

Mon 8th Jul 2019 14:59

This is a poem that cherishes the small truths behind civility. And to do that, it had to see them. So bravo for that benevolent eye, and for sharing the view with us!

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Mon 8th Jul 2019 14:52

I most like the idea of the mirror's heart breaking.

The poem's final moment seems to be you coming back to yourself, with feisty resolve and acceptance of whatever grit the truth has gotten coated in this time.
You tease honesty out of hiding. It seems simple when It's all been laid out, but it wasn't simple getting there, which truth you portray in your formatting, if I'm not mistaken.

A poem both painful and hopeful.

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Mae Foreman

Mon 8th Jul 2019 14:04

Awww! ?Gee...you make me blush?
Thank you???
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 8th Jul 2019 13:57

See, that's the influence it had on me, didn't even realise that I'd responded in rhyme. ?

J. x

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Mae Foreman

Mon 8th Jul 2019 13:44

Thank you dear Jason? Loved that last rhyming part of your comment. It fits perfectly
Glad it provoked some thought!
Thank you my friend?
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 8th Jul 2019 13:39

Anything less than that, would be high treason. Sometimes, the hardest thing in the world is to see that face for what it really is and accept that, and sometimes the hardest thing in the world is to trust what it tells you, but see, hear and trust you must.
Made me think, a lot.

J. x

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<Deleted User> (17847)

Mon 8th Jul 2019 13:29

wow Sophie, what a beautiful lady you are

( if you don't mind me saying so?)

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Robert C Gaulke

Mon 8th Jul 2019 13:14

Cheers, Cynthia.

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Peter Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 12:46

Devon Brock, that is one helluva poem. Entirely beautiful, thank you.
Peter

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Mae Foreman

Mon 8th Jul 2019 12:40

Another well deserved POTW! Congratulations Devon! I really can't make sense of those rejection slips... I'm truly baffled by that. Ecxellent work!
Thank you?
Mae

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Julian (Admin)

Mon 8th Jul 2019 12:32

Fabulous poem, Devon. Pity about that lawn though.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 8th Jul 2019 11:32

I think this is 'lovely' - an odd word for such a sad subject, but there it is - a kind of 'beautiful'.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 8th Jul 2019 11:25

Well, I don't 'like' it, because it is so good! And its message cuts like a sword right through the gut. Well put.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 10:34

Hahaa ?

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 10:21

Ooo I do like this Ray. Great story.

Not quite understanding the reasoning behind the formatting of this bit though:


- 0 -

In the pub a fire roars,

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 10:14

Whereas I really liked it, thought it tied it up in a clever way, that I didn't see coming ?

Great little poem.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 10:12

Are 2 line poems all the rage now? Does it count as a poem?

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 10:09

Why do you only use one word per line?

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 10:07

Did Amazons have guns?

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Laura Taylor

Mon 8th Jul 2019 09:55

Wow. Well, I thought this was a jokey type of a poem until I saw the news item! Deary me.

I honestly don't know why there aren't more people with broken noses tbh - I'd be over in a second if I walked along looking at my phone like that!

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